2025浙江首考高分應(yīng)用文和續(xù)寫

浙江首考高分應(yīng)用文和續(xù)寫你將參加英語課上的“一分鐘演講”活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)你針對(duì)部分同學(xué)在校園內(nèi)用手機(jī)拍攝短視頻的現(xiàn)象寫一篇演講稿，內(nèi)容包括：(1)陳述看法;(2)提出建議。注意：(1)

寫作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80左右；(2)

請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。

MyViewsonFilmingShortVideosonCampus學(xué)生高分作文（回憶版）：MyViewsonFilmingShortVideosonCampusToday,Iamthrilledtosharewithyoumyopinionaboutanincreasinglyprevalentsightofstudentsusingmobilephonestosnapshortvideosoncampus.Itisevidentthattheyareinclinedtorecordfleetingyetpreciousmoments,suchasthevibrantdiscussionsinclass,thehauntinglybeautifulcampussceneryandthehustleandbustleofdailystudylife.Nevertheless,ifstudentsshootshortvideoswithoutrestraint,thiswillapparentlybringannoyancetoothers,interferewithlearningefficiencyandevenaffectacademicperformance.Hence,Idosuggeststudentsfilmthemafterclassesorduringbreaks,whichwon'tsacrificetheirstudytime.

Furthermore,itisofparticularimportancetoensurethattheydon'tinvadeothers'privacy.Inaword,let'susetechnologyproperly!Thanksforlistening!作文分析：1.結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，邏輯連貫

-引入自然：開篇用“Today,Iamthrilledtoshare...”直接點(diǎn)明主題，簡(jiǎn)潔有力，符合演講稿的互動(dòng)性要求。

-觀點(diǎn)對(duì)比：通過“Itisevidentthat...Nevertheless...”先肯定現(xiàn)象積極面（記錄珍貴瞬間），再轉(zhuǎn)折指出問題（干擾學(xué)習(xí)、侵犯隱私），體現(xiàn)辯證思維。

-建議具體：用“Hence...Furthermore...”分層提出解決方案（課后拍攝、保護(hù)隱私），邏輯遞進(jìn)，緊扣題干要求。

2.語言豐富，表達(dá)精準(zhǔn)

-高級(jí)詞匯：

-現(xiàn)象描述：prevalent,fleeting,vibrantdiscussions,hauntinglybeautiful（生動(dòng)展現(xiàn)校園生活多樣性）

-問題分析：restraint,annoyance,interferewithacademicperformance（準(zhǔn)確點(diǎn)明負(fù)面影響）

-句式多樣：

-復(fù)合句：“ifstudentsshoot...thiswillapparentlybring...”（條件狀語從句增強(qiáng)說服力）

-非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)：“filmingthemafterclasses...whichwon’tsacrificestudytime”（which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句補(bǔ)充說明）

-修辭技巧：

-三列排比：“vibrantdiscussions...scenery...hustleandbustle”（增強(qiáng)畫面感）

-強(qiáng)調(diào)呼吁：“l(fā)et’susetechnologyproperly!”（祈使句強(qiáng)化號(hào)召力）

3.格式規(guī)范，交際得體

-文體意識(shí)強(qiáng)：開頭用“Dearfellowstudents”拉近距離，結(jié)尾“Thanksforlistening!”符合演講場(chǎng)景禮儀。

-字?jǐn)?shù)控制：全文約120詞（含格式），略超題干要求但內(nèi)容精煉無冗余，符合高分作文“適當(dāng)拓展”原則。

-對(duì)象貼合：針對(duì)學(xué)生群體，用“學(xué)習(xí)效率（learningefficiency）”“課后時(shí)間（afterclasses）”等貼合校園語境。

4.內(nèi)容深度與批判性思維

-辯證視角：不否定拍攝行為本身，而是批判“無節(jié)制（withoutrestraint）”，體現(xiàn)理性思考。

-問題具體化：將抽象影響具象為“干擾他人（bringannoyance）”“侵犯隱私（invadeprivacy）”，增強(qiáng)說服力。

-解決方案可行：建議“課后拍攝”“保護(hù)隱私”易于操作，符合學(xué)生實(shí)際，而非空泛口號(hào)。

讀后續(xù)寫：閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Kevinwasprettybored.Hismotherwasatwork,andhisfatherhadbeenawayonbusiness.Therefore,hewasleftinthecareofMrs.Hill,anoldladywholivednextdoor.Hisparentshadraisedthe12-year-oldtobeagoodboy.Henevergotintotrouble,thoughsometimeshewantedtodoriskythings.Mrs.Hillwasasleep.Kevinsighed(嘆息)andhopedsomethingexcitingwouldhappen.Suddenly,amovementoutsidecaughthiseye.Mrs.Hill’sfrontwindowfacedMr.andMrs.Green’shouseacrossthestreet.Thecouplehadbothgonetowork,soitwasstrangethatsomeonewasoverthere.Kevinstaredatthemanattheirfrontdoor.Suddenly,themanjumpedthroughanopenwindowintothehouse.Withhisheartinhismouth,KevingrabbedMrs.Hill’shomephoneandcalledthepolice.

