專題34讀后續(xù)寫之如何延續(xù)故事高潮-2023年高考英語一輪復習 精講與精練資料（教師版）

專題34讀后續(xù)寫之如何延續(xù)故事高潮《考點?題型?技巧》考向分析考向分析故事中的高潮(climax)也通常是故事的轉(zhuǎn)折點(turningpoint)，是指故事達到最緊張或扣人心弦的那一部分。高潮有時候是劇情中的“危機”點。有時它只是達到關鍵時刻或者轉(zhuǎn)折點時，發(fā)生了一些事情，或者人物必須做出決定，從而導致一個結(jié)果或其他。營造故事發(fā)展的高潮可以通過營造沖突實現(xiàn)。沖突帶來緊迫感，因此營造沖突是一種有效地將故事推向情節(jié)發(fā)展的高潮的方式?？键c導航考點導航一、高潮沖突思維1：.增加外部沖突增加外部沖突是一種明顯有效的可以達到故事高潮的方式。沖突帶來緊迫感,將故事推向必要的解決或崩潰。1.角色之間的沖突(人物觀點差異,競爭需要等)2.角色與環(huán)境之間的沖突3.時間依賴的發(fā)展：決策變得緊急4.增加的障礙：人物角色必須克服挑戰(zhàn),以達到他們的目標二、高潮沖突思維2：放大內(nèi)心沖突放大內(nèi)心沖突（你的角色的內(nèi)心斗爭）也有助于建立一個高度緊張和不確定的時刻。三、高潮沖突思維3：使用環(huán)境描寫增加不確定性充分利用環(huán)境描寫可以起到烘托故事高潮的作用，具體方法可以看上期讀后續(xù)寫微技能。當故事角色在碰到困難時候，我們往往要加大筆墨來描寫故事環(huán)境的黑暗，恐怖和不祥。強化環(huán)境描寫增強了高潮元素。我們感受到了緊張的倍增?！绢}型賞析】1.常見故事高潮Alittlegirlhasbeensearchingforherlostdog.Allofasudden,shehearsabarkcomingfromaroundthecorner,andshelooksaroundtosee...Kevinhasworkedveryhardtotryoutforthesoccerteamatschool.Thecoachhaspostedalistofthisyear'steammembersonhisofficedoor.Kevinwalksforwardtolookatthelist....Mary'sparentshavebeendiscussingwhetherornottomovetoanotherstate.TheycallMaryandhersisterdowntotalkwiththemabouttheirdecision...Loishasperformedinthestategymnasticsfinals.Shewaitsanxiouslytohearthenamesofthewinners.Theannouncersays,"Andfirstplacegoesto..."2.文學名著中的一些故事高潮ThedeathsofRomeo(whokillshimselfbecausehethinksJulietisdead)andJuliet(whokillsherselfwhensheawakesandseesRomeodead).RomeoandJuliet,Shakespeare（《羅密歐和朱麗葉》）WhenGastonandthetownspeoplecometoattackthebeast,andBelleadmitsherloveforthebeast.BeautyandtheBeast,Disney（《美女與野獸》）In"TheThreeLittlePigs,"suspensebuildsupuntiltheconfrontationbetweenthethirdpigandthewolf.Thisconfrontationistheclimax.（三只小豬）Howtocreateaclimaxofastory?3.角色之間的沖突(人物觀點差異,競爭需要等)Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn'twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.開車找旅館---徒勞無功---母親建議搭帳篷在他人后院---David和我倍感緊張，心有不悅（母子的觀點不一）4.角色與環(huán)境之間的沖突ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.……h(huán)esawinstantlythatitwasn'tadogatall,butawolf:quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac'sheartjumped.……,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac'srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,…….Thenit……,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellback……Mac騎車獨自行，路遇餓狼，與之搏斗，險象環(huán)生。（人（角色）----狼（環(huán)境）大戰(zhàn)）5.時間依賴的發(fā)展：決策變得緊急Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim."Getintothecar."PaulshoutedatMac.MacjumpedoffthebikeandslidintothecarwithoutdelayasthewolfwasjusttwostepsawayandwasabouttotearMacintopieces.Whatanarrowescape!騎車突停面前---急喊上車---Max上車避險---餓狼近在咫尺（此情此景，刻不容緩）6.增加的障礙：人物角色必須克服挑戰(zhàn),以達到他們的目標Butbeforewejumpedoffthehorses,wefoundthatwehadbeenoffthebeatentrackandgotlost.Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Exhaustedandhungry,Iwonderedifwecouldfindourwayback.小兔突現(xiàn)---馬兒受驚---草原迷路（障礙1）----天色漸黑（障礙2）----又累又餓（障礙3）----心理恐慌（障礙4）檢測訓練檢測訓練1、閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構成一篇完整的短文。TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.“Iwishyoucouldseehim,”shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara.“Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon'tseewhathecando.”Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.“Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney,”saidClara.“Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”“SodoI,”saidHarry.“Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.”Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish(完成).”Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone.“Itellyouwhatwecando,”saidJohn.“YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmakepopcorn(爆米花),andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右:2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.【范文】WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.So,theywenttothelocalsupermarkettogether.Theyboughtabagofcornandsomespecialbagsforpopcorn.Whentheygothome,theymadealotofpopcornandputitinthespecialbags.Withthepopcorn,theywenttoBernard’shome.TheytoldBernardhowtosellthepopcorn.Bernardandhisparentswereverygrateful.AndtheMeredithfamilyalsofeltveryhappytohelpthisfamily.Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Hetookthepopcornaroundtothehousesandsoldallhispopcorn.Heearnedalotofmoney.Then,hewantedtobeself-dependent.Therefore,heaskedMrs.Meredithtoteachhimhowtomakepopcorn.Afterthat,notonlydidhesellpopcorn,buthealsoaddedcreamandsalttothepopcorntomakeittastebetter.Bernardgrewuptobearemarkableman.HedidnotforgetthehelpofMeredith’sfamily,andhealsodidwhathecouldtohelpthoseinneed.【解析】本文是根據(jù)短文進行續(xù)寫，使之成為一個完整的故事。1.認真讀懂所給提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一個小社區(qū)里，他們想幫助一個貧困的家庭。那家的男主人生病臥床，女主人要照顧丈夫、無法外出賺錢，家中的小男孩Bernard也做不了什么事情，生活十分困難。后來，Meredith的孩子想出了一個主意--制作爆米花，讓Bernard去賣爆米花。2.根據(jù)所給材料確定文章主題:Meredith如何通過制作和賣爆米花幫助Bernard一家擺脫困境的。3.續(xù)寫部分和前面的文章銜接得上，并且與原文情節(jié)發(fā)展和人物性格相一致，故事情節(jié)的向后延續(xù)發(fā)展要合乎情理。4.根據(jù)第一段首句WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.(當Meredith太太聽到John的主意時，她也認為這是個好主意)可以針對如何實現(xiàn)制作爆米花這個提議展開構思；根據(jù)第二段首句Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.(一切準備就緒后，Bernard開始了他的新生意)可以針對Bernard如何通過賣爆米花讓家庭擺脫困境展開構思。5.續(xù)寫的語言要盡可能與原文的語言保持風格上的一致。文章時態(tài)以一般過去時為主。應使用自己熟悉的句型和短語進行寫作，考生要注意盡可能使句子的表達形式多樣化，適當?shù)氖褂靡恍└呒壘涫胶透呒壴~匯，以提高書面表達的檔次和可讀性。作文要層次清晰，要點全面，表達流暢，切合題干要求，句子結(jié)構準確，適當補充信息，使篇章結(jié)構連貫。2.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。NoOneWillEverKnowKaren,JudyandIwerethelastonesbackintheclassroomafterlunch.Alloftheothersixthgraderswerealreadyoutside,sinceitwasapleasantspringday.“LookatwhatIfoundthismorninginthestoragecupboardwhenIwasgettingoutsomeartsuppliesforMrs.Eiffler.”saidKaren,holdingupawoodenboxfilledwithshortpiecesofchalkineverycoloroftherainbow."Wow!Whatfunitwouldbetowriteonthechalkboardwhileeveryoneisoutside.”Judysaid.“ButM“s.Eifflerdoesn'tallowustowriteonthechalkboard.”Iresponded,alreadyfeelingguilty.