(新高考)高考英語二輪復習課時精煉考向42 讀后續(xù)寫之情感情緒細節(jié)刻畫(解析版)

考向42讀后續(xù)寫之情感情緒細節(jié)刻畫情感細節(jié)包括人物的感受、情緒，是續(xù)寫中必不可少的細節(jié)描寫之一。合理的情感情緒描寫與刻畫，可以凸顯人物的性格、人際關系的特征、以及烘托故事高潮進而突出語篇主題等。因此，合理的情感情緒刻畫在續(xù)寫中是非常必要的。以下就是讀后續(xù)寫過程中，刻畫人物情感情緒的四個方法：一、直接利用恰當?shù)谋砬楦械男稳菰~、副詞或名詞、介詞短語等表達人物的喜怒哀樂例如：快樂(happy,delighted,pleased,joyful,enjoyable等)、吃驚(surprised,shocked,amazed,astonished)等形容詞或介詞短語(toone'ssurprise,inrelief,inpanic)等描述人物的情緒。二、利用環(huán)境細節(jié)“融情于景”烘托人物的情感例如：Dellafinishedhercryinganddriedherface.Shestoodbythewindowandlookedoutunhappilyatagraycatwalkingalongagrayfenceinagraybackyard.(小說《麥琪的禮物》中利用3個形容詞gray，體現(xiàn)了Della的難受和不開心。)三、利用恰當?shù)膭幼髅鑼懛从橙宋锏那榫w例如：下面文章片段中的句子：Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hoping_to_see_the_lake.(動作描寫，說明Jane滿懷期望)Tohersurprise,(利用介詞短語體現(xiàn)Jane的吃驚)shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnow-cappedmountaintop.(寓情于景，體現(xiàn)Jane的無望失落)Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.四、利用高級句式和修飾成分細化情感細節(jié)例如：①“Absolutely！”repliedJohn,excitementshinninginhiseyes.(利用名詞excitement和獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)，描寫John的興奮激動)約翰答道，“一定”，他兩眼興奮地閃閃發(fā)光。②Soangrywasthebearthatitroaredandsmackedthefenceviolently.(so...that倒裝句型)熊怒火中燒，開始咆哮并用爪子猛烈地拍擊護欄。③Youcannotimaginehowfrightenedwewereattheapproachofthepolarbear.(how引導的賓語從句，介詞短語)你無法想象北極熊向我們逼近時我們多么的恐懼?！静呗晕⒕殹竣?按要求補全下面動作、情感和心理細節(jié)的句子1．簡又害怕又無助，靠著一棵樹坐下，歇歇疼痛的雙腳。,Janesatagainstatree,.(形容詞短語/非謂語動詞作狀語)2．“如果我沒有和湯姆吵架，我現(xiàn)在就不會被困在這里了，”她想，悔恨的淚水模糊了她的眼睛?！埃眘hethoughttoherself.(虛擬語氣的倒裝句，with復合結(jié)構(gòu))3．她掙扎著站起來尋找那個湖。4．她精疲力竭，她爬上一塊大石頭，躺了下來，很快睡著了。(so...that狀語從句，一連串的動作)5．簡醒來時天已經(jīng)亮了。6．盡管很沮喪，她還是決定繼續(xù)前進。,shedecidedtocontinueforcingherwayahead.(讓步狀語從句),shedecidedtocontinueforcingherwayahead.(狀語從句的省略句)7．隨著小溪的聲音，她向水邊走去。,shewalkedtowardthewater.(非謂語動詞作狀語)8．突然，她注意到遠處有一個熟悉的身影向她走來。(非謂語動詞作賓補)Ⅱ.將以上補全后的各句合并為短文，注意恰當?shù)你暯舆^渡參考答案Ⅰ.1．Scaredandhelpless,Janesatagainstatree,restingherachingfeet.(形容詞短語/非謂語動詞作狀語)2．“HadInotquarreledwithTom,Iwouldn'thavebeentrappedhere，”shethoughttoherselfwithregretfultearscloudinghereyes.(虛擬語氣的倒裝句，with復合結(jié)構(gòu))3．Shestruggledtoherfeettosearchforthelake.4．Shebecamesoexhaustedthatsheclimbedupontoabigrock,laydownandfellfastasleep.(so...that狀語從句，一連串的動作)5．ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.6．Althoughshewasdepressed,shedecidedtocontinueforcingherwayahead.(讓步狀語從句)Althoughdepressed,shedecidedtocontinueforcingherwayahead.(狀語從句的省略句)7．Followingthesoundofthestream,shewalkedtowardthewater.(非謂語動詞作狀語)8．Suddenlyshenoticedafamiliarfigureatadistancecomingtowardsher.(非謂語動詞作賓補)Ⅱ.參考范文Scaredandhelpless,Janesatagainstatree,restingherachingfeet.“HadInotquarreledwithTom,Iwouldn'thavebeentrappedhere，”shethoughttoherselfwithregretfultearscloudinghereyes.Shestruggledtoherfeettosearchforthelake.However,shebecamesoexhaustedthatsheclimbedupontoabigrock,laydownandfellfastasleep.