2020上海中考英語二模作文范文及解析

1、2020上海中考英語二模作文范文及解析2020閔行二模Write at least 60 words on the topic Ways to improve my online learning”(以“提高我在線學(xué)習(xí) 效率的方法”為題，寫一篇不少于60個詞的短文，標(biāo)點符號不占格。)在線學(xué)習(xí)是當(dāng)代青少年需要掌握的一項重要技能，請結(jié)合居家學(xué)習(xí)期間自己在線學(xué)習(xí)中的具 體事例，談?wù)勀阌行┠睦锾岣邔W(xué)習(xí)效率的方法。(注意；短文中不得出現(xiàn)任何人名、校名及其他相關(guān)信息，否那么不予評分)審題分析：根據(jù)題目要求，本文是一篇針對當(dāng)年熱點話題：在線學(xué)習(xí)(online learning)展開的論屬型作文，要求結(jié)合自己

2、在線學(xué)習(xí)的具體事例，談?wù)勌岣咴诰€學(xué)習(xí)的方法。本文開頭應(yīng)先引入由于原因，大家都不得不待在家里在線上課。在寫具體方法時，要注意分點表達(dá)，邏輯清晰。范文點評：Ways to improve my online learningBecause of the novel coronavirus, almost all of the students took online classes during the winter vacation. But the learning effects vary from one to another. Therefore, we should find ways

3、 to improve online learning. And I have some pieces of advice about it.First of all, we need a peaceful environment. Online learning takes strong self-discipline. For example, my mom likes to offer me snacks, which sometimes interrupts me. I have asked her to stop doing so. A quiet and peaceful room

4、 can help us stay focused. Whats more, we should catch every chance to communicate with our teachers online. Different from school learning, we cant easily find our teachers to ask questions, so we have to solve all our problems during the classes. By doing this, we can have no confusion after class

5、.These are my own ways to improve online learning. You can try taking my advice, and get better results in this period of time.作文提綱:句子開頭引入內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵詞/句因為 xx 病毒的原因(Because of the novel coronavirus),大 家不得不待在家里上課(took online classes),有一些提高學(xué) 習(xí)效率的建議(some pieces of advice )2020長寧二模94. Write at least 60 words ab

6、out the topic Online study makes me（請以“網(wǎng)上學(xué) 習(xí)使我為題，寫一篇不少于60個詞的短文，標(biāo)點符號不占格。）xx 期間（during the anti-epidemic-period,你不得不在家上網(wǎng)課（have online classes）, 這個特殊 的經(jīng)歷使你在培養(yǎng)獨立性、自信心等方面也有所收獲。請你結(jié)合具體事例談?wù)勛约耗骋?方面的收獲。（注意：文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名、校名及其他相關(guān)信息，否那么不予評分。）審題分析：.根據(jù)題目要求，這是一篇半命題作文，先要在makes me后面添加一個形容詞表達(dá)你的 情緒情感。.寫作背景是xx期間（during th

7、e anti-epidemic - period,你不得不在家上網(wǎng)課（have online classes）,具體寫作內(nèi)容是在家上網(wǎng)課給你帶來的獨立性、自信心或其他方面的收獲，然 后結(jié)合自己的具體事例描述具體的收獲內(nèi)容即可。.注意夾敘夾議，最后要有總結(jié)，描寫要是真情實感。范文點評:Online study makes me more independentAll students in China, including me, are forced to take online classes, known as the program of “no suspension of classe

8、s”, during the anti-epidemic period of coronavirus-2019. This completely different way of learning has many positive effects on me, among which the most far-reaching one is that it makes me more independent.During this time, online courses emerged as a novel learning method. At the very beginning, I

9、 failed to follow my teachers since their speed was so fast, making me frustrated and depressed. Whafs worse, there was limited time to think over the knowledge points and take notes. In order to catch up with the progress, I made full preparation and preview on each class in advance, as well as tur

10、ned to my teachers for help of missing points after class. Eventually, I came over all the difficulties and all the curriculum were going on as usual.To sum up, whatever the situation is, we are supposed to adjust ourselves to solve the problems actively and independently.作文提綱:句子內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵詞/句開頭引入take onli

11、ne classes; no suspension of classes; during the anti-epidemic period給出主題makes me more independent自身事例解釋問題At the very beginning, I failed to-*； Whats worse提出解決方法made full preparation and preview； turned to my teachers for help陳述結(jié)果Eventually總結(jié)經(jīng)驗得出主題To sum up； actively and independently.語言進(jìn)階：.非限制性定語從句

