2020北京一模作文解析匯編

1、32020 北京一摸作文解析匯編海淀一模第三部分：書面表達（共兩節(jié)，35 分）第一節(jié)（15 分）51.假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華。你的美國朋友Jim 得知你對探月感興趣，發(fā)來郵件和你討論該話題。請你給他回復郵件，內(nèi)容包括：1. 月亮在中國文化中的寓意；2. 你對人類探月活動的看法。注意：1.詞數(shù)不少于50；3. 開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。提示詞：探月moon explorationDear Jim,Yours,Li HuaDear Jim,I am glad to share with you more details about my passion for moon explora

2、tion.It started with what I had been told about the moon as a kid and grew stronger with time. As you can guess, thereis rich cultural meaning behind the faithful companion 伴侶 of the earth. In Chinese culture, as opposed to the masculinity 陽剛之氣of the sun, the moon is often compared to a quiet and el

3、egant lady. Also, it reminds people oftheir family and friends far away. People feel reassured 安心 knowing that they are watching the same moon as if the moon could serve as their messenger.Human beings have never stopped exploring our closest neighbor. I believe it is of great significance. The deve

4、lopment of relevant technology facilitates 促進 the progress of science in general, which benefits our everyday life. What ' s more, I think moon exploration shows an important human trOi征，that is, curiosity about the unknown, which is the driving force that has brought our species this far.I hope

5、 you find what I ve mentioned above interesting and reasonable. By the way, what do you think of when you gaze at the moon? Write back and tell me about it!Yours,Li Hua【解析】【分析】本篇書面表達屬于應用文。要求考生寫一封信給美國朋友Jim， 和 Jim 探討有關探月的話題?！驹斀狻康谝徊剑簩忣}體裁：應用文時態(tài) ：根據(jù)提示，時態(tài)應為一般現(xiàn)在時人稱：第一人稱為主結構：總分法總分法指把主題句作為總說，把支持句作為分說，并以這種方式安

6、排所寫內(nèi)容。要求： 1. 月亮在中國文化中的寓意；第二步 :列提綱 （重點詞組）moon exploration ； be compared to； remind sb. of sb./sth. ； as if； serve as； gaze at 第三步：連詞成句1. I am glad to share with you more details about my passion for moon exploration.2. the moon is often compared to a quiet and elegant lady.3. Also, it reminds people

7、of their family and friends far away.4. People feel reassured knowing that they are watching the same moon as if the moon could serve as their messenger.5. By the way, what do you think of when you gaze at the moon?（根據(jù)提示及關鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。）第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）1 .表文章結構順序：First of all, Firstly/First,

8、Secondly/SecondAnd then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last butleast2 .表并歹U補充關系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not onlyincluding, also3 .表轉(zhuǎn)折對比關系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause（ 從句 ）, In spite of + n/doing, On the onehand ,On the other hand So

9、me ，while others ,as for, so that 4 .表因果關系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result5 表換一種方式表達：In other words, that is to say,6 .表進行舉例說明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing7 .表陳述事實：In fact, frankly speaking8 .表選擇：either oror連句成文，注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰。第五步：潤色修改【點睛】范文內(nèi)容完整，結構嚴謹，要點

10、全面，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系。作者在范文中使用了主從復合句，如 It started with what I had been told about the moon as a kid 這 句話中用了 what 弓I導的賓語從句， 如 which is the driving force that has brought our species this far 中用了 which 弓I導的非限制性定語從句；使用了非常好的短語，如 be compared to, remind sb. of sb./sth., serve as, gaze at 等，為文章增

11、色不少；并注意了句子的銜接，如 Also , What' s more , By the way全文中沒有中國式英語的 句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章增色添第二節(jié)（20分）52.假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華。請根據(jù)下面四幅圖的先后順序，寫一篇英文周記，記述你確定大學志 愿的過程。注意：詞數(shù)不少于 60。大洋彩業(yè)The past week was by no means ordinary, for I had finally decided on my major.This Monday, the topic was brought