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Althoughdepressed,shedecidedtocontinueforcingherwayahead.Followingthesoundofthestream,shewalkedtowardthewater.Suddenlyshenoticedafamiliarfigureatadistancecomingtowardsher.【典例示例】閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應為150左右。SamWattswasa37-year-oldfishermanlivingandworkinginCanada.Oneday,SamplannedtoheadoutintothePacificat9amandworkstraightthroughuntil5pmthenextday.JoiningSamwouldbehiscrewman,24-year-oldTomBuck.AlthoughSamhadbeenwarnedthatastormwascoming,therewaslittlethatwouldkeephimfromgoing.Ashesailedthroughthewavessome120kilometersfromland,Samletouthisthree-kilometer-longfishingline.Thestormwasgainingstrengthonlandbuthadyettoreachthemenfaroffshore.Thatchangedaround1am.Wavesrockedthesmallboat,whichbegantoturnsidewayslikeanamusementparkride.“Getusoutofhere！”TomscreamedtoSam.“Let'sgoback！”Withthewindsandwaveskickingup,theboatbegantofillwithwater.SamandTomtriedtopullinthefishinglinetogether,butthehighwavesfilledtheboatwithwater,forcingSamtomakeaharddecision.Hecuttheline,losingthousandsofdollars'worthofequipmentandfishinthesea.Hethenpointedtheboattowardaportfivehoursaway.Samthencalledhisboss,WilliamFox,toreporthisposition.Withdawncoming,Samspottedtheriseofthemountainsonthehorizon.Hewasfiguringoutaroutethroughthedangerouswaterswhensuddenlythemotorstopped.“Icouldn'tbelieveit，”Samsaid.“Wewere24kilometersoffthecoast,andthemotordied.”Highwavesraisedanddroppedtheboat,sendingthemencrashingintothesides.“William,William！”Samyelledintotheradio.“Ifyou'recomingtogetme,comenow！”“We'recoming！”Williamshoutedback.Paragraph1Shortlyafter,theradiodiedandthewindcontinuedtoblowstraightoffshore,drivingthemenfartherouttosea.Paragraph2Thenextmorning,Samspottedafishingboatinthedistance.【寫作分析】文章主旨：原文敘述SamWatts和船員TomBuck去海上捕魚時，突遇風暴，在危險之際SamWatts做出了艱難的抉擇：割斷魚線，損失了價值數(shù)千萬美元的設備和魚。雖然和老板報告了自己的位置，然而SamWatts和TomBuck船上的發(fā)動機熄火。續(xù)寫部分應敘述他們被救出的過程。續(xù)寫第一段：根據(jù)首句關鍵信息“theradiodied”和“drivingthemenfartherouttosea”可知該段應敘述Sam和Tom在發(fā)動機熄火和無線電死機的情況下，被困海上面臨死亡。此時應用心理活動描寫，描寫他們的恐懼以及Sam后悔的心情，后悔自己不顧風暴的警告固執(zhí)地出海的決定。續(xù)寫第二段：根據(jù)首句關鍵信息“afishingboat”結(jié)合原文中提到到海上尋找他們的William可知，該段應敘述他們最終獲救。該段的敘述可利用動作描寫顯示他們見到來營救他們的船只時高興的心情?！緟⒖挤段摹縋aragraph1Shortlyafter,theradiodiedandthewindcontinuedtoblowstraightoffshore,drivingthemenfartherouttosea.FearseizedTomandhewastrembling,forthewaterhadnotonlywethisclothesbutalsoruinedhishopeofsurviving.Sammurmured,“Iwaswarnedthatastormwascoming.Haditnotbeenformystubbornness,wewouldnothavelostourequipmentandhadtofacesuchaterriblesituation.”Hisvoicegraduallydisappearedaswavesrockedtheboat,makingterrifyingsounds.Afterwhatseemedtobeacentury,agreatdarknessfell.Exhausted,theyfellasleep.Paragraph2Thenextmorning,Samspottedafishingboatinthedistance.HeexcitedlywokeTomup.Tomrubbedhiseyesandstared.Oncehecaughtsightoftheboat,hewasalsolitup.Thechanceofsurvivingmadethemregainstrengthandtheybegantoshoutloudly.Theboatsawthemandtheywentaboard.OntheboattheymetWilliamandothercrewmembers.Althoughtheyhadlostthousandsofdollars,theycametounderstandthevalueofhope.