新高考英語讀后續(xù)寫——故事編寫思路

1、讀后續(xù)寫寫作重點(diǎn)及步驟寫作重點(diǎn)1.重在描寫(畫面感)描述過程應(yīng)加入更多的具體動(dòng)作描述和情感描寫，用具體動(dòng)作代替抽象表達(dá)。同學(xué)們比較擅長(zhǎng)寫“結(jié)論性”語言，如“She felt really nervous and cold.”這樣的句子雖然沒有錯(cuò)誤，但是直接地形容詞表達(dá)，會(huì)導(dǎo)致續(xù)寫指呈現(xiàn)抽象的結(jié)論，沒有“畫面感”。例我每天去學(xué)校。Igotoschool every day.擴(kuò)寫：Withthe sunrisingfromtheeast, I, together with Tom and Jerry, ride to school at 6:00 every morning, laughing a

2、nd talking.2.關(guān)注語言避免句型結(jié)構(gòu)單一，否則會(huì)顯得對(duì)各種句型掌握不充分。應(yīng)有意識(shí)地使用非謂語、形容詞做狀語、虛擬語氣等。3.注意銜接要使用清晰的邏輯銜接。如明確的時(shí)間線索，很好地承接上下文。4.正向結(jié)局設(shè)計(jì)的結(jié)局應(yīng)是正向的化險(xiǎn)為夷。八步成文法(注意：這八步并不是固定的，可以不按這個(gè)順序，也可以省略一些環(huán)節(jié)。)1. 情緒：情緒描寫 & 2. 細(xì)節(jié)：進(jìn)一步解釋描寫細(xì)節(jié)描寫實(shí)例笑看到直升機(jī)，Jane高興地笑了起來。(1)At the sight of the helicopter, Jane beamed with wild joy.(2)Seeing the helicopter, J

3、ane beamed with wild joy.(3)The moment she caught sight of the helicopter, Janes eyes/face lit up with delight.(4)The moment she caught sight of the helicopter, a bright smile lit up Janes face/eyes.其他The smile on her face shone like a diamond.她臉上的笑容像鉆石一樣閃閃發(fā)光。A smile of understanding flashed across

4、his face.他臉上露出了一種理解的微笑。She wore a shining smile on her face.她臉上帶著燦爛的笑容。高興激動(dòng)當(dāng)她知道考試結(jié)果時(shí)，她興奮極了。(1)When she knew the result of the test, she felt excited/thrilled.(2)When she knew the result of the test, her eyes twinkled with excitement.(3)When she knew the result of the test, her heart was pounding wit

5、h wild joy.(4)When she knew the result of the test, a wild excitement took hold of her.(5)Knowing the result of the test, she felt a surge of excitement.(6)Knowing the result of the test, she was overcome with excitement. 其他A ripple of excitement ran through them.一陣激動(dòng)聲穿過他們。Laughter lingered around t

6、he room.笑聲在房間里縈繞。His eyes twinkled with pleasure.他的眼睛閃爍著快樂。A wild gaiety took hold of her.一種瘋狂的快樂控制了她。Unforgettable were her eyes that shone like diamonds and lips held in a steady smile.令人難忘的是她的眼睛像鉆石一樣閃閃發(fā)光，嘴角保持著穩(wěn)定的微笑。I was wild with joy.我欣喜若狂。I was pleased beyond description.我高興得難以形容?？匏蘖恕?1)A lump

7、 came to her throat.她哽咽欲哭。(2)Her eyes were red from crying.她的雙眼哭得通紅。(3)Her eyes brimmed with tears.她的眼里滿含淚水。(4)Tears coursed /trickled/streamed /ran down her cheeks.眼淚沿著她的面頰流下來。傷心痛哭她傷心不已。(1)She felt extremely sad.(2)A sadness came over her.(3)Her heart ached, tears streaming down her cheeks.(4)Numb

8、with grief, she became speechless.(5)Feeling a surge of sadness, she couldnt help crying bitterly.(6)Sadness surging within her, she burst into tears.其他He stood silently, tears rolling down his cheeks.他靜靜地站著，眼淚順著面頰流了下來。I feel like I am floating in an ocean of sadness.我漂浮在悲傷的海洋里。Her hands were shakin

9、g. She was on the verge of tears.她的手在顫抖。她快要哭了。Hearing the news, so desperate was he that he drowned sadness in wine.聽到這個(gè)消息，他絕望地把悲傷淹沒在酒里。She burst into tears and ran out of the room.她突然哭了起來，跑出了房間。 She sobbed, hiding her face in her hands.她掩面哭泣。I tried to fight back tears. /My eyes were filled with te

