2024屆高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)寫作專項(xiàng)：讀后續(xù)寫親情媽媽的雨衣課件

ContinuationWriting【個(gè)人成長】媽媽雨天騎車接我放學(xué)（2022.10浙江強(qiáng)基聯(lián)盟）Whenschoolwasover,thedaywasfadinganditstartedtodrizzle(毛毛雨).Istoodattheschoolgate,withaloadedbackpackonmyshoulders.ItwasFridayagain:aweekendofjoywithunlimitedsleepinghoursanddinnercoursesspeciallymadetomytaste,aweekendathome.Iwavedgoodbyetomyfriendsastheyjumpedintotheirfathers’warmandcomfortablecars.Curiously,thisgaverisetoadisturbingfeelinginme.Itwasnotexactlywhattheycalledjealousy,butsomethinglikedismay(沮喪).IknewallIcouldexpectwasanoldbikeMomwouldridealongon,withthebadly-oiledchaincreaking(嘎吱作響)againstthewheeltoannounceherarrival.

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EveryFridaywhenMomcametopickmeupfortheweekend,itwasamomentfullofgreatexpectationandgreatunease.Ialwaysfeltmyfaceburningaswerodeourwayinandoutofthenumerouscarsandsawmyfriends’facesstickingoutofthecarwindows.ItwaslikesteppingintoaballroomwithbeautifullydressedladiesandfindingyourselfinasmellyT-shirt.Totellyouthetruth,Momisquiteaheadacheonceinawhile.Shejustlooksahomelymiddle-agedhousewife.BeingapractitionerofDIY,sheknitsmostofmysweaters,chieflyinoldstyles.Whenevercaughtbysomecuriousclassmatesaskingwhatbrandmysweatersare,I’dforceasmileandreplyinahalfjokingmanner:homemade.Icouldn’trememberwhenIstartedtofindhersuchanembarrassment.Asalittleboy,Ireliedonhersomuch.Shehadbeenworkingathome,cookinginthekitchen,knittingbythelamporridingacrosstowntobuymeabookIbadlyneeded.Ithadalwaysbeenmuchfunridingwithmom.Butjustnowthereseemedtobesomethingstandingbetweenus,somethingthatmadehersostrangetomeandmetoher.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。

Todaysheshowedupinaraincoat.

Momtriedtocovermewiththebackoftheraincoatagainasastormsetin.這篇文章講述在同學(xué)家長眾多的汽車中間，我的媽媽雨天騎車接我放學(xué)。曾經(jīng)，和媽媽一起騎車對我來說是一件開心快樂的事情。而如今，這讓我有點(diǎn)尷尬難堪。我和媽媽中間不再親密無間，我們中間似乎有些陌生，有點(diǎn)隔閡。那這段雨中回家之路該如何是好呢？01問題導(dǎo)讀

1.從文章里對媽媽的描述來看，媽媽是一個(gè)什么樣的人？2.我小時(shí)候?qū)寢屖鞘裁礃拥那楦袘B(tài)度？現(xiàn)在又是怎么樣的？這樣的對比描寫對下文續(xù)寫有什么幫助？3.從第二段開頭句可以推斷出第一段媽媽做了什么動作？我對此有什么樣的反應(yīng)？4.這篇文章的主旨想要表達(dá)什么？1.從文章里對媽媽的描述來看，媽媽是一個(gè)什么樣的人？

