十句話搞定讀后續(xù)寫3十句五定課件-高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)

十句話搞定讀后續(xù)寫3

十句五定法讀一、讀什么：讀材料（一般是記敘文）＋讀提示句（讀關(guān)鍵詞）。

時間不夠讀首尾段二、怎么讀：1.找信息——who/where/when/what/why/how2.思考——readforcharacters人物/plot情節(jié)/conflict沖突/emotionalchange情感變化/theme主題3.讀的過程中圈畫關(guān)鍵信息，重要細(xì)節(jié)內(nèi)容（用以細(xì)節(jié)呼應(yīng)），好的句式（用以仿寫）三、讀完之后要明白：文章主人公是誰，文章主要情節(jié)，待解決的問題，人物情緒變化與文章主題。第二節(jié)(滿分25分)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Therewasanelderlyladystandinginthebone－chillingcoldoutsidethebackofthesupermarket.Shewasholdingabasketwithbunchesofflowers.“WouldyouliketheflowersTheyare$3，”sheaskedmeasIwaswalkingpast.Ipolitelyresponded“No,thankyou”，asIwalkedawayandwentinsidethesupermarket.IwaswalkingaroundthesupermarketsearchingforthethingthatIwasneedingtobuyandthinkingofthatlady,standinginthecoldholdingherbasketofflowers.VisualisingthebeautifulflowersIhadadmired,herpolitequietvoiceandlonelyfigure,Iwonderedaboutherunknownstoryofstandinginthecoldwithherbasket.Maybeherfamilywasinurgentneedofmoney;maybeshewasalonesoultoearnalivingwithherownhands...Ihadmyownpersonalstruggles,IhadtobudgetforeverythingandIappreciatedthat$3wasalotforme,likemanyofusallandprobablyforhertoo.Butitwasn'tmyfirstthoughtwhenshehadaskedmeaboutbuyingherflowers.MyfirstthoughtwasIdidn'thavethecashbutthiscouldn'tbeusedasanexcusefornotbuyingthoseflowers.IhadnotcarriedcashwithmeforafewyearsandIthoughtmanyofusdidthesame.

WhenIwenttotheregistertopaywithmycardIaskedfor$3cashout.Thestaffmemberquestionedmeaboutthe$3.IfeltanxiousaboutitquicklyandtriedtorememberthemoneyIhadinmyaccount.Andatthesametimeshepressedthebuttontoprocessit.IhadmentionedthatIwantedtobuyflowersfromtheladywhowassellingthemoutside.Sighofrelief.Iwasgladtoseeitallhadbeenacceptedbythemachineandthestaffmemberhandedmethe$3.注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請按如下格式作答。

Iwalkedawayandaroundthecornerofthesupermarkettothelady.

Aftergivingher$3,Iwassurprisedwhenshehandedmethechange.

[前文大意]本文以人物為線索，講述了作者在去超市買東西時，遇見一位賣花的老婦人。在她向作者售賣這些花時，作者拒絕了她。后來在購物期間，作者的腦海中一直浮現(xiàn)著這個賣花老婦人的形象，想著她可能遇到了生活中的困難或者是一位靠賣花來生活的孤獨老人。于是，作者在收銀臺換了3美元。[續(xù)寫思路]1．段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我走開了，在超市的拐角處，走向那位女士”可知，接下來可描述作者當(dāng)時看到這位女士的情景，以及作者決定買下她的花。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“給了她3美元后，她把零錢給我的時候，我很驚訝”可知，接下來可描寫作者詢問她這樣做的原因以及作者的感悟。2．續(xù)寫線索：走向女士——看到她的情形——作者的愧疚——決定買花——給錢，但她少收了錢——詢問原因——作者的感悟十句五定法paragraph11銜接para1提示句（接著para1首句往下寫）2345銜接para2提示句（根據(jù)para2首句倒推寫）paragraph26銜接para2提示句（接著para2首句往下寫）789

結(jié)尾（正能量）10

升華主題寫剩余五句補齊細(xì)節(jié)情緒動作心理語言環(huán)境描寫Para1.Para2.定

句1:銜接提示句--心理/動作鏈定句6:銜接提示句--心理/動作鏈句2:句7:句3:句8：句4:定句9:緊貼原文，交代結(jié)局定句5:過渡到P2首句定句10:點睛兩段十句五定法的思路其中第一段中的句1與句5，第二段中的句1，句4和句5共五句話基本是固定的，其他的句子安排根據(jù)具體情況可作輕微調(diào)整。para1：Iwalkedawayandaroundthecornerofthesupermarkettothelady.

________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________para2:Aftergivingher$3,Iwassurprisedwhenshehandedmethechange.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

接下來可描述作者當(dāng)時看到這位女士的情景，以及作者決定買下她的花。接下來可描寫作者詢問她這樣做的原因以及作者的感悟。我走開了，在超市的拐角處，走向那位女士。給了她3美元后，她把零錢給我的時候，我很驚訝。第一句話：____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第二句話：____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________接上句“走向那位女士”，人還在嗎？花賣完了嗎？呼應(yīng)文中的“天冷thebone-chillingcold”，描寫那位女士的狀態(tài)She

wasstillstandingwhereIoncemether,holdingthebasketofflowers.十句五定法：Thewindwasblowingheavilyandhercheeksnowwereredbecauseofthechillywind.第三句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第四句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________“我”接下來的舉動（買花）Atthemoment,ImadeupmindandcameuptoherandtoldherthatIwouldbuytheflowers.我的心理感受（突出“有點后悔”）Somehow,Ifeltabitashamedofnotbuyingtheflowersbeforehand.第五句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第六句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________她看見有人買花后的反應(yīng)，以及銜接下一句出現(xiàn)的money。Feelingexcited,shehandedmetheflowerspolitely,andIreachedmypocket,givingherthemoney.接上句“surprisedtoseethechange”,詢問是否找錯零錢。I

askedifshehadmadeamistake.Asimpleword“No”wasanswered.第七句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第八句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________她的解釋。突出“只有我”買了她的花，銜接下一句她的舉動。Shetoldmeshehadstoodhereforalmostalldaysellingtheflowersasherhusbandwsabadlyill.Noonewantedtogiveherthesympathytobuytheflowers.ItwasonlyIthathelpedherandboughtherflowers.第九句話：___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第十句話：___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________她很感激，因此給我打了個折扣。我的感悟。（“升華主題”）Shewasverygratefulanddecidedtogivemeadiscount.

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thatmoment,Irealisedthatevenasmallkindnesscanalsomakeabidifference.step1認(rèn)真剖析首句，構(gòu)思段落內(nèi)容step2十句五定法

展開劇情para1para2考慮與上下文的融洽銜接和續(xù)寫第二段開頭語的呼應(yīng)和銜接關(guān)注與文章開頭的遙相呼應(yīng)根據(jù)具體語境弘揚感情的真、人性的善或拼搏的美第1句：接著para1首句(心理/動作鏈）第5句：根據(jù)para2首句第6句：接著para2首句(心理/動作鏈）第9句：結(jié)局第10句：升華總結(jié)：step1讀原文，梳理信息，3-5分鐘step2構(gòu)思、初稿（十句五定法），10-15分鐘step3補充細(xì)節(jié)，寫剩下五句，潤色，定稿，10-15分鐘step4謄寫到答題卡上，5分鐘[參考范文]I

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