高考英語 My Pocket Money 英語書面表達寫作指導

1、高考英語 My Pocket Money 英語書面表達寫作指導 假如你是某國際學校記者站的小記者,你校以How I Spend My Pocket Money為題向全校學生做問卷調(diào)查,結(jié)果如以下表格所示。請你寫一篇文章分析該調(diào)查結(jié)果反映的問題并給出你的建議,發(fā)表在校英文網(wǎng)站上。詞數(shù):120左右。項目花費(元/月)占每月總支出百分比書籍1512.5文具108.3服裝5041.7零食2016.7娛樂2520.8合計120100寫作分析:第一步,認真審題,提煉要點。 一審體裁:本次寫作任務為說明文體裁寫作。 二審結(jié)構:文章可分為三部分。首先,簡要交代關于問卷調(diào)查的一些情況,如調(diào)查的內(nèi)容和結(jié)果等,以引

2、出寫作的主題。然后,結(jié)合表格中的數(shù)據(jù)分析調(diào)查結(jié)果反映的問題。最后,根據(jù)反映的問題給出自己的建議。 三審要點:用英語思維,理出寫作要點。1. spend 120 yuan of pocket money2. dont spend much on books and stationery3. lead to serious problems4. pursue material comforts5. help the students spend money reasonably6. their parents and teachers第二步,緊扣主題,擴點成句。1. A high school s

3、tudent spends 120 yuan of pocket money per month on average.2. They dont spend much on books and stationery.3. Students spend too much money on clothing and snacks, which could lead to serious problems.4. They may learn to pursue material comforts.5. For the sake of helping the students spend money

4、reasonably .6. Their parents and teachers should teach them what is important and how to spend money properly.第三步,補充修改,連句成篇。范文1:Nowadays a high school student spends 120 yuan of pocket money per month on average. Almost half of the money is spent on clothing. And the money spent on amusement and sna

5、cks takes up 20.8% and 16.7% of the 120 yuan respectively. However, they dont spend much on books and stationery.Obviously, students spend too much money on clothing and snacks, which could lead to serious problems. For example, they may learn to pursue material comforts and compare clothing with th

6、at of their classmates, both of which will have a bad impact on their studies.Accordingly, for the sake of helping the students spend money reasonably, their parents and teachers should teach them what is important and how to spend money properly. 亮點展示:1. 文章結(jié)構合理:首段介紹調(diào)查情況,第二段闡述其危害,最后一段提出自己的建議；2. 正確使用

7、定語從句,使文章句式多樣:., students spend too much money on clothing ., which could lead to serious problems. / ., they may learn to pursue material comforts ., both of which will have a bad .3. obviously和accordingly 不僅使文章更有邏輯性,而且起到了承上啟下的作用。范文2:According to the survey on How I Spend My Pocket Money conducted b

8、y our school, students spend about 120 yuan of pocket money per month on average. Compared with the small amount spent on books and stationery, almost half of the money is spent on clothing. In addition, money spent on snacks and amusement makes up a large share of the total spending.It is quite eas

9、y to see that too little money is spent on books. As students, our job is to study hard and learn as much as we can, especially in such a rapidly developing society. If we dont equip ourselves with knowledge, we could fall behind the others and sink to the bottom of the society.As far as I can see,

10、we should concentrate on our studies and attach great importance to knowledge, which comes from books. 亮點展示:1. 文章首句點明調(diào)查的內(nèi)容和結(jié)果,直接點明寫作的主題:According to the survey ., students spend about 120 yuan of pocket money per month .2. 文章詞匯表達豐富:compare with, equip with及concentrate on等；3. 最后一段用一句話點明自己的建議,語氣堅定:As

11、far as I can see, we should concentrate ., which comes from books.Powerful Sentences:1. It is useful to read a reasonable amount of science fiction, but you shouldnt become crazy about it; otherwise you could have trouble adapting to reality.2. Recently we had a meeting to discuss what should be con

12、sidered to be honor-able behavior and what is shameful.3. I hope that the results of my survey can attract the attention of our parents and teachers.4. A survey has been done to find out the cause of obesity among high school students.鞏固練習: 針對中學生交通出行安全問題,你校對全校1013名學生進行了問卷調(diào)查,結(jié)果如以下表格所示。假設你是校刊英語版的特約小記者

13、,請你根據(jù)表格中的調(diào)查結(jié)果,分析其中一種交通方式可能存在的隱患及預防措施,并進行簡要評價,將文章發(fā)表在?？⑽陌妗Ｔ~數(shù):120左右。交通方式使用人數(shù)（人）占總?cè)藬?shù)百分比自行車54353.6公交車34233.8步行10710.6其他212合計1013100參考范文:Recently a survey about transportation was carried out in our school. According to the survey, nearly half of the students go to school by bike, while 33.8% take the bu

14、s. Walking accounts for 10.6%, and 2% use other means.Nowadays, traffic safety must be paid special attention to. Whatever means of transport we take to go to school, there are some possible hidden dangers. Lets take travelling on foot for example. It will be very dangerous if we dont follow the traffic rules or cross the road at the zebra crossing. For the sak