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第二部分：圖畫作文寫作的訓(xùn)練：1、尋找參照物2、兩種訓(xùn)練方法：(1)英漢互譯(2)模仿法-imitationcarefullyandwriteanessay2002年寫作真題studythefollowingpictureentitled "Cultures——NationalcarefullyandwriteanessayandInternationaln.Intheessayyoushould1)describethepictureandinterpretitsmeaning,and2)giveyourcommentonthephe-nomenon.Youshouldwriteabout200wordsneatlyonANSWERSHEET2.(20points)關(guān)于comment的三個寫作角度：1、提建議yoursuggestions,yoursolutions;2、考慮背景及原因backgroundandreasons;3、描述未來、預(yù)測未來；(審題構(gòu)思時應(yīng)注意：以小見大、把握象征寓意)描述圖畫的單詞：發(fā)帶ribbon耳環(huán)earrings項鏈necklace少數(shù)民族minoritygroup 婦女服飾accessories范文再現(xiàn)：ThispicturevividlydepictsalovelyAmericangirlintraditionalChinesecostumewithasweetsmileonherface.Shewearsribbons,earrings,necklacesandotheraccessories,thatarecharacteristicoftheclothesofacertainChineseminoritygroup.Undoubtedly,thiscostumehasaddedorientalcharmtoherbeautifullook.Whatthepictureconveysgoesfarbeyondonlyafashiontrend.Insteaditcarriesculturalmeanings.ThefactthatpeoplefromdifferentcountriesareattractedtothemysteriousChineseculture,indicatesthattosomeextentaculturecanbeaccepted,respected,appreciated,andsharedinternationally.Inotherwords,anation1suniqueculturecanbecomeinternational（走向世界）throughworldwideeconomicandculturalexchanges.Sincethetrendofglobalizationseemsincreasinglyirresistible（不可抵擋）,culturalcommunicationswilleffectivelyimprovemutualunderstandingandfriendship.Inmyopinion,nationalcultureasapricelessspiritualtreasureshouldbepreservedandcherished.Yettherearegoodreasonstoadvocateinternationalculture.Forthoseideasfromtheothercultures,controversial（有爭議的、格格不入的）orevenabsurdatfirstsight,canprovideadifferentperspectiveforustoobservetheworld.However,whenweareconfrontedwithadifferentculture,weshouldbesensibleenoughtoabsorbitsessenceandtoresistitsdarkside（取其精華、去其米曹粕）.Onlyinthiswaycanwepromoteculturaldevelopmentpositively,andmakeourworlddimensional,colorfulandvigorous.寫作題型總結(jié)：1、提綱式作文（91年-96年）2,圖表作文（97年、99年）3、圖畫作文（98年、00年、01年、02年、03年）4、情景式作文（新增加，尚未考過）5、簡單應(yīng)用文（新增加，尚未考過）著重研究事務(wù)信函（分為建議信、求職信、申請信、表揚信、投訴信等）四大類主題題型總結(jié)：1、觀點對比選擇題eg.（91年）Wheretolive,inthecityorthecountry?提綱：1、城市的利與弊2、鄉(xiāng)村的利與弊3、我的看法，我的選擇（四六級99年）Readingselectivelyorextensively?（四六級97年）Myviewonjob-hopping（四六級00年）大學(xué)英語口語考試是否必要？推薦題目：（1）Whichtocelebrate,westernfestivalsortheChinese?Cyber-bars*advantagesanddisadvantages（網(wǎng)吧的利與弊）Myviewonprivatecars2、現(xiàn)象闡釋題eg.（93年）TVadvertisements提綱：（1）presentstates（2）reasons（3）mycomments（94年）Onmakingfriends闡釋：（1）theneedforfriendtruefriendshipmyprinciple（96年）goodhealth闡釋：（1）importanceofgoodhealthwaystokeepfitmyownpractice新概念：亞健康狀態(tài)、全民補鈣、關(guān)愛老年人健康、綠色食品、全民健身、愛滋病的蔓延、精神抑郁癥、保齡秋熱、瑜珈功熱、健身操熱、瘋牛病的威脅…第二段：對keepfit的錯誤理解；三種可行的觀點：（1）鍛煉身體及方式；（2）保證飲食健康；haveregularmeals;goonadiet;（3）同樣要保證精神健康；optimisticmentality開朗樂觀的心態(tài)（02年）Cultures—NationalandInternational闡釋略（看前面的范文）3、問題解決題關(guān)鍵：文章的第三段，如何解決問題代表作：（98年）Suchpromises考題描述：圖片插入語：（1）本母雞下蛋不見棱見角；（2）保證有蛋皮、蛋清、蛋黃；