12、This completely different way of learning has many positive effects on me, among which the most far-reaching one is that it makes me more independent.非限制性定語從句是修飾逗號前面的某個名詞或者句子的，此處among which=among many positive effects ”在這些積極影響中” the most far-reaching one is 對我影響最深遠(yuǎn)的 是”。如果是在這些人中用among whom。詞典例句：A tot

13、al of 16 Chinese universities made the top 300 chart this year, among which 8 are from the Chinese mainland.今年排行榜前300名中，中國共有16所大學(xué)上榜，其中8所來自中國大陸。There are many factors influencing the use of modern Chinese, among which context is one of the key factors.現(xiàn)代漢語的運用涉及諸多因素，而語境是其中關(guān)鍵要素之一。練習(xí)：Financial Times has

14、 ranked the top 50 women in world business, among 4 are from theChinese mainland.A. that B. whomC. whichD. whereThree plans are put forward, which my favor goes to the last one.A. amongB. with C. between D. on翻譯鞏固：.有很多的景點是我很感興趣，其中最感興趣的是大笨鐘。. 這個團(tuán)隊由33個人組成，其中有9個是教授。2.分詞做結(jié)果狀語I failed to follow my teache

15、rs since their speed was so fast, making me frustrated and depressed.此處making me frustrated and depressed,是前面我沒能跟上老師的結(jié)果狀語，分詞做結(jié)果狀 語表示自然而然的結(jié)果，如果是意料之外的結(jié)果就用不定式tod。詞典例句：A disastrous earthquake happened in Wenchuan in 2008, causing many people died.在2008年的汶川發(fā)生了災(zāi)難性的地震，導(dǎo)致很多人死亡。（causing表自然結(jié)果）He hurried to th

16、e station, only to 自nd the train had left.他急匆匆的趕到車站，結(jié)果發(fā)現(xiàn)車已經(jīng)走了。（t。find表意料之外的結(jié)果） 練習(xí)：A little plane crashed into a hill,all 5 people in it.A. killedB. to killC. killingD. being killedHe woke up only himself in a hospital.A. to findB. findingC. being find D. finds譯鞏固:她每天都回來得很晚，這是她爸爸很生氣。小男孩把玩具扔在地上，使得玩具摔成

17、了碎片。他試圖掩蓋真相，結(jié)果卻欲蓋彌彰。讓步狀語從句之疑問詞-everWhatever the situation is, we are supposed to adjust ourselves to solve the problems actively and independentlyWhatever=No matter what+ (n),意思是“無論什么”，做后面句子的名詞成分；however=no matter how+ (adj/adv),后面句子主謂賓完整，做方式狀語，意思是“無論/多么。詞典例句：No matter whatAVhatever I did to the bil

18、l, you still wanted it because it did not lose its value.無論我對這張鈔票做了什么，你們依然想著要得到它，這是因為它并沒有失去價值。(此處whatever做后面從句did后面的賓語)How many hours and how much money do your team devote to this project?你們團(tuán)隊在這個工程上投入了多少時間和金錢？練習(xí)：.you do, his love never gives up.A. WhateverB. WheneverC. Whichever D. However2.is wort

19、h doing at all is worth doing well.A. No matter what B. However C. Whatever D. No matter how翻譯鞏固：.無論我做什么，沒有人愿意原諒我。.無論你有多么忙，這段和你一起的時間是你的孩子應(yīng)得的。.不管多么小，我都會為我今天的成功慶功。2020金山二模Write at least 60 words about the topic “My opinion on remote lessons （請以“我對遠(yuǎn)程課堂的看法”為題，寫一篇不少于60個詞的短文，標(biāo)點符號不占格。）疫情期間我們開啟了一種全新的學(xué)習(xí)模式-遠(yuǎn)程

20、課堂（remote lessons） o在此期間你 是如何學(xué)習(xí)的？請結(jié)合你自身經(jīng)歷，談?wù)剬h(yuǎn)程課堂的看法。（注意：文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名、校名以其他相關(guān)信息，否那么不予評分。）The following is for reference only.（以下表達(dá)）because of the virusmanage timeself-controleffective審題分析：.根據(jù)題目要求，本文是一篇針對My opinion on remote lessons展開描述的夾敘夾議類作 文，在題目要求中已經(jīng)明確給出了文章所要包括的內(nèi)容，第一點是結(jié)合自己網(wǎng)絡(luò)學(xué)習(xí)的經(jīng)歷 加以描述，第二點是談一談對“遠(yuǎn)程學(xué)

