讀后續(xù)寫練習(xí)寫作指導(dǎo)人神共奮講義高三英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)

讀后續(xù)寫：人神共奮材料：When

Dr.Gullickson

wasassigning

project

matesforhisintroductiontoexperimentalpsychologyclass,

IsecretlyhopedhewouldpairmewithmybestfriendoratleastaclassmateIcouldhavesomefunwith.

Aboveall,

Ihopedhewouldn’tassignmetoworkwiththeintense,fiercelypetitive,singularly

serious

fellowwhoalwaysworedarkclothesandapparentlyhadapersonalitytomatch.

Asfatewouldhaveit,Dr.Gullicksonverydeliberatelymatchedeveryoneinclassandannouncedthat

IwouldbeworkingwiththeonepersoninclassIwantedtoavoid.Iwentuptomynewlabmateandintroducedmyself.

HelookedatmeasthoughIweren’tthere.

IfelthetreatedmeasthoughIwouldholdhimbackandprobablycausehisgradepointaveragetotakeanosedive.

Hewasn’toutrightmeanorabusive.Hejustgavemetheimpressionhecoulddowhateverprojectwedreamedupbetterifhedidit

alone.Needlesstosay,

Ididn’tlookforwardtoanentiretermofbeingbrushedoff,butItriedtomakethebestofitand

didn’tsayanything,lestImakethingsworse.Theprojectrequiredeachlabteamtodevelopahypothesis,setupanexperimenttotestthehypothesis,runthetests,dothestatisticalanalysisandpresentthe

findings.Whatevergradetheteamreceivedwouldbe

shared

bybothstudents.Whenmy

teammate

andImetto

discuss

ourproject,Iwasuneasy.

Herewasthischallengingstudentwhohadareputationforsinglemindednessandgoodgradestheexactoppositeofme.

Iwasoutmatched.

Iactuallywantedtodroptheclassatonepoint,butstoppedshortbecause

Ididn’twanttogivehimthe

satisfaction

ofmychickeningout.Afterlengthydiscussions,wesomehowagreedtodoastudyonthetactilekinestheticperceptionofspace.Iwasn’tsurewhatitmeant,butatleastwehadatopic.注意：

所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；Paragraph1:

Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.Paragraph2:

OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.寫作指導(dǎo)#人物分析01Dr.Gullickson這位實(shí)驗(yàn)心理學(xué)博士老師起了“牽線搭橋”的作用，通過assignprojectmates，把“我”和“他”組了搭檔，“人神”組合因此上線。02

“人”

自然是“我”內(nèi)心無比希望與最好的朋友，或者最差也得是個(gè)志趣相投的同學(xué)組搭檔；IsecretlyhopedhewouldpairmewithmybestfriendoratleastaclassmateIcouldhavesomefunwith.內(nèi)心OS被仿佛有順風(fēng)耳的老師聽見，于是被有意安排與“他”牽手成功；IwouldbeworkingwiththeonepersoninclassIwantedtoavoid.第一次打交道，“他”把我當(dāng)空氣，默認(rèn)“我”為“豬隊(duì)友”。然而，“我”沒吭聲，唯恐把事情弄得更糟；HelookedatmeasthoughIweren’tthere.IfelthetreatedmeasthoughIwouldholdhimbackandprobablycausehisgradepointaveragetotakeanosedive....lestImakethingsworse.“我”，學(xué)業(yè)上雖然被outmatched，但也算有些志氣，既不想chickenout而讓“他”如了愿，也不想被“他”冷落整個(gè)學(xué)期，仍然希望能做到最好。Ididn’twanttogivehimthe

satisfaction

ofmychickeningout.Ididn’tlookforwardtoanentiretermofbeingbrushedoff.Itriedtomakethebestofit.03

“神”就是“他”高冷學(xué)神，以專心致志和好成績而聞名；theintense,fiercelypetitive,singularly

serious

fellowHejustgavemetheimpressionhecoulddowhateverprojectwedreamedupbetterifhedidit

alone.Herewasthischallengingstudentwhohadareputationforsinglemindednessandgoodgradestheexactoppositeofme.越是對“他”敬而遠(yuǎn)之，越是“難逃孽緣”；Asfatewouldhaveit,

...“他”也沒那么壞，畢竟學(xué)神的世界只可遠(yuǎn)觀，“我”不配懂。

...hewasn’toutrightmeanorabusive.#情節(jié)分析人神交手，看點(diǎn)管夠因?yàn)轫?xiàng)目合作需要，“我”和“神”被強(qiáng)行綁定成為搭檔。“一條繩上的兩只螞蚱”，互相再不待見，也必須碰撞出一些智慧的火花來，否則一榮俱榮，一損俱損?！皩W(xué)神”面前，“我”自然相形見絀，但好歹終究有了課題。在接下來的頻繁見面中，“我”和“神”又會(huì)做些什么呢？仔細(xì)研讀材料中的信息，小榜做出如下的預(yù)測：1.草擬項(xiàng)目計(jì)劃(drawupourplans)根據(jù)材料，項(xiàng)目內(nèi)容包括：todevelopahypothesis(提出一個(gè)假設(shè));tosetupanexperimenttotestthehypothesis(建立一個(gè)實(shí)驗(yàn)來檢驗(yàn)這個(gè)假設(shè));torunthetests(運(yùn)行測試);