蛋清eggwhite;蛋皮eggshell;蛋黃yolk;都不必寫。打油詩：各行各業(yè)興承諾，歡迎監(jiān)督不委托；原本皆為份內(nèi)事，何須高唱文明歌。圖畫作文做題原則：構(gòu)思時，需要以小見大，把握象征寓意。分析主題：抨擊各行各業(yè)中對于完成自己職責(zé)的浮夸風(fēng)；提倡少說空話、多干實事的精神。提建議的思路：先說國家、政府該怎么辦，問題主要是由于國家的法律制度不健全，所以國家政府應(yīng)當制定法律法規(guī)；第二條思路，自己應(yīng)提高個人覺悟建議：平時多注意這類事物，有意識的自我練習(xí)。舉例：（1）諷刺中小學(xué)、大學(xué)的亂收費問題overcharging；（2）諷刺電視節(jié)目對兒童的不利影響；（3）諷刺大城市的空氣污染現(xiàn)象。尤為重要：以小見大，把一個現(xiàn)象看作一個普遍現(xiàn)象。（03年）溫室中的花朵經(jīng)不起風(fēng)雨題目分析：溫室greenhouse;要鍛煉自己的獨立生活能力，在艱苦環(huán)境下磨練自己的毅力才有前途，才能發(fā)展。4、觀點論證題（01年出現(xiàn)）（文章第二段中）命題角度：1、舉例論證段2、原因論證段AbriefHistoryofWorldCommercialFishing3,數(shù)據(jù)論證段代表作：（01年）愛心是一盞燈，在越黑暗的地方越明亮。（助人為樂的主題）AbriefHistoryofWorldCommercialFishing2000年考題Studythefollowingtwopicturescarefullyandwriteandessayto1）describethepictures,deduce（推理）thepurposeofthedrawerofthepictures,andsuggestcounter-measures（對策）.Youshouldwriteabout200wordsneatlyonANSWERSHEET2.Asisshowninthepictures,wecanseeclearlythatwiththerampancyofcommercialfishing,thenumberoffishesconsiderablydecreased.Inonepicture,therewerevariouskindsoffishandonlyonefishing-boatin1900.Onthecontrary,in1995therewasonlyonefish,butmanyfishing-boats.Thepurposeofthispicture（修正為thetwopictures或thepictures與第一段一致）istoshowusthatdueattentionhastobepaidtothedecrease（可換為decline>reduction>shrinkage>shrinking）ofoceanresources.Owingtoover-fishingthenumberoffisheshasobviouslydecreased（可換為declined、reduced>shrunk）.Ifweletthissituationgoasitis,wewon'tknowwherefishisinthefuture.（一般說我不知道,你不知道,他不知道用一般現(xiàn)在時就夠了：Idon'tknow不管過去，現(xiàn)在，未來都用這個形式，于是改為：willbeinthefutureo）Bythattime,ourenvironmentwillsufferagreatdestruction.（提示：By+未來時間:將來完成時對應(yīng)結(jié)構(gòu)是:willhavedone即我們將已經(jīng)……）Therefore,itisimperativeforustotakedrastic（firm）measures.Foronething,weshouldappealtoourauthoritiestomakestrictlawstocontrolcommercialfishing.Foranother,weshouldenhance（cultivate）theawarenessofpeoplethattheoceanresourcesareveryvital（重要的）tous.Onlyinthiswaycanweprotectouroceanresources.AlsoIbelievethatwehumanscanovercomethisdifficulty,andwewillhaveabrilliantfuture.第三部分考研寫作的訓(xùn)練方法復(fù)習(xí)：學(xué)習(xí)寫作的訓(xùn)練方法：.會意法找一篇250~300字的范文，反復(fù)的英漢互譯，通過此過程中的檢查和比較來發(fā)現(xiàn)自己的語法和拼寫錯誤，逐漸使范文作者的語言中的優(yōu)秀的閃光點為我所用，從而達到提高自己水平的目的。.模仿法在每聯(lián)一篇范文的時候都把它的好的句型和閃光點抄在卡片上，不斷的accumulation并匯集成冊，然后在以后每次的訓(xùn)練中刻意的用3~5個，這樣循序漸進，作文便有把握突破10分，12分。學(xué)習(xí)方法方面的建議：強化詞匯詞匯量少會導(dǎo)致語言貧乏，沒有辦法做到豐富多變，所以需要大幅度擴展詞匯，譬如接近考研大綱要求的5300個詞匯，如果在詞匯量沒有大幅度擴展的時候，期望以題海戰(zhàn)術(shù)來提高的話，效果是不會太明顯的。建議在7月份之前至少把去年的大綱詞匯過一遍，在新大綱出臺后再結(jié)合新大綱，查漏補缺。這樣通過詞匯量的大幅擴展就可以使聽力，閱讀，寫作的水平都有很大的提高。單詞記憶的幾點建議：.卡片記憶：把難記的單詞，長單詞，偏詞，怪詞記在卡片上，在平時多看兒遍，從而輕松的就記住了。.通過閱讀記憶：在上面記住的基礎(chǔ)上，通過大量閱讀，不斷應(yīng)用，不斷重復(fù)，不斷檢驗，便可以牢牢的記住了。.經(jīng)常自測：譬如利用單詞表，先看英語說漢語意思，其中不熟的，沒記住的，單獨摘出來或標記出來；再反過來，看英語說漢語，也把不熟的和沒記住的標出來，對這些反復(fù)的記憶。.尋找考研伙伴，互相測試：每天互相考一下，把難記的，長的，偏的，怪的多考一考，利用互相的競爭意識，來激發(fā)學(xué)習(xí)的欲望，從而但到記憶的目的。二.學(xué)以致用：在記住的基礎(chǔ)上不斷練習(xí)，達到熟能生巧的效果。