高考英語作文書面表達技巧三步曲之二：一劍封喉

1、高中英語新高考-英語作文：我來給雞湯類的英語寫作一劍封喉！背景各種大小模擬考試，我把作文題分類成兩個：一是問題，二是人品（綽號：雞湯dream and effort independent cooperationlife choicehow to deal with frustration personal practice我希望讀者能夠堅持讀完我下面的寫作簡要指導，應該對您有一些啟發(fā)。作文指導作文指導請閱讀下面短文，并按照要求用英語寫一篇150 詞左右的文章。The first day of school our professor introduced himself and challe

2、nged us to get to know someone we didnt already know. I stood up to look around when a gentle hand touched my shoulder. I turned around to find a wrinkled, little old lady beaming up at me with a smile that lit up her entire being. She said, Hi handsome. My name is Rose. I m years old. Can I give yo

3、u a hug I laughed and enthusiastically responded, Of course you may. and she gave me a giant squeeze.I always dreamed of having a college education and now Im getting one. She told me. After class we walked to the student union building and shared a chocolate milk shake. We became instant friends. E

4、very day for the next three months we would leave class together and talk nonstop. I was always amazed at this time machine as she shared her wisdom and experience with me.At the end of the semester we invited Rose to speak at our football banquet. Ill never forget what she taught us. She was introd

5、uced and stepped up to the podium. We do not stop playing because we are old; we grow old because we stop playing. Youve got to have a dream. When you lose your dreams, you die. We have so many people walking around who are dead and dont even know it.At the years end Rose finished the college degree

6、 she had begun all those years ago. One week after graduation Rose died peacefully in her sleep.寫作內(nèi)容1、以約 30 個詞概括短文的要點；2、然后以約 120 個就“Dream and effort”這個主題發(fā)表看法，并包括如下要點：Rose演講內(nèi)容的理解和感想。我的感悟一、雞湯類的作文題存在通用性這篇作文本質(zhì)上就是寫夢想。其實dream 和 purpose, ideal, goal, ambition 是一家的，下次換成談談 goal，不要說沒有寫過。我們要做的就是，需要把雞湯類的話題歸類，不要

7、做很多無用功。二、概括類的雞湯文往往是記敘文，記住就一個公式：某人或某物做了某事。這篇文章涉及到兩個人：Rose, IRose 在本文做了四件事：87 歲繼續(xù)大學教育；和我分享個人經(jīng)驗和智慧；發(fā)表演講；去世我在本文就做了一件事：成為 Rose 朋友這樣一想就好辦了：Rose continued her college education at the age of 87. Rose liked to share her experience and wisdom with me. Rose made an inspring speech.I make good friends with Ros

8、e.120 詞中發(fā)揮吧。Rose, 87 years old, continued collegeeducation and often shared experience and wisdom with me, her close friend.Though she died soon after graduation, her speech impressed everyone.三、雞湯類的作文，談感想就兩個：impressive, moved。談理解，首先要具體為：它的功能或重要性。感想：I am deeplymoved and impressed by Roses speech. Sh

9、e gave top priority to the important role our dreams andeffort play in the daily life.重要性的思維就雞湯而言，無非：動力、激情、幸福等。It is a source of Motivation, encouragingus to study hard.It gives us hope and arouses enthusiasm/ happiness.However, without effort, our dream will be in vain / be the castle in the air.需要

10、把三個句子拓展開來：A dream is something that you feel happy to hold on to. People with dreams love what they do, regardless of economic rewards,power or celebrity. So it is a source of motivation, giving us endless confidence and firing/arousing our great enthusiasm. If people lack dreams, they would never r

11、each full potential. Dreams imply hope, discipline,courage and many other qualities. In many cases, it can open up opportunities for people. However, dream and effort should go hand in hand, or dream will become thecastle in the air.四、雞湯類的思維關(guān)鍵詞存在互補和共存關(guān)系（這就是我在課堂上的最新發(fā)現(xiàn)）機遇等本質(zhì)上差不多。為什么這么說呢？我舉例：（）等等。這里面的邏