10、ars.我努力忍住眼淚。/ 我的眼里充滿了淚水。A frown（皺眉）now stood on his face.他皺起了眉頭。They sat there with glum looks on their faces.他們坐在那里，帶著一臉憂郁。The news cast a cloud of gloom over his face.這消息使他臉上蒙上了一層陰影。害怕我感到害怕。(1)I felt very frightened/scared/panicked.(2)I was in (a) panic/ was full of fear.(3)I stood rooted to the s

11、pot, brimming with fear/filled with fear.(4) I felt so scared that my throat tightened and my knees felt weak.(5) I froze with terror, too scared to move.(6) I was seized by a strong sense of honor; my palms sweating.其他He turned to me, with his eyes full of horror.他轉(zhuǎn)過身來，眼里充滿了恐懼。Fear slowly creeps up

12、on her.恐懼慢慢地蔓延到她身上。She was struck with horror when.她感到恐懼She was choked by fear.她因恐懼而窒息。Her face turned pale and stood there tongue-tied.她臉色蒼白地站在那里，舌頭打結(jié)。A flood of fear welled up in him. / Fear flooded over him.他心中涌起一陣恐懼。/ 恐懼淹沒了他。Her heart beat so violently that she felt nearly suffocated.她的心跳得厲害，幾乎窒

13、息而死。She shook all over, feeling like sitting on pins and needles. 她渾身顫抖，覺得如坐針氈。生氣憤怒Sam感到非常生氣。(1)Sam felt very angry.(2)Sam stood rooted to the spot, his eyes blazing with anger.(3)Sam felt so angry that he stormed out of the room, slamming the door furiously behind him.(4)Boiling with rage, Sam shoo

14、k his fist at me.(5) fulled with fury, Sam was unable to utter a single word.其他I was seized by anger.我充滿了憤怒。He was fuming with rage.他氣得大發(fā)雷霆。His anger boiled over.他的憤怒爆發(fā)了。He could hardly/scarcely contain his rage.他幾乎控制不住怒火。He was breathing fire and fury.他充滿著怒火。His voice trembled with anger.他的聲音因憤怒而顫抖

15、。He gave me a look of burning anger.他憤怒地看了我一眼。He glared at me with burning eyes.他用灼熱的目光怒視著我。He flared up at the word.他一聽到這個(gè)字就勃然大怒。His face clouded with anger.他氣得臉色陰沉。感動(dòng)Touched deeply/immensely, we被深深感動(dòng)，我們Tears filling her eyes, she offered her heartfelt gratitude.她熱淚盈眶，表示衷心的感謝。With tears streaming d

16、own her face, she. 淚水順著她的臉頰流了下來，.3. 轉(zhuǎn)折：個(gè)人努力或借助外界解決途徑：他人、他物、自己、自然(突出和諧，時(shí)間與成長(zhǎng))解決沖突的具體方案基本如下：1.encouragement(某人的鼓勵(lì)) fort(某人的安慰) 3.inspiration(突然靈機(jī)一動(dòng)) 4.effort(自己的努力訓(xùn)練)5.calm(冷靜思考) 6.kindness(某人的善良) 7.courage(勇敢)8.love(愛心，需要與move(感動(dòng))和patience(耐心)等適當(dāng)結(jié)合) 9.help(及時(shí)幫助)(當(dāng)然解決方案并不限于某一種，還可以是以上多種方式的結(jié)合)鼓起勇氣；他人的鼓勵(lì)

17、pluck up/take/gather ones courage (to do.)毫不猶豫(1)sb could hardly wait to do sth. (2)without a second thought (3)without even thinking (4)without delay (5)without hesitation4. 轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)：事情似乎有了轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)，并抱有希望，感到欣慰似乎(1)It was like doing sth (2) It seemed as if that.希望(1)hoping that (2)see/feel a glimmer of hope (3)t

18、rying hard to do sth.欣慰(1).breathed a sign of relief = sighed with relief松了一口氣(2) (a wave of) relief flooded through /washed over sb.(3)to ones relief, .是人欣慰的/放心的是.5. 失望：但是問題還未解決或出現(xiàn)了新問題不幸的是(1)but bad luck for sb, . (2) ., but in vain (3)., but without success (4)., but no use不知道做什么(1)sb did sth, won

19、dering what to do next. (2)sb did sth, not knowing what to do next.(3)sb did sth, unsure of what to do next. (4) sb was at a loss what to do.(5)sb was in a dilemma about whether to do sth or not.6. 想法：突然有了一個(gè)想法（一句話說明這個(gè)想法）某人想到/明白.； 有了主意It suddenly occurred to sb that + 從句 =It hit/struck sb that + 從句=I