例句：大家普遍認為譯文一:Peopleusuallythink譯文二：Itisuniversallyacknowlegedthat譯文三：Itisgenerallyacceptedthat譯文四：Itiswidelybelievedthat例句：不言而喻譯文-：Itgoeswithoutsayingthat譯文二：Thereisnodenyingthat譯文三：Thereisacommonbeliefthat例句：大家普遍認為互聯(lián)網(wǎng)在現(xiàn)代社會中發(fā)揮著越來越重要的作用。譯文：Itisuniversallyacknowlegedthatinternetisplayinganincreasinglyimportantroleinourinformationsociety.譯文：Itgoeswithoutsayingthatinternetisplayinganincreasinglyimportantroleinourinformationsociety.例句：大家普遍公認Beatles是英國歷史上最偉大的搖滾樂隊。譯文：ItisuniversallyacknowlegedthatBeatlesisthegreatestrock-bandintheBritishhistory.譯文：ThereisacommonbeliefthatBeatlesisthegreatestrock-bandintheBritishhistory.三.把書讀透：面對大量的優(yōu)秀的權(quán)威的資料，書籍，買了好多，但是每本都淺嘗輒止，這樣做是根本沒有效果的。我們從多個英語學(xué)習(xí)成功人士的事例中總結(jié)出來的方法是，選定一本喜歡的書，認真地把它讀透，把里面的每

個單詞，每個優(yōu)秀的句子，包括磁帶都鉆研透，這樣的話應(yīng)該會有巨大的飛躍。四：在寫作中培養(yǎng)一絲不茍的學(xué)習(xí)態(tài)度：良好的寫作習(xí)慣不僅在考試中會擁有優(yōu)勢；而且對于形成良好的工作習(xí)慣，以及作為眾多的英語學(xué)習(xí)者中的佼佼者而脫穎而出都是大有裨益的。我從我的學(xué)習(xí)經(jīng)歷中總結(jié)出來，只有始終抱著一絲不茍的態(tài)度，對所作的工作，認真的反復(fù)的檢查，才能保證精品的誕生。積少成多，聚沙成塔，一兩個小錯誤不在乎的話，錯誤多了，就有可能掩蓋你工作真正的閃光點。所以說真正優(yōu)秀的英語要一滴滴積累，一點點磨練才能換來的。第四部分考研作文范文分析主旨：以一絲不茍的態(tài)度對范文認真地分析，從而提高對語言的敏感性。好的作文需要語言豐富多變：重要的單詞盡量不重復(fù)有些主題詞難免重復(fù)：譬如computer,PC對于非主題詞，如形容詞，副詞，動詞則能改造就改造，用同義詞，近義詞來表達。減少，縮減；decrease減少，衰退，范圍減少；declinedeclinedeclined減少reducereductionreduced范圍減小，范圍減縮；shrinkshrinkage;shrinking;shrunk改造動詞時要具體情況具體分析，對特殊動詞要注意它的特殊的過去式形式（具體修改在2000年真題第4頁上的范文）圖畫作文范文二范文八Directions:Studythefollowingcartooncarefullyandwriteandessayinabout200words.▲Q殺￥▲Q殺￥Youressayshouldmeettherequirementsbelow:DecribethecartoonandthemessageconveyedDrawaconclusionandgiveyourcommentonthecartoonPollutionisbecomingmoreandmoreseriousallovertheworld.Asisshowninthecartoon,twocarsaregivingoffwastegasandthreepeopletryingtoavoidbreathinginthepoisonousgasbymaskingtheirfacewiththeirhands.Thepoisonousgassentoffbyfactories,domesticappliancesandautomobileshasmadetheairunhealthyforpeopletobreathe.Thereisnodenyingthatautomobilesareindicationsofcivilization,progressanddevelopment;nevertheless,automobilescausetheseriousproblemofairpollution.Scientistshavewarnedthatunlesseffectivemeasuresaretaken,theproblemofpollutionwilleventuallygetoutofhand（除非采取有效的措施，否則問題將會失控）.Actually,peopleareshowingareal（可替換為growing）concernover（固定搭西i!）theproblem.Forexample,thereisanincreasinglyloudvoicefromthepublicforfirmactionagainstpollutionfromautomobiles.Indeed,theearthisourhomeandwehavethedutytotakecareofitforourselvesandforourdescendants.Inmyopinion,weshouldworkoutconcretesolutionstotheproblemofpollutionfrompoisonousgasgivenoffbyautomobiles.Forexample,theautomobilesshouldbeequippedwithadevicewhichcandisposeofwastegas.Iconcretesolutionstotheproblemofpollutionfrompoisonousgasgivenoffbyautomobiles.Forexample,theautomobilesshouldbeequippedwithadevicewhichcandisposeofwastegassoastopreventitfrompollutingair.Onlyinthiswaycanwereallysolvetheproblemofairpollutioncausedbyautomobiles.（優(yōu)點：在文末用倒裝句展現(xiàn)句型的豐富多變）Cartoon：漫畫，卡通畫picture,photo：照片giveoff：排放sendoff：排放wastegas：廢氣poisonousgas：有毒氣體用手捂住臉：covermyfacewithmyhandsmaskingtheirfacewiththeirhands.家用電器：domesticapplianceshouseholdappliances不可否認的是：thereisnodenyingthat 是 的標志：areindicationsof或者用isanindicationof又或者是areindicativeof 是 的象征：isasymbolof同樣有：besymbolicof標志著：indicate或者是：symbolize盡管如此：nevertheless導(dǎo)致嚴重問題causetheseriousproblem同義詞：嚴重的severesevereproblem嚴重的問題severeconsequence嚴重的結(jié)果grave