12、輯應該是很清晰的，不需要我解釋，但是，我這樣換一下：,（）等等。有了自信人生就會有夢想，有了激情，希望）等等。敢情說這些雞湯詞就是一家人啊？有道是：不是一家人，不進一家門。人說，“有什么好談的，那是因為他的思維沒有打開?，F(xiàn)在你知道了這個道理：幸福、愛、自信、激情、希望、潛力、勇氣、機遇等必須打包出售！五、凡是舉例分兩種，時間緊張、思維卡殼、想得19 否則，以名人為例（前提是你得提前準備。以我為例的寫法分三層：開始（寫困難、轉(zhuǎn)機（有了希望、結(jié)局（喜大普奔、感慨（雞湯照應）開始：I have dreamed of being a translator since childhood. But in

13、 the past few years, I have had much trouble in memorizing new words. It almost cost me confidence and enthusiasm.轉(zhuǎn)機：I decided to make it a routine to read novels every day.結(jié)局：Practice makes perfect. My efforts paid off and my dream came true.總結(jié)：I realize that only with dream and effort can I realiz

14、e my dream.別人的例子n , s a Columbus, Bill Gates, Jobs。如果實在記不住他們，記住中國的張海迪，周總理等。 發(fā)現(xiàn)了新大陸，體現(xiàn)勇氣、夢Gates, Jobs Helen Keller, without dreams inspired by her teacher, would not have “seen” so many things through mere touch, and hence would not have moved the world by her touching story. In the same way, Zhang H

15、aidi, given her poor physical condition, would not have become a well-known writer without her ambition to overcome any difficulty. With dreams encouraging us, we are moving forward more eagerly and confidently.最可取的是下面的句式：A striking example is Premier Zhou, who in the youth dreamed of “studying for

16、a prosperous and rising China”. It was this dream that motivated him to strive to achieve the liberation of our country.最后總結(jié)：說起來雞湯文就這五句話，但是不要，不要，不要寫成模板文 can be an enthusiastic love of life that puts a sparkle in our eyes. / Dreams can smooth the wrinkles from our souls.高中英語新高考-英語作文：如何真正提高作文分數(shù)？ 實評一個優(yōu)

17、秀學生的作文關(guān)于作文下面我要評的作文是一個成績比較好的網(wǎng)課班同學的作文，很多時候，很多學生弄不明白，明明我已經(jīng)很努力在寫作了，句子長，各種復雜的語法結(jié)構(gòu)；短語也有， 但為什么分數(shù)不高。本文主要講講這個。Nowadays, idol-worshiping is popular among teenagers. The idols are their heroes. They admire them, they imitate them, and their world seems to be filled with them. Recently, a pair of parents from Z

18、hejiang province took their daughter, a middle school student, to a fan meeting for her favorite star in Shanghai, even though there was a typhoon in the city that day. Teenagers respond differently to the event.Wang Yuxin, 17:I dont agree with the parents idea. To make their idol more popular, stud

19、ents often spend much money supporting them. They waste their time on these stars, which should be spent studying. What about the scientists who make lots of contributions to the development of society? Many people dont even know these scientists names.Wang Yidi. 15:I agree with the parents action.

20、Its normal for a teenager to have a favorite star. In some aspects, the star they like is a reflection of the person they want to be. So, the star may motivate them to work harder. I admire parents who take their children to fan meetings, and I believe the experience will leave a great impression on

21、 these teenagers.【寫作內(nèi)容】30 詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容；120 “偶像崇拜”的看法，并包括如下要點： 你如何評價目前年輕人“偶像崇拜”這一現(xiàn)象？ 在你的生活中什么樣的人會成為你的偶像，請舉例說明?！緦懽饕蟆磕憧梢詤⒄臻喿x材料的內(nèi)容但不得直接引用原文中的句子；作文指導1.概括：具體的事例(某人做了某事)+評價The passage tells that a pair of parents accompanied their daughter to Zhejiang provincewhowaseagertoseeamoviestar,heridol,despiteatypho

22、on.Opinionsare divided on theevent.細節(jié)：even though there was a typhoon in the city that day despite a typhoon Teenagers respond differently to the Opinions are divided on the event. 2./ 價值觀來說明I think we should be cautious about idol-worshiping. Star fans, the majority of whom are teenagers and young

