【讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)】 2021學(xué)年杭州市高二下期末質(zhì)量檢測(cè)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)解析 名師課件-許麗君、吳俊峰

2021學(xué)年杭州市高二期末教學(xué)質(zhì)量檢測(cè)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)解析高空滑索ziplining杭州二中許麗君常山一中吳俊峰一、continuation閱讀理解能力淺層的信息定位能力：深層的文本分析能力：理清故事的發(fā)展線索（readfortheclue）明確文本的主要矛盾(readfortheconflict)關(guān)注故事的語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格(readforthestyle)對(duì)語(yǔ)篇結(jié)構(gòu)的把控能力讀文體（narration）讀關(guān)鍵詞（10underlinedkeywords）讀語(yǔ)言（vivid，specific，concise）讀內(nèi)容（5W+H）二、讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)策略（Strategyofcontinuation）起始部分：情節(jié)基調(diào)核心矛盾框架完整中間部分：順延故事發(fā)展語(yǔ)言文體遣詞用句情節(jié)走向Ending：合情合理的創(chuàng)意不著痕跡情節(jié)內(nèi)容框架結(jié)構(gòu)語(yǔ)篇段落第二節(jié)：讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)（滿分25分）

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。ZippingOutofFear“Breakfasttime!”Iquicklyputonmyclothesandrusheddownthestairs.“Comeon,wedon’twanttobelate！”Mymomsaid.Thearoma（香味）ofpancakesfilledthekitchen,makingtheroomwarm.Ilookedoutofthewindow.Thesunwasout,makingawarmandbrightmorning.“Today’stheday,ziplining

（高空滑索）！”Mydadsaid,soundingveryenthusiasticearlythismorning.Todaywewouldgoziplining.Theexcitementbuiltupinsideofmeasbreakfastwenton.Afterbreakfast,wesetoutinmydad’scar.Halfwaythroughtheride,thesungrewhot,andtheleatherontheseatsburnedmylegs.Ithoughtaboutthetrip,howmyparentswentbutnotme.Itwasmyfirsttimeexperiencingsomethinglikethis.Ialsothoughtaboutmyfearofheights,onethingItriedtogetridofmultipletimes.Itgotinthewayofsomanyfunactivities,likerollercoastersatKingsIsland.Wewerebasicallytherebynow,thesunstillblazinghot.Wepulleduptobigsignwhereourinstructorwaitedforus.2021學(xué)年杭州市高二教學(xué)質(zhì)量檢測(cè)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)（高空滑索ziplining）典題例析：

“Hiy’all！”saidourinstructorcheerfully.“So,havey’alldonethisbefore?”MyparentsnoddedbutIshookmyhead.Ourinstructorwentoversafetyinstructionswhileweeachputonasafetyharness

（安全帶）.Istartedtogetnervous.Aneverendingrollercoasterofexcitementandanxiousnessbuiltinsideofme.Ilookeddownthecliff.Myheartskippedabeatwhenthewindhowled,blowingleavesandtwigsinthetrees.Mylegsstartedtoshake.注意：1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；3.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好；4.續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。Paragraph1: “Alrighty’all,timetohitthetrails!”saidtheinstructorwithtoomuchenthusiasm.Paragraph2: Myturnfinallycame.2021學(xué)年杭州市高二教學(xué)質(zhì)量檢測(cè)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)（高空滑索ziplining）典題例析：