2.我小時(shí)候?qū)寢屖鞘裁礃拥那楦袘B(tài)度？現(xiàn)在又是怎么樣的？這樣的對比描寫對下文續(xù)寫有什么幫助？

從文章的這些描寫“dinnercoursesspeciallymadetomytaste、BeingapractitionerofDIY,sheknitsmostofmysweaters,chieflyinoldstyles、Shehadbeenworkingathome,cookinginthekitchen,knittingbythelamporridingacrosstowntobuymeabookIbadlyneeded”可以看出媽媽是一個(gè)勤勞善良能干的媽媽，并且十分愛我。我小時(shí)候很依賴媽媽，和她一起騎車很開心(Asalittleboy,Ireliedonhersomuch,Ithadalwaysbeenmuchfunridingwithmom)?，F(xiàn)在，我覺得媽媽騎車接我，我覺得讓我很尷尬，我們之間變得有點(diǎn)陌生，有點(diǎn)隔閡(Butjustnowthereseemedtobesomethingstandingbetweenus,somethingthatmadehersostrangetomeandmetoher.)。這樣的對比描寫可以推斷出續(xù)寫情節(jié)里，我對媽媽的冷漠和隔閡會發(fā)生轉(zhuǎn)變。3.從第二段開頭句可以推斷出第一段媽媽做了什么動作？我對此有什么樣的反應(yīng)？4.這篇文章的主旨想要表達(dá)什么？從第二段開頭句可以推斷出第一段媽媽給我蓋過一次雨衣，可能我拒絕了她的好意。這篇文章續(xù)寫結(jié)尾是我不再覺得媽媽騎車接我會讓我尷尬丟臉。我對媽媽的冷漠，隔閡會因?yàn)閶寢寣ξ业膼鄱淖?。Todaysheshowedupinaraincoat.①Asshewaspedalinginmydirection,afeelingofembarrassmentbubbledupinsideme.②Soon,Mom,withtheraindropsdrippingfromherbangs,cametoastop,askinganxiously,“Waitingforalongtime?”③Makingnoreply,Isteppedforward,jumpingontothebackseat.④BeforeMomcouldcovermewiththebackofherraincoat,Isimplythrewitasideandcomplained,“Shallwegonow?”⑤Obviously,mycoldnessleftMomconfused.⑥Forasplitsecond停頓了一秒,adeadlysilencehungoverusandIduckedmyheadtoavoidanyeyecontactwithher.(95w)Momtriedtocovermewiththebackoftheraincoatagainasastormsetin.①Shewhispered,“It’srainingheavily”andthenmountedthebike.②Seeingherbendingforwardandpedalingupaslopewithallhermight用盡全力蹬上斜坡,Iinstantlyfeltapangofguilt內(nèi)疚的感覺.③Withtheraindropsbeatingagainsttheraincoat,Ifeltasiftheywereslappingmyface打臉.④Mycoldnessandignoranceturnedapreciousrideintoatorture折磨.⑤Justthen,Momturnedback,“Areyoucold?Wewillbehomesoon.”⑥ItwasatthemomentthatIcametorealizelovecomesinvariousformsandthereisnothingtobeashamedof.(93w)下水文:4、親情主題句Familyandfriendsarehiddentreasures.Family,awonderfulshelteranda24-hourharbor,isalwaysthereforus.Familyloveisthegreatestgiftinlife.Familyistouswhatharboristoships.(家庭之于我們就像港口之于船只)“Familyisalifejacketinthestormyseaoflife.”

–J.K.RowlingFamiliesarethecompassthatguidesus.Family:wherelifebeginsandloveneverends.Todaysheshowedupinaraincoat.Onceshesawme,Momcalledmynameexcitedly.Almosteverybodypresentlookedinherdirection.Idroopedmyheadandfixedmystareonthemiddleoftheroad,sweatformingonmyforehead.Whenshetriedtocovermewiththebackofherraincoat,Isimplythrewitaside.Insilence,shotherablamingglanceandthrewmybackpackheavilyintothefrontbasketofthebike.Withoutasingleword,Ijumpedontothebackseat.(87w)

Momtriedtocovermewiththebackoftheraincoatagainasastormsetin.Reluctantly,Ipulleditover.Withthewindroaringangrilyandtheraincoatdancing,itfeltwarmandsecureinside.Mombentforwardandpedaledwithallherstrength.Istartedtofeelguiltyofmycoldness,tearswellingupinmyeyes.Quietly,IslippedmyhandsaroundMom’swaistandgentlypressedmyfaceagainstherback.Inthecryingwindandpoutringrain,IfeltmymisunderstandingofMommeltaway.(92w)參考范文:參考范文:1.朝某人的方向看過去：2.我低下頭，盯著路面看，汗水在額頭冒出來：3.默默地，沉默地：4.我責(zé)備地看了某人一眼：5.沒有說一句話，我跳上自行車后座：6.不情愿地：lookinone’sdirectionIdroopedmyhead,fixedmystareonthemiddleofth