嚴厲果斷的措施：firmaction 堅決果斷的：drastic所以也可替換為：drasticmeasures在我看來：inmyopinion制定出：workout制定法律：makelaws取的作文高分的必要前提是句型要豐富多變，要有倒裝句。圖畫作文范文之三范文十Directions:Studythefollowingcartooncarefullyandwriteanessayinabout200words.YouressaymustbewrittenclearlyonANSWERSHEETII.Youressayshouldmeettherequirementsbelow:DescribethecartoonandthemessageconveyedDrawaconclusionandgiveyourcommentonthecartoon.Today,theearth'sdesertsarespreadingandgettinglargeranddesertificationisaseriousproblemfacingtheworld.Themajorreasonforthisisirresponsiblecuttingdownoftrees.Asisshowninthefirstcartoon,whenpeoplecutdowntreesdesertforceson（沙漠以巨大的動力向前推進，勢不可擋）andbecomesirrepressible.Peoplecutdowntreesforvariousreasons（重復(fù)）buttheymayforgetthattreesplayavitalpartinwaterandsoilconservation（水土保持）.Treescanpreservemoisture（儲存濕度，水分）andfertility（養(yǎng)分,土壤的肥沃度，來源于fertile）inthesoil,protectsoilagainsterosionandpreventfertilelandfrombecomingdesert.Thereforewhenpeoplecutdownallofthetrees,theearthliesbareanddryinthehotsun,anddesertisinevitable.Desertificationcanleadtomanyotherseriousproblemswhichmaythreatentheexistenceofhumanbeings,suchasareductionofarableland,terribledroughts（旱災(zāi)）andfamine（饑荒）.Inordertopreventdesertification,peoplehavetoplanttrees,asthesecondcartoonshows.Thetimewhenpeopleplanttreesisthetimewhendesertretreats.Peopleshouldnotcutdowntreesanymore,asisdoneinthefirstcartoon,butrather,theyshouldplantmoretrees,andonlyinthiswaycandesertificationbefinallydefeated.（文章結(jié)尾倒裝句型可使文章豐富多彩）沙漠化：desertification壓制，克制：repress 可以壓制的：repressible 失控的：irrepressible同義：getoutofhandfertileland,fertilesoil肥沃的土地 nutEion食物的營養(yǎng)soilerosion土壤侵蝕可耕作的：arable 可耕地的減少：reductionofarableland缺點：一般的圖畫作文第一段應(yīng)該先描述圖畫，不應(yīng)該急于分析原因，一般的原因分析在第二段，提出建議在第三段。（結(jié)構(gòu)散亂）建議：寫作文如果要分段的話，每一段應(yīng)該是一個大的內(nèi)容，第二段只講原因，第三段提出建議，展望未來。切不可把內(nèi)容拆散到各段去。推薦的文章結(jié)尾采用的高難度句型：一.倒裝句型：Only 或者Onlyinthisway 或者是Onlybydoingso 即：倒裝句OMy+介詞短語二.強調(diào)句Itis that 結(jié)構(gòu)例如：Itisinthisway/Itisbydoingsothatwecansolvetheproblem.三.虛擬句型Itishightime例如：Itishightimethatwechangedpresentsituation.Itishightimethatwesolvedtheproblem.注意：虛擬語氣必須在從句中采用動詞過去時重寫范文十：步驟：第一段詳細描述圖畫信息，Asisshowninthepictures,wecanseeclearlythestruggle（fightbattle）betweenpeopleanddesert.Inonepicture,peoplearefleeingthegreedy（hungly>overwhelming）desert.（說明：圖畫和圖表的所配文字可以用caption）Thecaptionindicatesthatasthesandadvances,weretreat.Onthecontrary,thesecondpicturedepictspeoplecarryingtools,youngtreesandwater（說明：spade鐵鍬；黑桃tool工具sapling樹苗；youngtrees樹苗）toplanttheearthagain.Thewordsdemonstratethatasweforceonthesandhillswithdraw（recede）.

