新題型讀后續(xù)寫第篇

第十二篇讀后續(xù)寫3曲折性原則凡是故事都應有跌宕起伏，其中人物會遇到困難或問題，但最終能解決。2正能量原則故事內(nèi)容一定要正能量，弘揚社會主義核心價值觀。如迷路了但最終一定回到了家；失敗了或遇到困難了，但最終一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言歸于好，和睦相處；犯錯了，最后一定會改過自新，重新做人；賊逃了，最后一定是繩之以法，等等。1原文一致原則內(nèi)容要前后銜接，上下連貫,語言表達風格一致。三大原則增加細節(jié)開始寫作細讀首句構思框架四個步驟修改潤色整潔謄寫讀懂大意理清脈絡1.4.3.2.讀所給的不完整故事，弄清大意和主題，理清故事的主要人物和事件。仔細閱讀所給兩段的首句，結合正能量結尾，思考大致框架。依據(jù)情節(jié)發(fā)和常識，在確定的框架內(nèi)，可按“所見/遇所想，所為所感”等構思具體細節(jié)。思考再三，把修正潤色后的續(xù)寫整潔地寫入答卷。讀后續(xù)寫

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇

完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應為150左右。

DadandMomhadgottogoonafour-daybusinesstrip.TheytaughttheireldersonDanielandyoungerdaughterJanehowtofeedandlookaftertheirdog,Spot,howtotakegoodcareofthemselves—learningtocookiftheycould,ororderingpizza—withmoneyleftonthetable—iftheywerebusy,andtoldthemtokeeptheirroomscleanandtidy.TheyaskedDanieltobeincharge.

Ontheverymorningwhentheparentsleft,MomkissedthemandsaidtoDanielgently,“Youngman,dotakecareofSpotandJane.”Danielpromised,“Iwill,Mom.”

Tooexcitedtofallasleepagain,DanielandJanejumpedoutofbed,callingouteachothertogetup.Theirpetdog,Spot,heardthesimilarvoiceandrushedin,withaballinitsmouth.Janestuck(伸)herheadintoDaniel’sroom,“Spotgotupanhourearlier.Let’swalkit.”Danielsaidexcitedly,“I’mcoming,but,Jane,don’tforgettokeepyourroomcleanandtidy.”“Iwill.”TheyranwiththedogintheyardandthrewtheballawayforSpottobringitback.TheyhadfunplayingwithSpotthewholemorning.WashingSpotwasslowandtiring

asitwasthefirsttimetheyhaddoneit.ThenDanielsettleddowntohishomeworkwhileJanedidherreadingwithinterest.

Thefollowingday,Janebeggedherbrothertoorderpizzaforlunch.Danielagreedexcitedly,“Wehaven’ttastedthatforlongandwebehaveourselves,right?”Afterawhile,headded,“Weshouldsavemoney,too.”

Withinhalfanhour,theytreatedthemselvestoabigpizza.However,intheafternoon,Spotlookedsick,lyinglazilyandunwillingtomove.DanielwasconcernedaboutthedogandtookittothepetclinicimmediatelywithJaneastheirparentshaddone.

Paragraph1：WhenDadandMomarrivedadayearlier,theywereamazedtofindeverythinginamess.Paragraph2：Danielranintohisroom,withtearsinhiseyes,“Jane,thereisnoneedtoexplainandMomwon’ttrustmeanylonger.”主要是根據(jù)記敘文的六要素弄清文章大意，特別要弄清故事的人物，時態(tài)(通常是一般過去時)，事件(故事的起因和經(jīng)過)，語言特色(以便在續(xù)寫時語言特色前后一致，保持不變)，等等。1、讀懂大意，理清脈絡人物時態(tài)和事件語言特色不要變CharactersTenseEventsmom,dad,Jane,Daniel,SpotsimplepasttenseDadandMomhadgottogoonafour-daybusinesstrip.TheytaughttheireldersonDanielandyoungerdaughterJanehowtofeedandlookaftertheirdog.TheyaskedDanieltobeincharge.Tooexcitedtofallasleepagain,DanielandJanejumpedoutofbed,callingouteachothertogetup.TheyranwiththedogintheyardandthrewtheballawayforSpottobringitback.TheyhadfunplayingwithSpotthewholemorning.theytreatedthemselvestoabigpizzaHowever,intheafternoon,Spotlookedsick,lyinglazilyandunwillingtomove.DanielwasconcernedaboutthedogandtookittothepetclinicimmediatelywithJaneastheirparentshaddone.5Daniel像他們父母以前做的那樣趕緊帶Spot去了寵物醫(yī)院。4然而，到了下午，Spot似乎生病了，躺在地上一動也不動。3Jane和Daniel叫了pizza的外賣；他們吃的特別香。2在父母離開后，Jane和Daniel早早起了床并和Spot在花園里玩了一上午，并給它洗了個澡，這是他們第一次給狗狗洗澡。1因為爸爸和媽媽要出差四天，所以他們教大兒子Daniel和小女兒Jane如何照顧他們自己和狗狗Spot，并叫Daniel主管家里的事物。事件梳理語言特色02/01/分詞短語做狀語：

DanielandJanejumpedoutofbed,

callingouteachothertogetup.