【檢測訓練】1.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Tobythecatwasinasmallcardboardboxmarked“freekittens”whenDaisymethimandtookhimhome.Andfromthatmomenton,helovedboxes.Hesleptinhatboxes,giftboxesandtakeoutfoodboxes.HesleptinDaisy’ssockdrawer,ifsheleftitopen.Whenhewasakitten,thesizeofasmallloafofbread,hehadsleptinshoeboxes.Buthegrewandgrew,andnowhewasalotbiggerthanaloafofbread.Whenhetriedtosleepinashoebox,hisfurrystomachhungoverthesides.Tobydidn’tjustsitinboxes,though.Sometimeshesatinflowerpots,orlaundrybaskets.Daisyhadabeautifuldollhouseforherbirthday,adarkgreenthree-storyhousewithlotsoffurniture.Daisylovedit.SodidToby.Helikedtopushthefurnitureoutofalltheroomsandsitinthebedroomonthesecondfloor.OnedayDaisycamehomefromschool,andshecouldn’tfindToby.Hewasn’tinthedollhouse,orhersockdrawer,eventhoughshe’dforgottentocloseit.“Mom,Dad!”Daisywailed.“Tobyisgone!”Daisy’smomlookedintheattic.Therewereboxesanddustbunnies,andevenamousethathadescapedToby’snotice,butnoToby.Daisy’sdadlookedinthekitchencabinets.Therewerepotsandpans,andcansofsoup,butnoToby.Suddenly—“Ifoundhim!”Daisycried.Thebigcatwasinsidehermom’snewglassvase,andhedidn’tlookhappyatall.Daisytippedthevaseovergentlyandtriedtopullhimout,butTobyjusthowled.“We’llhavetobreakthevasetogethimout!”Daisycried.Nowhermomdidn’tlookhappy.Itwasabeautifulvase.“No,”saidherdad.“Ifwebreakit,theglasspiecesmighthurtToby.Maybewecanputbutterontheinsideofthevaseandslidehimout,likethetimeyougotthatringstuckonyourfinger.”注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Paragraph1:Immediately,Daisyfetchedsomebutter.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Soontheywereatthevet'soffice.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Immediately,Daisyfetchedsomebutter.Hermombutteredasmuchoftheinsideofthevaseasshecouldreach,andherdadtriedtopulltheunhappycatout.Totheirdisappointment,Tobyputhispawsagainstthesidesofthevaseinprotest.Nowtheyhadanangry,butterycatstuckinavase.TheywerealmostdesperatewhensuddenlyDaisy'sdadhituponanidea.“Wecouldcallthevet,”hesuggested.Soontheywereatthevet'soffice.Seeinganannoyed,frightened,butterycatinavase,thevetalmostlaughedoutloudbutshemanagedtoclearherthroatinstead.“PossiblyoneofthestrangerthingsI'veseen,”sheadmitted.ShehadDaisyandherparentsstayinthewaitingroomwhileshegaveTobyashottomakehimsleepy.Anhourlater,averysleepyandwashedTobywasbroughtouttohisanxiousfamily.NotonlyToby,butthevase,stillinonepiece!【寫作分析】本文以故事為線索展開，講述了小貓Toby被主人Daisy收養(yǎng)后，它喜歡待在各種盒子里，有時還會坐在花盆、平底鍋或洗衣籃里，媽媽建議給小貓建一個自己的貓舍，可是Daisy沒有在意，有一天Daisy發(fā)現(xiàn)Toby不見了，原來它蜷縮在花瓶里面，肥胖的身體幾乎卡住了?！緦懽鞑襟E】1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“Daisy立刻拿來一些黃油?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫Daisy一家人為救出小貓所遇到的困難和做出的努力，最終決定向獸醫(yī)求助。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“很快他們就到了獸醫(yī)辦公室?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫在獸醫(yī)的幫助下，Toby得救了，花瓶也完好無損。

