14-情感描寫-震驚

讀后續(xù)寫早讀晚練情感描寫——震驚必備單詞__________

n.驚訝vt.使驚訝

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vt.使大為驚奇

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vt.使驚訝

__________n.震驚v.(使)震驚

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adj.難以置信的早讀——積累素材surpriseamazeastonishshockincredible高級詞塊_________________________________________讓某人震驚的是

_________________________________________________驚奇地

________________________________________________對……感到驚訝

___________________________________________________得知/發(fā)現(xiàn)/聽到……感到驚訝/震驚toone’ssurprise/amazement/astonishmentin/withsurprise/amazement/astonishment/besurprised/amazed/astonished/shockedat/besurprised/amazed/astonishedtolearn(find/shockby…h(huán)ear…)高級詞塊______________________________令我驚訝的是……____________________________________最讓我吃驚的是……_________________________________某人幾乎難以相信……_________________________出乎意料地________________大為震驚Itamazes/astonishesmethat…Whatamazes/astonishesmemostis…sbcouldhardly/scarcelybelieve…beyondone’sexpectationbetakenaback1.我驚訝地瞟了他一眼。他由衷地同意我所說的一切起到了先發(fā)制人的作用。句子賞析Iglancedathimwithsurprise.HiscordialagreementwithallIsaidcutthegroundfromundermyfeet.2.我走過去瞧個仔細(xì)，但卻在震驚中停了下來。3.不久之前，村民們驚悉恩得利農(nóng)場鬼死了。Iwentovertolookatitmorecarefully,andstoppedinsuddensurprise.Ashorttimeago,villagerswereastonishedtolearnthattheghostofEndleyhaddied.4.哈特利幾乎無法相信她的屈服是真的，而且她屈服的如此迅速和徹底。5.我大為震驚，想起我曾只見過他一次。Hartleycouldscarcelybelievethathersurrenderwastrue,itwassoswiftandcomplete.Iwastakenaback.IreflectedthatIhadonlyseenhimonce.我這個動作的后果讓我大吃一驚。希斯克里夫手里的蠟燭掉了，呆呆地站在那兒，他的臉煞白得像他身后的墻。精彩片段Iwassurprisedbytheeffectofmyaction.Heathcliffdroppedhiscandleandstoodwithoutmoving,hisfaceaswhiteasthewallbehindhim.晚練——運(yùn)用素材一、完成句子

運(yùn)用晨讀表格中的必備單詞/高級詞塊，把下面的句子補(bǔ)充完整。1.西湖春天的美景超出了我的預(yù)期。ThebeautiesoftheWestLakeinspringare______________________.beyondmyexpectation2.令他們感到驚訝的是，我們在沒有任何幫助的情況下完成了該項(xiàng)目。_________________,wehavecompletedtheprojectwithoutanyhelp.3.林巧稚是一位偉大的醫(yī)生。最令我驚訝的是，她一生中接生了5萬多個嬰兒。LinQiaozhiisagreatdoctor.___________________

___________________________shedeliveredmorethan50,000babiesinherlife.TotheirsurpriseWhatamazes/astonishesmemostisthat4.聽到他說的話，我簡直不敢相信自己的耳朵。(現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語)Hearingwhathesaid,Ijust________________myears.5.這個名字令我感到吃驚。Thenamewas_______________________.anastonishmenttomecouldhardlybelieve二、篇章練習(xí)

閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。

(2021屆廣東肇慶一統(tǒng))“Youcangetakitten,”Ipromisedmyseven-year-olddaughter,Cali.“Assoonaswegotsettledinournewapartment.”HerlifehadbeenuprootedwhenherfatherandIdivorced.Soonemorning,weheadedtoNorthBayAnimalServicestopickouthernewpet.Therewereplentyofcatstochoosefrom,butCalihadherheartsetontwoorange-and-whitekittens.TheattendanttoldustheywerebrotherscalledCaramelandButter.Theyplayedlikebestfriends.Whentheytiredout,theycurled(蜷縮)aroundeachother,theiridenticalmarkingscreatingwhatlookedlikeaheart.Caliwantedtotakethemboth.Butthelandlordhadmadeitclearthatwecouldonlyhaveonepetintheapartment.Finally,wedecidedtobringCaramelhome.CalirenamedhimOzzy.ThatnightIwatchedOzzyandCalifallasleeptogether,tellingmyselfthey’dforgetabouttheotherkittensoon.HowwrongIwas!Ozzydidseemlonelywithouthistwin.NomatterhowCaliandItriedtodistracthimoverthenextfewdays,hewanderedaroundtheapartment,crying,asiflookingforhisbrother.Aftertwoweeksofbeinglikethis,Ibrokedown.Wedrovebacktotheshelter,onlytobetoldButterhadbeenadoptedfourdaysago.Caliwassad,andIwassodesperatetocalmherdownthatIsaidsomethingfoolish.“We’llfindButterandadopthimtoo,”Isaid.“Whatareyoudoing?”Iaskedmyself.IknewI’dneverbeabletofulfillthatpromise.Butitwastheonlythingthatseemedtobringmydaughtersomepeace.Withtime,Ozzygotusedtobeingonhisown.AndCalistoppedaskingabouttheotherkitten.Ournewlifewasworking-outjustasI’dhoped.Ievenstarteddatingagain.Brian,whohadlosthiswifefouryearsago,seemedpromising.Hehadadaughter,Ruby,justayearolderthanCali.I’dmethimonlineandtalkedtohimformonthsbeforeweplannedadinnerathishome.Paragraph1：Thatday,afterdinner,wewerewalkingbyBrian’shousewhenIsawaflashoforange-and-whiteinthecorner.______________________________________Paragraph2：“That’smycat,”Briansaid.______________________________________________________________寫作步驟第一步，通讀全文，理清脈絡(luò)1.讀要素，弄懂故事大意本文大意：______________________________女兒領(lǐng)養(yǎng)了雙胞胎小貓中的其中一只，但小貓因想念同伴而悶悶不樂。作者決定把另一只貓一并領(lǐng)養(yǎng)，卻被告知它已被領(lǐng)走了。令人意外的是，不久后，作者在新交往的對象Brian家附近發(fā)現(xiàn)了一只與自家小貓長得很像的貓。2.讀人物，理清人物關(guān)系________________________________________3.讀時態(tài)，確定主體時態(tài)________________________________________“我”和Brian一般過去時4.讀結(jié)構(gòu)，了解敘述方式第____段：__________________________________第____段：__________________________________第____段：__________________________________1-3Ozzy因沒有同伴的陪伴很孤獨(dú)，但當(dāng)“我”想把它同伴領(lǐng)養(yǎng)回來時，卻被告知它已被領(lǐng)走“我”和女兒在領(lǐng)養(yǎng)站領(lǐng)養(yǎng)了一只貓并取名為Ozzy4-56一家人開始慢慢過上新生活，而“我”也有新交往的對象續(xù)寫部分：__________________________________由此可見，材料是按照________________來劃分的。我們在構(gòu)思續(xù)寫時應(yīng)從這個敘述方式去進(jìn)行拓展。主要講述了“我”在Brain家發(fā)現(xiàn)了一只與Ozzy長得很像的貓。后續(xù)可設(shè)想這只貓就是Butter。事情發(fā)展順序5.讀語言，把握語言特色原文中的語言特色：(1)現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語(2)asif引導(dǎo)狀語從句ThatnightIwatchedOzzyandCalifallasleeptogether,tellingmyselfthey’dforgetabouttheotherkittensoon.Hewanderedaroundtheapartment,crying,asiflookingforhisbrother.(3)onlytodosth作結(jié)果狀語(4)定語從句Butitwastheonlythingthatseemedtobringmydaughtersomepeace.Brian,whohadlosthiswifefouryearsago,seemedpromising.Wedrovebacktotheshelter,onlytobetoldButterhadbeenadoptedfourdaysago.第二步，依據(jù)首句，構(gòu)思框架1.讀懂兩段首句第一段首句譯文：________________________第二段首句譯文：________________________第一段框架：____________________________第二段框架：____________________________那天晚餐過后，我們在Brian家Brian說，“那是我的貓?”作者懷疑這只貓是Ozzy，于是靠近想了解情況?Brian解釋這只貓是他領(lǐng)養(yǎng)的?沒想附近散步，這時我突然看見角落處閃過一個橙白相間的影子?到的是，它正是我們一直遺憾被領(lǐng)走的Butter?第一段首句后的銜接句：第一段尾句(須與第二段首句銜接)：第二段首句后的銜接句：2.寫好三個銜接句Ozzy?IApproachedcloser,onlytofinditlookedsomuchlikeOzzy.Thereweresomanyorange-and-whitecatsintheworld.“Butter!Comeout!”heshouted.3.寫好一個升華句即第二段的尾句(即文尾句)。能體現(xiàn)故事圓滿結(jié)局的句子或故事給我們的啟示的句子：______________________________________________________________________________TodayOzzyandhisbrotherareinseparable,justasmynewfamily.第三步，增加細(xì)節(jié)，展開續(xù)寫作者的心理活動描寫(__________________)→作者的動作描寫(______________________)→貓的動作描寫(________________________)→作者的心理活動(________________________)基于第一段的框架，我們可以補(bǔ)充以下細(xì)節(jié)：懷疑這是Ozzy靠近那只貓飛快閃進(jìn)旁邊的灌木叢推斷出這不是Ozzy，只是和Ozzy長得很像的一只貓Brian的語言描寫(______________________)→作者的神態(tài)和語言描寫(_____________________)→Brian的語言描寫(______________________)→作者的語言描寫(_______________________)→作者的動作描寫(_________________________)基于第二段的框架，我們可以補(bǔ)充以下細(xì)節(jié)：叫貓的名字Butter，引出“我”的驚訝驚訝并再次確定貓的身份表現(xiàn)出內(nèi)心的驚奇解釋來龍去脈和Brian相擁，一個美好的結(jié)局第四步，檢查優(yōu)化，整潔謄寫Paragraph1：

Thatday,afterdinner,wewerewalkingbyBrian’shousewhenIsawaflashoforange-and-whiteinthecorner.Ozzy?IApproachedcloser,onlytofinditlookedsomuchlikeOzzy.Feelingmysteps,thecatshotintothenearbybushlikelightning.Obviously,it’snotmyfamilymember,forOzzywouldn’tbeinsuchhorrorwhenseeinghisowner.“Whatacoincidence!”Thereweresomanyorange-and-whitecatsintheworld.Paragraph2：“That’smycat.”Briansa