高三第三次聯(lián)合測評讀后續(xù)寫分析+講義

高三第三次聯(lián)合測評讀后續(xù)寫分析閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。AllyandIfirstmetatalocalridingclub,wherewewerebotheagerbeginners,learningthebasicsofhorsebackriding.Ourfriendshipquicklydevelopedaswediscoveredoursharedpassionforhorsesandtheexcitementofridingahorseacrossopenfields.Wespentcountlesshourstogether,talkingabouteverythingunderthesunaswewatchedthehorsesplayinghappilyandlively.Allywasverypassionateaboutriding,anditwasajoytosharethatenthusiasmwithher.However,beingsomeonewhosethighstandardsformyselfandthoseIcaredabout,Isometimesfoundmyselfpushinghertoimproveherskills,evenifitmeantbeingabitdemanding.Onesunnyafternoon,duringaparticularlychallengingridingexercise,Isuggestedatechniquethatinvolvedatightturnandaquickjumpoveralowfence."That'stoorisky,"Allyprotested,bitingherlipsinconcern.“I'mnotreadyforthatyet.”"Comeon,Ally,"Iurged,tappingmyfootimpatiently."You'vegottopushyourselfifyouwanttogetbetter.”O(jiān)urvoicesrose,andsoonwewerelockedinaheateddiscussion,andevenourhorsessensedthetensionandbecamnerestless.Finally,webothacceptedthatwehaddifferentpointsofviewanddecidedtoleaveitatthat.Buttheleftovertensioncausedaslightbutnoticeablegapbetweenus.Oneeveningafterthatargument,asIwashelpingmyparentscloseupthestore,myphonerang.ItwasAlly.Ipickedupthephone,myheartstillheavyfromourearlierdisagreement.“Hey,”shebegan,hervoicefullofhope."Iwasthinkingwecouldtrythattechniqueagain.IfeellikeI'mreadynow."Ishookmyheadeventhoughshecouldn'tseeme."Idon'tthinkthat'sagoodidea,"Ireplied,mytonefirm.Shepaused,andIcouldalmosthearherdisappointment.“Okay,"shesaidsoftly."I'llseeyouthen.”注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數應為150左右；2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Thenextafternoon,IreceivedacallfromAlly'smother.IrushedtothehospitalandfoundAllywithacast（石膏）onherleg.文章主題文章圍繞朋友之間因騎馬技巧產生分歧展開，主題是關于友誼中的矛盾、理解與成長，強調在友誼里尊重彼此選擇以及良好溝通的重要性。人物性格“我”：對自己和在乎的人要求高，追求進步，有時會顯得有些強勢、急躁，比如在騎馬練習中急于讓Ally提升技能，態(tài)度強硬地勸說她嘗試高難度動作。但在得知Ally受傷后，能意識到自己的錯誤，懂得反思，內心善良且珍視友誼。Ally：起初比較謹慎，對自己的能力有清晰認知，拒絕嘗試高難度的騎馬技巧。但后來因為爭吵又有些沖動，獨自嘗試了該技巧，導致受傷。續(xù)寫思路Para1：接到Ally母親電話得知她出事，兩人對話，重點描寫“我”的心理活動，像震驚、自責、悔恨等情緒，突出內心的煎熬，為后面去醫(yī)院的情節(jié)做鋪墊。Para2：見到受傷的Ally，兩人坦誠交流，表達歉意。著重描寫兩人的對話和神態(tài)動作，展現彼此的懊悔，最終和解并升華主題，強調友誼里相互理解和溝通的重要，讓故事有一個溫暖且積極的結局。學生誤區(qū)1.第一段中Ally媽媽電話沒有提及女兒受傷，而是關于其他話題，比如問“我”為什么沒有和Ally一起去騎馬。這樣寫的同學后續(xù)都編了第二個情節(jié)來銜接下一段，比如Ally媽媽再次打電話描述Ally騎馬受傷，因為篇幅有限，所以一筆帶過了這部分最重要的內容；2.第一段中Ally媽媽打電話責備Ally為什么和自己的女兒爭執(zhí)，導致女兒受傷，并說出很多傷人的話，這是不符合上文描述的，文章沒有鋪墊過媽媽的這種不講道理推脫責任的性格，并且，這么做也是不合適的（畢竟女兒自己嘗試危險動作而導致受傷，不能將責任都推到女兒朋友身上），這里媽媽打電話是因為知道我們是好朋友，所以告知一下情況，而非興師問罪；3.第二段結尾不會總結，認為文章講述的是友情的重要性，套用了很多和友情相關的句式，沒有明白文章探討的其實是如何建立健康且牢固的友誼——相互尊重與理解。作文范文Thenextafternoon,IreceivedacallfromAlly’smother.HervoicewastremblingasshetoldmethatAllyhadbeeninanaccidentwhileriding.“Shetriedthattechniqueyoumentioned,”shesaidquietly.“Shefellandbrokeherleg.”O(jiān)nhearingthis,Ifeltawaveofguiltwashingoverme.“I’msosorrytohearthat,”Istammered,myvoicecracking.“Inevermeantforhertogethurt.”IrealizedIshouldhavebeenmoresupportiveandpatient,understandingthateveryonehastheirownpaceinlearning.Thisrealizationweighedheavilyonme,andIknewIneededtomakeupforit.IrushedtothehospitalandfoundAllywithacastonherleg.AsIsatbesideher,Iapologizedsincerelyformybehavior.“I’msosorry,Ally,”Isaid,tearswellingupinmyeyes.“Ishouldneverhavepushedyousohard.Yoursafetyismoreimportantthananyridingachievement.”Allysmiledweakly,forgivingmewithareassuringlook.Wechattedjoyfully,talkingabouttheimportanceoflisteningtoeachotherandrespectingourlimits.Fromtha