23、adults, are used to blindly following every aspect of celebrities behavior, accepting both positive and negative influences as universal truths. The young, once their values are shaped by them, tend to be slaves to fame and wealth at any cost. Besides, large quantities of money and time spent on ido

24、ls will put great pressure on their families, let alone study.3.我的偶像In my opinion, whats most important are values and qualities, such as honesty, diligence, and persistence. Therefore, my heroes are scientists who devote themselves to the exploration of space and have just made a big breakthrough i

25、n Change 4s landing on the moon.學生作文評點With idol-worshiping gaining popularity, many teenagers tend to meet for their idols.trdo tend to meet for 改 為 ：are crazy about joining their idols meetings.）Just as thepassage above demonstrates, netizens hold very different opinions as to this issue.tnedhyters

26、eer.這是漢式英語，漢式英語最突出的一點就是累贅，修改：parents often go too far when it comes to spoilingtheirchildren.朗文詞典：gotoofaralsotake/carrysth too far：to do something too extreme e.g. One day she will go too far. Some people thoughthehadgonetoofarinhiscriticismofthepolice. ）Nowadays, the phenomenon is common and has i

27、ts roots. As a matter of fact, the development of modern technology has inevitably pushed for the presentation of celebrities. We should acknowledge that we need someone to be arolemodel.（文章要求談的是你對明星崇拜的觀點但此處大量筆墨花在了講原因上或者刪掉或者進一步修改。原句里的：pushforthepresentationof 這個句子看起來也是漢式英語， 考生說的是科技帶來了明星的出現(xiàn)，邏輯不當：科技和明

28、星之間沒有什么聯(lián)系準確說應該是科技的發(fā)展讓人更快獲得關(guān)注他們千方百計迎合大眾進而成為偶像：thefastdevelopmentoftechnologicaltoolsmakesroomforthosewhotryto appeal to the public by all means just to act as the idols ）However, it should be kept inmindthatwecannotignoretheimportanceoffocusingonouracademic performance.Otherwise,idol-worshipingwillne

29、gativelyaffectourstudyand這個和前面邏輯也是出現(xiàn)斷檔，偶像崇拜和學習沒有必然的聯(lián)系，需要修改為： idols worshipping undoubtedly interfere with our study because it will take up much time which otherwise could be spent on learning and distract our attention from As to meI will think twice and choose the idol. （主題句空洞無物，直接去掉）A suitable id

30、ol should be equipped with many qualities, such as honesty, humorsense（senseofhumor）generosityandconfidenceWhatsmoreadevotedand self-disciplinedpersonisworthimitatingOnlybylearningfromsuchpersoncanwe trulybenefitalotandimprove漏掉要點了，沒有寫自己的偶像）簡潔為上；邏輯為上，千萬不要以為“你懂得”，實際上讀者不懂。就第 2 點，我們再來看看這位高二同學的作文的一句：On

31、the other hand, most idols of the young are pop singers and famous actors,whose contributions to the society are but entertaining songs and films, much less than that of the committed but unknown scientists in the laboratory. Despite the fact that they are well-received, they dont worth the over-due

32、 worshiping.our media prefer to put pop singers and famous actors in the limelight and make great efforts to sing high praise of them. It will make the young look down upon many diligent scientists and teachers.-請閱讀下面文字，并按照要求用英語寫一篇150 詞左右的文章。More than 100,000 volunteers in 132 cities spent a weekend

33、 picking up plastic and other waste across the country, in a joint worldwide effort to clean up the planet.To celebrate the 10th World Cleanup Day on Sept 15, some 700 non-profit NGOs (non-governmental originations) and social groups held activities aimed at cleaning up the environment and tackling

34、the waste crisis throughout China, mobilizing an estimated 1 million-plus people.From snowcapped mountains to vast oceans, people united in taking action to remove waste from the environment to raise awareness of the severity of the crisis.“Where there is a will, every day can be and should be Clean

35、up Day,” says Ma Yongjian, a volunteer from Beijing who recently did “plogging”jogging while picking up trashwith his friends in Yudong Park in the northwest of the city.“We must change the way of living we are used to, to reduce waste from its source,” says Joe Harvey, a British national and promot