第二段：Thepurposeofthetwopicturesastoshowasthatdueattentionhastobepaidtotheharmsofdesertification(desertexpansion).Owingtopeople'srampant()clearcuttingdesertisrapidlyourlivingspace.Inparticular,thesharpincreaseofsandstormsissoundinganalarmtoushumanbeings.Ifweletthissituationgoasitis,ourenvironmentwillsufferagreatdestruction.Therefore(astheresult,thus,hence,accordingly,inmyopinion,inconclusion),itisimperativeforustotakedrasticmeasures(要迫切采取嚴厲的措施).Foronething(ontheonehand,aboveall),weshouldappealtoourauthorities(governments)tomakestrictlaws(makelaws制定法律，可替換為workoutlaws)tocontroldeforestation(森林砍伐：clearcutting,deforestation,thecuttingofforests植樹造林：forestation).Foranother(ontheotherhand,inaddition,what'smore,furthermore),weshouldalsoenhancetheawarenessofpeoplethatthenaturalresourcesareveryvitaltous.Onlyinthiswaycanweprotectournaturalresources.AlsoIbelievethatwehumanscanovercomethisdifficulty,andwewillhaveabrilliantfuture.水土保持：waterandsoilconservation可以使用從句形式：forestresourcesareveryvitaltous利用倒裝句：Onlyinthiswaycanweprotectournaturalresources.利用強調(diào)句：Itisinthisway ,Bydoingsocanwe 利用虛擬句型：Itishightimethat 2001年作文：Amongalltheworthyfeelingsofmankind,loveisprobablythenoblest,buteveryonehashis/herownunderstandingofit.(在人類的所有價值感情里面，愛心可能是最崇高的，但是每個人理解不同。)Therehasbeenadiscussionrecentlyontheissueinanewspaper.Writeanessaytothenewspapertoshowyourunderstandingofthesymbolicmeaningofthepicturebelow,(即在第一段里面要把圖畫的象征寓意點出來)giveaspecificexample,(要給出一個具體的例子)andgiveyoursuggestionastothebestwaytoshowlove.Youshouldwriteabout200wordsonANSWERSHEET2.（20points）作文要求的改動：字數(shù)增多，由150增到200個；分值加大，評分標準放寬。增加情景語言，即：情景說明，提綱說明，以及圖畫。重要原則：英語情景說明語句，不可直接照搬，需要進行改動。盡量應(yīng)用同義，近義詞，相關(guān)表達，不同句式改造。例如worthy可以替換為valuable,feelings可以替換為emotions,mankind可以替換為humanbeing,可以改為beregardedas/beconsideredas/betakenas/beviewedas/bethoughtofasthenoblest,noblest可以替換為greatest,范文一：（20）Amongalltheworthyfeelingsofmankind,loveisprobablythenoblest.（照搬情景句很危險）Itisoftheutmostimportancetothehumanbeings（愛心對人類有至關(guān)重要的意義）,Everybodynotonlyneedslove,butalsoshouldgivelove.Asisdescribedinthepicture,nloveisalampwhichisbrighterindarkerplaces.nThisisindeedtrue.Peopleindarkerplacesneedmorelightthanordinarypeople.（邏輯錯誤）Mayeevenadimlight（微弱的光）cangivethemmuchhopeforabetterlifeandprogress.Maybejustathreadoflight（一線的光芒）willcallforththeirstrengthandcouragetostepoutof（走出困境）theirdifficulties.Forinstancewhensomeoneisstarvingtodeath,justalittlefoodandwaterfromyoumaysavehislife.（我們只是給出,些食物和水就可以幫助他拯救生命）Orwhenalittlegirlinapoorruralareadropsoutofschoolbecauseofpoverty,justasmallsumofmoneyfromyoumaysupporthertofinishherschoolingandchangeherlife（改變了女孩的人生）.Inthiscases,youhavegivenlovewhichislikealampinadarkplacewherelightismostneeded.（在這些例子里面，你已經(jīng)表現(xiàn)了愛心，向黑暗中的一盞燈一樣。）Sotosumup[Sotosumup因此，概括一下應(yīng)該么改為asaresult/therefore（因此）要么就改為inconclusion/tosumup（概括總結(jié)）],weshouldofferourhelptoallwhoareinneed.Weexpecttogetlovefromothersandwealsogivelovetootherssowhenyouseesomeoneindifficultyorindistressandinneedofhelp,don*thesitatetogiveyourlovetohim.Ibelievethentheralationshipbetweenpeoplewillbeharmoniousandoursocietywillbeabetterplaceforustolivein.When……just……結(jié)構(gòu)：當某人遇到……的困境的時候，我們只是這樣……就解決了問題。supposesb.doingsth.結(jié)構(gòu)：假設(shè)某人正遇到 的困境的時候,我們將 imaginesb.doingsth.,weshould 結(jié)構(gòu)：假設(shè)某人正遇到 的困境的時候,我們將……聯(lián)想：Afriendinneedisafriendindeed.