2.續(xù)寫線索：把貓拉出來——貓不出來——向獸醫(yī)求助——等待——貓出來了

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①突然想出：hitupon/cameupwith

②建議：suggested/advised

③給……注射：give…ashot/give…aninjection

情緒類

①生氣的：angry/annoyed

②絕望的：desperate/indespair【寫作步亮點】[高分句型1].Seeinganannoyed,frightened,butterycatinavase,thevetalmostlaughedoutloudbutshemanagedtoclearherthroatinstead.（現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語）

[高分句型2].“PossiblyoneofthestrangerthingsI'veseen,”sheadmitted.（省略關系代詞that的限制性定語從句）2.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)所給內(nèi)容進行續(xù)寫,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Itwasdeepintothenightmanyyearsago.Therainjustcamepouringdownoutside.Anelderlymanandhiswifeenteredthelobby(大廳)ofasmallhotelinPhiladelphia,USA.Tryingtogetoutoftherain,thecoupleapproachedthefrontdeskhopingtogetaroomtostayinforthenight.“Couldyoupossiblygiveusaroomhere?”thehusbandasked.Theclerk,afriendlyyoungmanwithawinningsmile,lookedatthecoupleandexplainedthattherewerethreeconferencesinthetown."Allofourroomsaretaken,"theclerksaid.“ButIcan’tsendanicecouplelikeyououtintotherainatoneo'clockatnight.Wouldyouperhapsbewillingtosleepinmyroom?It'snotexactlyasuite,butitwillbegoodenoughtomakeyoucomfortableforthenight.”Whenthecoupledeclined,theyoungmanpressedon."Don'tworryaboutme.I'llmakeoutjustfine,"theclerktoldthem.Sothecoupleagreed.Ashepaidhisbillthenextmorning,theelderlymansaidtotheclerk,“Youarethekindofmanagerwhoshouldbethebossofthebesthotel.MaybesomedayI'llbuildoneforyou.”Theclerklookedatthemandsmiled.Thethreeofthemhadagoodlaugh.Astheydroveaway,theelderlycoupleagreedthatthehelpfulclerkwasindeedexceptional,asfindingpeoplewhoarebothfriendlyandhelpfulisn'teasy.Threeyearspassed.Theclerkhadalmostforgottenthethingwhenhereceivedaletterfromtheelderlyman.Itrecalledthatstormynight,whenheofferedhiskindhelptotheelderlycouple.Intheenvelope,therewasaround-triptickettoNewYork,andaletteraskingtheyoungmantopaythemavisit.Theyoungmandecidedtosetoutimmediately.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段,每段的開頭語已為你寫好。Paragraph1:“Doyoustillremembermypromiseyearsago?”theelderlymansaidtotheyoungman.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:“Youmustbejoking,”theyoungmansaid.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Paragraph1:“Doyoustillremembermypromiseyearsago?”theelderlymansaidtotheyoungman.Theyoungmanwaspuzzledandrememberednothingofwhattheelderlymanhadsaidyearsbefore.Hejustlookedattheelderlymaninsurprise,shakinghishead.“Well,”theelderlymanwenton.“IpromisedtobuildahotelforyouwhenIleftyourhotel.Youaresokindandsohelpful.I'msureyouwillturnouttobeagoodbossinthefuture.Ihavefirmtrustinyou.Paragraph2:“Youmustbejoking,”theyoungmansaid.“I'mserious,”saidtheelderlymanwithasmilearoundhismouth.Hethenpointedtoagreatnewbuildingthere.“That,”saidtheelderlyman,“isthehotelIhavejustbuiltforyou.Ihopeyoucantakechargeofit.”Thus,theyoungclerkbecamethefirstmanagerofthehotel.Buthehadneverexpectedtheturnofeventsthatwouldleadhimtobecomethemanagerofoneoftheworld'smostfamoushotels.【寫作分析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了一個傾盆大雨的夜晚，一對老夫婦進入一家小旅館想要住宿，但所有客房已經(jīng)訂滿。一位年輕的員工將自己的房間讓給了他們。多年后，這位老先生兌現(xiàn)當年的承諾，為這個年輕人建造了一座酒店，并邀請他出任經(jīng)理的感人故事?！緦懽鞑襟E】1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“這位老人詢問這個年輕人是否還記得他幾年前的諾言?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼戇@位老者重提多年前的承諾。打算要為年輕人建造一家酒店，讓他做老板。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“這個年輕人對老人的話難以置信?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫年輕人對老人的提議深感驚訝，但在老人誠懇的邀請下，承擔起管理酒店的職責。