21、習(xí)”的體會或看法。.本文開頭應(yīng)先引入“遠(yuǎn)程學(xué)習(xí)”這一話題，然后過渡到自己的觀點并結(jié)合經(jīng)歷進(jìn)行描述。.文章上語言表達(dá)要清晰，事件過程有邏輯性，應(yīng)用主客觀描寫，適當(dāng)?shù)剡\用動詞、副詞， 防止單調(diào)重復(fù)。范文點評：My opinion on remote lessonsThe outbreak of the novel coronavirus in China recently has forced millions of students to have class at home, which students have different attitudes towards. From my po

22、int of view, remote lessons produce great effects.I have learned various kinds of school online lessons for several months. There are many advantages of this mode of learning, which make me manage time more effectively and benefit a lot from self-control. In addition, I am interested in interacting

23、with my teachers and classmates.For my part, the remote lesson is a better choice for us students than traditional lessons, we should take full advantage of it to improve ourselves.作文提綱:句子內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵詞/句開頭引入The outbreak of the novel coronavirus in China recently has forced millions of students to have class

24、 at home.說明觀點(2) From my point of view, remote lessons produce great effects.記敘事情have learned various kinds of school online lessons; manage time; benefit a lot from self-control; interacting with總結(jié)體會the remote lesson is a better choice; take full advantage of it to improve ourselves語言進(jìn)階:.非限制性定語從句Th

25、e outbreak of the novel coronavirus in China recently has forced millions of students to have class at home, which students have different attitudes towards.定語從句有限制性和非限制性兩種。限制性定語從句是先行詞不可缺少的局部，去掉它 主句意思往往不明確；限制性定語從句起補充說明作用，是先行詞的附加說明，缺少也不會 影響全句的理解，它與主句往往用逗號隔開。關(guān)系詞分關(guān)系代詞和關(guān)系副詞，關(guān)系代詞that, which, who, whom, w

26、hose在定語從句中充當(dāng)主語，賓語，表語或者定語，關(guān)系副詞where, when, why在定語從句中充當(dāng)?shù)攸c，時間和原因狀語，關(guān)系副詞可以用介詞+which代替。本句為which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句，和主句用逗號隔開，關(guān)系which可以代替前 面的名詞也可指代整句話,本句中which指代前面一整句話,可以在作文中用來合并簡單句。詞典例句：Increasing teenagers are now addicted to electronic books, which makes parents worried.越來越多的青少年沉迷于電子書，這讓父母們很擔(dān)憂。（which指代主句）I have

27、 kept the violin for ten years, which was bought by my father as a birthday present.這個小提琴已經(jīng)跟隨我十年了，這是我爸爸作為禮物賣給我的。練習(xí)：Eric received training in computer for one year,he found a job in a bigcompany.after thatafter whichafter itafter thisBetween the two parts of the concert is an interval,the audience ca

28、n buy ice-cream.A. whenB. whereC. thatD. which翻譯鞏固：.我經(jīng)常忘了帶作業(yè)，這讓老師非常生氣。.越來越多的中國人能夠說英語了，這對于中國的開展來說是一件好事。.在上海高峰期的時候經(jīng)常會有交通堵塞，這給人們的生活帶來很多的不便。There are many advantages of this mode of learning .There be句型是英語中常用句型，意思是“有表示人或事物的存在”或“某處有某物詞典例句：There isnt hami in trying.不妨一試。There is going to be a meeting toni

29、ght.今天晚上有個會議。翻譯鞏固：.碗里有一些蘋果。.沒有必要把這件事告訴他。他已經(jīng)知道了。具體方式一首先(First of all),我們需要一個安靜的環(huán)境(we need a peaceful environment.)具體方式二其次(What offer sth to sb:提供某東西給某人；offer sb sth:提供給某人某東西；offer to do sth:主動 提出做某事 3.詞典例句： They decided to offer the job to Jo. 他們決定把這份工作給喬。 The young man offered the old man his own se

