互動視域下的讀后續(xù)寫實踐+以2016浙江高考續(xù)寫真題為例 講義 高三英語一輪復(fù)習寫作專項

讀后續(xù)寫：2016年10月浙江高考讀后續(xù)寫真題《因吵迷路力求生》閱讀下面材料,

根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,

使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I'mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”

andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,

Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace，sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcapped

(頂部被雪所蓋著的)

mountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”

shecried."Help!"Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落）somewhereatadistance(在遠處).Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,

shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse（襯衫）,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.注意：1.

續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.

請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。（一框）Paragraph1

Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain._________（二框）Paragraph2

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup._______________文章分析：文章講述的是一個野外迷路脫險的事情。Jane和丈夫Tom在七月周末去湖邊森林露營。在去往森林途中，兩口子吵架導(dǎo)致Jane賭氣離開Tom，而想另覓露營之地。誰知她這一去，經(jīng)迷路了，再也回不到湖邊。因為找不到回去的路，而天色已晚，Jane在野外露宿了一晚，其時，她很想回到Tom和家人身邊，她想告訴Tom她很愛他。次日醒來，她找到一條小溪，并且還發(fā)現(xiàn)溪邊的漿果叢。她喝了一點水，吃了一些漿果，獲得了力量，便沿著小溪走，企圖找到原本露營的湖邊。在尋湖的途中，Jane聽到了直升飛機的聲音。但不幸的是，樹木使得飛機上的人看不到Jane。又過了一會兒，另一架飛機飛過，Jane脫下她的黃色襯衫，尋思著：跑到開闊的區(qū)域，然后想飛機揮衣示意。文章在此處戛然而止。給出兩個續(xù)斷首句分別是：續(xù)段一：但是再沒有飛機飛過，而天色變黑，夜幕降臨。續(xù)斷二：破曉清晨，Jane醒了過來。根據(jù)“互動思維”與“伏筆”（主要是人物性格），我們可以構(gòu)思如下：主題主題是控制情節(jié)走向的幕后統(tǒng)帥！文章主題：險境中擁有希望，積極求生不放棄。

夫妻有話好好說，不要爭吵。伏筆伏筆助立主題，伏筆促進情節(jié)。Jane

有悔恨之意；飛機可能就是Tom找來搜救Jane的。.續(xù)段一一輪己己互動（我的想法）我的情感：失望、悲傷。我的想法：要是沒有吵架該多好。我的行動：想到這，流下眼淚。

二輪己己互動一個聲音說：擁有希望，不要放棄。聽到聲音后：獲得力量，開始尋找開闊之地，并在那里睡著。銜接句Jane找到一塊開闊之地，然后因為累就睡著了。續(xù)段二己己互動Jane心理:

希望看到飛機（因此吃了漿果，積極等候）Jane行為：等啊等，終于等到飛機。Jane行為：跑起來，搖晃這黃襯衫。主配互動Jane行為：跑起來，搖晃黃襯衫。直升機：發(fā)現(xiàn)Jane,

開始停下來。主配互動Tom下了飛機后：擁抱Jane,

并說道：爭吵有代價，以后永不爭吵。Jane回應(yīng)：帶著眼淚笑了，【下水文】Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.(1)In

aflash,amixtureofdisappointmentandsadnesssweptoverJane.(2)“IfonlyIhadnotquarreledwithTom.HowimpulsiveIwas!”

Janesaidtoherselfconstantly.(3)Nosoonerhadshethoughtofthisthantearsrolleddownherface.(4)Suddenly,avoiceechoedinher

ears

,“staycalm;stayhopeful.Godhelpsthosewhohelpthemselves.”(5)Hearingthis,Janeregainedsomestrength,overwhelmedwithhope.(6)WhatcamenextwasthatJanewalkeduntil

anopenarea,andthenshefellasleepasshewassoexhausted.Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.(1)Havingeatensomeberriesshecollectedyesterday,Janewaited,hopingthatsomehelicoptersappeared.(2)Shewaitedandwaited,andfinallyahelicopterarrived.(3)NosoonerhadJaneheardofitssoundthanshe

jumpedtoherfeetandranaround,

wavingtheyellowblouse.(4)Fortunately,sheattractedthehelicopteranditstopped..(5)AsTomsteppedoffthehelicopter,Janeracedtohim,fac