整體閱讀，確定故事基本情節(jié)(readfortheplot)who,when,where,whathapped,howwouldthestorycontinueStep1:ReadfortheplotwhoTheauthor,MomandDad;theinstructorwhenBreakfasttime，Awarmandbrightmorning,thedayIfirstexperiencedzipliningwhereAthome,abigsignwheretheinstructorwaitedforus,theplacewherewetakezipliningwhathappenedMyparentsandIweregoingtotakeourziplinetour.MomandDadmadethezipliningexcitedlyandsuccessfully.Thiswasmyfirsttimetoexperienceziplining,IwasinanxietywhetherIcouldmakeit.Iovercamemyfearofheightsinspiredbymyparentsandinstructor.summarizethestoryItwasthefirsttimefortheauthortoexperienceziplining.Fearfulofheightsas“I”was,“I”sawwhatgoodexamplemyparentssetforme,“I”wasencouragedandinspiredbymyparents.Withthehelpofmyinstructor,Isucceededovercomingmyfearofheightsandmadeitinziplining.Step1:Readfortheplot人物性格分析(readforthecharacter)1.從人物的動(dòng)作中2.從人物的言語(yǔ)中3.從他人的評(píng)價(jià)中Step2:Readforthecharacterwhocharacter/traitsauthorshy/timid,worried,butstaycalmindifficultyMomanddadenthusiastic,inspiringtheinstructorWarm-hearted,reliableintheeyesoftheauthor,patientStep2:Readforthecharacter

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Beginning(Introduction)

Process(Developing)

Climax(conflict)

EndingListtheplotsStep3:Readfortheclues1.Onesunny,warmbrightmorningmyparentsandIgotreadyforazipliningtour.2.EagerforzipliningasIwas,myfearofheightspreventedmefrommanyfunactivities.3.Iwasnotbraveenoughtoexperienceziplining,myparentsdiditsuccessfully.4.?_________________:parents，instructor_________________:morning_________________:excitement,fear_________________:ziplining,hot,safetyharness,cliff,windcharacterstimefeelingssettingparents，instructor,morning,excitement,fear,ziplining,hot,safetyharness,cliff,wind

Step4:Readfortheinformation–Classify10keywordsintodifferentgroups.Q1:whendidtheauthorzipwithherparents?1Q2:Whowilltakepartintheziplining?2Q3:Whatdid“my”parentsask“me”todo?34Q4:Howdid“myDad”feelwhenhetoldmetozipthatday?5Q5:Howdidtheauthorfeelwhenaskedtozipinthebeginning?6Q6:Whydidn’tIgetinvolvedintheziplining?7Q7:Whatprevented“me”takingpartinthefunactivities?Step4:Readfortheinformation–trytoanswerthefollowingquestions…BeginningEndingexcitedanxiousuneasyupsetnervousfearfulfrightenedfrustratedInspired,encouragedGlad/satisfied?delighted?Whentheauthorwasencouragedbyparentsandtheinstructorfeelings?Climaxalive/refreshed/overwhelmed?When

theauthorfirstexperiencedzip-liningStep5：Readfortheemotionofmaincharacter(讀主人公的情感)author'sfeelingsMy

fear

of

heightsStartedtoshakeWarmandbrightsun,thesunblazinghotSkippedabeatExcitementbuiltup,triedtogetridoffearofheights,getnervousactionslegssurroundingsthoughtsHeartStep5：Readfortheemotion情感表達(dá)的多樣性-表達(dá)的方式和途徑Who(character)Where

(place)When(time)What(event)Why(reason)How(solution)I;Mom;Dad;ourinstructorAthome,abigsignwheretheinstructorwaitedforus,theplacewherewetakezipliningBreakfasttime，Awarmandbrightmorning,thedayIfirstexperiencedzipliningMomandDadencouragedme,theinstructorinspiredandhelpedme.Myfirsttimeexperiencingziplining,andmyfearofheights.Mainidea:thefirsttimefortheauthortoexperienceziplining.Fearfulofheightsas“I”was,“I”sawgoodexamplemyparentssetforme,“I”wasinspiredbymyparents.Withthehelpofmyinstructor,Isucceededovercomingmyfearofheightsandmadeitinziplining.MyparentsandIweregoingtotakeourziplinetour.MomandDadmadethezipliningexcitedlyandsuccessfully.Thiswasmyfirsttimetoexperienceziplining,IwasinanxietywhetherIcouldmakeit.Iovercamemyfearofheightsinspiredbymyparentsandinstructor.Step6：Readforthetheme(讀主旨大意)三條線時(shí)空線（明線）Time&Place(setting)情節(jié)線(Plot明線)情感線(Mood暗線)Momanddad情感線(Mood暗線)(theauthor)Breakfasttime,A

