又困電梯了（T8聯(lián)考）讀后續(xù)寫解析講義-高三英語二輪復(fù)習

又困電梯了T8聯(lián)考續(xù)寫解析Whenwewerefinallydismissedfromthelastclassoftheday,thestudentsstreamedoutoftheclassrooms.Itwasanotherboringdayafterschool.IdraggedmyfeethomeasIsighed.Yetanotheruneventfulday,Ithought.LittledidIknowthatthedaywouldtakeaturnfortheworse.Theliftlobby（電梯間）ofmyflatwasoldanddirty.Thewalls,whichwerepaintedwhite,hadbeendirtiedovermanyyears.Ireachedmyflat’slobby,andpressedtheliftbuttonandwentin.Justthen,MrsLim,myelderlyneighbour,hobbled（蹣跚）in.Shelookedancientwithtissuepaperwhitehair,wearingafadedoldfashioneddress.Iheldtheliftdooropen,flashingafriendlysmile,andpolitelygreetedher.Iaskedherhowshefeltthatdayandpressedthebuttons.Shethankedmeforbeingsopolite,thenweweresilentfortherestoftheride.Theliftfelldownincreasinglyfast.Therewereloudclankingsoundshereandtherewhiletheliftgrewslowerandslower.Myheartbeathardandfastasmyhandsturnedcoldandwetwithsweat.Unfortunately,theliftcametoanabruptstopatthefifthfloor.Ipressedthebuttonshardseveraltimes,butitwasofnohelp.Thelightsonthebuttonshadgoneout.Itsoondawnedonmethatweweretrapped.Anicyfearcreptupmyspine.MrsLimwashysterical（歇斯底里）.“Wewillnevergetout!”shecriedwithherfacepale.Ithadbeeacolourlessmask.Ihadnotimetolose.Ipressedthebellintheliftimmediately.Thesoundwassurelydeafening,butwhatotherchoicedidIhave?MrsLimburstintotears.Itriedmyverybesttoforther,tellingherthateverythingwouldbeallrightandthatweneededtofindouthowtogetoutsafely.MrsLimbeganhavingtroublebreathing,andIimmediatelyhelpedhersitdownandloosenedhercollar.Paragraph1:Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.Paragraph2:Bang!MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.續(xù)寫作文：Paragraph1:Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.Eachminutewitnessedthedeadsilenceinthelift,brokenonlybyMrs.Lim’ssniffles.ThenInoticedtheemergencycallbutton,somethingthatusuallyappearedasameredecoration,yetitheldmylastglimmerofhopeatthatverymoment.Afterpressingit,Iwassomewhatrelievedwhenthefaintcrackleoftheconnectionsignaledthathelpwasontheway.Ileanedagainstthedirtywall,puttingonabravefaceandchattingaboutourneighborsandourdailyroutineswithMrs.Lim,hopingtodistractherfromtheunease,aswellasmine.ButittooksolongthatIwasabouttosinkintodespairagainwhentherefinallycamesomevoice.(122words)Paragraph2:Bang!MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.Theydidetoourrescue!Itwasmyturntoburstintotears,tearsofrelief,forInolongerneededtopretendtobestrong.Thedooropened,thelightofduskwasn'toverpowering,butaswesteppedoutofthecrampedlift,itstillmomentarilydazzledoureyes.Itwasabeaconoflife,agentleyetprofoundreminderofoursurvival.ItwasatthatmomentthatIhadathoroughunderstandingofthesignificanceofcherishingtheuneventfuldays,forintheirsimplicityliesapreciousnessweoftenoverlook.Ipromisedmyself,Iwouldneveragainfailtofindjoyintheordinary.(126words)與原文協(xié)同的表達思路：Itwasanotherboringdayafterschool.IdraggedmyfeethomeasIsighed.Yetanotheruneventfulday,Ithought.?1.ItwasatthatmomentthatIhadathoroughunderstandingofthesignificanceofcherishingtheuneventfuldays,forintheirsimplicityliesapreciousnessweoftenoverlook.2.ItdawnedonmethatIshouldnevertakemyblesseduneventfullifeforgranted,andImustcherishwhatIhavewithaheartfullofgratitude.Theliftlobbyofmyflatwasoldanddirty.Thewalls,whichwerepaintedwhite,hadbeendirtiedovermanyyears.?AsIleanedagainstthegrimy/dirtywallsofthelift,thepeelingpaintmirroringthechaosofmymind,Ifeltanoppressiveweightclosinginaroundme,makingitdifficulttobreathe.Shethankedmeforbeingsopolite,thenweweresilentfortherestoftheride.?Iguessourbondswouldneverbelimitedtomerepolitenessagain.MrsLimburstintotears.?1.Heroncepanickedtearsfinallygavewaytotearsofrelief.2.Itwasmyturntoburstintotears,tearsofrelief,forInolongerneededtopretendtobestrong.Weweretrulygoingtoberescued.原文協(xié)同按緊急求救Iturnedtotheemergencycallbutton,somethingthatusuallyappearedasameredecoration,yetitheldmylastglimmerofhopeatthatverymoment,myhopehingingonthepossibilityofsomeone'sresponse.如果沒用——However,despitemyrepeatedefforts,thelineremainedstubbornlysilent,onlyservingtoincreaseoursenseofisolation.如果有用——Afterpressingtheemergencycallbutton,Iwassomewhatrelievedwhenthefaintcrackleoftheconnectionsignaledthathelpwasontheway.對MrsLim的幫助社牛傾情暖場型：IputonabravefaceforMrs.Lim,chattingaboutourneighborsandthesmalljoysofourdailyroutines,hopingtodistractherfromthegrowingunease.社恐調(diào)息靜等型：Iencouragedhertotakeslow,steadybreaths,andweleanedagainstthewallforsupport,waitingfortherescuethatseemedtotakeaneternitytoarrive.電梯被困合理自救Ifeltamassiveweightoffmyshoulder.Ibreathedasighofrelief,feelingasthoughaweightyrockhadfinallyhittheground.Thelightofduskwasn'toverpowering,butasIsteppedoutofthecrampedlift,itstillmomentarilydazzledmyeyes.Itwasabeaconoflife,agentleyetprofoundreminderofoursurvival.續(xù)寫亮點：Eachminutewitnessedthedeadsilenceinthelift,brokenonlybyMrs.Lim’ssniffles.運用了分詞短語作狀語。ThenInoticedtheemergencycallbutton,somethingthatusuallyappearedasameredecoration,yetitheldmylastglimmerofhopeatthatverymoment.運用了轉(zhuǎn)折連詞以及定語從句。Afterpressingit,Iwassomewhatrelievedwhenthefaintcrackleoftheconnectionsignaledthathelpwasontheway.運用了主從復(fù)合句。Ileanedagainstthedirtywall,puttingonabravefaceandchattingaboutourneighborsandourdailyroutineswithMrs.Lim,hopingtodistr