讀后續(xù)寫：The+first+hunting+講義高三英語寫作專項

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。Hisfathersaid,

“Allset,boy?”

andJeremynodded,pickinguphis

gun

withawkwardglovedhands.Hisfatherpushedopenthedoorandtheywentoutintothefreezingdawntogether.OrdinarilyJeremywouldtakeouthis

camera

torecordthescenery,butnotthismorning.Thiswasthemorning,particularlysacred,when14-year-oldJeremywouldgo

duck

huntingforthefirsttime.However,he

hated

it,andhadhatedthewholeideasincehisfatherboughthimagun.Buthewasdeterminedtogothroughwithit.Helovedhisfather,andwantedhis

approval

morethananythingintheworld.Theycametoanarrowandhiddenplacefacingthebay.Jeremysatdownnervouslyand

waited.Toreducefear,hetooka

picture

ofhisfatheragainstthecleanwater.Thenheputthecamerahurriedlyonthegrassandpickeduphisgun.Jeremygothisgunready.“I’llletyou

shoot

first,”hisfathersaid,loadinghisowngun.“Youknow,I'vebeenwaitingforalongtimeforthisday.Justthetwoofus...”Hebrokeoff,bendingforward,eyesnarrowed.“There'sasmallflightheadingthiswaynow.Keepyourheaddown.I'llgiveyoutheword.”

Thesuncameout.Jeremycouldseeeverythingclearly:hisfather'sface,

tense

andeager;thewhitefrostonthegun.Hisheartwasbeatingwildly.Heprayed,“Don'tletthemcome,please!”Buttheykeptcoming."Fourblack,”hisfathersaid.“Onemallard(綠頭鴨).”Highabove,Jeremyheardthepulsingwhistleofwingsastheflightbegantocircle.Themallardwasleading,hisfeetdroppingdown,reachingforthesilver-coloredwater.Closer,closer...“Getset,”hisfatherwhispered.“Now!”criedJeremy'sfather."Takethem!”Jeremyfelthisbodyobey.Hestoodup,holdingthegun.Inthesameinstant,thewildduckssawthegunnersand

flew.“Shoot!”saidsomethingsharplyinJeremy'sbrain.Butupwentthemallardhigherstill,untilsuddenlyhecaughtthefullforceofthewindandflewaway,outofrange.注意：1.

所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.

應使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；3.

續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.

續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Paragraph

1:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“Whydidn’tyoushoot?”

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Paragraph

2:ToJeremy’ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim.

_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________主要人物：Jeremy喜歡攝影、討厭打獵、愛父親、渴望得到父親的認可Father喜歡打獵、期待跟兒子一起打獵（以為兒子也喜歡打獵）時間地點：時間：atdawn描述：freezing;sacred;thesuncomeout;thewhitefrostonthegun.地點：nearthecleanwater幫助：戶外情景運用環(huán)境描寫，呼應時間地點相關描述細節(jié)shoot的雙重含義：shoot一語雙關

含義1:射擊；含義2:拍攝文章主要矛盾/問題表面上的矛盾：Jeremy是否該開槍打獵深層次的矛盾：1)Jeremy該堅持自己的興趣(拍照)還是為了獲得爸爸的認可而選擇打獵2)父親和兒子的相處之道：父親喜歡的東西，兒子是否一定要聽從和喜歡有第二段開頭可推出第一段的內容：第二段開頭ToJeremy’ssurprise可知，第一段結尾可以寫Jeremy講完自己的為什么不開槍的原因后的心理描寫，他以為父親會生氣。詞語積累：請找出以下中文對應的英文表達。續(xù)寫題目：1.推開門：pushopenthedoor2.極冷的：freezing3.第一次：forthefirsttime4.完成（或做完）艱難（或令人不快）的事：gothroughwith5.(給武器)裝彈藥：load6.他停止說話，向前彎下腰，瞇起眼睛：Hebrokeoff,bendingforward,eyesnarrowed.7.緊張的：tense8.翅膀搏動的呼嘯聲：pulsingwhistleofwings9.(聲音)突然而響亮地：sharply

參考范文：1.從…中判斷：judgefrom2.勃然(大怒)：explode3.一想到…某人就有一種…感覺：Atthethoughtof…,sbwasovercomewithasenseof…..4.眼里閃著光，嘴角露出微笑：Eyesglintandlipscurveintoabigsmile5.把某人攬入懷中：gathersbintoone’sarms6.溜達、散步：stroll

7.模糊的雙眼：mistyeyes8.沐浴在燦爛的陽光下：bebathedintheradiantglowofsun9.鳥鳴聲：thechirpsofthebirdsPossibleversion1:

Paragraph1:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“Whydidn'tyoushoot?”

“Becausetheyweresoalive”,Jeremyexplained,withhislipsshaking.Hesatonthegrass,buriedhisfaceinhishandsandburstintotears.Allhopeofpleasinghisfatherwasgone.Foralongmoment,hisfatherwassilent.ThenJeremyfelthimkneeldownbesidehimandpathimontheshouldergently.Suddenly,hisfathershouted,

“Getready!”

Feelingcoldmetaltouchinghishand,Jeremylookedup.

Paragraph2:ToJeremy'ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim.

“Herecomesanotherduck.”

Abeautifulwildduckflewcloser,itswhite

breastshininginthesunshine.Jeremyhelduphiscameraimmediately.”

Igothim!”

Abroadsmilelituphisface.Hisfathergavehimathumbs-up.Jeremy

discoveredtherewasnodisappointmentinhiseyes,onlyprideandlove.

“It’sokay,son.Iloveshooting,butthatdoesn’tmeanyouhaveto.”

Hepausedandsaid,

“Couldyouteachmehowtousethatcamera?”Possibleversion2:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“Whydidn'tyoushoot?”

“I,I’msorry.”

Jeremymurmuredwithhisheadlow,beingtotallyataloss（獨立主格結構，非謂語動詞）.Hedidwanttoshoottheduck

andgethisfather’sapproval.（強調句，回扣原文）However,whenheheldhisgunandaimedatthe

flying

mallard(學以致用，新概念3L9),hismindwentblank---heknewhecouldn’tkillthebeautifulcreatureinsuchacruelway.Hestruggledforalongtime.Finally,hegatheredallhisbraveryandlookedupintohisfather’scrosseyes.

“Dad,”

hesaid,

“I

hateguns

andkillings.CanIquithunting?”（反映主題：人與動物和諧相處)

Hisfatherwentsilentandturnedaround.

ToJeremy'ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim.

Hetookoverhis

camera

unbelievablywithhismouthopenedwide.

（獨立主格結構）Amusedbyhisaction,

非謂語動詞

hisfatherlookedathim

affectionately

(學以致用，新概念3L9)andexplained,

“Iknowyoulovephotography,however,I