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JayceCrowderbegannoticingwhenhewasinkindergartenthathelookeddifferentfromhis

classmates.Theyhadtwohands.Hehadone."Itstartedwhenoneboyteasedsayshis

mother,CortneyLewis.Jayce'sbubblyenthusiasmsouredtosunenness（活潑的熱情變成了悶

悶不樂）.He'dreturntotheirDesMoines,Iowahomewithquestions:WhyamIdifferent?Why

me?Why?”HeactuallytoldushewasmadatGodformakinghimthatway,“hismother

says."Thatwasahugedaggertotheheart."（像一把匕首刺痛我的心）Lewisadmitsshedidn't

knowwhattodoatthatpoint.HowcouldsheprovideanswerstoherSOL'Squestionswhenshe

hadneverfoundthoseanswersherself?Afewweekslater,Lewiscamehomefromherjobasan

orthodonticassistantandturnedontheTVtoanewsstoryaboutasix-foot-threeeighthgrader

fromWashington,Iowa.TrashaunWillis,then14,hadbecomeanInternetsensationafterposting

videosofhisslamdunks,and,likeJayce,hewasmissingmostofhisleftarm.LewiscalledJayce

in.Hewasriveted（被吸引）,watchingdunkaftermonstrousdunk.（他全神貫注地看著一

個又一個可怕的扣籃。）Atthetime,itseemedthatwatchingTrashaunwouldsimplybean

inspiringmomentforJayce-he'dseeathrivingrolemodelwithaseeminglysimilar

similardefect.Andhaditstayedjustthat,Lewiswouldhavebeenhappy.Butlittledidsheknow

thatafamilyfriendhadalreadyreachedouttotheDesMoinesRegister,askingthenewspaperto

helpsetupameetingwithTrashauntobuildJayce'sconfidence.

【段首句】

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TheboysmetatWashingtonMiddleSchoolonaSaturdayafternoona

coupleofmonthslater.

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Sincethatmeeting,Lewishasseenapronounced/noticeabledifferencein

herson.

語篇分析

故事梗概

這篇文章講述了Jayce,一個因天生缺失左臂而感到自卑的男孩，在遇到同樣身有殘

疾但充滿自信的籃球少年Trashaun后，受其鼓勵和指導，不僅學會了接納自己，還逐漸找

回了自信。這是一則關于自我接納、努力和榜樣力量的成長故事。

人物分析

JayceCrowder

主人公，一個因天生缺失左臂而感到困惑和低落的男孩。經(jīng)歷了從自我懷疑到被鼓勵和找

到榜樣的轉變。

CortneyLewis

Jayce的母親，深切關心兒子的情感與成長，但面對兒子的問題感到無助，后來通過行動

幫助兒子找到解決方法。

TrashaunWillis

Jayce的榜樣，一個因天生殘疾仍能取得卓越成就的籃球少年，激勵了Jayce接受自己并

重拾自信。

情節(jié)分析

?Jayce在幼兒園意識到自己和他人的不同，并因此感到沮喪與憤怒。

?母親無意中看到關于Trashaun的新聞，并讓Jayce看了相關視頻，點燃了Jayce的興趣和

希望。

?一位家庭朋友促成了Jayce與Trashaun的會面，幫助Jayce建立了自信。

情緒發(fā)展

前期：Jayce感到失落、憤怒、不安，母親同樣感到無助。

中期：母親試圖為Jayce找到一個榜樣，情緒逐漸轉為希望。

后期：Jayce通過榜樣的激勵變得積極樂觀，情緒達到了愉悅與滿足的高潮。

主題分析

?接受自我：通過榜樣的影響，學會欣賞和接受自己的獨特之處。

?鼓勵與支持：他人的關愛和榜樣的力量可以幫助我們戰(zhàn)勝內(nèi)心的掙扎。

?克服自卑：無論先天條件如何，每個人都可以通過努力超越自我。

續(xù)寫方向

1.第一段描寫meeting的情節(jié)

描述在此次會面的情景，包括人物的情緒動作表情等，其次是Trashaun如何幫助

Jayce找到whyamIdifferent的答案，也正好呼應前文母親的疑問HOWcouldsheprovide

answerstoherson，squestionswhenshehadneverfoundthoseanswersherself;以

及Tashaun如何鼓勵Jayce直面殘疾，克服自卑，收獲自信。

2.詳細描述這次meeting帶來的影響

Jayce產(chǎn)生了什么樣的變化，可以是情緒上的，與媽媽相處上的，對自己先天缺陷認知上

的，受到Trashaun影響收獲的興趣愛好，面對同學的嘲笑等等。最后可以回扣文章的主題

Trashaunhelpedhimseethattheirshareddifferenceisnohandicapto

succcess.He'snotalone,andhehassomeonetolookuptowho'sjust

likehim.

