高考英語復習之讀后續(xù)寫【高效備課精研+知識精講提升】 自我成長類：爬山時意外受傷但繼續(xù)堅持課件

高考英語讀后續(xù)寫語篇練習自我成長類：爬山時意外受傷，但繼續(xù)堅持1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文IoftengoclimbingwithmyfriendMelOlsen,whomI'dmetinaFace-bookgroup.Twoyearsago,onDecember30,whenIwas16,sheandIdrovetoOregontotackle11,240-footMountHood.MyparentswerehappyI'dfinallyfoundahobby.It'ssafertostartwinterclimbsatnightwhenthere'slessriskofthesunmeltingthesnowpack.Thatday,westartedat3a.m,followingthepathsalongsidetheskiruns.Thetemperaturewasabout14degrees.Alongtheway,wemettwootherclimbers,andthefourofuscontinuedontogether.Afteraboutfivehours,wereachedDevil'sKitchen,aplateauatabout10,000feet,justbeforethefinalpushtothetop.Bythispoint,thewindwasviolent.Myexposedskinfeltasthoughitwereburning.Theotherclimbersdecidedtoturnback,butMelandIwentahead.Wehadiceaxes,helmets,andcrampons(冰爪).Wewerepreparedfortheclimb.Thetrailwefollowedgrewnarrowerandsteeper.Suddenly,Iheardacrack,andawholeblockoficebrokeofftheicestep,rightundermyfoot.4續(xù)寫原文Inaninstant,Ifellbackward.IcouldhearMelcallingmynameasIrolleddownthemountainasifIwereacharacterinavideogame.Istuckoutmyarmsandlegs,grabbingatanything.Myclothesweretornintopieces,myhelmetwasbroken,andmyfacewasbloodiedfromcutsandscratches.ThenItookasurveyofmybodytoseewhereIwashurt,startingwithmyhead,thenmyneckandarms.Forthemostpart,Iwasfine,exceptthatIwassufferingfromasharppaininmyleftleg.AsMelmadeherwaydown,Ishoutedforhelp,andotherclimberscametoassistme.AcoupleofthemweretrainedEMTs.TheyfixedmylegandcalledPortlandMountainRescue.MelstayedbymysidewhileItriednottocryfromthepain.5段首句Para1：I'dbeenlyingontheiceshakingandachingforfourhoursbythetimetherescuersreachedme.Para2：Thefallonamountaincanchangeeverything.6Part2題目分析7點1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語；點4：文章結尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構建的重點8續(xù)寫思路分析本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者和好友梅爾·奧爾森爬山時突發(fā)意外，嚴重受傷，康復后仍堅持爬山的故事。9續(xù)寫思路分析Para1：I'dbeenlyingontheiceshakingandachingforfourhoursbythetimetherescuersreachedme.由第一段首句內(nèi)容“救援人員趕到我身邊時，我已經(jīng)躺在冰上發(fā)抖疼痛了四個小時。”可知，第一段可描寫作者最終獲救并入院接受治療。10續(xù)寫思路分析Para2：Thefallonamountaincanchangeeverything.由第二段首句內(nèi)容“從山上摔下來會改變一切?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼戇@次意外事故引起的關注、作者堅持爬山以及感悟。11續(xù)寫思路分析續(xù)寫線索最終獲救——入院接受治療——媒體關注——堅持爬山——感悟12續(xù)寫素材可用詞匯：行為類①尖叫、大喊：scream/shout②.到達：arriveat/getto③.回到：gobackto/returnto情緒類①.咬緊牙關（克服困難）：withmyteethclenched/setmyteeth②.熱愛：love/bekeenon13續(xù)寫素材可用句型：[高分句型1].Stepbystep,withmyteethclenched,wefinallyarrivedatthebottomofMountHoodwhereIwasloadedintoanambulanceandtakentoahospital.（運用了with的復合結構以及where引導的定語從句）[高分句型2].Ithinkhandlingallthatatsuchayoungagehelpedmegrowup.（運用了動名詞作主語）14Part3范文呈現(xiàn)15范文呈現(xiàn)I’dbeenlyingontheiceshakingandachingforfourhoursbythetimetherescuersreachedme.Theygavemefirstaidquicklyandpulledmedownthemountain.Iscreamedwitheachmove,butstillIhadaprettyhighpaintolerance.Stepbystep,withmyteethclenched,wefinallyarrivedatthebottomofMountHoodwhereIwasloadedintoanambulanceandtakentoahospital.Istayedthereforfourdays.ThedoctorstoldmeitwouldbeayearbeforeIcouldclimbagain,butIwasdeterminedtogobackclimbingassoonasIcould.16范文呈現(xiàn)Thefallonamountaincanchangeeverything.Buttheexperiencealsomademegrowasaperson.Therewasalotofmediaattentionfollowingtheaccident.SomesaidIshouldgobacktoIndia.Ithinkhandlingallthatatsuchayoungagehelpedmegrowup.Sincetheaccident,I’veclimbedanother60mountains.I’mnotgoingtoletonefallanditsaftereffectkeepmefromdoingmyfavoritethingintheworld.Ilovedthechallengeofconqueringsomethingbiggerthanmyself.17范文譯文當救援人員找到我時，我已經(jīng)躺在冰上發(fā)抖疼痛了四個小時。他們迅速對我進行了急救，并將我從山上拉了下來。我的每一個動作都讓我尖叫，但我仍然有很高的疼痛承受能力。我咬著牙，一步一步地，我們終于到達胡德山的底部，在那里我被抬上救護車，送往醫(yī)院。我在那里呆了四天。醫(yī)生告訴我，我還需要一年的時間才能再次攀登，但我決心盡快回去攀登。18范文譯文山上的墜落可以改變一切。但這段經(jīng)歷也讓我成長為一個人。事故發(fā)生后引起了媒體的