12、 up again by my parents during dinner. I had asked myself the same question many times, but still couldn t make up my mind. Seeing my hesitant look, mom patted me on my shoulder, her smileencouraging me to do more research.Later that evening, I turned to the Internet for help. Faced with so many cho

13、ices, I seemed to be lost. Law could be a good choice. Business and computer science were also attracting top students. I noted down one after another major, but crossed them all off, for what I wanted was a profession that could make a difference in peopleThe inspiration came unexpectedly with the

14、CCTV News yesterday. The moment“ Role Models of Ourappeared on the screen, I was awe曲畏的.The news story focused on superheroes without a cape police ofhealthcare workers, delivery men, city cleaners who guarded us and ensured our life ran normally. Suddenly,realized my life s purpose relieving pain a

15、nd saving lives. And to pursue this call, I decided to specialize in medical science.I jumped excitedly at this idea. Mom and dad were also happy that I had found the compass for my future life, and said they would be so proud to see me in white. Now, determined to become a healthcare worker, whenev

16、er I start my schoolwork, I know I am studying for a noble cause.【解析】【分析】本篇書面表達屬于應用文。要求考生根據(jù)所給的四幅圖寫一篇周記，記述自己確定大學志愿的過程?！驹斀狻康谝徊剑簩忣}體裁： 應用文時態(tài) ：根據(jù)提示，時態(tài)應為一般過去時 人稱： 第一人稱為主結構 ：總分總法總分總法指把主題句作為總說，把支持句作為分說，結尾再重申一下自己的主題，并以這種方式安排所寫內(nèi)容。要求 ： 1. 挖掘四幅圖所給出的信息：圖1 和父母討論大學志愿選什么，圖2自己網(wǎng)上查找大學志愿資料，圖3看電視新聞給自己選大學志愿的啟發(fā)，圖4確定了自己的大學

17、志愿；2. 自己確定大學志愿過程中的感悟。第二步 :列提綱（重點詞組）by no means； make up one ' s minencourage sb.to do sth.； turn to for heIpmake a difference； focus on第三步：連詞成句1. The past week was by no means ordinary, for I had finally decided on my major.2. I had asked myself the same question many times, but still couldn t m

18、ake up my mind.3. Seeing my hesitant look, mom patted me on my shoulder, her smile encouraging me to do more research.4. Later that evening, I turned to the Internet for help.5. for what I wanted was a profession that could make a difference in people s lives.6. The news story focused on superheroes

19、 without a cape.（根據(jù)提示及關鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。）第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）1 .表文章結構順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/SecondAnd then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last butleast2 .表并歹U補充關系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not onlyincluding, also3 .表轉(zhuǎn)折對比關系：However, On th

20、e contrary, but, Although + clause（ 從句 ）, In spite of + n/doing, On the onehand ,On the other hand Some ，while others ，as for, sothat4 .表因果關系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result5 表換一種方式表達：In other words, that is to say,6 .表進行舉例說明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing7 .表陳述事實：In fact

21、, frankly speaking8 .表選擇： either or, - or連句成文，注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰。第五步：潤色修改【點睛】范文內(nèi)容完整，結構嚴謹，要點全面，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系。作者在范文中使用了主從復合句，如for what I wanted was a profession that could make a differencein people 's 曬話中既用了 for引導的原因狀語從句，又用了that引導的定語從句；文章多處用了非謂語動詞結構，如Seeing my hesitan

22、t look 和 Faced with so many choices 在句中做狀語；使用了非常好的短語，如 by no means, encourage sb.to do sth., turn to for help make a difference 等，為文章增色不少； 并注意了 句子的銜接，如 but, eitheror-。全文中沒有中國式英語的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章增色添彩。朝陽一模第三部分：書面表達（共兩節(jié)，35 分）第一節(jié)（15 分）51.假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華。你的美國筆友Jim 對中國文化十分感興趣，你在英

