2022-2023學(xué)年高中英語人教版（2019）必修第一冊讀后續(xù)寫微技能訓(xùn)練（一）課件

1、讀后續(xù)寫微技能（一）波峰李樹果9/30/2022Mr Lee1定主旨名意圖，續(xù)寫不走偏技能解讀讀后續(xù)寫不是無視原文的獨(dú)立創(chuàng)作，而應(yīng)順著原文作者的思路完成未完成的文本。動手續(xù)寫前，應(yīng)先認(rèn)真閱讀原文，理清原文的人物、故事情節(jié)發(fā)展線和情感發(fā)展線，把握其文本大意和敘事意圖。1.記敘文類的文本大意，即主要人或物，描述的主要事件和結(jié)果；而敘事意圖指故事主要內(nèi)容、傳遞給讀者的信息，可以是情，也可以是理；2.準(zhǔn)確理解原文，根據(jù)“誰、發(fā)生了什么”，快速理清原文對主要人或物的描寫并整理相關(guān)事件，提煉原文大意和敘事意圖；3.續(xù)寫部分要在文本大意、敘述意圖和主題上與原文保持一致。9/30/2022Mr Lee2典例展

2、示閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。 During this past year , Ive had three instances of car trouble . Each time these things happened , I was sick of the way most people hadnt bothered to help . One of those times ,I was on the side of the road for close to three hours with my big Jeep . I put sig

3、ns in the windows , big signs that said NEED A JACK(千斤頂)，and offered money .Nothing . Right as I was about to give up , a Mexican family in a small truck pulled over, and the father bounded out . He sized up the situation and called for his daughter, who spoke English . He conveyed through her that

4、he had a jack but that it was too small for the Jeep, so we would need something to support it . Then he got a saw(鋸子)from the truck and cut a section out of a big log on the side of the road . We rolled it over and put his jack on top , and we were in business.9/30/2022Mr Lee3 I started taking the

5、wheel off , and then , if you can believe it , I broke his tire iron . No worries: He handed it to his wife , and she was gone in a flash down the road to buy a new tire iron . She was back in15 minutes . We finished the job ,and I was a very happy man . The two of us were dirty and sweaty .His wife

6、 prepared a pot of water for us to wash our hands. I tried to put a $20 bill in the mans hand , but he wouldnt take it , so instead I went up to the truck and gave it to his wife as quietly as I could . I asked the little girl where they lived .Mexico ,“ she said . They were in Oregon so Mother and

7、Father could work on a fruit farm for the next few weeks . Then they would go home.注意： 1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2.請按如下格式作答。 When I was about to say goodbye , the girl asked if Id had lunch. . After they left , I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag. .9/30/2022Mr Lee4四步成文第一步 把握文本大意明主旨和兩線文本大意作者的汽車出故障后，本以為無

8、人愿意大意幫忙，沒想到一家墨西哥人不嫌麻煩、不計(jì)回報，幫作者修好了汽車。原文兩情線情節(jié)線：汽車出故障好心人幫忙修車原文支付報酬情感線：失望開心感激敘事意圖通過敘述一次不計(jì)報酬的助人故事，體意圖現(xiàn)了無私的精神，并傳遞了愛的正能量。9/30/2022Mr Lee5第二步 據(jù)兩首句信息確定續(xù)寫方向1.兩段首句定一框 (I)根據(jù)第一段首句中的“the girl asked if Id had lunch”可推出，接下來可描寫作者對此問題的回答，接著敘述他們是否一起吃午飯。 (2)根據(jù)第二段首句中的“the paper bag”可逆推出，續(xù)寫第二段應(yīng)提及墨西哥家庭給了作者一個紙袋子。2.二框二首正能量

9、(I)根據(jù)第二段首句中的“opened the paperbag”,第一段首句中的“l(fā)unch”和原文中的“a$20bi”可推出，續(xù)寫第二段中可描述紙袋里裝的是食物和20美元。 (2)續(xù)寫第二段尾句應(yīng)呼應(yīng)原文主題寫出感悟，體現(xiàn)傳遞愛的正能量。9/30/2022Mr Lee6第三步 原續(xù)兩情相悅合理添加細(xì)節(jié)1,續(xù)寫部分情節(jié)線和情感線的發(fā)展，應(yīng)與原文故事的情節(jié)線和情感線一致，以達(dá)到“兩情相悅”。 (1)續(xù)寫部分的情節(jié)線應(yīng)是：和墨西哥家庭一起吃午飯給作者紙袋打開紙袋在紙袋里發(fā)現(xiàn)什么。應(yīng)側(cè)重面部表情、心理活動、動作細(xì)節(jié)的描寫； (2)情感線的走向應(yīng)是驚喜、驚訝，感激、感動等情感描寫。2.添加細(xì)節(jié)：在描

10、寫墨西哥家庭邀請作者吃午飯時，可利用面部表情（如微笑）和動作細(xì)節(jié)描寫。敘述作者打開紙袋、發(fā)現(xiàn)里面的東西時，應(yīng)側(cè)重驚訝、感激、感動等情感描寫。9/30/2022Mr Lee7第四步 沿原語言特點(diǎn) 完美連貫表達(dá)原文利用簡單句、并列句、非謂語動詞和主從復(fù)合句進(jìn)行動作和情感描寫，續(xù)寫部分可利用適當(dāng)?shù)牟⒘芯?、非謂語和復(fù)合句描寫動作和情感9/30/2022Mr Lee8摹寫閱讀 When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if Id had lunch . A bright smile flashed on her face when I said I

11、hadnt. The family invited me to enjoy the lunch together. Originally refused but watching their enthusiastic faces l nodded with gratitude. We shared a wonderful meal , over which they shared interesting stories about their lives in Mexico and on fruit farms. After lunch ,the girls mother put a pape

12、r bag in my jeep. I showed my gratitude again and we said goodbye to each other.9/30/2022Mr Lee9 After they left . I got into my jeep and opened the paper bag. Inside the bag were some fruits. I was also surprised to find the $20 bill . I was overcome with a mixture of respect and gratitude. It was awesome to know that while many people tend to ignore tho