高二讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)練習(xí)二講評(píng)課件

Requirements讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)題型解讀該題計(jì)25分，提供一段350詞以?xún)?nèi)的語(yǔ)言材料，要求考生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容、所給兩段段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)（150詞左右），將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)合理且完整的短文。StrategiesTip1:找問(wèn)題，抓主題Tip2:定結(jié)局，再倒推Tip3:增互動(dòng)，多回扣讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)基本原則積極性：結(jié)局明確且正能量簡(jiǎn)要性：不新增人物、不新增旁支情節(jié)，不過(guò)多使用對(duì)話(huà)一致性：不偏離原文主題，不與原文矛盾合理性：不違背事之常理，人之常情讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)解題策略讀——主題把握精準(zhǔn)到位思——情節(jié)推動(dòng)合情合理寫(xiě)——你來(lái)我往銜接連貫Writing21.讀——主題把握精準(zhǔn)到位“the5Ws”guideline

Who:Neha,herparents(maincharacters)theshopowner,theoldlady(minorcharacters)2.What:Nehaaskedherparentstobuyherastudytablewithdrawersbecauseofhersister.Nehadiscoveredamoneybaginthedrawerofanoldtableandinsistedonbuyingit.Backhome,Nehafoundanoteinsidethemoneybag.Nehawouldhavetomakeupmanyliesandhidethemoneyallthetime.Nehadecidedtofacethetruthandreturnedthemoney.1.讀：主題askedherparentstobuyastudytablediscoveredamoneybaginanoldtable

(surprisedandoverjoyed)→insistedonbuyingit

(scaredbutgreedy)

foundanoteandwouldhavetotellmoreliesandhidethemoney主題:theimportanceofhonestyandintegrityinthefaceoftemptation

在誘惑面前，誠(chéng)實(shí)正直的重要性。(ambivalentandregretful)theme?P1Withherheartstillracing,Nehagatheredthestrengthtofaceuptowhatshehaddone.P2Together,thethreeofthemwentbacktothestore,wheretheshopowner...2.思：情節(jié)HowdidNehafeelatthattime?Whatdidshedonext?Whatwasherparentsreaction?

Tip:仔細(xì)審讀兩段給出句，結(jié)合原文伏筆，捕捉信息。Para.2:Together,thethreeofthemwentbacktothestore,wheretheshopownerofferedtohelp.

將錢(qián)裝進(jìn)袋子和父母坦白手抖→深呼吸→拿起便條Whatdidtheydonext?HowdidNehafeel?Whathaveshelearnedfromtheincident?

店主幫忙聯(lián)系老婦Neha的直觀感受（可寫(xiě)老婦現(xiàn)身感謝）主題，回扣Para.1:Withherheartstillracing,Nehagatheredthestrengthtofaceuptowhatshehaddone.心理和動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)，決定歸還思：情節(jié)Para1語(yǔ)料(結(jié)合主題—高尚品行)Imagininganoldladysavingcoinsfordecades,Neha'sthroattightened.Shefelthischeeksgoingredandasenseofguiltrisinginsideher.Overcomewithguilt,shefeltherfaceburning.Herfingerstrembledlikeautumnleavesclingingtobranches.Withstrongdetermination,Nehatookadeepbreath,dashedoutofherroomandhandedherparentstheplasticbagfilledwithunexpectedtreasure,tellingthemthetruth.“Let’sfindtherightfulowner.”Sheadded.Tohersurprise,insteadofblamingNeha,herparentsenvelopedherinabighugandbothagreedtoreturnthemoney.動(dòng)情話(huà)思：情節(jié)Para2語(yǔ)料Uponarrival,Nehatoldhimwhathadhappenedandaskedhimtofindthepreviousowneroftheoldblacktable.Afterhecheckedhisrecords,theygotincontactwiththeoldladyandreturnedthemoney.Seeingthegenuinehappinessshehadbroughttothewoman’slife,Nehafinallyletoutasighofrelief.Thatevening,asNehaadmiredhersecondhandtablenowshiningwithnewfounddignity,sherealizedtruewealthwasn'tinpossessionsbutinthelightnessofaclearconscience.【主題，回扣】It’stheimportanceofhonestyandintegrityinthefaceoftemptationthatmatters.“Thiscomingbirthday,”shethought,“I’vegainedsomethingmorevaluablethananygift—therestorationofmyhonesty.”3.寫(xiě)：回扣&互動(dòng)Paragraph1:

Withherheartstillracing,Nehagatheredthestrengthtofaceuptowhatshehaddone.Whensheimaginedthewrinkledhandsoftheoldladycarefullysavingeachrupeeforherfamily,asenseofguiltroseinsideher.Swallowinghard,shegrabbedtheplasticbag

andrushedtofindherparents."I...Ifoundthishiddeninthetable,"shestammered,tearsblurringhervisionassheconfessedherinitialgreed.Hermotherhuggedhertightly,saying,"Honestytakescourage."Herfather'seyessoftenedwithpride.Theydecidedtoreturnthemoney,knowingitcarriedsomeoneelse'shopes.Paragraph2:Together,thethreeofthemwentbacktothestore,wheretheshopownerofferedtohelp.Uponarrival,Nehatoldhimwhathadhappenedandaskedhimtofindthepreviousowneroftheoldblacktable.Afterhecheckedhisrecords,theygotincontactwiththeoldladyandreturnedthemoney.Seeingthegenuinehappinessshehadbroughttothewoman’slife,Nehafinallyletoutasighofrelief.“Thiscomingbirthday,”shethought,“I’vegainedsomethingmorevaluablethananygift—therestorationofmyhonesty.”評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)1．本題總分為25分，按七個(gè)檔次進(jìn)行評(píng)分。2.評(píng)分時(shí)，主要從內(nèi)容、語(yǔ)言表達(dá)和篇章結(jié)構(gòu)三個(gè)方面考查，

具體為：續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容質(zhì)量、續(xù)寫(xiě)的完整性以及與原文情境的融洽度。3．評(píng)分時(shí),應(yīng)先根據(jù)作答的整體情況確定其所屬的檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來(lái)綜合衡量,確定或調(diào)整檔次,最后給分。4．評(píng)分時(shí)還應(yīng)注意:(1）詞數(shù)少于120的，酌情扣分：（2）單詞拼寫(xiě)和標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)是寫(xiě)作規(guī)范的重要方面,評(píng)分時(shí)應(yīng)視其對(duì)交際的影響程度予以考慮,英美拼寫(xiě)及詞匯用法均可接受。（3）書(shū)寫(xiě)較差以致影響交際的，酌情扣分。檔次給分要求第七檔（22-25分）創(chuàng)造了豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，富有邏輯性，續(xù)寫(xiě)完整，與原文情景融洽度高；使用了多樣且恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)、表達(dá)流暢，語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤很少，且完全不影響理解；自然有效地使用了段落間、句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，前后呼應(yīng)，意義連貫。第六檔（18-21分）創(chuàng)造了比較豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，比較有邏輯性，續(xù)寫(xiě)比較完整，與原文情景融洽度較高；使用了比較多樣且恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，表達(dá)比較流暢，有個(gè)別錯(cuò)誤，但不影響理解；比較有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)比較清晰，意義比較連貫。第五檔（15-17分）創(chuàng)造了基本合理的內(nèi)容，有一定的邏輯性，續(xù)寫(xiě)基本完整，與原文情境相關(guān)；使用了比較恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，表達(dá)方式不夠多樣性，表達(dá)有些許錯(cuò)誤，但基本不影響理解；使用了語(yǔ)句銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)比較清晰，意義比較連貫。檔次給分要求第四檔（11-14分）

創(chuàng)造了基本完整的故事內(nèi)容，但有的情節(jié)不夠合理或邏輯不強(qiáng)，與原文情景基本相關(guān)；使用了簡(jiǎn)單的詞匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，有部分語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤和不恰當(dāng)之處，個(gè)別部分影響理解；尚有語(yǔ)句銜接的意識(shí)，全文結(jié)構(gòu)基本清晰，意義基本連貫。第三檔（6-10分）內(nèi)容和邏輯上有一些重大問(wèn)題，續(xù)寫(xiě)不夠完整，與原文有一定程度脫節(jié)；所用的詞匯有限，語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，錯(cuò)誤較多且比較低級(jí)，影響理解；未能有效地使用語(yǔ)句銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)不夠清晰，意義欠連貫。第二檔（1-5分）內(nèi)容和邏輯上有較多重大問(wèn)題，或有部分內(nèi)容抄自原文，續(xù)寫(xiě)不完整，與原文情景基本脫節(jié)；所使用的的詞匯非常有限，語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)