讀后續(xù)寫人與動(dòng)物-天使狗狗的守護(hù)講義 高三英語作文復(fù)習(xí)寫作專項(xiàng)

續(xù)寫原文AFour-leggedGuardianAngelSnowhadjustmeltedoffthegroundthatAprildayatourhouseinReginaBeach,Saskatchewan.Ihadjustcleanedupthepoolinpreparationforsellingthehouse.Theyearbefore,Ihadlostmyjobwiththeprovincialgovernment,andnowourfinancialsituationwasgrim.Indespair,Ihadfinallyputthehomeonthemarket,andarealestateagentwasduetoshowuplaterthatday.

Evenworse,IwouldhavetogiveupmybelovedGreatDane（大丹犬）,

Brigitte,becauseIcouldnolongeraffordthecostoffeedingit.ThethoughtoflosingthedogandourbeautifulhomewasalmostmorethanIcouldbear.Deepindespair,Isattypingupresumesandcoverletters.OutofthecornerofmyeyeIcouldseemythirteen-month-oldson,Forrest,ashelayonthecarpet,playingnearourbig,gentlenanny-dog,Brigitte.Itseemedasif

Brigittewasalwaysmeanttobeinthisfamilyandsheturnedouttobeaperfectcompanion.BrigittecametoourhouseonChristmasevewhenthedoorbellrangandIwassuresomeofmyChristmaspackageshadarrived.Irantothedoorandswungitopen,butnoonewasthere.Isensedsomethingandlookeddown,onlytofindabeautifulGreatDanesittingthere,lookingupatmewithbig,intelligenteyes.Therewasnowaythatshecouldhaverungthedoorbellbyherself,wasthere?Perhaps,someonehadfoundthepuppysomewhereandleftherthere,andthenrangthedoorbellandranaway.TheyaccuratelyguessedIwouldwelcomeanadditionalfamilymemberandtakecareofher.Thinkingofthese,Icouldn'thelpheavingasighandwentstraightbacktowork.However,Ihadn'ttypedmorethantwosentenceswhenBrigittebeganbarkingfuriouslyandrunningbackandforthtotheslidingglassdooroverlookingourpool.Iracedtosee

whatwashappening

andnoticedthattheslidingdoorwasslightlyopen.Suddenly,Irealized

Forrestwasnowheretobeseen.

Inpanic,Iopenedthedoorandranoutside.

續(xù)寫段首句：P1:ThereIwassurprisedtoseeBrigitte,whowasterrifiedofwater,diveintothepool.P2:Finally,thedoctorsaidForrestwasallrightandcouldbereleasedfromhospital.解題思路：

step1:

根據(jù)讀原文時(shí)所劃關(guān)鍵信息確定故事問題/矛盾（通常有兩層：事情本身一層；事情背后所展現(xiàn)的信息又一層）讀原文時(shí)需劃的關(guān)鍵信息主要包括：①負(fù)面否定信息

②與前者形成對(duì)比的信息

③反復(fù)出現(xiàn)信息

④問題信息

⑤轉(zhuǎn)折信息

故事主要問題/矛盾：1淺層：孩子去哪兒了；

狗為何叫；

孩子是否得救2深層：是否放棄小狗；對(duì)小狗的新的認(rèn)識(shí)

step2:根據(jù)已給段首句與主要矛盾確定每段發(fā)展到什么程度P1:

小狗救起孩子

孩子被送往醫(yī)院P2:

決定不放棄小狗

認(rèn)識(shí)到它是守護(hù)天使

step3：每段具體設(shè)計(jì)：確定描寫對(duì)象，從行為動(dòng)作/語言、心理感受/神態(tài)表情兩大方面交替描寫各個(gè)對(duì)象，必要處添加環(huán)境等其他描寫

具體設(shè)計(jì)構(gòu)思示例

P1：

描寫對(duì)象——我、

小狗我：

震驚

緊張

焦慮，祈禱小狗：快速蹬腿

游向孩子我：急切

拿出手機(jī)

撥打急救電話

小狗：咬住孩子衣服

用力蹬

往回游我：拍/抱一下小狗

快速將孩子送上救護(hù)車

P2:描寫對(duì)象——我、小狗小狗：一路陪伴在孩子身邊。到家之后坐在孩子身邊

，不時(shí)地看孩子。我：感悟（小狗是守護(hù)天使，不能放棄）。蹲下

拍它

親它

說（語言內(nèi)容主要是表達(dá)對(duì)小狗的肯定

感謝

不放棄）注意：感悟與語言內(nèi)容多從文中找線索加以利用

謹(jǐn)記：1.必寫高級(jí)句式：

非謂

、獨(dú)立主格、定從、

名從、

倒裝、

強(qiáng)調(diào)2.多從原文找線索，利用相關(guān)詞匯，提高與原文的契合度

英文寫作示例

P1:ThereIwassurprisedto

seeBrigitte,whowasterrifiedofwater,diveintothepool.Wavesofastonishmentandanxietysurginginmyheart,IrealizedwhatwashappeningandcrossedmyfingerforthesafetyofbothForrestandBrigitte.StruggleasBrigittedid,sheswiftlykickedherlegsandsparednostrengthtoreachForrestwithintheshortesttime.Meanwhile,Igrabbedmyphoneoutofpocketanddialedforrescuewithtremblingvoice.Afterwhatseemedtobeacentury,therewasBrigitte,rightunderForrest.ShegrippedForrest’sclothtightlywithherteethandkeptkickingherfourlegs,attemptingtoswimbacktowardsme.Themomentshelanded,wetallover,ItookoverForrest,spreadmyarmsaroundBrigitteandthenrushedtotheambulancebywhichForrestwassenttohospitalforcheckandtreatment.

P2:Finally,thedoctorsaidForrestwasallrightandcouldbereleasedfromhospital.Sincewesteppedonthewaybackhome,BrigittehadbeenstayingbesideForrestasifshewasconcernedaboutanotheraccident.AfterwearrivedandwhenForrestplayedonthecarpet,Brigittestillsitnearhimandfrequentlystaredathimwithherintelligenteyes.ItwasthisexperiencethatconvincedmeBrigittewasnotjustaperfectcompanion,butapricelessguardianangelwhocaredaboutusevenmorethanherself.Howsillyitwastogiveherup.Isquatteddown,pattedheronherbackandkissedherforehead,whisperinginherear,“youarealwaysmeanttobeinthisfamily,youareourguardianangel,andnothingcouldpress/forcemetogiveyouup.”下水文：P1:ThereIwassurprisedto

seeBrigitte,whowasterrifiedofwater,diveintothepool.Quickly,sheswamtowardsForrest,whoundulatedupanddowninthewater.ShebitonForrest'sclothesandsparednoefforttodraghimaside.Ialsojumpedintotheswimmingpoolwithoutthinking.Myson'sheartbrokencriesforhelppromptedmetosavebothofthemassoonaspossiblebecausetheycouldn'tswimatall.Itriedmybesttoswimtowardsthem.Nowasteoftime!IsentForresttothenearesthospitalforathoroughphysicalexamination.P2:Finally,thedoctorsaidForrestwasallrightandcouldbereleasedfromhospital.Sinceweembarkedonourwayhome,BrigittehasbeenbyForrest'sside,asifsheisworriedaboutanotheraccident.Afterwearrived,whileForrestwasplayingonthecarpet,Brigittestillsatnexttohim,oftenstaringathimwithherclevereyes.ItwasthisexperiencethatmademebelievethatBrigittewasnotonlyaperfectcompanion,butalsoaninvaluableguardianan