患難之交才是真正的朋友范文二：（16）Itisgenerallybelievedthatloveisahottopicwhichismosttalkedabout.（句子內(nèi)容重復(fù)，沒有真實內(nèi)容）ThisistruenotonlyinChinabutalsoinothercountries.Weliveindifferentcountries,speakdifferentlanguages,butloveissomethingcommontousall.Buthowtoshowlove（結(jié)構(gòu)混亂）maybedifferentwithdifferentpeopleindifferentcountries.Thisissomethingweshouldgivemorethoughtto.Asshowninthepicture,loveislikealampwhichshinesbrightestindarkplaces.Thistellsusasimpletruth:Loveislikealamp.Itismostvaluablewhenitismostneeded.Forexample,onceIsawaforeignladygetlostinthestreet.ShecouldnotspeakChineseandnobodyseemedtobeabletohelpher.ThoughmyEnglishisnotverygoodandIwasashyperson（Iwasshy/Iwasveryshy就夠了），Ithoughtsheneededhelpverymuch.（desperately絕望地；極度地）Iaskedherwhatshewanted.Shetoldmeshelostherway,soIshowedherthewaytoherhotel.Itwasasmallthingbutshethankedmeverymuch（sincerely真誠的）becausemyhelpwasneededverymuch,（myhelpwasmostneeded）Myhelpwaslikealampinadarkplace.Ithink（太口語，最好使用：inmyopinion/asfarasIamconcemed/tosumup/inconclusion/onthewhole）weallshouldbelikealampinadarkplace,showingourlove,givingourhelptoothers,eventostrangers.Inthiswaywecan（一般用：Onlyinthiswaycanwe）makethisworldaharmoniousandpeacefulworld.“不同”還可以用：differfrom,varyfrom,distinctfrom范文三：（10）Inthepicturebelow,inthefulldarksituation（語句搭配不當，應(yīng)該說:畫面，背景，角落等等），alittleofsparkenlightens（enlighten啟發(fā)，啟發(fā)某人做 事用詞不當；應(yīng)該用brighten）thedark.Thenaive（naive幼稚，無知，傻乎乎的（貶義詞），innocent天真的（褒義詞））sparksmilessosweet.Itseemstobesaying,asthecaptioninthepicturereads,Iamalightoflove,themoredarkwhereIam,themoreenlighten.（錯誤1：dark的比較級應(yīng)該是darker錯誤2：dark這樣的短詞是沒必要加more的）Amongalltheworthyfeelingsofmankind,loveisprobablythenoblest.Asamatteroffact,allofussurviveinaloveworld.（切勿直接照搬情景句）Weofferlove,moreimportant,weneedlove.Iamahardworkingstudentthat（對人不應(yīng)該用that弓I導(dǎo)從句，應(yīng)該用who）isspecializedinComputerScienceandApplication.Onceatime（英語中的有一次只可以說：Once或者atonetime）,Ilostmymind（我發(fā)瘋了：Ilostmymind心不在焉：Iwasabsenceofmind）accidentallyasaresultIdroppeddownfromthedownstairs（downstairs不合邏輯應(yīng)該改為upstairs）,badlyinjured.Butfor（butfor結(jié)構(gòu)：要不是因為 主句里面應(yīng)該用情態(tài)動詞+完成式（would/couldhavedone））myroommates*helpIcouldn*tliveupnotonlyinphysics（在物理方面：inphysics在酒精方面：inspirits在肉體方面：inphysical在精神方面：inmental/mentally）butalsoinspirits.Ithankthem（時態(tài)錯誤，應(yīng)該用Ithanked）genuinly（genuinely:真誠地）.WhatIaccomplishedtoday（應(yīng)該用現(xiàn)在時態(tài):Ihaveaccomplished）party（party聚會，partially部分地）attributeto（attributesth.tosth.：……要被歸功于……attribute的賓語提前的話，應(yīng)該使用被動語態(tài)應(yīng)該是：sth.shouldbeattributedto）allofthemgivingmeahandtomyschoolwork.Ihope（習(xí)慣用法：一旦用hope,從句中應(yīng)該用will 即如：Ihopeshewill）Icanliveuptomyselfaswellasmyroommates.AsfarasIamconcerned（在我看來）,loveshouldbeshowedbytwomeans（通過兩種方式表達愛心）asfollows.Atthefirstplace（應(yīng)該改為inthefirstplace首先，第一）,weshouldkeepacriticaleye（keepaneyeonsth.詞組：密切關(guān)注，照料，照顧）onothers*loveshowedtous.Ofcourse,mostoftheloveisgoodforus,nevertheless,somedoesharmtous,suchashelpingtocheatinginexams.Thelastbutnotheleast（第二點應(yīng)該用：inthesecondplace/inadditionwhafsmorethelastbutnottheleast一般用于三個方面的最后一個，只有兩點是不用該詞組的），weshouldshowlovehearts（表達愛心'應(yīng)該用showlove而不是showloveheart）tothoseneedingthem.Asweknow,HopeProject（希望工程在英語中應(yīng)該說：projecthope）isthelargestloveprojectinourcountry,youshouldpayhighlyattentiononitratherthanneglect.Inaddition,weshouldcultivatetheawareness（要培養(yǎng)我們的意識）tohelpothersinourdailylife.Let,sholdourhands（holdourhands：握手joinourhands：團結(jié)一心）tobuildourcountryfilledinlovehearts,（filledin：填表，filledwith：充滿；愛心應(yīng)該用love就可以了）寫出好的作文應(yīng)做的準備：大規(guī)模的積累主題相關(guān)詞，優(yōu)秀的句型詞組。