高考英語讀后續(xù)寫練習寫作訓練：個人成長類之即將退休教師音樂會對教學和學生的新認知自我療愈（含解析）

讀后續(xù)寫練習寫作訓練：個人成長類之即將退休教師音樂會對教學和

學生的新認知自我療愈（含解析）

讀后續(xù)寫（溫州市2025屆高三第一次適應性考試）

閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。

Thestagelightsinthemusichalldarkened,asthenextschooFsconcertbandsettledonstage.

TheFirstChair,ayoungviolinist,calleduponeachsectiontoplay,tuningthemwithprecision

andgrace.Themomentthemusicaldirectorappeared,awaveofapplausefilledtheair.

TheannualHighSchoolMusicFestivalwasthehighlightofmyyear.Asamusicteacher,I

nevermissedasession,alwaysamazedbytheextraordinarytalentsthemusicaldirectorsinspired

intheirstudents.Butthisyearmightbemylastvisit.Withagecatchingup,mydesirefor

retirementwasgrowingstronger.

Honestly,therewasalwaysatouchofdissatisfactionandenvyinmyheartasIwatched

theseschoolbands,becauseIhadneverbeenabletodevelopabandtothislevel.Itaughtina

smallprimaryschool.Mystudentsplayedbeginnermusic,andtheywerehappywhenwe

managedtoplayfromthestartallthewaytotheendofapiece,withalltheinstrumentsfinishing

together.Thecomplexitiesoffulltone,dynamiccontrol,andbalancewerebeyondtheirabilities.

Asthebandopenedwiththeirfirstpiece,thestrikingsoundofviolins,accompaniedbythe

livelynotesofpianos,setmyheartpounding.Wouldn'titbegreattobethemusicaldirectorfor

oneofthesemassivehighschoolbands?Ithoughtasthemusictransportedme.Whenthelast

notesrangout,therewasabriefsilencebeforethunderousapplauseerupted.Myagingeyes

scanned（察看）thestage,seekingfamiliarfacesamongtheperformers.Butmyvisionwasno

longersharpenoughtorecognizeanyone.

Duringtheteabreak,Iheadedtowardtheentrancehall."MissJones!^^ayoungman'svoice

cutthroughthecrowd.Irecognizedtheconcertuniformhewaswearing.Itwastheveryviolinist

Ihadbeenadmiring.Puzzled,!searchedhisfaceforfamiliarfeatures.ItturnedouttobeBradley,

aformerstudentofminewhowasdifficulttoforget.Schoolworkhadbeenhardforhim,andhe

hadstruggledthroughallhissubjects.Itwasapleasantsurprisetomeethimhere.Wesatdown

andhadachat.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數應為150左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

Irememberedthedaywhenheaskedtojointheschoolband.

IwasstillsmilingasImademywaybacktothemusichall.

積累原文素材，認真審讀原文

原文分析：thekighli/htof（積累）

Thestagelightsinthemusichalldarkened,asthenextschoolfsconcertband

settledonstage（狀從）.TheFirstChair,ayoungviolinist,calleduponeachsectiontoplay,tuning

themwithprecisionandgrace（非謂語動詞做伴隨動作）.Themomentthemusicaldirector

appeared（狀從復合連詞）,awareofaDDlausefittedtheair（積累）.

TheannualHighSchoolMusicFestivalwasthehi史hli史htofmyyear.Asamusicteacher,I

nevermissedasession,alwaysamazedbytheextraordinarytalents（非謂語動詞做主語的未卜語）

themusicaldirectorsinspiredintheirstudents（定從）.Butthisyearmightbemylastvisit.With

agecatchingup（非謂語動詞做后置定語）,nzydesireforretirementwasgrow加殳stron史er.

Honestly、therewasalwaysatouchofdissatisfactionandinmyheartasIwatched

theseschoolbands（狀從）,becauseIhadneverbeenabletodevelopabandtothislevel.Itaught

inasmallprimaryschool.Mystudentsplayedbeginnermusic,andtheywerehappyw/ze王we

managedtoplayfromthestartallthewaytotheendofapiece,withalltheinstrumentsfinishing

together（非謂語動詞做后置定語）.Thecomplexitiesoffulltone,dynamiccontrol,andbalance

werebeyondtheirabilities.