23、文報紙China Daily上看到 “中華文化表情包設計大賽（The China Daily Emoji Design Contest of Chinese Cultural Symbols） 征集來 ”自世界各地參賽作品的活動，請給他寫一封郵件，邀請他參加投稿，內(nèi)容包括：1. 介紹稿件要求；2. 告知投稿時間和方式；3. 詢問對方意向。注意 : 1. 詞數(shù)不少于50；2. 可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；3. 開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。Dear Jim,Yours,Li HuaDear JimI am writing to tell you about The China Daily E

24、moji Design Contest of Chinese Cultural Symbols organized byChina Daily. I know you re keen on traditional Chinese culture, so why not have a try?You may choose any symbol that best represents Chinese culture in your eyes, such as the panda, kung fu, theGreat Wall and so on. There is no limit and it

25、s culture meanings. Your work sh September. All winning designs will beon the style, but be sure to give your work a name and explain designing ideas ould be submitted online with required personal information by the end of shared and promoted on the China Daily app, and winning designers will recei

26、ve prizes!Are you interested? If you need any help, I would be very glad to help. Let your creative juices flow!Yours,Li Hua【解析】 【分析】本篇書面表達屬于應用文，你在英文報紙China Daily 上看到 “中華文化表情包設計大賽”征集來自世界各地參賽作品的活動，請給你對中國文化十分感興趣的美國筆友Jim 寫一封郵件，邀請他參加投稿。【詳解】第一步：審題體裁： 應用文時態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時態(tài)應為一般現(xiàn)在時和一般將來時。結構：總分法總分法指把主題句作為總說，把支持句作為分說

27、，并以這種方式安排所寫內(nèi)容。要求：1. 介紹稿件要求。(introducetherequirements)2. 告知投稿時間和方式。( inform the time and method of submission )3. 詢問對方意向。( ask about his intention )第二步 :列提綱 (重點詞組)be keen on; such as; be sure to; givea name; personal information; by the end of; be glad to第三步：連詞成句1. I am writing to tell you about The

28、China Daily Emoji Design Contest of Chinese Cultural Symbols organized by China Daily.2. I know you re keen on traditional Chinese culture, so why not have a try?3. You may choose any symbol that best represents Chinese culture in your eyes, such as the panda, kung fu, the Great Wall and so on.4. Th

29、ere is no limit on the style, but be sure to give your work a name and explain designing ideas and its culture meanings.5. Your work should be submitted online with required personal information by the end of September.6. All winning designs will be shared and promoted on the China Daily app, and wi

30、nning designers will receive prizes!7. Are you interested?8. If you need any help, I would be very glad to help.9. Let your creative juices flow!第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）1 .表文章結構順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/SecondAnd then, Finally, In the end, At last2 .表并列補充關系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furth

31、ermore, In addition As well as, not onlyincluding,3 .表轉(zhuǎn)折對比關系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause（ 從句 ）, In spite of+n/doing,On the onehand ，On the other hand Some ，while others ，as for, so that 4 .表因果關系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result第五步：潤色修改【點睛】范文內(nèi)容完整，要點全面，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當，上下

32、文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系。作者在范文中使用了較多主從復合句，如：You may choose any symbol that best represents Chinese culture inyour eyes, such as the panda, kung fu, the Great Wall and so on.這句話運用了 that 引導的主語從句。使用了一些固定詞組，如be keen on; be sure to; by the end of; be glad to 等。全文中沒有中國式英語的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章增色

33、添彩。第二節(jié)（20 分）52.假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華。請根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，為校刊“英語園地”寫一篇短文，講述你在這個寒假居家自主學習的過程。注意：詞數(shù)不少于60。9【答案】I spent an unforgettable winter vacation this year, during which I became an autonomous learner.At the beginning of the vacation, I made a detailed learning plan. I first listed the learning tasks for the fo

34、llowing days and then made plans in great details to ensure that they are practical and feasible. Then I started learning as scheduled. With the learning materials piled on my desk, I was always in high spirit every day. To my delight, I could carry out the plan strictly.Whenever I met with difficul

35、ties, I turned to my teachers and classmates for help through the Internet. Thanks to the convenient video chat app, I could get my problems solved in time, which guaranteed my learning in a right and smooth way. At the end of the vacation, I had a systematic revision of previous lessons, and gained