Spotlookedsick,lyinglazilyandunwillingtomove.with復合結構：

—withmoneyleftonthetable—

Theirpetdog,Spot,heardthesimilarvoiceandrushedin,withaballinitsmouth.03/狀語從句：

...asitwasthefirsttimetheyhaddoneit

Daniel...tookittothepetclinicimmediatelywithJane

astheirparentshaddone.

1、細讀句首，構思框架兩段首句定一框

由續(xù)寫的第一段首句與第二段首句確定第一段的框架。二框二首正能量

第二段的框架，由第二段首句與正能量結尾來確定。兩段首句定一框

從第一段首句可知在Jane和Daniel把Spot送去醫(yī)院后爸爸媽媽提前一天回來了，而且房間也沒有收拾，而從第二段首句可知應該是媽媽責怪了Daniel，所以他哭著回了房間并說媽媽不會再相信他了。第一段應該是寫媽媽責怪Daniel的內(nèi)容，而第二段應該有個反轉(zhuǎn)，表示媽媽錯怪了Daniel。Paragraph1：WhenDadandMomarrivedadayearlier,theywereamazedtofindeverythinginamess.(當爸爸媽媽提前一天到家時，因為家里的一團亂而大吃一驚。)Paragraph2：Danielranintohisroom,withtearsinhiseyes,“Jane,thereisnoneedtoexplainandMomwon’ttrustmeanylonger.”(丹尼爾流著淚跑進了自己的房間，“簡，不用解釋了，媽媽不會再相信我了?！?二框二首正能量

由第二段首句中：媽媽不會再相信我了。說明媽媽責怪了Daniel，第二段應以正能量結尾，媽媽表示自己錯怪了孩子們，并道歉，還表揚了孩子們做的事情。Paragraph2：Danielranintohisroom,withtearsinhiseyes,“Jane,thereisnoneedtoexplainandMomwon’ttrustmeanylonger.”(丹尼爾流著淚跑進了自己的房間，“簡，不用解釋了，媽媽不會再相信我了。”)2、增加細節(jié)，開始寫作

在已定框架范圍內(nèi)，依據(jù)情節(jié)發(fā)展和生活常識，推斷故事中人物所見、所聞、所思、所說、所做等給每段增加5至8個具體細節(jié)，我們稱之為叫“58細節(jié)添加法”。構思Paragraph1：WhenDadandMomarrivedadayearlier,theywereamazedtofindeverythinginamess.(當爸爸媽媽提前一天到家時，因為家里的一團亂而大吃一驚)根據(jù)構思的大致框架，推斷故事中人物所見、所思、所說、所做等每段增加五至七個具體細節(jié)或叫“57細節(jié)法”。母親生氣，責怪兒子交代看家，房間凌亂飯錢花光，狗仍饑餓質(zhì)問錢去何處，女兒解釋帶狗看病，故錢花光構思Paragraph2：Danielranintohisroom,withtearsinhiseyes,“Jane,thereisnoneedtoexplainandMomwon’ttrustmeanylonger.”(丹尼爾流著淚跑進了自己的房間，“簡，不用解釋了，媽媽不會再相信我了?！?根據(jù)構思的大致框架，推斷故事中人物所見、所思、所說、所做等每段增加五至七個具體細節(jié)或叫“57細節(jié)法”。父親說話，安慰母親母親了解原由，后悔責怪擁抱兒子，道歉表揚根據(jù)一致性原則，除內(nèi)容上要語義銜接，上下連貫外，語言風格也要一致，應使用分詞語短和各類從句。3、修改潤色，整潔謄寫

審讀初稿，注意語義是否銜接，前后是否連貫，事件是否符合邏輯，語言特色是否與前文一致。在修改潤色之后，整齊工整地謄寫在答卷上。參考范文Paragraph1：WhenDadandMomarrivedadayearlier,theywereamazedtofindeverythinginamess.

Momwasangryandshouted,“Listentome,youngman—Ileftyouincharge.Wethoughtyouwouldactlikeanadult,butlookatthemess.ThemoneyforfoodhasbeenusedupbutwhydoesSpotstilllookhungry?Whatdidyoudowiththemoneyweleft?”Janeexplainedanxiously,“Mummy,Spotissick,sowespenttherestofthemoneytakingittothepetclinic.”Paragraph2：

Danielranintohisroom,withtearsinhiseyes,“Jane,thereisnoneedtoexplainandMomwon’ttrustmeanylonger.”

ComfortingMom,Dadsaidcalmly,“Thereisprobablyagoodexplanationforeverything.”Hearingthelittledaughter’swords,M