Asthebandopenedwiththeirfirstpiece,thestrikingsoundofviolins,accompaniedbythe

livelynotesofpianos（非謂語動詞做后置定語）,setmyheartDoundin史.Wouldn'titbegreatto

bethemusicaldirectorforoneofthesemassivehighschoolbands?Ithoughtasthemusic

transportedme（狀從）.Whenthelastnotesransout,therewasabriefsilence

beforethunderousaDDlauseerupted.Myagingeyesscanned（察看）thestage,seekingfamiliar

facesamongtheperformers（非謂語動詞做伴隨動作）.Butmavisionwasnolongersharu

enoughtorecognizeanyone.

Duringtheteabreak,Iheadedlowwdtheentrancehall."MissJones!"aman'svoice

cutthroughthecrowd.Irecognizedtheconcertuniformhewaswearing（定從）.Itwasthevery

violinistIhadbeenadmiring（定從）.Puzzled（非謂語動詞做adj主語補語）Jsearchedhis

faceforfamiliarfeatures.ItturnedouttobeBradley,aformerstudentofminewhowasdifficult

toforget（定從）.Schoolworkhadbeenhardforhim,andhehadstruggledthroughallhis

subjects.Itwasapleasantsurprisetomeethimhere.Wesatdownandhadachat.

原文語法、重點詞匯短語和續(xù)寫思路

重點詞匯短語

語法現(xiàn)象分析

1.并列句與復合句

-例如:“Thestagelightsinthemusichalldarkened,asthenextschool'sconcertband

settledonstage.^^

-分析：此句是并列復合句，由并列連詞“as”連接兩個分句。前者陳述舞臺燈光暗下來，

后者描述樂隊上場，兩者表明時間上的相繼關系。

2.定語從句

-例如："Irecognizedtheconcertuniformhewaswearing.^^

-分析：這里"hewaswearing”是定語從句，修飾“concertunifdnrT,解釋了"unifdrm"的

細節(jié)信息。此結構增強了句子的描述性。

3.分詞結構

-例如："Puzzled,Isearchedhisfaceforfamiliarfeatures.

-分析：句中“Puzzled”為分詞做狀語，表明說話人“疑惑”的狀態(tài)，使句子更加簡潔、

流暢，表現(xiàn)人物情感。

4.省略現(xiàn)象

-例如:"Wouldn'titbegreattobethemusicaldirectorforoneofthesemassivehighschool

bands?”

-分析：該句省略了部分主句結構，但完整意思為"Wouldn'titbegreatifIcouldbethe

musicaldirector...這種結構在英語口語及書面表達中常用。

常見搭配與語料積累

1.Settleonstage-登臺

-定義：登上舞臺，為演出準備就緒。

-近義詞：takethestage,getonstage

-例句：Thedancerssettledonstageastheaudiencequieteddown.

2.Waveofapplause-一陣掌聲

-定義：觀眾給予的熱烈掌聲。

-近義詞：roundofapplause

-例句：Awaveofapplausebrokeoutastheleadsingertookabow.

3.Catchupwith-追趕上；(在此處)指"年老體衰”

-定義：用于形容歲月的積累或某種狀態(tài)的顯現(xiàn)。

-近義詞：getold,age

-例句：Theyearsfinallycaughtupwithhim,makinghimconsiderretirement.

4.Dynamiccontrol-動態(tài)控制

-定義：在音樂中掌控音量的變化。

-例句：Theorchestraldynamiccontrolwasimpressive,shiftingsmoothlybetweensoft

andloud.

5.Cutthroughthecrowd-穿過人群

-定義：從擁擠的人群中穿過或喊出。

-近義詞：makeone'swaythrough

-例句：Thesecurityguardscutthroughthecrowdtoreachthefrontofthestage.

生詞短語及解析

1.Precision(n.)-精確

-詞性：名詞

-近義詞：accuracy

-反義詞：inaccuracy

-例句：Theexperimentrequireshighprecisiontogetaccurateresults.

2.Highlight(n.)-最精彩部分

-詞性：名詞

-近義詞：mainevent

-反義詞：lowpoint

-例句：Thehighlightoftheeveningwasthegrandfireworksdisplay.

3.Envy(n.)-嫉妒

-詞性：名詞

-近義詞：jealousy

-反義詞：admiration

-例句：Shelookedatherfriend'ssuccesswithenvy.