二.需要大規(guī)模的減少語法錯誤和拼寫錯誤。圖表作文介紹：一般有四種考試形式。第一種叫：table,即表格題。最大的難度是如何挑選最典型的數(shù)據(jù)來描述，不能面面俱到，要找有說服型的。應(yīng)該采取的原則：首尾呼應(yīng)原則。只看開始和結(jié)尾，中間的忽略不計。即起點是多少，終點是多少，增加了多少。可采取的動詞：增力□:increasefromto減少：decreasefromto第二種叫：piechart,餅狀圖或圓形圖。必不可少的詞組：由 部分組成:consistof,bemadeupof,becomposedof,占多大比例：accountfor,takeup第三種叫：barchart,柱狀圖。要把柱狀物的頂端縱橫對位，找到精確的數(shù)據(jù)。第四種叫：graph,曲線圖?；拘g(shù)語：增加，上升：increase;grow;rise;climb;goup.減少：decrease;reduce;decline;fall;godown;shrink.保持不變：remainstable/steady/unchanged;相關(guān)國J詞：sharply;dramatically;considerably;rapidly.（表不大幅度的4個副詞）gradually（逐漸地）；steadily（穩(wěn)步地）；slightly（微弱地）；基本術(shù)語：波動：fluctuate例如：微弱的波動：fluctuateslightly有~B些小的波動：Therearesomesmall/slightfluctuations.大幅度的波動：fluctuatedramatically/sharply/considerably起伏升降：riseandfall遞增：ontherise/ontheincrease遞減:onthedecline難點：圖表作文的難點不在第一段的描述上，關(guān)鍵在于第二段如何透過數(shù)據(jù)挖掘?qū)嵸|(zhì)。第三段針對現(xiàn)象提出建議。Directions:（兩表對比題）Studythefollowinggraphscarefullyandwriteanessayinatleast150words.YouressaymustbewrittenneatlyonANSWERSHEETII.THEUPSANDDOWNS。上POPULATIONGROWTHUS1?OPUl>T]OKGROWTHOVERTIME~彳KEtTHEUPSANDDOWNS。上POPULATIONGROWTHUS1?OPUl>T]OKGROWTHOVERTIME~彳KEtYouressayshouldcoverthesethreepoints:effectofthecountry*sgrowinghumanpopulationonitswildlife（這個國家不斷增長的人口對野生動物的影響，如果沒有describe,那就點到為止，粗線的描述作文，不用引用數(shù)據(jù)。如果有describe,就要找出數(shù)據(jù)用圖表語言詳細描述。）possiblereasonfortheeffect（寫出影響原因。）yoursuggestionforwildlifeprotection（針對現(xiàn)狀，危機提出建議。）第一個圖：隨著時代的變化，美國人口的增長。遞增：ontherise;increasesteadily;第二個圖：species：物種；extinction：滅絕；美國物種滅絕的數(shù)量隨著時間的遷移越來越多。范文：（高分）Fromthesegraphs（術(shù)語正確），wecandrawaconclusionthat,withthegrowthofhumanpopulation,thenumberofspecieshasdecreasedrapidly（可以替換為：declinedramatically;或者用：fall/reducesharply）inAmerica,andsomespecieshaveevenvanishedfromourplanet.Whydoesthisphenomenonappear?Ithink（口語，這里的Ithink可以去掉不用，直接用therebe結(jié)構(gòu)。）thereareseveralpossiblereasonsfor（這里的可以添力口acconunting,從而改為詞組accountingfor）this.（自問自答，好）First（aboveall）,witharapidgrowthofpopulation（可以替換為asthehumanpopulationgrowsrapidly或owingtothehumanpopulationgrowsrapidly）,moreandmorepeople（這里的可以改換為：agrowingnumberofpeople越來越多的人）cametolivewheresomewildspecieshavebeenliving.Thenthesespecieshavetomovetootherplaces.Someofthemprobablycannotadapttothenewenvironmentanddie.Second（可以替換為inaddition/moreimportantly好的方面），althoughmanypeoplelookonthewildlifeastheirfriends,somepeoplemaynotthinkso.Theycatchalotofwildanimalsandselltheminordertogetmoremoney.Third（可以替換為：evenworse壞的方面）,withthedevelopmentoftheindustry（可以替換astheresultof或astheconsequenceof）,thenaturalbalanceandtheecologicenvironmentaredestroyed.Thedeforestation（clearcutting/cuttingoffforest）hasbecomemoreandmoreserious（這里的可以該換為：increasingly越來越）.Sosomeofthewildlife（沒有復(fù)數(shù)）becomehomelessandextinct.Inordertoprotectthewildlife,Ihavesomesuggestions.Firstzthegovernmentsshouldmakelawstopreventthemfrombeingcaughtandkilled.Second,thegovernmentsshouldeducatepeopletolovenatureandprotectit.Third,asforourselves,weshouldtakepracticalactionstoprotectourlivingenvironment.