“Don'tbeafraid,Janet.Noonewilleverknow,”saidKaren.Iunwillinglyjoinedmyfriendsintheartwork,butwasafraidofbeingcaught.Iknewwellthatwewerebreakingnotone,buttwoclassrules.Thesecondrule-wasthatnoonewasallowedtostayinsideatnoonwithoutawrittenexcusefromhomeiftheweatherwasnice.Tryingvariouscolors,wedrewhouses,treesandthree-dimensionalboxes.Itwasfun!ThenJudyhadanidea."We'reallright-handed.Let'sseewhocanwriteournamesbestusingourlefthands.JudyandKarenpickeduptheirchalkandstartedwriting.Ichoseawhitepiecefromtheboxandwrotemyname.“IthinkJudyisthewinner,”saidKaren.“Hersisthebest.”“We’dbettergetthisboardcleanedoffbeforeMrs.Eifflercomesback,”saidJudy,erasingourartworkfromtheboard.Everythingcameoffbutmyname!Indisbelief;IlookedcarefullyatthechalkIheldinmysweatyhand.Itwasn'tchalkatall,butasmallpieceofwhitecolorcrayon.Mymotherhadasaying:"Fools,namesandfacesalwaysappearin.publicplaces.”Ineverunderstoodfullywhatitmeantbefore.NowIdid!Mykneesfeltweak.WhatwouldMrs.Eifflerdotome?Andtheteacherwouldbereturningsoon.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Paragraph1“Quick,let’sgetsomewetpapertowels,”saidJudy.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2Wewerejustslippingintoourdeskswhenthebellrang.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Paragraph1:“Quick,let’sgetsomewetpapertowels,"saidJudy.Everyonesprangintoaction.Afterrubbingprettyhard,mynamestillremained.“IthinkIsawacanofcleanerbythesinkinthecoatroom,”IsaidasIracedtofindit.Werubbedwiththecleanerandmynamecameoffallright,butintheprocessofremovingit,weleftafrictionmarkonthechalkboard.Listeningforfootstepscomingdownthehall,wedriedthewetareaasmuchaswecouldwithmorepapertowelsandfanneditwithabooktoremoveeverytell-taletraceofwetness.Paragraph2:Wewerejustslippingintoourdeskswhenthebellrang.Theotherstudentsbeganenteringtheclassroom.Theteacherwalkedinsoonafterwards.Mrs.Eifflerneveraskedaboutthefrictionmark.Maybeshenevernoticedit,butIdid.EverytimeIwalkedpastthedamagedsurfaceofthechalkboard,Irememberedit.Oh,howIremembereditsowell.ThelessonIlearnedthatdayisoneIneverforgot,eventhough40yearshavepassedsincetheevent."Noonewilleverknow”isnevertrue.Evenifnooneelsefoundout,Imyselfknew.Sometimeslivingwithaguiltyconscienceispunishmentenough.【寫作分析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者和朋友用從老師儲藏柜里拿來的粉筆在黑板上寫字，并且趕在老師回來之前擦掉粉筆畫的東西，結(jié)果作者的名字因為是蠟燭寫的擦不掉，雖然最后用清潔劑擦掉了，但是在黑板上留下了一個擦痕，這也提醒著作者，“沒人會知道”是不可能的。即使別人都不知道，自己也知道。有時候，受到良心的譴責已經(jīng)是最大的懲罰了?！緦懽鞑襟E】1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“‘快，我們?nèi)ツ眯窦埥?。’Judy說?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者他們是如何擦掉黑板上名字的經(jīng)過的。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我們正要溜進自己的課桌，鈴聲就響了?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼懯虑榈暮罄m(xù)以及作者從中得到的感悟。2.續(xù)寫線索：拿濕紙巾——用清潔劑擦名字——擦掉名字——黑板留下擦痕——老師沒有發(fā)現(xiàn)——作者得到教訓——作者感悟3.詞匯激活行為類采取行動：springintoaction/jumpintoaction進入：enter/getinto奔跑：race/run情緒類用力：hard/violently真的：true/real【寫作步亮點】[高分句型1]EverytimeIwalkedpastthedamagedsurfaceofthechalkboard,Irememberedit.