36、 more confidence in weak subjects. My parents also took notice of my progress and gave me a thumb up for my self -discipline.I had a great sense of accomplishment because my autonomous learning ability was cultivated, which I believe will have a far -reaching influence on me.【分析】本篇書面表達屬于應用文，要求考生根據(jù)所給

37、的圖畫內(nèi)容為?？坝⒄Z園地”寫一篇短文，講述自己在這個寒假居家自主學習的過程?！驹斀狻康谝徊剑簩忣}體裁： 應用文時態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時態(tài)應為一般過去時。結構：總分法總分法指把主題句作為總說，把支持句作為分說，并以這種方式安排所寫內(nèi)容。要求：1. 定制詳細的學習計劃。( make a detailed learning plan )2. 介紹學習渠道。( introduce the ways of study )第二步 :列提綱 (重點詞組)at the beginning of; in great details; in high spirit; to my delight; carry out;

38、 meet with difficulties; gave me a thumb up for; have a great sense of第三步：連詞成句1. I spent an unforgettable winter vacation this year, during which I became an autonomous learner.2. At the beginning of the vacation, I made a detailed learning plan.3. I first listed the learning tasks for the following

39、 days and then made plans in great details to ensure that they are practical and feasible.4. Then I started learning as scheduled.5. With the learning materials piled on my desk, I was always in high spirit every day.6. To my delight, I could carry out the plan strictly.7. Whenever I met with diffic

40、ulties, I turned to my teachers and classmates for help through the Internet.8. Thanks to the convenient video chat app, I could get my problems solved in time, which guaranteed my learning in a right and smooth way.9. At the end of the vacation, I had a systematic revision of previous lessons, and

41、gained more confidence in weak subjects.10. My parents also took notice of my progress and gave me a thumb up for my self -discipline.11. I had a great sense of accomplishment because my autonomous learning ability was cultivated, which I believe will have a far -reaching influence on me.第四步：連句成篇（銜接

42、詞）12. 文章結構順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/SecondAnd then, Finally, In the end, At last13. 并歹U補充關系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not onlyincluding,14. 轉(zhuǎn)折對比關系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause（ 從句 ）, In spite of+n/doing,On the onehand ,On t

43、he other hand Some ，while others，as for, so that 15. 因果關系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result第五步：潤色修改【點睛】范文內(nèi)容完整，要點全面，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系。作者在范文中使用了較多主從復合句，如：Thanks to the convenient video chat app, I could get my problemssolved in time, which guaranteed my learning in a right and

44、smooth way. 這句話運用了which 引導的非限制性定語從句。使用了一些固定詞組，如in great details; in high spirit; to one s delight; carry out; meet with difficulties;have a great sense o殍。全文中沒有中國式英語的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章增色添彩。東城一模第三部分：書面表達（共兩節(jié)，35 分）51.假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華。你的英國好友Jim 在給你的郵件中提到新冠病毒爆發(fā)給他帶來了焦慮，并詢問你在疫情期間的生活

45、。請給他回郵件，內(nèi)容包括：1安慰與鼓勵；2疫情期間你的生活與學習情況；3. 疫情給你帶來的思考。注意： 1 詞數(shù)不少于50；2開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。提示詞：新冠病毒novel coronavirus；Dear Jim,YoursLi HuaDear Jim,I do understand how you feel. The outbreak of novel coronavirus is a big challenge to every one of us. Pleasedon t be so anxious. With everybody standing together, Im

46、 sure we can defeat the virus.We can do our bit in this battle! Id like to share what I have done in the past three months. To help prevenvirus from spreading, I have responded to the governments call and stayed at home Wwihthilemy families.keeping an eye on the situation, I have been studying with

47、the help of the online course offered by our school.Communicating with my teachers and classmates online, I have never felt lonely. Besides, I have kept on doing some inside sports to keep fit and helped my mom with the housework.第一節(jié)（15 分）13Not going out is my way to fight the virus. Thinking of the