4.Thunderous(adj.)-雷鳴般的

-詞性：形容詞

-近義詞：deafening,roaring

-反義詞：quiet,silent

-例句：Thethunderousapplauselastedseveralminutesaftertheperformance.

5.Striking(adj.)-引人注目的

-詞性：形容詞

-近義詞：noticeable,remarkable

-反義詞：unremarkable

-例句：Herstrikingappearancemadeherstandoutinthecrowd.

續(xù)寫思路與框架

1.提取情節(jié)：本段故事的情節(jié)圍繞一位年邁的音樂教師與曾經的學生重逢的情感。關

鍵情節(jié)包括回憶學生加入樂隊的情景及對學生成長的欣慰。

2.確定情感基調：續(xù)寫要維持溫馨、感動的情感基調，表達老師對學生成長的欣慰與

對自己音樂教育事業(yè)的反思。

3.框架構思：

-第一段：回憶Bradley加入樂隊的情景，可以寫老師對他初次加入時的鼓勵，或教

學中的點滴回憶。使用細節(jié)增強情感，例如學生的努力、老師的指導。

-第二段：老師從回憶中回到現(xiàn)實，帶著微笑回到音樂廳，可能對自己曾付出的努力

感到欣慰，也帶著繼續(xù)支持學生們的決心。

4.實施策略：

-情感對比：在回憶和現(xiàn)實中體現(xiàn)出教師從略帶遺憾到滿足的心理變化。

-使用細節(jié)：通過對學生表現(xiàn)、樂曲演奏的細致描寫豐富故事。

-合理銜接：續(xù)寫應與原文情節(jié)無縫銜接，尤其注意人物情感的延續(xù)性。

注意事項

-人物一致性：確保人物的行為、語言與之前的描述一致。

-情節(jié)自然流暢：避免情節(jié)跳躍和生硬的情感轉變。

-語言風格：保持原文的書面表達風格，適當使用復雜句型和生動的詞匯，使得續(xù)寫

更加真實生動。

重點單詞分析

范文中的重點詞匯

重點生詞短語和常見搭配

1.Clutch-n

-詞性：動詞

-近義詞：grip,holdtightly

-反義詞：release,letgo

-例句：Thechildclutchedhismother'shand,refusingtoletgo./Sheclutchedherbag

tightlyasshewalkedthroughthecrowdedstreet.

2.Legacy-遺產，成就

-詞性：名詞

-近義詞：heritage,inheritance

-反義詞：none（遺產無反義詞）

-例句：Sheleftbehindalegacyofkindnessandgenerosity./Histeachingsbecamealegacy

forfuturegenerations.

3.Encourage-鼓勵

-詞性：動詞

-近義詞：inspire,motivate

-反義詞：discourage

-例句：Myteacherencouragedmetopursuemydreams./Thewarmapplauseencouraged

theperformertocontinue.

4.Dedication-奉獻

-詞性：名詞

-近義詞：commitment,devotion

-反義詞：apathy,indifference

-伊J句：Hisdedicationtohisworkwasadmiredbyall./Thevolunteers9dedicationmade

theeventagreatsuccess.

5.Perseverance-堅持不懈

-詞性：名詞

-近義詞：persistence,determination

-反義詞：givingup,surrender

-例句：Herperseveranceinthefaceofchallengeswasinspiring./Perseveranceoftenleads

tosuccess.

以下是根據歐路詞典整理的詞匯表，包括詞性、詞義、近義詞、聯(lián)想詞和例句：

1.darken

-詞性：動詞

-詞義：變暗，使變黑

-近義詞：dim,obscure

-聯(lián)想詞：lighten,brighten

-例句：Asthecloudsgathered,theskybegantodarken./Thestagelightsdarkened,

creatingadramaticeffect.

2.settle

-詞性：動詞

-詞義：安頓，解決，定居

-近義詞：resolve,establish

-聯(lián)想詞：relax,inhabit

-伊］句：Theydecidedtosettleinthesmalltown./Theconcertbandsettledonstage,readyto

perform.

3.pound

-詞性：動詞

-詞義：重擊，心臟跳動

-近義詞：beat,hammer

-聯(lián)想詞：strike,thump

-例句：Herheartbegantopoundwithexcitement./Hepoundedonthedoor,demandingto

beletin.