(運用了everytime引導時間狀語從句)[高分句型2]ThelessonIlearnedthatdayisoneIneverforgot,eventhough40yearshavepassedsincetheevent.(運用了eventhoug引導讓步狀語從句)3、閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。AVacationwithMyMotherIhadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsurprisesandamusements,allbecauseofmymother---loving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwe’deverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe’dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler’schecksMomhadforgotten.DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept:“Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout(放哨)whileIgo,andI’llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:“Honey,wherearethekids?”“What?!Oh,Gosh…Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.”Wewereneveractuallyleftbehindinastrangecity,butweweren’tabouttotakeanychances.Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn’twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections(反對).Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorstep,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldisasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Paragraph1:Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.______________Paragraph2:Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.______________【范文】Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Thinkingofthistent,Momsuggestedthatwegocampinginthenextvillageinexcitement,withhereyesglittering.Consideringherenthusiasm,weallagreed.Whenthedoorofourcaropened,Momstormedoutinstantlyandurgedustoputupthetent.DavidandIwereaskedtopickupsomebranchestobuildafire.Andwhenwecameback,DadandMomhadalreadylaindownthegrasscomfortablyinfrontofthetent,talkingmerrilywithalocalboyatourage,whokeptglancingatthistentcuriously.Soonwelearntthattheboyinragsevendidn’thaveahometolivein.Ofcourse,Mom“forgot”totakethistentwithusagain.Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Andwealsohadanicetimelivingwithmygrandparentsduringthattrip.Butwhatimpressedmemostwasthattent,whichwasforgottendeliberatelybyMom.Thoughshedidlovegoingcamping,shepresentedthatpoorboywiththistentoutofsympathy.ItwasMomthatmademychildhoodcolorful.Anditwasalsoshethatshowedmethetruemeaningofgiving.【解析】這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫。短文敘述了作者的母親很健忘，一家四口自駕旅游去祖父母所居住的地方，途中發(fā)生了有趣的事情?！驹斀狻渴紫龋鶕?jù)文章當中第二段內(nèi)容比較開心的基調(diào)，第一段的故事情節(jié)應該比較偏向正面感情色彩，例如：我們在露營過程中一起搭建帳篷的開心時光或露營過程中的趣事(尤其是前文有鋪墊媽媽是個forgetful的人，這一點也可以埋下伏筆來表達后面過程中由于媽媽健忘而帶來的趣事)(也有同學在此處描述了露營過程中對其他陌生人提供幫助，來集中體現(xiàn)nice這一個點);其次，第二段開頭說來描述欣賞風景：此處可以用一些描述景色環(huán)境的表達來烘托下氛圍，但是第二段不能僅僅只能有景色描述；例如：這里可以實寫和虛寫結(jié)合的方式，看到景色(同時回憶往事)，最終把故事的落腳點放在“家人的感情”“親情”“生活的樂趣”“與媽媽一起的趣事”等等角度都可以的;當然也有同學描述與陌生人的相遇，引出了陌生人的善意這個主題;總之這次的話題比較開放，情節(jié)可以寫的角度比較多;再次，除了情節(jié)方面的內(nèi)容以外，以下幾個方面是考生需要著重關注的得分點：字跡清晰程度，語法多樣性和句式豐富性，銜接成分的使用，語言的場景恰當程度;高考英語寫作中，考生所采用的句型結(jié)構一定程度上影響了老師對考生寫作水平的判斷;說到語法豐富性方面，例如在作文中用到從句結(jié)構、強調(diào)句、非謂語結(jié)構等。尤其應該注意的是：避免句型單一化，如通篇使用定語從句，這樣反而使閱卷老師覺得該考生對句型掌握的不夠充分。應該在文章寫作中有意識地多使用不同的句型結(jié)構?！