30、at on the bus. 那個年輕人在公共汽車上將自己的座位讓給了那個老人。 He offered to drive us to the airport, but we preferred to walk there. 2.聽見門鈴聲，她停下手中的活去開門。s more),我們應(yīng)該多跟老師交流(we should catch every chance to communicate with our teachers online.)總結(jié)這就是我的方法(my own ways),你門可以采取我的意見 (taking my advice),取得更好的成績(get better results)

31、語言進(jìn)階:1. because of +名詞：因為 because+句子：因為詞典例句：Many motorists were forced to stop over in that town because of floods.由于發(fā)大水，許多開車旅游的人被迫停留在那個鎮(zhèn)上了。The boss discharged her because of her absence.老板因她缺勤而把她解雇了。翻譯鞏固：這主要是由于我的過錯。由于大雪，飛行員只得把飛機降落到另一座城市的一個飛機場。我愛你因為你為我做的事。他主動提出送我們?nèi)C場,但我們寧愿走路去。翻譯鞏固：.她提出將自行車借給我。.那個公司的

32、老板親自來向我們抱歉。.當(dāng)我最困難的時候，他提供了幫助給我. stop doing sth：停下正在做的事；stop to do sth:停下去做另外一件事 詞典例句：I stopped reading the book when my mother asked me to have supper.當(dāng)媽媽叫我去吃晚飯時，我停止了讀書.I was watching TV just now.When I heard my mother came into the room,! stopped to read my book.剛剛我在看電視。當(dāng)聽到媽媽走近房間時,我馬上停下來，然后去做作業(yè)了.翻譯鞏

33、固：1.別這樣做，否那么你會陷入困境的2020靜安二模Write at least 60 words about the topic “My view on online lessons this March(請以“今年三月 的網(wǎng)課之我見”為題，寫一篇不少于60個詞的短文，標(biāo)點符號不占格。)(注意：文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名、校名以及其他相關(guān)信息，否那么不予評分。)The following is for reference only.What is your view?Show us an example or give your reason(s) to support your view.G

34、ive at least one suggestion you would like to make to your teacher(s)審題分析：根據(jù)題目要求，本文是一篇針對當(dāng)年熱點話題：在線學(xué)習(xí)(online lesson)展開的論屬型作文，要求結(jié)合具體事例或者給出理由，談?wù)勱P(guān)于網(wǎng)課我們的觀點。本文開頭應(yīng)先引入由于疫情原因，大家都不得不待在家里在線上課。在寫自己的觀點時，要注意分點表達(dá)，邏輯清晰。范文點評：My view on online lessons this MarchBecause of the novel coronavirus, we had to stay at home

35、to take online lessons. Online lesson is a new experience for all of us, and different people have different opinions about it. As far as I am concerned, I think the advantages of online lessons far outweigh its disadvantages.First, taking online lessons can save us lots of time. I dont need to take

36、 nearly an hour to go to school by bus like before. Now, all I have to do is to sit in front of the computer in my room, so I can have enough time to preview the lesson before class. Whats more, unlike school lessons, many online lessons can be recorded and we can review them by watching the replay.

37、 If I forget or feel confused about some important points,! will check the replay, which enables me to study more efficiently.I like online lessons, but there is also a problem that staring at the computer for a long time can do harm to our eyes. Therefore, I hope our teachers can lead us to do eye

38、exercises during the break time, which can protect our eyes from becoming nearsighted.Whether we take lessons at school or online, we should take it seriously and try our best to achieve better results.作文提綱:句子內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵詞/句開頭引入因為 xx 病毒的原因(Because of the novel coronavirus)，大 家不得不待在家里上課(took online lessons),

39、在我看來(As far as I am concerned),線上課優(yōu)點大于缺點(the advantages of online lessons outweigh its disadvantages.)觀點一首先(First),線上課能節(jié)約時間(can save us lots of time)觀點二其次(Whats more),線上課可以被記錄下來看回放(can be recorded, and watch the replay)總結(jié)無論在家還是學(xué)校(whether we take lesson at school or online),都應(yīng)該認(rèn)真對待(take it seriously)

40、,努力取得 好成績(achieve better results)語言進(jìn)階:As far as I am concerned = in my opinion詞典例句：As far as I am concerned, I think books are a Treasury of all knowledge accumulated over thousands of years.我認(rèn)為，書本就是人類通過幾千年世界積累的知識寶庫。In my opinion, ideal is a wish for you to live better.在我看來，理想就是你想讓生活變得美好的愿望。翻譯鞏固：在我看