warm

and

bright

morningTheday“I”firstexperiencedzipliningOpening(起）incitingincident(引發(fā)事件）enthusiasticexcitedAnxious/uneasy/upsetnervousAthome,abigsignwheretheinstructorwaitedforus,theplacewherewetakezipliningForeshadowing(伏筆）excitedfearful/frightened/frustratedZiplining,hot,safetyharness,cliff,windDeveloping(承）Upinspiring/encouraginginspired/encouragedChanging（轉(zhuǎn)）cheerfulalive/refreshedConcluding（合）delighted/satisfiedSatisfied/delighted/overwhelmed/MakepredictionswiththehelpofgivendetailedinformationStep7：Predictingtheending(預(yù)測(cè)故事結(jié)尾）二、由讀到寫(xiě)的思維能力細(xì)讀兩段續(xù)寫(xiě)的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)，理順續(xù)寫(xiě)段落的邏輯關(guān)系；圍繞劃定的10個(gè)關(guān)鍵詞，合理創(chuàng)新故事情節(jié)。Para.1:“Alrighty’all,timetohitthetrails”.Saidtheinstructorwithtoomuchenthusiasm.Para.2:

Myturnfinallycame.Para.1:

“Alrighty’all,timetohitthetrails”.Saidtheinstructorwithtoomuchenthusiasm.Para.2:

Myturnfinallycame.Event:MomandDad

did

theirzipliningsuccessfullyParents’Feelings:enthusiasticexciteddelightedEvent:“I”overcamemyfearofheightsandsucceededinziplining.Author’sFeeling:nervous/upsetfearfulencouragedstillnervousbraveenoughrefreshedoverwhelmedStep8：ReadforwritingPara.1:“Alrighty’all,timetohitthetrails”.Saidtheinstructorwithtoomuchenthusiasm.Q1:

Willtheauthorzipacrosstheline?Q2:

Willtheauthorbeencouragedbyfather,motherortheinstructor?Q3:Howdidtheauthorfeelafterseeingparentssucceededziplining?Para.2:

Myturnfinallycame.Q1：Willtheauthorsucceedinziplining?Q2:Howdidtheauthorovercomeherfearofheights,byherselforwiththehelpoffamily?Q3:Howdid“father”encourage“me”tozip?Q4:Whataboutfamilies’reactionafter“I”succeededinziplining?Step9：Draftacontinuation(起草續(xù)篇)Questionstogenerateideas:Para.1:

“Alrighty’all,timetohitthetrails”.Saidtheinstructorwithtoomuchenthusiasm.Mom首當(dāng)其沖Mum把自己掛在金屬線上

爸爸緊隨其后Dad滑索前鼓勵(lì)了我一番

DadandMum都滑索成功接著該輪到我了Step9：Draftacontinuation(起草續(xù)篇)我手心直冒汗我開(kāi)始跳躍我閉上眼睛我很緊張我往我身下看我聽(tīng)到了家人的歡呼我感到精神倍增，神清氣爽我克服了恐高

Para.2:

Myturnfinallycame.Step9：Draftacontinuation(起草續(xù)篇)Paragraph1:

“Alrighty’all,timetohitthetrails.Saidtheinstructorwithtoomuchenthusiasm.