Thinkingthatthemanmightgetawaywithwhateverhewantedbeforethepolicearrived,Kevindecidedtodosomething.HerushedoutofMrs.Hill’shouseandcrossedthestreetquickly.Grabbingabranchfromacut-downtree,hejumpedinthroughthewindow.

“Stoprightthere!Youmustleaverightnow!”

hecalledout,holdingthebranchwithbothhands.Themanfrozeforasecond,butwhenhesawtheskinnyboyhebreathedasighofrelief.

“Hey,kid,putthatdown.Itwasmyhome.Myparentsusedtolivehereandmyfather’swatchwashere,”

heexplained,tryingtoliftafloorboard.

Atthatmoment,thesoundsofapolicecarechoed(回響)intheair.Themanstoodupinapanic,thenranthroughthehousetowardthewindowandjumpedout.Kevinfollowedoutandtoldthearrivingpoliceofficerswhathadhappened.Theypursuedandarrestedtheman.KevinwentbacktoMrs.Hill’shouse.Somehowhewasn’tsurehehaddonetherightthing.

“Whatifhehastoldthetruth?”

hethoughttohimself.Theman’swordssoundedprettyconvincing.注意：（1）

續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；（2）

請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

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WhenMr.andMrs.Greengothome,Kevinwenttotalktothem.Paragraph2:

KevinandMr.Greentookthewatchtheyhadfoundtothepolicestation.（第五檔作文：23分）WhenMr.andMrs.Greengothome,Kevinwenttotalktothem.

He

elaboratedonhowhenoticedthestranger,howheassistedthepoliceinarrestinghimandhowheworriednowthatitwasamistake.Mr.Green’scountenancewascloudedwithconfusion.“Butwherecouldthewatchbe?"Hemurmured.Kevinrackedhisbrain,andeventually,theman'slastmovementemergedinhismind.“Beneaththefloorboard!”Heexclaimed.Sotheretheywere,rummagingthroughthefloor,flippingopenalltheboardsontheirway.Mrs.Green'samazedcryconcludedtheirsearch.“It’sreallyhere!”Asshefishedthewatchout,KevinexchangedaknowingwinkwiththeGreens—nowheknewtherightthingtodo.

KevinandMr.Greentookthewatchtheyhadfoundtothepolicestation.

Thepoormanwasstilltherebehindthebars,hiseyesred-rimmed,hislipsdown-curved.Wearinganapologeticbeam,Kevinapproachedtheman,stuffedthewatchintohispalmsandclarifiedthetruthtotheofficerbeside.Itdidn'ttakelongbeforethepolicesearchedtheman'snameinthereal-estatesystemandreportedtheresult—trueashehadclaimed,hisparentsWEREtheformerresidentsofthathouse.Onhisrelease,themanpattedKevin,whowasalittleembarrassed.“You'reagoodboyandyou'vedoneright.It'smyfaulttoactlikeathief!”Hejoked.Andamidstlaughter,arelievedsmileeventuallyblossomedonKevin'sface.作文分析：1.情節(jié)邏輯嚴(yán)密，呼應(yīng)前文-合理延續(xù)沖突：精準(zhǔn)承接原文中凱文的內(nèi)心矛盾（“Whatifhehastoldthetruth?”），通過“找到手表”與“警察局澄清”兩段完整解決懸念，形成“發(fā)現(xiàn)誤會(huì)→糾正錯(cuò)誤→人物成長(zhǎng)”的閉環(huán)結(jié)構(gòu)。

-細(xì)節(jié)伏筆回收：利用前文“地板下找手表”的關(guān)鍵動(dòng)作（“tryingtoliftafloorboard”），在續(xù)寫中設(shè)計(jì)“翻找地板”的情節(jié)，實(shí)現(xiàn)線索呼應(yīng)，增強(qiáng)故事可信度。

-主題升華自然：通過“誤會(huì)與真相”的對(duì)比，傳遞“正義需理性判斷”的價(jià)值觀，避免說教感，符合高考“立德樹人”命題導(dǎo)向。

2.語言表達(dá)豐富，表現(xiàn)力強(qiáng)

-高級(jí)詞匯精準(zhǔn)：

-動(dòng)作描寫：rummagingthrough,flippedopen,fishedout（生動(dòng)展現(xiàn)搜尋過程）

-情感刻畫：countenancecloudedwithconfusion,apologeticbeam,red-rimmedeyes（多維度呈現(xiàn)人物心理）

-句式靈活多變：

-復(fù)合句：“Kevinapproachedtheman,stuffedthewatchintohispalmsandclarifiedthetruthtotheofficerbeside...”（非謂語連動(dòng)句增強(qiáng)畫面感）

-修辭手法巧妙：

-隱喻：“arelievedsmileblossomed”（以“花朵綻放”隱喻情緒釋放）

-對(duì)比：“behindthebars”與“onhisrelease”（場(chǎng)景對(duì)比強(qiáng)化戲劇張力）

3.人物塑造立體，情感真實(shí)

-凱文的成長(zhǎng)弧光：

-初始狀態(tài)：沖動(dòng)行動(dòng)后的自我懷疑（“wasn’tsurehehaddonetherightthing”）

-行動(dòng)轉(zhuǎn)變：主動(dòng)求證真相（“rackedhisbrain”回憶細(xì)節(jié)）

-最終升華：從“尷尬”（emb