军c睛】文章思路清晰，語言規(guī)范，段落整齊，語篇連貫，層次清晰。使用了較為高級的句式:虛擬語氣和with復合結(jié)構Momsuggestedthatwegocampinginthenextvillageinexcitement,withhereyesglittering.Consideringherenthusiasm,weallagreed.what引導的主語從句和which引導的非限制性定語從句Butwhatimpressedmemostwasthattent,whichwasforgottendeliberatelybyMom.高級句式的應用提升了寫作的檔次，整個短文顯示出了作者高水平的英語表達能力。4.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。Father’sDayChessItwasDale'sthirdSundayvolunteeringattheretirementhome.Hehadthoughtitwouldbeagoodwaytogiveback.Buttodayhejustfelttired.Whileonashortbreak,Daletookawalkthroughthegarden.Therewerepeoplesittingonbenches,chattingtogether.Awomansatknitting,lookingverypleasedwithherself.Thestrandsofbrightly-coloredyarndisappearedquicklythroughherhands.Acrossthecourtyard,therewasamansittingaloneatatablewithachessboardinfrontofhim.Dalewatchedwithcuriosityasthemanwouldstareatthepieces,thenmovethem,andthenwoulddothesamefromtheothersideoftheboard.Onhiswayhomeafterthedayhadended,Dalefoundhimselfthinkingabouttheman.Howhewashunchedoverindeepthought,playingagameagainsthimself.Howodd,hethought.EachSunday,Dalewouldseethemandoingthesamething.Whileeveryoneelsetalkedwithoneanotherorhappilycarriedon,themanwouldsit,slightlybentoverandscratchinghischin.Hiseyesrarelycameoffofthechessboard.OneSunday,Dalewenttothegardenonhisbreakexpectingtoseethemanathisnormalspot.Buthewasn'tthere.ItwasFather'sDayandthereweremanyvisitorsatthehome.Daleshruggedandthoughtthemanmustbebusywithhisfamily.Thatafternoon,Dalewasmoppingthehallwayswhenhehappenedtopassbytheman'sroom.Thedoorwasslightlyopenandhecouldseethemansittinginachairnexttothewindow,peeringoutatthecourtyard.Daleknockedlightlyandaskedtocomein.Themannodded.Dalesawacollectionofframedphotographsonthebedsidetable.“Arethoseyourchildren?”heasked.“Yes,they’reallgrownandlivefaraway.Theyhavetheirownkidsnow,”hereplied.Dale,notwantingthemantobealoneonFather'sDay,hadanidea.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Para.1:Hewentoutsideandgotthechessboardfromthetable.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.2:Dalewasgladthathevolunteered.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Para.1:Hewentoutsideandgotthechessboardfromthetable.“Shallweplaychesstogether?"Themanhesitated.Hestaredatthechessboardsinkingintohisthoughts.IttookawhilebeforetheoldmanfinallysharedhisthoughtswithDale.Inthepast,heoftenplayedchesswithhischildren,whichweresomeofhisfondestmemories.However,theyalldiedbecauseofacaraccidentandtheoldmanhasbeenaloneeversince."Sorry,Iliedtoyou,"themanchoked,eyesbrimmingwithtears.“Thankyouforyourkindhelp.”Para.2:Dalewasgladthathevolunteered.Deeplytouched,henowunderstoodwhythemanpreferredtoplaychessalone,andwhyhesatsilentlyinhisroomonFather'sDay.Hecarefullyplacedallthepiecesonthechessboardandsaid,"Sir,I'msorryforyourloss.Butasyoumaynotice,IcomehereeverySunday.Ifyouwish,youcanplaychesswithme,asyoudidwithyourchildren.Aflickerofasmilecrossedtheman’sface.Takingadeepbreath,hesettledhimselfoppositetoDaleandmovedapiece.