4.note

-詞性：名詞/動詞

-詞義：音符，注意到

-近義詞：observe,remark

-聯(lián)想詞：tone,record

-例句：Shetooknoteofthekeypointsduringthelecture./Thefirstnoteofthesongwas

perfectlyonpitch.

5.prestigious

-詞性：形容詞

-詞義：有聲望的，著名的

-近義詞：famous,reputable

-聯(lián)想詞：renowned,distinguished

-例句：Hegraduatedfromaprestigiousuniversity./Theawardisgivenbyaprestigious

organization.

6.rhythm

-詞性：名詞

-詞義：節(jié)奏，韻律

-近義詞：beat,cadence

-聯(lián)想詞：tempo,flow

-例句：Therhythmofthemusicmadeeveryonewanttodance./Shehasagreatsenseof

rhythmwhenplayingthedrums.

7.clutch

-詞性：動詞

-詞義：緊握，抓住

-近義詞：grip,holdtightly

-聯(lián)想詞：grasp,seize

-例句：Sheclutchedherbagtightlyasshewalkedthroughthecrowdedstreet./Thechild

clutchedhismother'shand,refusingtoletgo.

8.audible

-詞性：形容詞

-詞義：聽得見的

-近義詞：perceptible,clear

-聯(lián)想詞：distinct,loud

-例句：Hervoicewasbarelyaudibleoverthenoise./Thedistantthunderwasjustaudible.

9.unwavering

-詞性：形容詞

-詞義：堅定不移的，不動搖的

-近義詞：steady,resolute

-聯(lián)想詞：firm,determined

-例句：Hehasanunwaveringcommitmenttohisgoals./Herfaithinhimwasunwavering.

10.nurture

-詞性：動詞

-詞義：培養(yǎng)，滋養(yǎng)

-近義詞：foster,cultivate

-聯(lián)想詞：support,encourage

-例句：Parentsneedtonurturetheirchildren'stalents./Shenurturedherdreamof

becomingawriter.

11.skeptical

-詞性：形容詞

-詞義：懷疑的

-近義詞：doubtful,suspicious

-聯(lián)想詞：cynical,questioning

-伊J句：Shewasskepticalabouttheplan'ssuccess./Manypeopleareskepticalofnew

technology.

12.obstacle

-詞性：名詞

-詞義：障礙，阻礙

-近義詞：barrier,hurdle

-聯(lián)想詞：difficulty,hindrance

-例句：Thebiggestobstacletosuccessisoftenfearoffailure./Theyfacedmanyobstacles

duringtheirjourney.

13.diligently

-詞性：副詞

-詞義：勤勉地，用心地

-近義詞：carefully,conscientiously

-聯(lián)想詞：earnestly,persistently

-例句：Sheworkeddiligentlyonherproject./Hestudieddiligentlyforhisexams.

14.persistence

-詞性：名詞

-詞義：堅持不懈

-近義詞：perseverance,tenacity

-聯(lián)想詞：determination,resolve

-例句：Herpersistencehelpedherovercometheobstacles./Persistenceisthekeyto

achievingone'sgoals.

15.timid

-詞性：形容詞

-詞義：膽怯的，害羞的

-近義詞：shy,fearful

-聯(lián)想詞：nervous,apprehensive

-例句：Hewastootimidtospeakupinclass./Thelittlegirlgaveatimidsmile.

16.bedestinedto

-詞性：詞組

-詞義：注定要

-近義詞：bemeantto,befatedto

-聯(lián)想詞：inevitably,surely

-例句：Shewasdestinedtobecomeagreatmusician./Theyseemeddestinedtomeet.

17.dim

-詞性：形容詞/動詞

-詞義：昏暗的，使變暗

-近義詞：dark,faint

-聯(lián)想詞：dull,obscure

-例句：Thelightintheroomwasverydim./Hisvisiondimmedashegrewolder.

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learningdisabilityandconstantstru般les,stoodinfrontofmewithashysmile.Iwasskeptical,

unsureifhewouldkeepupwitheventhebasics（條件狀從）.However,hewasdeterminedand

enthusiastic、qualitiesthatwererareamongmystudents（足收）.Hestartedcomingtoevery

practice,tryingtofollowalongeven（非謂語動詞做伴隨動作）whenhewasstruggling（狀從）.

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