2022屆高考英語寫作之讀后續(xù)寫：荒野求生（word版有范文）

1、2022高考英語寫作之讀后續(xù)寫：荒野求生原題閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so ang

2、ry that she said to Tom Im going to find a better spot for us to camp and walked away.With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a sn

3、ow capped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.Tom! she cried. Help!No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to

4、 stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound

5、 to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane h

6、eard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.注意:1)所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為15

7、0左右;2)續(xù)寫部分分為兩段,每段的開頭語已為你寫好。Paragraph 1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Paragraph 2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up.參考范文一Para 1:But no more helicopters came and it wasgettingdarkagain.Disappointed and sad,Janesat by thestream, resting her aching feet. “If I hadnt quarrell

8、ed withTom, I wouldnt have to be here.” Jane thought regretfully, with tears welling up in her eyes. She wanted to say sorry to Tom for losing her temper. However, the only thing she could do was lie by the stream and wait for help. It was getting late and Jane fell asleep.Para2: It was daybreak whe

9、n Jane woke up.She stood up to find something to eat but in vain. Shewalkedand walked until she came to an open area where water and berries are available. Suddenly, she heard ahelicopter. In no time, she took off heryellow blouseand began waving it wildly.To her great joy, she was spotted and the h

10、elicopter soon landed. With the door open, Tom ran out first. Seeing Jane, he was so excited that he couldnt contain his joy. “Honey, I wont lose my temper again. I want to stay with you forever.” Jane said in tears.參考范文二Para 1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. All at once,

11、 the forest was enveloped in silence. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay down near a stone, missing her family in the distance. All the fantastic memories crowded in and she couldnt help crying, “Had I not quarreled with Tom, walked away and climbed to the high place, I wouldnt be trapped in this awful

12、 place, faced with the danger of dying.” She regretted and burst into tears. A moment later, she fell asleep with shining tears in her eyes.Para2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance. To her great joy, a helicopter was fly

13、ing overhead again and again. Eager and excited, she waved her yellow blouse and spared no effort to yell so as to attract others attention. Fortunately, she was eventually noticed and brought into the helicopter. There, she saw her husband staring at her, wearing an expression of relief. As tightly

14、 as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything. Besides, they agreed never to quarrel again, determined to live the life to the fullest.寫作注意問題格式：有且只有兩段，字?jǐn)?shù)分配合理。情節(jié)：避免再出現(xiàn)矛盾沖突,節(jié)外生枝 (狼/虎/熊齊上陣，獵人老農(nóng)村民齊幫忙.）避免拉長時間線 (極少需要寫幾天后/幾周后/幾年后,除非段首明確給出)故事發(fā)展合理化(天都黑了, 又爬山,又找湖,又掛衣服.）問題解決合理化 (眼一閉，一睜，Tom出

15、現(xiàn)了; 上樹/爬雪山無所不能.)語言：時態(tài)、語態(tài)準(zhǔn)確無誤。豐富句子結(jié)構(gòu)(副詞放句首,with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu), v-ing/ed作狀語, adj做狀語, 各種從句.）完善語言表達(dá)(To show. Not to tell;如害怕傷心，只寫“He was scared and sad”而缺少害怕傷心的原因、害怕傷心的表現(xiàn)。細(xì)節(jié): 語言/動作/神態(tài)/心理)寫作素材積累He rose to his feet and ran outside.他站起來跑到外面。We stood there crying and hugging each other.我們站在那里哭著互相擁抱。She went to her da

16、ughter and hugged her tightly.她走向女兒，緊緊地?fù)ё×怂?。Jack warmly embraced his son.杰克熱烈地?fù)肀Я藘鹤?。I recalled / recollected that we were all gathered in the kitchen.我記得當(dāng)時我們都被召集到廚房里。I recollect/recall him / his saying that it was dangerous.我記得他說那很危險。The old family photo reminds the girl of the good old times with h

17、er grandparents.這幅老照片讓女孩想起來和祖父母一起的美好時光。The painting brings to mind some of Picassos early works.這幅油畫使人想起了畢加索早期的作品。Memories came crowding into her mind.往事一齊涌上她的心頭。He couldnt hold back his anger.他再也控制不住他的怒火。She held back her tears.她強忍著沒讓眼淚流出來。There were sudden tears in his eyes and he paused, fighting

18、 for control.淚水突然奪眶而出，他停了下來，竭力控制住自己。Davidsonlost control of himselfand started yelling.戴維森的情緒失去了控制，開始怒吼。Hanging/ her head in shame, she didnt know what to say next.Holding a firm belief that Tom, her husband must be looking for her, she kept on walking regardless of the back breaking work.Feeling hopeless and regretful, she couldnt hold back her tears anymore.Spotted with stars, sky seems like a blanket full of jewels.Seeing Jane, he was so excited that he couldnt contain his joy.Disappointed an