反復(fù)使用，失去語言的魅力范文（0）——背范文的結(jié)果Accordingtothefiguresgiveninthebarcharts（柱狀圖）,ittookfromthebeginningofhumanlifetotheyear1830forthepopulationoftheearthtoreachonebillion.Thatrepresentsatimespanofatleasttwomillionyears.Thentheworldpopulationincreasedrapidly（迅速增長）,addingupto（增長達至了多少）twobillionin1930.Thenextbillionwasaddedby1960,onlythirtyyears.Fromthenontheglobalpopulationwasontherise（不斷地增長）,amountingto（達至U了多少）4billionin1975rwhichisanotherbillionpeopleinonly15years.（數(shù)據(jù)不典型，而且不對）Thereareatleasttworeasons,Ithink,forthesharpincrease（劇烈地增長）inworldpopulation.Inthefirstplace,thebirthrateiscontinuouslyclimbing（不斷的爬升）inmanycountries,especiallyindevelopingcountries.Generallyspeaking,peoplethereholdtheopinionthatchildrendon'tcostmuchandwhentheygetoldenoughtoworktheywillbringinmoneyandthatwhenparentsareold,theywilltakecareofthem.Secondly,thedeathrateimostdevelopedcountriesdeclinessteadily（穩(wěn)步地F降）becausepeople*sstandardsoflivingareraisedandhealthcareimproves.Inmayopinion,thechiefreasonforthepopulationgrowthisnotsomuchariseinbirthratesas（與其 不如 ）afallindeathratesasresultofimprovementsinmedicalcare.學(xué)習(xí)范文不應(yīng)該只是去把它全部背下來，而是應(yīng)該取其精華，去其糟粕，應(yīng)該借用的是好的句型，好的句型，好的詞組，閃光的句型結(jié)構(gòu)，好的諺語。采取模仿法，互譯法，而對其中的具體內(nèi)容應(yīng)能做到隨機應(yīng)變。復(fù)習(xí)：圖表作文一般分為兩大類型考察。一種類型叫粗線條表述，一旦沒要求describe,就不需要引用數(shù)據(jù)論證，只要說出圖表的變化就可以了。一種叫細線條作文，或詳細描述作文。一旦要求describe,或者makefulluse,就應(yīng)該把圖表的細節(jié)一一表述出來。今天的內(nèi)容：-?把復(fù)雜圖表作文講一下。考研中經(jīng)常是給出多個圖表。.介紹情景作文的創(chuàng)作策略。.事務(wù)信函創(chuàng)作的五大要素。.寫作中的精彩語言。高分作文的語言特征。范文（專家版）：在欣賞的時候要注意語言是如何豐富多變的ThetwochartsshowthattheincreaseintheU.S.populationhasbeenaccompaniedbyacorresponding（相對應(yīng)的，相應(yīng)的；在兩表作對比時可以使用）declineinthenumberofwildlifespecies（特點:把with句型改成accompanied）.Fartoomany（同alotofmany）specieshavebeenlostalready.Thisposesadanger（構(gòu)

成危險）toecologicalbalance（生態(tài)的:ecological生態(tài)的平衡：ecologicalbalance）.Asthehumanpopulationexpands（范圍，規(guī)模的擴大：expands;在這里可以替換increase,grows）,moreandmorewildanimalsarehuntedforfood,orbecausetheyarethoughttopresentathreat（present當動詞使用讀［pri*zent］也有構(gòu)成的意思）toman.Butstudiesshowthatoneoftheprimarycauses（?般都用mainreasons）ofthedisappearance（般都用extinct表示滅絕這里使用disappearance：消失）ofwildlifeispollution,whichisoneoftheconseauences（后果，貶義詞，強調(diào)嚴重的后果；一般用result）ofpopulationgrowthandeconomicdevelopment.Thismakesuswonderifmanisabletosharethisplanetinharmonywith（與 和諧共存）otherlifeforms.Inmyopinion,（在我看來）itisimperative（迫切的）totakesteps（采取措施）toreverse形容詞作動詞thedisturbing（令人不安的）trend（扭轉(zhuǎn)趨勢）illustrated（-，般都用show表示“表現(xiàn)表明”；這里用illustrate”圖表中的精彩”用詞表現(xiàn)）inthecharts.Onemeasurewouldbetoforbidthebuildingofcitiesinareaswherewildlifeisthreatenedwithextinction.But,moreimporantly,manmustlearntostoppollutingtheenvironment,orhehimselfwillbecomeextinct.多變的詞匯增加1：increase;expand;growth野生動物：wildlifespecies;species;wildanimals;wildlife;otherlifeforms;livingcreatures滅絕消亡：havebeenlost;disappearance;vanish;extinction;becomeextinct.構(gòu)成危險：poseadanger;presentathreat;bethreatenedwith;表明：show;illustrate;作文時，主題詞可以重復(fù)，而動詞，名詞，形容詞應(yīng)該盡量用同義，近義詞來替換，即作文的原則：語言豐富多變。如圖表語言中的增加：increase;grow;rise;goup;climb;soar.如減少：decrease;decline;fall;reduce;shrink;godown.增減幅度很顯著：sharply;dramatically;人g比例耳力皿便型JkI，乙.妁占人g比例耳力皿便型JkI，乙.妁占20%幅度緩慢。逐漸的：gradually;steadily;slightly.祥細地描述的表達：增力口：increasefrom???。??？從 增加到了 減少：decline/decr