讀后續(xù)寫：幫我修椅子的鄰居講義 高一下學(xué)期英語(yǔ)期末一段式續(xù)寫

杭州高一期末讀后續(xù)寫原文

Ihadjustpouredmysecondcupof

teathatmorningandsatdowntoreadthepaper.Fromsomewhere,aninner

voice

said,"GoseeJeffandbringhimthechairto

repair.Gorightnow."

itwassuchastrongneed

thatIhurriedlydressedandcarriedadinning-room

chair

tohisdoor.

Jeff

wasaneighborwhohadlosthiswife

awhileback,andhesometimesdidminor

repairsformebecauseheenjoyedworkingwithhishands.

I

knockedonhisdoorandwaitedawhile.I

wasabouttowalkawaywhenheanswered.Helookedlikehewasfarawayinhisthoughts.Ifeltawkwardaboutupsettinghimsoearly.I

greetedhimandthenaskedifhecouldrepair

mychair.He

invited

meinside.Wesat

inhislivingroom.Helookedverysadandnothisusualself.Hesaidhehadhadastrokerecently,andwhile

hewashomenow,hestillneededtoattendphysical

treatment.Hehadtobuildhisstrengthbackup.IapologizedforthechairandtoldhimI

wouldjustbringitbackhome.Hesaidtoleaveit.

Wetalkedforawhile.Hesaidthat,beforeIarrived,hewasseriouslysad.So,myvisit

stoppedhisdarkness.Ilistenedtohowhard

ithadbeensincehiswifepassedandhowmuch

worseitwasnowsincethestroke.Thelongerwetalked,themoreIsawhismood

lighten.

AfterIlefthishome,Iwenttothesupermarketandgatheredingredients.Imadehim

ahotmealIthoughthewouldlike.Carefully,Icutupvegetablesand

prepared

stew(燉菜)forhim.IbelieveitwasthebeststewIevermade.Imadehomemadebiscuitsandpreparedfreshfruitfordessert.Irealizetheremighthavebeenhalthierfood,butIthoughtahotmealwouldlifthisspirits.Idroppeditoffforhim.Hewas

gladthatsomeonecared.Emotionally,heseemedinabetterplace.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為100左右；2.至少使用4個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；3.續(xù)寫一段，開頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。About

aweeklater,heknockedonmydoor.

___________________________________文本分析01Read

for

vocabulary2.2did

minor

repairs小的3.4havea

stroke中風(fēng)4.3...Isawhismood

lighten（使情緒、氣氛）變得輕松；（臉或表情）變得高興5.1gather

ingredients成分；食材5.4liftone'sspirits提升某人的情緒5.5inabetterplace處境更好02Readforappreciation3.1I

wasaboutto

walkaway

when

heanswered.beabouttodo...when...正要做某事突然...3.4...and

while

hewashomenow,hestillneededtoattendphysicaltreatment.while此處意為“盡管”4.3

Thelonger

wetalked,

themore

Isawhismoodlighten.Thelonger...themore...越長(zhǎng)...就越多03Readforplots寫作·分析ANALYSISOFWRITINGTECHNIQUES01運(yùn)用“三條線索”推導(dǎo)，豐富故事情節(jié)

在構(gòu)思情節(jié)時(shí)，借助人物線、地點(diǎn)線和情感線三條線索，并結(jié)合要求中100詞的詞數(shù)限制，對(duì)續(xù)寫故事情節(jié)進(jìn)行推導(dǎo)。01人物線I

Jeff(myneighbor)原文本中出現(xiàn)的人物只有兩人，因此續(xù)寫情節(jié)中就是兩人的互動(dòng)。02地點(diǎn)線myhouseJeff'shousesupermarket從續(xù)寫文本推測(cè)，故事應(yīng)該發(fā)生在我的家里。03情感線根據(jù)人物線的推導(dǎo)，確定故事發(fā)生的主要人物和基本情節(jié)（本文為我和鄰居Jeff的互動(dòng)交流），并據(jù)此將合理的情感表達(dá)融入故事情節(jié)中。情節(jié)一：我應(yīng)門。Jeff手里拿著修好的椅子和一些食材，心情愉悅地問(wèn)我是否可以再為他燒一次燉菜。情節(jié)二：我欣然答應(yīng)，并為了讓他記憶猶新，加上了上次給他吃過(guò)的水果和餅干。情節(jié)三：我們交談，我發(fā)現(xiàn)我的小小善舉，竟然讓他發(fā)生了如此大的變化。04挖掘原文本的信息增強(qiáng)銜接銜接一：原文本第三段中提及Jeff讓我把壞了的椅子留下，所以續(xù)寫文本中Jeff來(lái)拜訪我時(shí)一定會(huì)帶著修好的椅子來(lái)。銜接二：原文本中提及Jeff喪妻且自己中風(fēng)，心情一直不好，結(jié)局可以點(diǎn)出我對(duì)他的小小善舉讓他的心情發(fā)生了天翻地覆的變化。為了在情節(jié)合理的基礎(chǔ)上使文本詞匯和句法結(jié)構(gòu)運(yùn)用的更加高級(jí)，需有意識(shí)的加入人物的情感描寫和動(dòng)作描寫，這樣才能把高級(jí)句式結(jié)構(gòu)充分發(fā)揮出來(lái)。下水范文續(xù)寫情節(jié)展示Aboutaweeklater,heknockedonmydoor.

Iansweredthedoorandsawhimholdingmyrepairedchairinonehandandsomeingredientsintheother."Ican'tforgetthestewyoumadeformelasttime.

Could

youdoitformeagain?"

askedJeff,

his

eyesdancingwithmerriment.

"Byallmeans!"Irepliedandsettherepairedchairaside,takingtheingredientstothekitchentomakethestew.Inordertoimpresshim,Ievenpreparedfreshfruitandhomemadebiscuitsforhim.

Overthemeal,wetalkedsomuchthatitwasimpossibletotellhewaswidowedandhadsufferedastroke.Itturnsoutthat

asmallkindnesscanindeedmakeabigdifferenceto

aperson!(118words)

譯文大約一周之后，他來(lái)我家敲門了。我開了門，看見他一只手里拿著修好的椅子，另一只手上提著一些食材，心情愉悅地問(wèn)我：“我忘不了上次你為我做的燉菜。能再為我做一次嗎？”“當(dāng)然！”我把修好的椅子放在旁邊，并接過(guò)他手上的食材，到廚房準(zhǔn)備燉菜。為了讓他記憶猶新，我還特地為他準(zhǔn)備了新鮮水果和自制餅干。餐桌上，我們侃侃而談，完全看不出他是個(gè)喪偶和得過(guò)中風(fēng)的人。原來(lái)，小小的善意對(duì)一個(gè)人的影響竟然如此之大！下水范文解析A