20、t dawned on sb that+從句(an idea, thought.) occurred /came to sb=.came/flashed into ones mind=.crowded in ones mind(3)ones mind began to race7. 結(jié)局：過段時(shí)間，事情有了最后的轉(zhuǎn)折過了一段時(shí)間(1)not long after that,.=shortly afterwards,. = before long, .= It didnt take long before+從句=It took some time before +從句(2) for an ins

21、tant/moment事情有了轉(zhuǎn)折(1)To ones surprise (delight) / Strangely enough, it turned out that +從句(2)But no second thoughts,.(3)But what happened next was pure magic.8. 總結(jié)：點(diǎn)題，呼應(yīng)前文直到.才意識(shí)到(1)倒裝句：Not until+時(shí)間狀語+did sb realize/notice that + 從句(2)強(qiáng)調(diào)句：It was only +時(shí)間狀語+ that sb realized that + 從句還記得某人的話；還在某人的腦海中(1

22、)Ones word echoed/rang out in ones ears.(2)Ones words/voice/song lingered/whispered in ones mind/ head.(3)Ones head was still full of.經(jīng)歷與教訓(xùn)(1)感嘆句：What a/an valued/useful/great/painful lesson sb taught me/sb learned from sb.! What a/an enjoyable / pleasant / wonderful / unforgettable / memorable / in

23、teresting / valued experience sb had!(3)Down deep in ones heart,.在某人的內(nèi)心深處題型專練閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. As he walked along Park Avenue near the First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tri

24、ed again and again but couldnt get the car moving. Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like youve got a problem,” Arthur said.“Im afraid so. Im in a big hurry and I cant start my car.”“Is there something I can do to help?

25、” Arthur asked. The young man looked at the two suitcases in the back seat and then said, “Thanks. If youre sure it wouldnt be too much trouble, you could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.” “No trouble at all. Id be glad to help.”The young man got out and took one of the suitcases from the ba

26、ck seat. After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other one. Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the long loud noise of an alarm.It was from the bank.There had been a robbery (搶劫)!Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before. Now the air was filled wit

27、h the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened?” But everyone had a different answer.Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned to look at the bank and walk

28、ed right into the young woman in front of him.She looked at the suitcase and then at him. Arthur was surprised. “Why is she looking at me like that?” He thought. “The suitcase! She thinks Im the bank thief!”Arthur looked around at the crowd of people. He became frightened, and without another though

29、t, he started to run.注意：1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2. 應(yīng)使用5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4. 續(xù)寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Paragraph 1:As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!”_Paragraph 2:The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur._解題步驟Step 1 閱讀出主要情節(jié)1.年輕

30、人汽車發(fā)不動(dòng)2.Arthur幫忙搬箱子3.銀行發(fā)現(xiàn)被盜、周圍一片混亂4.Arthur發(fā)覺自己拿著贓物、開始跑Step 2 構(gòu)思后續(xù)情節(jié)(每段四-五句話)Paragraph 1:As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!” Arthur意識(shí)到這個(gè)男人可能是小偷。 Arthur沒停下 Arthur找到出租車，上了出租車，跟出租車說去警察局 出租車很快開向警察局Paragraph 2:The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Art

31、hur. Arthur下車 把箱子給警察 講得到箱子的過程 小偷被抓 結(jié)果鬧了烏龍，意識(shí)到自己做了件蠢事。/他的勇敢和當(dāng)機(jī)立斷被表揚(yáng)了Step 3 增加細(xì)節(jié)(描寫)(1)增加細(xì)節(jié)： 1.時(shí)間地點(diǎn)(用來過渡) 2.天氣道具感悟a.天氣(偶爾補(bǔ)充) b.道具(with+n. + on/in ones hand,.) c.感悟i. Feeling tired/happy/worried/shamed. sb. did sth. ii. Tired as he was, he felt it worthwhile, for.(2)在造句過程中，盡量加上“過渡詞”或“非謂語動(dòng)詞”，適時(shí)增加“直接引語”，

32、以使情節(jié)豐富生動(dòng)，但是直接引語不可過多。模板句型時(shí)間/地點(diǎn)/過渡，sb. doing sth1, did sth 2, doing sth 3, doing sth 4, doing sth 5, doing sth6, feeling., looking.Step 4 成文Paragraph 1:As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!” Arthur意識(shí)到這個(gè)男人可能是小偷。 Arthur不停 找到出租車，上了出租車，跟出租車說去警察局 出租車很快開向警察局But just at the moment, Arthur realized that the young man might be the bank chief. So Arthur, kept on running, trying to his best to look for a taxi. Soon he found