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TheboysmetatWashingtonMiddleSchoolonaSaturdayafternoonacoupleof

monthslater.Thedaywasnotspentwallowinginself-pity-itwasdedicatedto

fun.Thetwoboyswereinstantlybonded.Theyrodebikesaroundtheschool's

hallways,tookphotos,playedhide-and-seek,andshotbaskets.TrashauntaughtJayce

tofinishwithahighreleaseandputsomebackspinontheball.Atonepoint,Trashaun

didgetseriouswithJayce.HetalkedabouttheirJeftarms-orlackthereof.Hetold

JaycehewasperfectthewayGodmadehim.Hesaidnottoletanyonedraghim

downandthatwordsdon'tneedtoshakehisconfidence.

Sincethatmeeting,Lewishasseenanoticeabledifferenceinherson.Jayeehas

becomemoreconfident,outgoing,anddeterminedthaneverbefore.Heisnolonger

ashamedofhisdifferencesandinsteadembracesthem,usingthemasasourceof

strengthandinspiration.Herecentlyevenhasstartedwrestlingandlovesit.

Lewiswatcheswithprideandamazementashersoncontinuestogrowand

thrive.SheknowsthatthechanceencounterwithTrashaunhaschangedhislife

forever,andisgratefulforthekindnessofthefamilyfriendwhohasmadeitall

possible.

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TheboysmetatWashingtonMiddleSchoolonaSaturdayafternoonacoupleof

monthslater.AtthesightofTrashaun——tall,confident,andsmiling——Jaycehesitated,

unsureofwhattosay.Sensinghisunease,Trashaungreetedhimwithawarm

smileandafistbump,puttinghimatease.Thetwowereinstantly

bonded,embracingtheirshareddifference,orratheruniqueness.Trashaunshared

hisjourneyofovercomingchallengessimilartothoseJaycewasexperiencing."I

knowhowitfeelstowonder,"WhyamIdifferent?9Butletmetellyouit'snotabout

whatwedon'thavebuthowweusewhatwe'vego/"Thesewordsresonateddeeply

withJayce.Forhours,theytalked,laughed,andplayedbasketballtogether.Bytheend

oftheafternoon,Jaycewaslaughingandsmiling,hisconfidencealreadybeginning

tobloom.(115words)

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Sincethatmeeting,Lewishasseenapronounceddifferenceinherson.Jayce

hasregainedhisbubblyenthusiasm.Nolongerdoeshereturnhomesullen,but

speaksofhisdreamswithnewfoundenthusiasmandconfidence.Nordoesheshy

awaywhenaskedabouthisarm;instead,hetalksabouthisfriendTrashaunandthe

amazingthingshecando.He'stakenupbasketballwithrenewedpassion,practicing

everydayandshowingoffhisimprovingskillswithpride.t6IfTrashauncandoit,so

canI,“heoftensays,hisfaceglowing/radiatingwithdetermination.ForLewis,the

changeisnothingshortofmiraculous.Thatmeetingchangedeverything-Jayceno

longerquestionswhyheisdifferent-instead,heembracesit,knowingthathis

uniquenessmakeshimcapableofextraordinarythings.(115words)

一些找回自信的語料積累

Onceatimidindividualwhoavoidedeyecontactandmumbleduncertainly,Sarah

transformedafterregainingherconfidence.Now,hervoiceissteadyandresonant,her

wordsbrimmingwithassurance.Shestandstall,herbackstraightandhershouldersrelaxed,

asifshecarriestheworldwithease.Herbrightsmileandsparklingeyesexudewarmth,

drawingpeopletowardher.Eachstepshetakesispurposeful,andhergesturesareopen,

radiatingtrustandoptimism.薩拉曾經(jīng)是一個膽小的人，避免目光接觸，含糊不清，在

恢復信心后，她改變了。現(xiàn)在，她的聲音穩(wěn)定而洪亮，她的話語充滿了自信。她站得

高高的，背挺直，肩膀放松，好像輕松地扛起了整個世界。她燦爛的笑容和閃閃發(fā)光

的眼睛散發(fā)著溫暖，吸引著人們。她邁出的每一步都是有目的的，她的姿態(tài)是開放的，

散發(fā)著信任和樂觀。

Jayce'stransformationwasevidentineveryaspectofhisdemeanor.His

posture,onceslouchedandhesitant,becameuprightandassured.Hewalked

throughtheschoolhallwayswithabounceinhisstep,hisheadheldhigh,and

asmilethatseemedtoradiatewarmthandpositivity.Hiseyes,whichhadonce

dartedaroundnervouslytoavoidmakingcontact,nowsparkledwithdetermination

andenthusiasm.

Inconversations,Jayce'stonewaslivelyandupbeat.Hebegantocrackjokes

withhisclassmates,oftenmakinglightof