【寫作分析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了Dale在養(yǎng)老院做志愿者時注意到了一個孤獨的父親，每天都在下棋，他還發(fā)現(xiàn)這個人一個人過父親節(jié)。于是這天Dale主動提出和老人下棋，老人告訴了Dale自己的孩子因為車禍去世的事情，最后Dale提出每周都可以和他下棋。【寫作步驟】1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“他走到外面，從桌上拿起棋盤?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼懤先烁嬖VDale自己孩子去世的遭遇。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“Dale很高興他做了志愿者?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫Dale得知真相后的心理活動以及Dale提出每周都可以和老人下棋。2.續(xù)寫線索：Dale拿起棋盤——老人告知自己經(jīng)歷——Dale高興自己當了志愿者——Dale提出陪老人下棋3.詞匯激活行為類陷入沉思：sinkingintohisthoughts/belostinthought去世：die/passaway坐下：settledhimselfoppositeto/sitdown情緒類高興：glad/happy最愛的：fondest/favorite【寫作步亮點】[高分句型1]Inthepast,heoftenplayedchesswithhischildren,whichweresomeofhisfondestmemories.(運用了which引導非限制性定語從句)[高分句型2]Deeplytouched,henowunderstoodwhythemanpreferredtoplaychessalone,andwhyhesatsilentlyinhisroomonFather'sDay.(運用了why引導賓語從句)5、閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。"Pickupthepace!"saidAmy'shusband."ButIcan't!"Amysaid,herheartbeatingquicklyinside."Ican'tgoanyfaster!Herhusbandencouragedher."Yes,youcan!You'remakingprogresseveryday.”TohelpAmystayhealthy,herhusbandhadbeenrunningwithherforovertwoyears.Severalyearsago,Amycouldbarelywalkdownthestairsofherapartmentbuildingduetofatnesscausedbyeatingdisorders.Sherealizedtheproblemafterafailedjobinterviewandbeganwalkingtoimproveherabilitytomove.Atfirst,shecouldwalkforonly15minutesatatime.Butshepushedherselfeveryday,walking5minuteslongerthanshedidthedaybeforeuntilshewalkedforanhourandeventuallytwo.Forthreeyears,Amykeptherwalkinghabit,slowlyandpainstakinglybuildingherbodyshape.Thenshechangedherwalkingshoestorunningshoesabouttwoyearsagoandbecameanexcellentrunner.InMarch2001,anadvertisementinvitedpeopletonominate（提名）anordinarypersonwhoinspiredthemtobringtheOlympicflametoSaltLakeCityastorchbearers（火炬手）orsupportrunners.（Supportrunnersserveas“guardiansoftheflame"andrunwithtorchbearersalongthejourney.）Amy'sexperiencestouchedherhusband,sohenominatedhertobeatorchbearer.Thepossibilitytobeselectedwaslow,butAmywantedtotry.RunningtaughtAmytheimportanceoftrainingforarace.Shepicturedherselfrunningaraceandcrossingthefinishline.Formonths,sheranthroughherneighborhoodcarryingabroken-offbroomhandle,feelingtheweightofthetorch.Shewavedatherneighbors,pretendingtheywerecheeringcrowds.Shealsoprintedapictureofatorchbearerwearingthewhiteuniform,replacedthefacewithapictureofhers,andputitontoherrefrigeratordoor.Everyday,Amyimaginedherselfasatorchbearer.Shewastrainingforahistoricrunningevent.OnSeptember26th,whileonherdailyrunthroughherneighborhood,anexpresspackagearrived.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Paragraph1:AmyopeneditandfoundaletterandabookontheOlympics.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:"Oneoftoday'storchbearerscan'trunherpart,"announcedtherelayorganizer.