新高考英語(yǔ)III卷讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)經(jīng)過(guò)老師鼓勵(lì)愛(ài)上寫(xiě)作課件高考英語(yǔ)專(zhuān)題復(fù)習(xí)

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——讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)2023年新高考I&II卷:經(jīng)過(guò)老師鼓勵(lì)，愛(ài)上寫(xiě)作1.Readthestory2.Predictthestory3.Writethestory目錄情節(jié)主題人物Brainstorming故事的三要素story（葛文山，2022）（衡很亨，2023）情節(jié)設(shè)計(jì)主題揭示續(xù)寫(xiě)出“與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文”（教育部考試中心，2015）人物塑造Brainstorming讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的三大任務(wù)1Readthestory閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofailHisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(銀匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenightDidhegettiredHavedoubtsDidhewanttoquitIsympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.注意:1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________1.閱讀全文，確定背景(Readforsetting)time(When)place(Where)character（Who）

background(What)settingI;mysocialstudiesteacher;PaulRevere;myoldersisterinmiddleschool

（過(guò)去時(shí)）Afewweekslaterlibrary;teacher’soffice;(classroom;home)Ididnotlovewriting.Writingwassodifficultandpainfulforme.Teacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.

Isaidnowithoutthinking.2.畫(huà)故事山，構(gòu)情節(jié)線(xiàn)(Readforplots)risingactionfallingactionendingplotsbeginningTherecamethenewsaboutthecontest.Mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.climaxIwroteitagain,andagainandagain.

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finallyfinishedit.3.畫(huà)故事山，構(gòu)情感線(xiàn)(Readforemotions)risingactionfallingactionendingplotsbeginningTherecamethenewsaboutthecontest.Mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.emotionsclimaxI:changed,determinedTeacher:happyandencouragingI:refused;curiousI:encouragedI:persistentI：joyfulTeacher:congraduationIwroteitagain,andagainandagain.Andfinallyfinishedit.I:enjoyed2PredictthestoryI:changed,determinedTeacher:happyandencouragingI：joyfulTeacher:congraduation4.根據(jù)故事山，預(yù)測(cè)情節(jié)和主題(Predict

theplotsandtheme)risingactionfallingactionendingplotsbeginningTherecamethenewsaboutthecontest.Mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.emotions銜接句口訣：兩段首句定一框，二框二首正能量I:refused;curiousI:encuragedI:persistent主題句Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.Andfinallyfinishedit.I:enjoyedclimaxParagraph1:Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Paragraph2:Iwenttomyteacher’soffice

aftertheawardpresentation.口訣：兩段首句定一框，二框二首正能量銜接句1.Whatisthenews2.Duringtheawardpresentation,whatdidtheydo1.Whathappenedintheteacher’soffice2.Aftertheawardpresentation,whatwilltheydo比賽消息傳來(lái)--作者獲獎(jiǎng)--高興--頒獎(jiǎng)典禮感謝老師Iexpressedmythankstomyteacher.主題句頒獎(jiǎng)后來(lái)到老師辦公室--老師告訴作者堅(jiān)持寫(xiě)作--作者表達(dá)了對(duì)寫(xiě)作的喜愛(ài)--作者寫(xiě)作取得了成功--感激老師回應(yīng)前文/點(diǎn)出主題1.我開(kāi)始熱愛(ài)寫(xiě)作。I’mcrazyaboutwritingnow.2.努力有回報(bào)--寫(xiě)作獲得成功。Yourhardworkwillpayoff(--becomingawriter).3.感恩之心。Showrespectandgratidutetoteacherforguidance.4.根據(jù)故事山，預(yù)測(cè)情節(jié)和主題(Predict

theplotsandtheme)5.DraftforwritingwontheprizeteachercongratulatedattendedtheawardpresentationsharedwithteacherIthankedteacherIthankedteacherAfewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Para1銜接句onthestagebeinformedexcited,proudinvitedtothestageimmediatelypersonally一個(gè)角色的所言、所行、所感、所想會(huì)引起其他角色的一系列反應(yīng)。ActionResponse主題句teachercongratulatedteacherencouragedMysuccessIthankedIpromisedthereasonforsuccessIwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Para2goodworks--awriterowemysuccesstomyteacherholdingmyhandskeepwritingdon’tlikebeforetrymybesttowrite一個(gè)角色的所言、所行、所感、所想會(huì)引起其他角色的一系列反應(yīng)。5.DraftforwritingActionResponse3WritethestoryTip1forwriting口訣：人物時(shí)態(tài)和事件，語(yǔ)言特色不要變58細(xì)節(jié)添加法Tip2forwritingToshowin3aspects:①Bodylanguage②Facialexpression③Voice?Toshow,nottotell.(王初明“寫(xiě)長(zhǎng)法”)Telling:Hewasdelighted.他很高興。Showing:bodylanguage+facialexpression肢體語(yǔ)言+面部表情Hewassodelightedthathealmostjumpedup,withtearsfillinghiseyes.他高興得幾乎跳了起來(lái)，熱淚盈眶。Tip2forwritingToshow,nottotell.(王初明“寫(xiě)長(zhǎng)法”)Tip3forwriting語(yǔ)言協(xié)同：創(chuàng)造性的模仿（原文風(fēng)格）原文:·WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,

“Great.Now,writeitagain.”寫(xiě)作:·Holdingmyhands,hesaid,“Congratulations!Youareagoodwriter,sokeepwriting.”Tip3forwriting語(yǔ)言協(xié)同：創(chuàng)造性的模仿（原文風(fēng)格）原文:Isympathizedimmediately.寫(xiě)作:IwassohappytohearthenewsthatIimmediatelyshareditwithmyteacher.評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)參考小試身手請(qǐng)你將自己的習(xí)作寫(xiě)在題目的橫線(xiàn)上。Paragraph1:

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考范文Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.IwasinformedthatIwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontestandthattherewouldbeanawardpresentationintwodays.IwassohappytohearthenewsthatIimmediatelysharedit