41、來，這是向前邁出的一大步。我的看法是，上面提到的長處超過短處在我看來，我已經(jīng)在過著我真正的生活。enable sb to do sth詞典例句：The software enables you to access the Internet in seconds.這種軟件使你在幾秒鐘內(nèi)便可訪問互聯(lián)網(wǎng)。The new programme enables older people to study at college新計劃使老年人有機會在大學(xué)學(xué)習(xí)。翻譯鞏固：他這次考試的失敗將會激勵他努力學(xué)習(xí)。閱讀讓我認(rèn)識世界。方便的交通讓我能夠在半小時內(nèi)到達(dá)學(xué)校。protect (sb) from doing:保

42、護(hù)某人免受于.詞典例句：The numerous holes in the front protect from the summer heat.在前擋板上大量的洞孔保護(hù)車手不用忍受夏日的炎熱。They huddled together to protect themselves from the wind.他們擠在一起，免受風(fēng)吹。翻譯鞏固：.你最好戴上太陽鏡來保護(hù)眼睛免受太陽(傷害).法律會保護(hù)我們免受傷害。.你應(yīng)該防范孩子們感冒2020青浦二模情景提不：在本學(xué)期居家學(xué)習(xí)期間，你是如何開展學(xué)習(xí)的？有什么收獲？請結(jié)合你的學(xué)習(xí)經(jīng)歷和體驗談 一談。（除詩歌外文體不限。）Expressions fo

43、r references:take online courses, watch video lectures, organize Wechat groups, share the experience follow the advice, the self-learning ability審題分析：.根據(jù)題目要求，本文是一篇針對XX期間居家學(xué)習(xí)所展開描述的生活類作文，要求講述 自己在XX期間如何開展，所得收獲進(jìn)行書寫.本文需要結(jié)合自身經(jīng)驗，并不是單純的議論文，因此注意主語需要第一人稱.本文開頭應(yīng)先引入此次寒假與之前不一樣，然后過渡到自身的情況介紹。.在內(nèi)容較多的局部要注意層次和連詞。范文點評：

44、This is a special festival, a different winter holiday, for every student, which is also a test, a test of self-control.Since the outbreak of the disease, I have been staying at home and online courses become the first choice during this special period. Our school has also launched online courses fo

45、r us, using an application called DingDing, through which the teachers broadcast lectures and give us assignments. Whats more, not only do I insist on online courses, but also I take exercise every day to keep healthy.Actually, different people have different feelings about online classes, but for m

46、e, I think, we should be responsible for ourselves. Learning is our own business. We cant rely on others. We must be highly self-conscious and self-discipline. Only in this way can we have efficient learning and harvest efficient knowledge and skills.作文提綱:句子內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵詞/句開頭引入a special festival, a different

47、 holiday如何開展學(xué)習(xí)online courses, DingDing, give us assignments花錢感受be responsible for ourselves, highly self-conscious語言進(jìn)階：.非限制性定語從句This is a special festival, a different winter, holiday, for every student, which is also a test, a test of self-control.定語從句有限制性和非限制性兩種。定語從句的關(guān)系詞分關(guān)系代詞和關(guān)系副詞，關(guān)系代 詞that, which

48、, who, whom, whose在定語從句中充當(dāng)主語，賓語，表語或者定語，關(guān)系 副詞where, when, why在定語從句中充當(dāng)?shù)攸c，時間和原因狀語，關(guān)系副詞可以用介詞 +which 代替。詞典例句：他在一些不重要的事情上花費時間太多，這導(dǎo)致了整個計劃的失敗。He spent too much time on some unimportant/less important things, which led to the failure of the whole plan.隨著社會的迅速開展，許多人都渴望向群眾展示他們自己，從而產(chǎn)生了各種各樣的娛樂活動。With the rapid d

49、evelopment of society, a growing number of people are eager to show themselves to the public, which has resulted in various/all kinds of amusements.練習(xí)：Recently I bought an ancient Chinese vase,was very reasonable.A. which priceB. the price of which C. its priceD. the price of thatTony will never forget these days she lived in China with her mother,has agreat effect on her life.A. that； which B. when； which C. which； that D. when； that翻譯鞏固：.孩子們從小就不得不在學(xué)也上競爭，這就給他們帶來了日益增加的精神壓力。.老師的贊賞給了