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【范文】Paragraph1:AmyopeneditandfoundaletterandabookontheOlympics.Theletterread,"Congratulations!You'vebeenselectedasasupportrunnerfortheOlympicTorchRelay..."Althoughshewouldn'tbewearingthewhiteuniform,shewasn'tdisappointed.Shecompletedtherequiredphysicalexamination,deliveredtheforms,andwaited.Monthslater,anotherpackagearrived.Itcontainedherofficialbluesupportrunneruniformalongwithinstructionsforherpartoftherelay.Thenonacoldday,AmyandherhusbandstoodoutsidetheTorchRelaycollectionpoint.Paragraph2:"Oneoftoday'storchbearerscan'trunherpart,"announcedtherelayorganizer.Thenhesaid,"Oneluckysupportrunnerwillbecomeatorchbearer.Selectapersonnow."Luckily,Amybecamethetorchbearer.Holdingittight,sherandownthestreetfilledwithpeoplewavingflags.TheOlympicthemesongwasbroadcast.Amysmiledandwavedtothecrowds,knowingthatshewascarryingnotonlythetorch,butalsotheOlympicspirit.【解析】【分析】本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫?！驹斀狻客ㄟ^閱讀所給文章可知，幾年前，艾米由于飲食失調(diào)導致肥胖，幾乎走不下公寓樓的樓梯。在丈夫的幫助下，慢慢地恢復身材，并成為一名優(yōu)秀的跑步運動員。在看了一則廣告后，丈夫鼓勵艾米去競選奧運火炬手。為此，艾米把自己想象成火炬手，一直為此訓練，直到有一天，一個快遞包裹到達。續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：艾米打開它，發(fā)現(xiàn)了一封信和一本關于奧運會的書。本段應該寫艾米看到信上寫著自己被選為奧運火炬接力的助跑員。她完成體檢幾個月后，又來了一個包裹，里面是正式的藍色助跑服，還有她那部分接力的說明，終于到了火炬接力的那一天。第二段開頭是：“今天的火炬手中有一個不能勝任她的角色，”接力組織者宣布。本段應該寫艾米在揮舞著旗幟的人們中，跑去接過火炬，奧運主題曲播出了，艾米微笑著向人群揮手致意，她傳遞的不僅是火炬，還有奧林匹克精神。續(xù)寫時要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右，按要求完成寫作任務。【點睛】本文描寫詳略得當，使用了高級詞匯和高級句子。如：beselectedas，rundown，fillwith等高級詞匯；Althoughshewouldn'tbewearingthewhiteuniform,shewasn'tdisappointed.讓步狀語從句的運用；Amysmiledandwavedtothecrowds,knowingthatshewascarryingnotonlythetorch,butalsotheOlympicspirit.賓語從句的運用等高級句式。6.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。Likemostchildren,Itookmyparentsforgranted.Itwasn'tuntilIbecameanadultthatIrealizedtheirdesiretomakeadifferenceinthelivesofothers.MamaandDaddyperformedtheirangelmagicwithneitherfanfare(炫耀)noradesireforrecognition.BecausetheirkindnesstootherswassomethingIacceptedasamatterofcourse,Imightneverhaveevaluatedthisaspectoftheirpersonalitieswereitnotforaneventthatmymothermentionedinpassing.ArizonainJulyusheredinthemonsoon(季風)season,whichwasinfullswingandjustthatmorninghadhittheSouthernArizonadesertwithseverethunder,lightining,rain,andhighwinds.MamaandDaddychosetospendthedaywanderingthedry,air-conditionedmall,havingabitetoeat,andtakinginamovie.ItseemedanicewaytospendaSaturdayafternoonwhileleavingthestormoutdoors.Theychoseacasualrestaurantforlunchandwerereadingthemenuwhentheirwaitress,ayoungwomaninhermid-twenties,approachedthetabletointroduceherselfandtaketheirorder.MamaandDaddynotedthatherhairwasdamp,aswereherclothes.Shewasfriendlybutseemedtobequitetired.Drawingherintoconversation,theylearnedshewasasinglemotherandacollegestudentworkingtwojobs.Thatparticulardayhadbeenunkindtoher.Hercarbrokedown,forcinghertowalktoworkintherainandwind.Shewasconcernedabouthowbeingwithoutavehiclewouldaffectherabilitytocareforherdaughterandgotocollege.Herfrustrationwasobvious,andtheday'seventshadcertainlyleftherinacertainamountofdespair.