2.續(xù)寫線索：重提諾言——驚訝——解釋——難以置信——誠懇邀請——成功

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①.管理：takechargeof/takeover/holdthereinsof

②.繼續(xù)說道：goon/add/moveon

③.信任：havetrustinsb/havefaithinsb/havebeliefinsb

情緒類

①.驚訝地：insurprise/inastonishment

②.迷惑不解的：puzzled/confused/bewildered

【寫作步亮點】

[高分句型1].Buthehadneverexpectedtheturnofeventsthatwouldleadhimtobecomethemanagerofoneoftheworld'smostfamoushotels.（由連接詞that引導的定語從句）

[高分句型2].Theyoungmanwaspuzzledandrememberednothingofwhattheelderlymanhadsaidyearsbefore.（由連接代詞what引導的賓語從句）

[高分句型3].Hejustlookedattheelderlymaninsurprise,shakinghishead.（現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語）3.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Mr.Taylorcheckedagain:water,food,bandage,medicines,acompass,andamapwrappedinplastic...Bingo!Heputallthathepreparedforthecominghikingintohisbackpack.Mr.Taylorwasfondofhiking,thistimeinparticular,foritwasthefirsttimeforhimtohikewithhistwosons,HarryandJoel.JoellikedreadingbooksaboutexplorersandHarryjoinedthehikingclubinhisschoolthisterm.Itwillbeanunforgettableexperience,definitely,hewhisperedtohimselfunconsciouslyasmilespreadingoverhisface.HarryandJoel,however,arguedforthefirstthreemilesoftheirhikingtrip.HarryaccusedJoelofwearingsmellyoldshoes.JoelblamedHarryforusingallofthebugspray（噴霧防蟲劑）.HarrytoldJoelhesmelledterrible.JoelcalledHarryacoward（懦夫）.“Willthetwoofyoujustquietdownandenjoyourhiketogether?”theirfathersaid."You’remissingallofthebeautifulscenery!"Itwastrue.NeitherJoelnorHarryhadtakennoticeofthebeartheirfatherhadspiedatthestartoftheirtrip.Theyhadn’tlookedupattheeaglehepointedoutoverhead.Worstofall,theyhadn’tpaidanyattentiontotheturnsandtwistsalongthewaywhiletheycontinuedtheirargument.“Joelthrewastickatme!”Harryscreamed."That’snottrue!”Joelshoutedback.Mr.Taylorcouldnolongercontainhisanger."Andbothofyouneedtostoparguing!"heerupted.Asheturnedtofacethem,hisleftfootcaughtonaroot.Heslippedbackwardanddownmuddybank,fallingintotheriverthatranalongsidethepath,HarryandJoelracedtotheirfather’sassistance.Theyhelpedhimupoutofthewater,andthendraggedhiswetbackpackupontoland.Fortunately,theirwet-throughfatherfoundhimselfjustslightlyinjured.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在相應位置作答。Paragraph1:Buthisglassescameoffwhenhefellinthewater.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:“Justcalmdown."Mr.Taylorshouted,"Withoutmyglasses,weneedtoworktogethertofindourway."