新高考英語III卷讀后續(xù)寫經(jīng)過老師鼓勵愛上寫作課件高考英語專題復(fù)習(xí)

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——讀后續(xù)寫2023年新高考I&II卷:經(jīng)過老師鼓勵，愛上寫作1.Readthestory2.Predictthestory3.Writethestory目錄情節(jié)主題人物Brainstorming故事的三要素story（葛文山，2022）（衡很亨，2023）情節(jié)設(shè)計主題揭示續(xù)寫出“與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文”（教育部考試中心，2015）人物塑造Brainstorming讀后續(xù)寫的三大任務(wù)1Readthestory閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofailHisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(銀匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenightDidhegettiredHavedoubtsDidhewanttoquitIsympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________1.閱讀全文，確定背景(Readforsetting)time(When)place(Where)character（Who）

background(What)settingI;mysocialstudiesteacher;PaulRevere;myoldersisterinmiddleschool

（過去時）Afewweekslaterlibrary;teacher’soffice;(classroom;home)Ididnotlovewriting.Writingwassodifficultandpainfulforme.Teacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.

Isaidnowithoutthinking.2.畫故事山，構(gòu)情節(jié)線(Readforplots)risingactionfallingactionendingplotsbeginningTherecamethenewsaboutthecontest.Mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.climaxIwroteitagain,andagainandagain.

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finallyfinishedit.3.畫故事山，構(gòu)情感線(Readforemotions)risingactionfallingactionendingplotsbeginningTherecamethenewsaboutthecontest.Mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.emotionsclimaxI:changed,determinedTeacher:happyandencouragingI:refused;curiousI:encouragedI:persistentI：joyfulTeacher:congraduationIwroteitagain,andagainandagain.Andfinallyfinishedit.I:enjoyed2PredictthestoryI:changed,determinedTeacher:happyandencouragingI：joyfulTeacher:congraduation4.根據(jù)故事山，預(yù)測情節(jié)和主題(Predict

theplotsandtheme)risingactionfallingactionendingplotsbeginningTherecamethenewsaboutthecontest.Mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.emotions銜接句口訣：兩段首句定一框，二框二首正能量I:refused;curiousI:encuragedI:persistent主題句Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.Andfinallyfinishedit.I:enjoyedclimaxParagraph1:Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Paragraph2:Iwenttomyteacher’soffice

aftertheawardpresentation.口訣：兩段首句定一框，二框二首正能量銜接句1.Whatisthenews2.Duringtheawardpresentation,whatdidtheydo1.Whathappenedintheteacher’soffice2.Aftertheawardpresentation,whatwilltheydo比賽消息傳來--作者獲獎--高興--頒獎典禮感謝老師Iexpressedmythankstomyteacher.主題句頒獎后來到老師辦公室--老師告訴作者堅持寫作--作者表達(dá)了對寫作的喜愛--作者寫作取得了成功--感激老師回應(yīng)前文/點出主題1.我開始熱愛寫作。I’mcrazyaboutwritingnow.2.努力有回報--寫作獲得成功。Yourhardworkwillpayoff(--becomingawriter).3.感恩之心。Showrespectandgratidutetoteacherforguidance.4.根據(jù)故事山，預(yù)測情節(jié)和主題(Predict

theplotsandtheme)5.DraftforwritingwontheprizeteachercongratulatedattendedtheawardpresentationsharedwithteacherIthankedteacherIthankedteacherAfewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Para1銜接句onthestagebeinformedexcited,proudinvitedtothestageimmediatelypersonally一個角色的所言、所行、所感、所想會引起其他角色的一系列反應(yīng)。ActionResponse主題句teachercongratulatedteacherencouragedMysuccessIthankedIpromisedthereasonforsuccessIwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Para2goodworks--awriterowemysuccesstomyteacherholdingmyhandskeepwritingdon’tlikebeforetrymybesttowrite一個角色的所言、所行、所感、所想會引起其他角色的一系列反應(yīng)。5.DraftforwritingActionResponse3WritethestoryTip1forwriting口訣：人物時態(tài)和事件，語言特色不要變58細(xì)節(jié)添加法Tip2forwritingToshowin3aspects:①Bodylanguage②Facialexpression③Voice?Toshow,nottotell.(王初明“寫長法”)Telling:Hewasdelighted.他很高興。Showing:bodylanguage+facialexpression肢體語言+面部表情Hewassodelightedthathealmostjumpedup,withtearsfillinghiseyes.他高興得幾乎跳了起來，熱淚盈眶。Tip2forwritingToshow,nottotell.(王初明“寫長法”)Tip3forwriting語言協(xié)同：創(chuàng)造性的模仿（原文風(fēng)格）原文:·WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,

“Great.Now,writeitagain.”寫作:·Holdingmyhands,hesaid,“Congratulations!Youareagoodwriter,sokeepwriting.”Tip3forwriting語言協(xié)同：創(chuàng)造性的模仿（原文風(fēng)格）原文:Isympathizedimmediately.寫作:IwassohappytohearthenewsthatIimmediatelyshareditwithmyteacher.評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)參考小試身手請你將自己的習(xí)作寫在題目的橫線上。Paragraph1:

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考范文Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.IwasinformedthatIwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontestandthattherewouldbeanawardpresentationintwodays.IwassohappytohearthenewsthatIimmediatelysharedit