Paragraph2:

Myturnfinallycame.author’sreflection:Stillnervousparents’reflectionCheeredmeupproblemfurtherproblemTracethehiddencluesinthegivensentencesinspiredAppreciative/delightedPredicttheplot-1Paragraph2:

Myturnfinallycame.Myparentsandinstructorencouragedmetoovercomemyfearofheights.Ireceivedlotsofencouragement.Myfirstziplininggainedgreatsuccess.Resolutionresult?Ilearnedhowtozipline,andexperiencedthefirstzip-liningsuccessfully.TracethehiddencluesinthegivensentencesPredicttheplot-2

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“Alrighty’all,timetohitthetrails.Saidtheinstructorwithtoomuchenthusiasm.Mymomsteppedupfirst,shegothookeduptothemetalwire,readytogetpushedoffthecliff.Shejumpedoffthestoolandzippedacrossthemetalline,thewindblowingonherface.Mydadgavemeanencouragingsmilebeforehefollowedsuit.Igotwoozy.Whatifthezipfailedme?ThesunkeptbeatingdownonmeandIhadtobracemyselfup.Sincemyparentshadmadeit,whycouldn’tI?

Writingsample-1…Paragraph2:

Myturnfinallycame.Myhandsgrewclammy,andIstartedtosweat.Thesmellofmetalcameuponmyhandsfromholdingmyharness.Ijumpedandclosedmyeyes,mylegsfoldingupinunison.AllthenervousnesswentawayassoonasIjumped.Iflewacrossthatwire.Ilookeddowntoseetheriverbelowmyfeetwhilestillhearingmyfamily’sfaintcheers.ThewindblewagainstmyfaceandIfeltaliveandrefreshedfromit.WhenIreachedtheend,myfamilygreetedmewithahugeembrace.IrealizedhowfarIhadcome,conquringmyfearofheights.Writingsample-1

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“Alrighty’all,timetohitthetrails.Saidtheinstructorwithtoomuchenthusiasm.Everyonelinedupwithexcitementinfrontofthecliff.Theywerechatteringbriskly(happily)andeveryoneexceptme,seemedtowearaconfidentlookontheirfaces.Thehotsunwasbakingtheground,sweatstreameddownmyburningface,fearandunwillingnessfilledeveryinchofmyheart.Iwasonthepointtoescape,whenacutepetlaidonmyshoulders.Itwastheinstructor,“Hi,littlegirl!Don’tbeafraid,thisisaveryfungame,ofcourse,it’sverysafe.Bebraveandenjoyit!”Heruffledmyhair

andencouragedme.Isqueezedaflickerofsmile

andsaid“thankyou”tohiminadeepvoice.Still,I’mafraidbutreadytogiveatry.Writingsample-2

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Myturnfinallycame.I

firmedmylipintoaline

andpacedslowlytothecliff.Myparentswerebehindme.“Youcandoit!”theysaidinadeterminedvoice.Gatheringupallmycourage,Ibouncedoffthecliff

anddivedintothesky.Windranthroughmybody,IfeltlikeIwasabird.Thefeelingofthezipliningwassoamazing,fearandnervousnessvanished,myheartwasfilledwithjoyandgratitude.Thankstoallthosepeoplewhoencouragemetochallengethedifficulties,andalwaysbebravetotrynewthings.Therefore,rollercoaster,I’mcoming!Writingsample-2

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“Alrighty’all,timetohitthetrails.Saidtheinstructorwithtoomuchenthusiasm.“I’llbethefirst.”Dadcockedhishead,tookadeepbreath,anddirectlysprangofftheedge.Likeaswoopinghawk（像一只猛撲的鷹）,hestretchedhisarmsandswooshed（嗖嗖地迅速移動(dòng)）alongthetrailtowardtheotherside.Theexhilarated(愉快的，振奮的)

yellingechoed

inthevalley,andthenextmomentIglancedbeyondthecliff.Dadhadalreadyreachedtheend,wavingatus.Fullofexcitementasitseemed,Icouldn’thelpwriggling（扭動(dòng)）mytoes

nervously.WhenMomgesturedtotheinstructortolethergonext.Beforejumping,shecastmeanencouraginggrin