____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Para1Buthisglassescameoffwhenhefellinthewater.HarryandJoelwadedbackintotheriver.Twigsandleavesswirledaroundtheiranklesbeforefloatingawayonthecurrent.Noglasses!Hairythoughttheymighthavebeensweptdownstream,withoutwhichMr.Taylorcouldn’tsee.Everythingwasablurtohimnow.Howcouldtheygethome?“Ohgreat!Nowwe’relost,”groanedJoel,"anditmightbedaysbeforesomeonefindsus.”"Nothankstoyou.”Harryblamed.Para2"Justcalmdown."Mr.Taylorshouted,"Withoutmyglasses,weneedtoworktogethertofindourway."Mr.Taylorfumbledinhisbackpackandpulledthemapandthecompassout.Luckily,Joellearnedhowtoreadamapfromhisbooks,andHarryknewhowtouseacompassfromhishikingclub.Theystoppedarguing,lookeddownatthemap,sothattheysearchedfortheriverandusedthecompasstofindthedirection.Inrelief,Mr.Taylorbeamedproudly,"Youtwowillsavetheday.You’reprettygoodhikingpartners!”【寫作分析】本文以人物為線索展開。主要講的是Taylor先生第一次和兩個兒子Harry和Joel一起徒步旅行。然而，Harry和Joel為徒步旅行的前三英里而爭吵。結(jié)果后來惹得Taylor先生生氣了，他的左腳被樹根纏住了，在泥濘的河岸上滑來滑去，掉進了路旁的河里。兩個兒子前去幫助父親，還好渾身濕透的父親發(fā)現(xiàn)自己只是受了點輕傷。【寫作步驟】1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“但他掉進水里的時候眼鏡掉了。”可知，第一段可描寫兩個孩子一起幫助Taylor先生在水里找眼鏡，在找尋無結(jié)果的情況下，兩個孩子又相互埋怨。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容““冷靜點?！盩aylor先生喊道，“沒有我的眼鏡，我們需要一起找到出路””可知，第二段可描寫Taylor先生在背包里找到了地圖和指南針，兩個孩子利用他們之前學過的使用知識，利用地圖和指南針找到了出路。2.續(xù)寫線索：掉進水里——尋找眼鏡——埋怨——讓孩子們冷靜——找到指南針和地圖——使用地圖和指南針——找到出路——贊揚3.詞匯激活行為類①尋找：searchfor/lookfor②抱怨：complain/grumble/murmurat③摸索：grope/feelabout/trytofindout④使用：makeuseof/apply⑤贊揚：praise/compliment/speakhighlyof情緒類①生氣的：annoyed/angry②高興的：pleased/delighted【寫作步亮點】[高分句型1]Harrythoughttheymighthavebeensweptdownstream,withoutwhichMr.Taylorcouldn’tsee.（運用“介詞+關系代詞”引導非限制性定語從句。）[高分句型2]Theystoppedarguingandlookeddownatthemap,sothattheycouldsearchfortheriverandusedthecompasstofindthedirection.（運用sothat引導目的狀語從句。）4.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。JesseDuftonwasbornwithageneticcondition,retinitispigmentosa(色素性視網(wǎng)膜炎),andovertheyears,hiseyesightgraduallyworsened.BythetimehegottouniversityinBathtostudyChemistryithadgottothepointwherehecouldn’treallyseeimagesatall,onlythedifferencebetweenlightanddark.Andafewyearslater,hewasalmost100%blind.Jesse’smumwasateacherandhisdadranacharity,andthey’vealwaysencouragedandsupportedhimineverything.Jessestartedclimbingwhenhewasyoung.Hisdadtookhimuphisfirstrockroutewhenhewastwo.Allhisearlyclimbingwasoutdoortraditionalclimbing.HisdadhadbeenintheMountainRescueandwaspartofamountaineeringclub,sotheywouldgoforweekendsawayclimbingthroughouttheUK.Jesse’sfathertaughthimeverythingandguidedhisfirstrouteoutsidewhenhewas11.Atthistimehehadabout30%blurry(模糊不清的)centralvision.Hecouldjustseewellenoughtoplacerockequipment,butnotwellenoughtopickouttheroutesfromtheground.AtuniversityhejoinedtheMountaineeringClubandwasabletoclimbmuchmorefrequently.Theyhadregulartripstoindoorwallsandweekendsawayoutdoors.HedevelopedagreatcircleofclimbingfriendsandwentonmultipletripstoEurope.OnthesehestartedAlpineclimbingandiceclimbingtoo.Butwhenhissightdroppedtoalevelwherehecouldnolongerread,itstartedtobedifficulttoplaceequipmentashecouldn’tseewhetheritwasproperlyseated.Healsostoppedbeingabletopickouttheholdsatindoorwalls.Jessethoughthemighthavetogiveupclimbingashiseyesightgotworse.Buthisparentsnevergiveuphopesforhim.TheyplannedaclimbingforthefamilyandencouragedJessetohaveatryagain.Jessesmiledbecauseheknewhisparentswouldalwaysbehisbestguide.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Itwasroutelikemilestone(里程碑)anditwasnoteasy.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________SomepeopleaskedJessewhyhechosetotryclimbing.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Itwasroutelikemilestoneanditwasnoteasy.Jesse’svisionwastoughproblemandhehimselfwasn’tconfidentenough.Thattimehefelthardertocompletehisclimbing.Hetoldhimselfthathemustclimbon,notonlyforhimself,butalsoforhisbelovedparents,whocarefullywatchedhisstepsandpatientlyremindedhimofpossibledanger.Asyouexpect,Jessesucceededclimbinguptothetopofthemountain,safeandsound.SomepeopleaskedJessewhyhechosetotryclimbing.Heansweredthathedidthatbecauseitwasdifficultandchallengingandhewantedthesatisfactionofsuccess.Therearemanydifferentchallengesinclimbing.ButthefeelingofaccomplishmentisincredibleHecouldn’tseetheviewbuthecouldfeelthepoweroflovefromhisparents.Itistheultimatetestofourbrainandourbody.【寫作分析】本文以人物為線索展開，文章主要講述了男主角Jesse有先天性的眼部疾病——色素性視網(wǎng)膜炎，視力逐漸下降，進入大學的時候幾乎接近失明。但是他的父母自始至終沒有放棄他，鼓勵他走上家庭攀巖之旅?！緦懽鞑襟E】1.段落續(xù)寫：由第一段首句內(nèi)容“這條路線就像里程碑式的路線，但這并不容易?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫Jesse克服困難的心理過程以及最終成功攀巖。由第二段首句內(nèi)容“有些人問杰西為什么選擇嘗試攀登的原因?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫Jesse解釋他努力攀巖的原因以及通過攀巖他獲得的好處。2.續(xù)寫線索：遭遇的困難——克服困難——成功攀巖——選擇攀巖的理由——攀巖的好處—感到父母的愛

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①.提醒某人：remindsbof/helpsbremember

②.完成攀爬：completeclimbing/finishclimbing③.想要成功的滿足感：wantthesatisfactionofsuccess/achieveasenseofaccomplishment情緒類

①.自信：beconfident/feelsureabout

②.不可思議的：incredible/believable【寫作步亮點】[高分