36、er of “zero waste” lifestyles in China. H e and his girlfriend Carrie Yu created The Bulk House, a brand that provides zero-waste solutions for daily living. They are urging people to reduce or eliminate the use of plastic and single-use disposables, such as plastic utensils, bags and beverage bottl

37、es.Sounding a note of caution, Mao Da, a specialist in environmental history at Beijing Normal University, says: “In recent years, the massive consumption and materialistic craze have worsened the waste situation as trash has been produced at a fasterpace and in greater quantities.”【寫作內(nèi)容】1. 30 概括寫法一

38、找、二并、三換概括大意需要文體，無非：新聞體、故事體、論說文。就本文而言，是新聞體。新聞體的大意主要看：事實和評論s and ，評論有時和寫作目的交織在一起。關(guān)注點：首段和末段（目的非常重要）步驟：找關(guān)鍵信息More than 100,000 volunteers in 132 cities spent a weekend picking up plastic and other waste across the country, in a joint worldwide effort to clean up the planet.To celebrate the 10th World Cle

39、anup Dayactivities aimed at cleaning up the environment and tackling the waste crisispeople united in taking action to remove waste from the environment to raise awareness of the severity of the crisis.提煉和合并（例如數(shù)字+do sth to do.by doing.More than 100,000 volunteers in 132 cities spent a weekend pickin

40、g up plastic and other waste across the country, in a joint worldwide effort to clean up the planet.To celebrate the 10t h World Cleanup Dayactivities aimed at cleaning up the environment and tackling the waste crisispeople united in taking action to remove waste from the environment to raise awaren

41、ess of the severity of the crisis.這里面目的有好幾處，但基本相同，因此：clean up the planet, raise awareness of the severity of waste crisis最終是：In celebrating the 10th World Cleanup Day, people make a joint worldwide effort to clean up the planet and raise awareness of the severity of waste crisis.但這個句子由于和原文相似多，稍微變換一下

42、，改成：sb do sth to do.by doing.。The 10th World Cleanup Day has raised public awareness of the severity of waste crisis by encouraging more and more people worldwide to clean up the planet together.主體材料中來，材料中去及類似活動有哪些看法？positive 方好寫：思維要點：環(huán)保，健康環(huán)保reduce waste, create a clean environment where people live

43、 in harmony with natureserve as a wake-up call / reminder that we should pursue a healthy lifestyle.Undoubtedly, such activities can benefit the whole society a lot in many ways.（說明主旨）First,y e o a n and s . ）e e suffering the consequences of the worsening environment and unfortunately the mounting

44、wastes e f e t .h s g p , e k and e y y and y. ） Besides, they serve as a wake-up call that people should pursue a healthier lifestyle such as avoiding overconsumption. （要點二：生活方式的變化。同時用舉例法）你覺得要采取哪些措施來保持環(huán)境整潔？公共性的措施無非是一大一小一意識，即：個人怎么做，政府怎么做。措施：awareness:regulationsrecycling products拓展。原文有：Where there i

45、s a will, every day can be and should be Cleanup Day reduce waste from its sourcereduce or eliminate the use of plastic and single-use disposables, such as plastic utensils, bags and beverage bottles綜合一下：Honestly speaking, holding activities alone is far from enough.( 說 明 主 旨 ) For one thing, each i

46、ndividual should do his part to clean the environment around him instead of throwing rubbish at.d fA e t make a big difference.（承接前一句，說明原因）For another, producers should obeyl s and s and e t o 要點二：生產(chǎn)商做法。為了）Only in this way can a clean earth be in sight（最后總結(jié)）完整的作文：The 10th World Cleanup Day has raise

47、d public awareness of the severity of waste crisis by encouraging more and more people worldwide to clean up the planet together.Undoubtedly, such activities can benefit the whole society greatly. First, they contribute to a clean and harmonious environment. People have been suffering the consequenc

48、es of worseningenvironment and unfortunately the mounting waste is one of the root causes. With volunteers cleaning up the waste, people work and socialize happily physically and psychologically. Besides, they serve as a wake-up call that people should pursue a healthier lifestyle such as avoiding o

49、verconsumption.Honestly speaking, holding activities alone is far from enough. For one thing, each individual should do his part to clean the environment around him instead of throwing rubbish at will. A little effort makes a big difference. For another, producers should obey environmental rules and