（咧嘴笑，露齒笑）andcomforted,“JustdoasIdo.”Thenshegripped/graspedthebeltandstampedtheground.LikeDad,sherapidlybecameasmalldotandhittheterminal-another

cliffthatwasnearlyahundredmetersacrossfromme.Writingsample-3

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Myturnfinallycame.Myeyeswerefixedonthesafetyharness.“Isthistrulyfirmenough?”O(jiān)ntheothersideweremyparentswavingatme,anddownthecliffwasendlessdarkness.Justwhenmystomachbegantochurn（攪動(dòng)）,Mom’swordsflashedacrossmymind,“DoasIdo.”Igrittedmyteeth,clenchedmyfist,andleaptout（跳躍）.NosoonerhadIsqueezedmyeyesshut,agustofwind

lashedatmyface.Myfeetweredangling（懸掛，搖擺）casuallyintheair,asifsteppingoninvisiblestairs.Eventually,Ipluckedupmycouragetoopenmyeyesabit,andaviewof

breathtakingscenery

instantly

leaptintomysight.“Wow—”HardlycouldIresistthedesiretoyellatthetopofmyvoice.Severalsecondslater,Iwasagainontheground.Butunlikeafewmomentsago,Iwas

beaming

（喜氣洋洋）wholeheartedlythistime.Writingsample-3

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“Alrighty’all,timetohitthetrails.Saidtheinstructorwithtoomuchenthusiasm.Istoodrootedtothespot,motionlessly,withmyhandstremblingviolently.Afloodoffear

creptinmymind,Icouldn’tevenutterawordormakeamovement.“Oh,mypoorboy.”Theinstructorpattedme

smoothly

ontheshoulder.“Thenyourparentsgofirst,andthey’llwaitforyouatthedestination.”Inodded,pacedback

andhidmyselfbehindtheinstructor.Mymomanddadwavedatmeandsoonsetoffwithoutasecondthought.Icaughtmysafetyharnesstightly,hopingthemomentwouldnevercome.Ifeltthelineabovemewasshaking,andIclosedmyeyes,waitingforthetime.Writingsample-4…Paragraph2:

Myturnfinallycame.Breathingasighofrelief,Iseizedthesafetyharnessandfeltmyheartbeatingviolently.Iscreamedandexclaimed.ButIdidn’tregret.It’sfantastic.Therayofsunlightdarted（投射）towardsme,asifsaying“Youareabraveboy.”Ultimately,catchingsightofmyparents’faintsmilecrackingonthem

tightly.Adustofbreeze,coolandsoft,crafted（吹拂）ourface

withasenseoffulfillmentwellingupfromthebottom

ofmyheart.IrealizedInotonlysucceededinziplining,butalsocuredmyfearofheights.

Writingsample-4

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“Alrighty’all,timetohitthetrails.Saidtheinstructorwithtoomuchenthusiasm.Myfathervolunteeredtobethefirst.Withascreamofexcitement,hewentoff.Sofastwashethathealmostimmediatelyturnedintoablackspot,thescreamechoing

inthecliff.Lookingatthelandundermyfeetandglancingatthebottomofthecliff,fear

overwhelmedmymindandIwasnearlyunabletomove.“Don’tbesoafraid,”Mompattedmeontheshoulder,“Justenjoythefeastofthescenery!”Thenshesetoff.“Ihadtomusterup/gathermycourage,”Ithought,“Justenjoythischanceofflying.”Writingsample-5

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Myturnfinallycame.“Relax,relax.”Theinstructorsaidwhenattaching

mysafetyharnesstotherope,“Youaregoingtoloveit!”

Sweatdrownedmyface,andIhadnoideawhetheritwasbecauseofthehotweatherormyfear.Myparentswerecheeringup

inexcitement.Itookadeepbreathandthenwentintotheair.Windhowledbymyears.Imanagedtoopenmyeyes.Lookingatthebluesky,softcloudandgreenmountains，Ifeltlikeabird!Surprisetooktheplaceoffear.“Woo-hoo!”Icheeredwhenlandingonthegroundsafely.

Whatanamazingexperience!”Writingsample-5

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“Alrighty’all,timetohitthetrails.Saidtheinstructorwithtoomuchenthusiasm.Myfatherpattedmeontheshoulderandwhisperedtheinspiringwords

tome,“Youcandoit,Iwillbethefirst,justfollowme.”Thenhewasreadytostartziplining.Exactlyatthatmoment,hebegantozip.Shortlyafterwards,hewasstandingontheothersideofthecliff,

wavingtoushappily.MyfatherlookedsorelaxedbutIwasstillfrightened,withmypalmssweatingandmylegsshivering.Mymomstrokedmyhead

andsaid,“Don’tbescared.I’llwaitforyouontheotherside.”Thenshealsostartedherziplining.Ontheotherside,myparentsyelledatme.“Comeon!”Writingsample-6

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Myturnfinallycame.Stillhesitant,Istoodfarawayfromthecliff.Theinstructorwalkedtowardsme,thengavemeapatontheshoulder,saying,“Justkeepyourheadup,andyouwon’tbeafraid.”Itookadeepbreath

andsteppedforward.Withapushonmyback,Isetout,

keepingmyheadup.Icouldfeelthewindhowlingbesideme,blowingawayallmyfear.WhenIreachedtheotherside,IknewInotonlycompletedonezipliningride,butalso

ridmyselfoffearofheight.Writingsample-6

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“Alrighty’all,timetohitthetrails.Saidtheinstructorwithtoomuchenthusiasm.Beforemyparents’turn,theyencouragedme,pattingmeontheshoulder.“Comeon!Don’tbeafraid.”Fathersaidwithexcitement.Havingtightenedthesafetyharnessagain,myparentswerereadytogo.Rightatthatmoment,Iheardmyheartbeatingheavily

andthesunhovering（盤(pán)旋）myheadnearlyswallowedme.Fulloffear,Iwasquivering（顫抖）fromheadtotoe,withmypalmssweating.Writingsample-7

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Myturnfinallycame.Icheckedmysafetyharnessoverandoveragain.ThenIwasready.Clenching/Holdingthestringtightly,Ijumped.Thewinddashedontomyface.Withthesunblazing,Iattemptedtoopenmyeyes.Justgreenallaround,IfeltlikeIwasjustabirdkissingthesky.Thehotnesswasgonewiththefear.Suddenly,thedestinationcameintomysight.Lookingbackatthezipliningleftbehindandthegreenwavesbelow,Ibeamed/smiledattheterrifyingcliff.Don’tgiveintothefear.Thefantasticworldiswaitingforustotry.Writingsample-7

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“Alrighty’all,timetohitthetrails.Saidtheinstructorwithtoomuchenthusiasm.MomwasthefirstandIwouldfollowheraftershefinished.“Readytogo!”sheyelledto

theinstructorgladly.Afteraquickwavingback,shetookoff.

Screamingwithexcitement,shequicklydisappearedinthemorningsunlightandsoonbecameablackdotfarawaylikeabirdflyingthroughthevalley.Seeingthis,Icoveredmymouthwithahandtoconcealmypanicandcouldn’tfeelexcitedatall.HowcouldIdothat?Writingsample-8

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Myturnfinallycame.Thewindandthesceneryquicklypassedme.Ipluckedupmycouragetoopenmyeyesandlookeddown,I

couldn’thelplettingoutacry,startled(surprised).Butgradually,afteryellingconstantly,Ibegantoenjoytheziplining.Seeingthe

breathtakingview,asurgeofcurrentofjoywelledupinsideme.Afterlandingontheground,myparentswrappedmeintotheirarmsandwewereexultant（狂喜的，歡躍的）,withsmilesspreadingonourfaces.WhenIwasbathedinthesunshine,itfeltliketheamber-likesunshinewaskissingeveryinchofskins.Iteventually

dawnedonme

thatwhattrulyfrightensmeisthefearitself.Writingsample-8

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“Alrighty’all,timetohitthetrails.Saidtheinstructorwithtoomuchenthusiasm.Myparentshitthetrailswithfullofconfidence,butmypalmwassweatingandIcouldn’tdothat.“Don’tworry,boy,justlookathowyourDaddo!”Dad