todothestatisticalanalysis(做統(tǒng)計(jì)分析);

topresentthe

findings(展示研究結(jié)果)除了最后的研究結(jié)果展示，前面的4項(xiàng)內(nèi)容都能在續(xù)寫第一段中提及?？紤]到小榜和各位榜粉可能都不懂“tactilekinestheticperceptionofspace”究竟是心理學(xué)領(lǐng)域中的什么東東，所以續(xù)寫段落中建議規(guī)避關(guān)于學(xué)術(shù)專業(yè)方面的描寫。不妨考慮用白描的寫法講述“我”和“神”之間的各種交集，如：項(xiàng)目如何分工、“我”能做什么，“神”做了什么......可以設(shè)計(jì)一些小沖突、小磨合或小突破來推動(dòng)情節(jié)的發(fā)展從而激發(fā)人物情感的變化，很多電影電視劇不就是這么演的嗎？2.搭檔生病(partner'sdisease)從第二段段首句OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease中得知，“學(xué)神”搭檔因?yàn)橹夭《朐褐委煛Ｒ虼?，在“我”和“神?/p>

的多次交集中，“我”可能會(huì)注意到“他”身體上的某種不適癥狀，從而為第二段“他”的入院治療打下伏筆。但是，小榜在這里提醒一下各位粉絲：千萬不要把我們這位“學(xué)神”寫死了。小榜的很多學(xué)生似乎都有一種悲劇情結(jié)，每個(gè)故事，必有事故，好像人物不離世，情感就不能爆發(fā)，主題就不能升華似的。21世紀(jì)，醫(yī)學(xué)那么發(fā)達(dá)，再重的疾病，也有生還的希望吧，更何況是在虛擬的故事中呢。讓我們懷揣最大的善心，釋放最大的善意，讓這位“學(xué)神”搭檔劫后余生吧。3.雙方的改變(changes)這篇作文無論是情節(jié)明線還是情感暗線，都應(yīng)該共用一個(gè)主題詞“改變”。下面用更為直觀的方式為各位榜粉解讀這三條重要的線索??（這篇文章雖然文章的敘述視角依然是“我”，但是主人公卻是“我”和“他”（“人”和“神”），“我們”倆人的情感在整個(gè)已知和未知情節(jié)的發(fā)展中都發(fā)生了改變。兩個(gè)最不可能成為搭檔的人在項(xiàng)目合作的過程中，無論是出于好奇、試探、忍讓還是真心，從慢慢放下偏見與戒備，邁出了解對方、予對方以機(jī)會(huì)的第一步，進(jìn)而逐漸信任對方、依靠對方，到最終接受對方、“化敵為友”，這種情感上的改變最終成就了情節(jié)上的圓滿(HappyEnding)。#主題分析通過上述情節(jié)明線和情感暗線的分析，我們愿意成全“我”和“神”雙雙成為最后的贏家。其實(shí)，這個(gè)故事還有第三個(gè)贏家。他是誰？對，沒錯(cuò)，Dr.Gullickson！Dr.Gullickson也許早就洞悉取“我”之長可以補(bǔ)“他”之短，反之亦然。他慧眼識珠，也許早就判定“我”是可造之材，于天時(shí)地利之外為“我”安排了最關(guān)鍵的“對的人”，讓“他”成為“我”的幸運(yùn)之“神”。他也許也期盼“學(xué)神”在學(xué)業(yè)之外的成長與改變。于是，Dr.Gullickson安排我們成了搭檔，安排“人”“神”共同奮斗。小榜不禁感嘆：Whatawiseman!所以，這篇文章的主題是什么？是改變。列夫·托爾斯泰曾說：所謂人生，是一刻也不停地變化著的。就是肉體生命的衰弱和靈魂生命的強(qiáng)大、擴(kuò)大。自我認(rèn)知會(huì)改變，對他人他事的認(rèn)知也會(huì)改變，變則通，通則存，存則強(qiáng)，改變能成就所有的美好。#范文最近很多公眾號都在推這篇作文的解析和下水文，甚至把原文也挖了出來。小榜倒是認(rèn)為原文的參考意義已經(jīng)不大。每個(gè)嘗試?yán)m(xù)寫此文的作者，都會(huì)根據(jù)自己的人生閱歷，遵循自己的“三觀”而賦予材料不同的背景和解讀視角。讀后續(xù)寫本就是見仁見智的題型，沒有標(biāo)準(zhǔn)答案。下水文Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.Honestly,hisacademicexcellencedidputhiminauniquepositiontobeincharge.Iwatchedhimbusyinghimselfinthelab,curiouslyyetadmirably.Occasionally,hewouldsitdownasiftorturedbysomepains,whenhewouldmotionmetocontinue.Iwasgladtotakeoverandtriedtomakethebestofit.Themoretimeshequitforrest,themorechancesIhadtojustifythequalificationsashispartnerandthefaithhecouldputinme.OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.