50、 be subject to supervision. Only in this way can a clean earth be in sight158 )心得不要過于自信，慢慢說，小心寫（這里就是閱卷老師在最短時 （但不要都是另外，句子一長了，各種漢式說法就冒出來了，神不知鬼不覺的。一些搭配要牢記。參考答案說明：個人感覺答案第二部分說看法時，只是把材料復述一遍，并非發(fā)表了看法，因此需要斟酌。A great many volunteers throughout the country made joint efforts to pick up rubbish scattered around

51、 so as to bring the severity of environmental crisis into the public focus.The past decades have witnessed the development of economy, but we pay a high price for it, damaging the environment. To observe the 10th World Clean Up Day, the Chinese participate in this worldwide action. Some organization

52、s have carried out various programs targeted at cleaning up our surroundings and awakening peoples awareness of environmental protection. In response to the campaigns launched, people do their bits to help sustain the planet where we co-exist.As for individuals, we can start from minor things as fol

53、lows. To begin with, we can use energy-saving products as much as possible. In the second place, we cannot throw rubbish at will and we can eliminate using plastic and disposable chopsticks. Only when we all enhance theeco-friendly awareness can we enjoy a healthier life.高中英語新高考-英語作文：談談寫作的評判性思維（簡化模式

54、）評判性思維英文名字：critical thinking。定義頗多，各種術(shù)語比較費腦。我參考了一些文本解釋，比較通俗易懂的是下面這個：批判性思維就是一種慎重的思考過程。在這一過程中，你使用批判性思維來考慮一個問題。最終，你判斷什么是可信的，或決定將要做什么。以下是批判性思維的方法，包括：1、別急著判斷，而是檢查一個命題或行動的有效性。2、用多維視角思考。3、考慮一個想法或行動的內(nèi)涵和影響。4、用理由和證據(jù)來解決分歧。5、根據(jù)最新信息來重新評價一個觀點。簡化為：1、你的觀點是什么？2、你有什么理由支持你的觀點？3、你為什么這么想？4、關(guān)于這個問題有沒有不同的視角？因此總結(jié)一下比較容易掌握的評判性

55、思維的模式：主題解釋一下給個細節(jié)或例子為什么呢/那又如何？ 這種練習可以在平時經(jīng)常練習，例如：小明遲到了-為什么呢？It is because 他起晚了 為什么呢？for the reason that 熬夜打游戲is clear that -means that 他上課-, 他回家無法完成課堂作業(yè)。題目請閱讀下面短文，并按照要求用英語寫一篇150 詞左右的文章。Li Shuangying said her 18-year- old son, who just took this years college entrance exam, would become a professional

56、in the artificial intelligence (AI) field.Artificial intelligence is the branch of computer science concerned with making computers behave like humans. The requirement for AI talents is a solid foundation of maths and English, so for senior high graduates, they should have a higher mathematical thin

57、king ability and have a good command of English if they want to become professional in AI.Li Shuangying said her son always has been one of the top students in his class at one of the leading high schools in Zhongshan, Guangdong province. Zhongshan, which neighbors Guangzhou, has been one of Chinas

58、pioneering cities in embracing reform and opening up. It flourished （繁榮 labor-intensive industries, but recent rising labor shortages and costs have become a real threat. In response, local manufacturers have been quick to embrace automation （自動化）and adopt AI-assisted robots for survival.The company

59、 Li works for, a medium-sized home appliance manufacturer with annual output of about 1 billion yuan（$150 million）, is no exception. Li said she used to bring her son to her workplace from time to time, and he has developed a strong interest in AI, automation and robots.“Our family all agree that AI

60、 is the trend, and it holds great potential for future development,” Li said. That view is shared by many college students and their parents, who consider Al a desirable major.【寫作內(nèi)容】30 個詞概括上文。120 請你談談對人工智能專業(yè)的看法；作為高三學生，你是否會選擇人工智能專業(yè)？簡要說明理由3 點如何概括第一步：確定本文是新聞體，通過一個具體例子來談現(xiàn)象，因此具體人物細節(jié)就不要出現(xiàn)，應該籠統(tǒng)說是一類人。找（關(guān)鍵句）