48、 medical staff, we have no reason not to discipline ourselves. We need to thank them and at the same time, treasure our life.Please take care of yourself. Keep calm and carry on!Yours,Li Hua【解析】【分析】這是一篇提綱類寫作?！驹斀狻康? 步： 根據(jù)提示可知，假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華。你的英國好友Jim 在給你的郵件中提到新冠病毒爆發(fā)給他帶來了焦慮，并詢問你在疫情期間的生活。請給他回郵件，內(nèi)容包括：1

49、安慰與鼓勵；2疫情期間你的生活與學習情況；3. 疫情給你帶來的思考。第 2 步：根據(jù)寫作要求，確定關鍵詞（組）： novel coronavirus （ 新冠病毒）； outbreak （爆發(fā)）； defeat （打敗）；prevent from （阻止）；with the help of（在的幫助下）等。第 3 步：根據(jù)提示及關鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。此處文章主要應用現(xiàn)完成時和一般現(xiàn)在時。第 4 步：連句成文，注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，保持整潔美 觀的卷面是非常重要的?！军c睛】范文內(nèi)容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當。作者在范文

50、中使用了較多高級表達方式，如I dlike to share what I have done in the past three months. 運用了賓語從句；To help prevent the virus from spreading,I have responded to the government' s call and stayed at home with my 謂mie詞的運用。 全文中沒有中國式英語的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。另外文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章增色添彩。52.假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華。請根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，給學校

51、英文報投稿，記述學校法制宣 傳周期間的系列活動。注意：1.詞數(shù)不少于602.開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。提示詞：模擬法庭 moot courtLegal Awareness Week was opened in our school. A series of activities were carried out.【答案】 Legal Awareness Week was opened in our school. A series of activities were carried out.On Monday morning, an expert was invited to our sch

52、ool and delivered a lecture on law knowledge. We learned about the basic rules of law and some legal cases from the lecture. After that we got down to making some posters. We put up the posters on the bulletin board, aiming to enhance the understanding of laws.#The next day, we took part in a moot c

53、ourt to experience what a real trial was like. Several students acted as judges and lawyers, having a heated argument about legal issues. The vivid presentation on the moot court drew us closer to the law.A class meeting was held as scheduled on Friday. We shared what we had learned during the week.

54、 All of us expressed that we had deepened the understanding of the law and it was of great importance to raise our legal awareness.【解析】【分析】這是一篇圖畫類寫作?！驹斀狻康? 步：根據(jù)提示可知，假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華。請根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，給學校英文報投稿，記述學校法制宣傳周期間的系列活動。第 2步：根據(jù)寫作要求，確定關鍵詞（組）： deliver a lecture （發(fā)表演講）； put up （張貼）； enhance （增強）； takep

55、art in （參加 ）； moot court（ 模擬法庭）等。第 3 步：根據(jù)提示及關鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。此處文章主要應用一般過去 時。第 4 步：連句成文，注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，保持整潔美 觀的卷面是非常重要的?！军c睛】范文內(nèi)容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當。作者在范文中使用了較多高級表達方式，如Weput up the posters on the bulletin board, aiming to enhance the understanding of laws. 非謂語動詞的運用；The nextday,

56、we took part in a moot court to experience what a real trial was like. 運用了賓語從句。全文中沒有中國式英語的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。另外文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章增色 添彩。西城一模第三部分：書面表達（共兩節(jié)，35 分）第一節(jié)（15 分）假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華。你的英國女?友Jim在做關于中學生做家務”的調(diào)查，想了解你做家務的情況。請你給他回復郵件，內(nèi)容包括：1）你平時做哪些家務；2）你對中學生做家務的看法。注意：1.詞數(shù)不少于50;2.開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。Dear Jim,

57、Knowing you are conducting a survey of the housework that high school students do at home，（交代背景）I ' m writing to tell you about what I do （ 寫信目的）.（要,點 1）Although my school schedule is rather tight, I still manage to help with the housework from time to time. I will clean up after dinner. I also help with other things like sweeping and dusting. Every once in a while, I will cook