Iwasindeedstartledthatthepainshe’dbeensufferingshouldprovetroublesome.Seeinghimconfinedtothehospitalbed,Ifeltforthefirsttimethathewasnolongerintense,norfiercelypetitive.Isharedmyworriesaboutthefinalpresentationbuthestoppedme,sayingfirmly“Youcanmakeit.”So,wemade

thewardoursecondlab.ThebigmomentwasimpressivewhenIcarriedthroughourpresentationunexpectedlywell.Shownthe“Aplus”awardedbyDr.Gullickson,hebeamedabroadgrin.Ituckedhiminandsaidmerrily,“Justgetbetter.Wearepartners,everafter.”

佳作展示范文1Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.

Ireallyhadbutterfliesinmystomachinthebeginning.Butaswegraduallygotacquaintedwitheachother,Idiscoveredthathewasactuallymoreshythandistant.Ihadtoadmitthatitwashethatwaspushingaheadwithmostoftheproject.ButhedidletmeparticipateasmuchasIcouldandofferedtimelyhelpwhennecessary,thusmakingmyconcernsthingsofthepast.IguessedIcouldseewhyDr.Gullicksonpairedhimwithme.

OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.

Itwasdrawingclosetothefinalpresentation.Andasfatewouldhaveit,thereremainedonlyonesingleguytofaceit.However,Ididn’twantourprojecttoendinfailure,whichwouldcertainlybeanotherblowtomyhospitalizedpartner.Itookovertherestoftheworkanddevotedallmyselftoit,informinghimofdailyupdatesandmeanwhilegettingencouragementoverthephone.WhenIfinallyshowedupinhiswardwiththeAplusgrade,webothlaughedheartily.Weweregladthatwehadgotcloser,academicallyandemotionally.Andwewereluckytohavebeenpartnered.

范文2：Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.

Serious

asmyteammatewas,wegradually

grewingoodtunewith

eachother.He

hadawaywithtechnicalthings

and

approachedeverydetail

withaclearpurpose.AndIsparednoefforttodomybit,

collectingdata

and

recordingresults

carefully,soasto

makeupfor

my

academicdisadvantage.I

fullydiscussedmyideas

andsharedmyinsightswithhim,whowasonce

indifferent

but

laterlistenedtome

withcloseattention.Weweremakingsteadyprogresswithour

project.OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.ThemomentIsawhimlyinghelplesslyinbed,

Idecided

Ihadtoactaloneanddomybest.

Iassuredhim

Iwouldnotlethimdownandheshouldconcentrateonrecovering.

Ipouredmoretimeandenergy

intothat

project

thaneverbefore,andfinally

presentedourfindings

totheclass,whichsurprisinglyearnedus

anexcellentgrade!WhenItoldhimaboutoursharedsuccess,hesmiled.Ithadtodowithtrustandthejoyofsharingamonprize.范文3：Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupour,hisacademicexcellencedidputhiminauniquepositiontobeincharge.Iwatchedhimbusyinghimselfinthelab,curiouslyyetadmirably.Occasionally,hewouldsitdownasiftorturedbysomepains,whenhewouldmotionmetocontinue.Iwasgladtotakeoverandtriedtomakethebestofit.Themoretimeshequitforrest,themorechancesIhadtojustifythequalificationsashispartnerandthefaithhecouldputinme.OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.Iwasindeedstartledthatthepainshe’dbeensufferingshouldprovetroublesome.Seeinghimconfinedtothehospitalbed,Ifeltforthefirsttimethathewasnolongerintense,norfiercelypetitive.Isharedmyworriesaboutthefinalpresentationbuthestoppedme,sayingfirmly“Youcanmakeit.”So,wemadethewardoursecondlab.ThebigmomentwasimpressivewhenIcarriedthroughourpresentationunexpectedlywell.Shownthe“Aplus”awardedbyDr.Gullickson,hebeamedabroadgrin.Ituckedhiminandsaidmerrily,“Justgetbetter.Wearepartners,everafter.”范文4：Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.panionasIwasintheproject,Istillhad

nosenseofparticipatingintheproject.Myteammatekepthisbrainoccupiedin

developingthehypothesis,

settingupanexperimenttotestit,andrunningthetestsalone

,leavingmejuststandingbesidehim

asifIwereafool.“Whatadullprojectitis!”

Imurmuredtomyself.However,

somethingchangedgradually,asIbecameawarewhatthe

psychologicalwellbeingofteenagers

meant.Thankstotheintense,

fiercelypetitive,

singularlyserious

fellow,thewholeprocedurewentsmoothly,closetothefinalstage.OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.Withoutanydelay,Ipackedupmyschoolbag,tookallthe

experimentstatistics

andrushedtothehospital.Seeingthepalefellowwearingpurewhiteclothesinsteadoftheannoyingdarkclothes,Ifeltasenseofsympathyandmercywellingupinmyheart.Withhisguidance,Ifinishedthe

statisticalanalysis

and

presentedthefindings.ItturnedouttobesuchanamazingandpersuasivestudythatmyteammateandIdidwinthebestgrade.Now,wehavebeenmostrel