高中英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫－故事構(gòu)思與語(yǔ)言優(yōu)化 課件

讀后續(xù)寫--內(nèi)容構(gòu)思與語(yǔ)言優(yōu)化內(nèi)容如何構(gòu)思續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容(logicalplotting)***如何打磨續(xù)寫的語(yǔ)言(vividwriting)211如何構(gòu)思續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容(Logicalplotting)1.續(xù)寫第一段的內(nèi)容設(shè)計(jì)既要考慮與上文的融洽銜接，同時(shí)也要考慮本段和最后一段開頭語(yǔ)的呼應(yīng)和銜接，而后者是容易忽視的部分。2.續(xù)寫第二段是文章的結(jié)尾，要關(guān)注與文章開頭的遙相呼應(yīng)，凸顯主題，升華精神。

Whatkindofendingwouldyoupreferforthisstory?

AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday.…***Sometimes,thegeneralkeywordcanguideustoimaginereasonably.surprisinginteresting

OneSundayafternoon,theyweredrivingtoaneventintheircarbuthadtostopatthebankandusetheATMmachine.Ashleigh,showingherhusbandwheretoturn,gesturedwildlywithherlefthandandfelttheringoff.However,whensearchingthecarcarefully,theyweren'tabletofindit.Theyfigureditfelloutoftheopendriver'ssidewindow.Gradethestory

Thecouplesearchedtheparkinglotandthecarforhours.Nothing.Later,backathome,theHannahssearchedthroughthecarforhours.Nothing.Yearslater,Danielboughthiswifeamuchlargerengagementring.Finally,thismonthKoreymadecontactwithDanielHannah.Theymet,andasarewardforreturningthering,shesimplyaskedthatDanielsendheraphotoofthemomenthesurprisedhiswifewithherlostengagementring.Onmother'sday,Ashleigh'ssongaveherthering.Itdidn'tfitandwasmuchsmallerthanherreplacementring,butnoneofthatmattered.***Howtopolishyourstory?

（vividwriting）Waystopolishyourstory

perconjunctions2.abundantsentencepatterns***1.advanced

wordsandphrases***Advancedwordsandphrases豐滿人物內(nèi)心（心情的表達(dá)）Richadjectivesandotherusefulexpressionstoportraytheinnerthoughtsofthefigures增加表達(dá)效果（動(dòng)作的表達(dá)）Detailedverbstomakeexpressionspowerful豐富故事情節(jié)（細(xì)節(jié)和連貫）ProperadverbstoenrichyourstoryLet’scompare?、貶owever,whensearchingthecarcarefully,theyweren'tabletofindit.②Theyfigureditfelloutoftheopendriver'ssidewindow.①However,totheirgreatdisappointment,whensearchingthecarcarefully,theywerenotabletofindit.Feelingdepressed,theyfigureditmighthavefallenoutoftheopendriver'ssidewindow.Inconclusion，thedescriptionofinnerthoughtscanmakeourstorymorelogical,reasonable,andpowerful.Howtodescribeyourinnerfeelings?1.Feelinghappy/sad/angry/guilty/depressed…,2.Drivenbycuriosity/asenseofregret/sympathy….或者是Deeplytouched/movedby…3.….,fullofregret/anger/fear/gratitude/sadness…4.Toone’sdisappointment/surprise/delight/relief/astonishment…5.具體的動(dòng)作描寫standfrozen,jumpwithjoy,tremblewithanger,withtearsfilling/wellingupone’seyes,withone’seyeswideopen等Let’shaveatry!1.Later,backathome,theHannahssearchedthroughthecarforhours.Nothing.Later,backathome,withthelastrayofhope,theHannahssearchedthecarforhoursonceagain.Nothing.Theystaredatthecar,tremblingwithrageanddepress.2.Ashleigh'ssongaveherthering.Itdidn'tfit...Ashleigh'ssongaveherthering.Themoment

thelostringcameintohersight,arushofexcitementsweptoverher.Ashleighwastooastonishedtosayaword,withhereyeswideopen./Shewasspeechlessinsurprise.增加表達(dá)效果（動(dòng)作）Brainstorming:tell

saywhisper

murmur

speaktalk

cryout

shout

respond

reply

explain

scream

roar

announce

declare

yell…callout①Thegovernment_________astateofemergency.②

“Getoutofmyclass!”Theteacher______.③He_________somethinginhissleep.④Seeingthefilmstar,thefans________withexcitement.⑤Askedwhyhewaslate,Alex________thathiscarhadbrokendown.增加表達(dá)效果（動(dòng)作）declaredroaredmurmuredscreamedexplainedLet’shaveatry!1.Ashleigh,showingherhusbandwheretoturn,gesturedwildlywithherlefthand.Inordertoshowherhusbandwheretoturn,Ashleighscreamedout,gesturingwildlywithherlefthand.Let’shaveatry!2.*Finally,thismonthKoreymadecontactwithDanilHannah.Theymet,andasarewardforreturningthering,shesimplyaskedthatDanielsendheraphotoofthemomenthesurprisedhiswifewithherlostengagementring.*Finally,thismonthKoreymadecontactwithDanielHannah,towhomsheexplainedthewholething.Hannah,deeplytouchedbywhatKoreydid,criedout

withgratitude.AndhepromisedtogiveittohiswifeasagiftforthecomingMother'sDay.Whatyouaresupposedtobearinmind:只要是記敘文，難以逃脫的動(dòng)作描寫肯定有，除了熟知各種說(shuō)的表達(dá)方式外，請(qǐng)記住各種看，和各種走Eg:see,watch,observe,peep,stareat,glareat,glanceat,catchsightof,losesightof,etcEg:walk,run,wander,dash,pacebackandforth,stepinto,makeone’swayto,danceout,etcLet’shaveatry!3.*OnMother'sDay,Ashleigh'ssongaveherthering.Itdidn'tfitandwasmuchsmallerthanherreplacementring,butnoneofthatmattered.*OnMother'sDay,themomentAshleigh'ssonpresentedthelostringtohismother,sherecognizeditatthefirstsightanddancedforwardtocatchitasifakidhadgottreasure.“Itwasneverlost,never...”,shemurmuredtoherself.Memoriescamefloodingbackandjoyfultearsrolleddownhercheeks.*Ashleigh,showingherhusbandwheretoturn,gesturedwildlywithherlefthandandfelttheringoff.Inordertoshowherhusbandwheretoturn,Ashleighscreamedout,gesturingwildlywithherlefthand.+Allofasudden/Suddenly,shefelttheringoffwhenshestretchedbackherarm.豐富故事情節(jié)（細(xì)節(jié)+連貫）

*Finally,thismonthKoreymadecontactwithDanielHannah.*Fortunately,thismonthKoreymadecontactwithDanielHannah./

Finally,thismonthKoreysuccessfullymadecontactwithDanielHannah.豐富故事情節(jié)（細(xì)節(jié)+連貫）

OneSundayafternoon,theyweredrivingtoaneventintheircarbuthadtostopatthebankandusetheATMmachine.Inordertoshowherhusbandwheretoturn,Ashleighscreamedout,gesturingwildlywithherlefthand.Allofasudden/Suddenly,shefelttheringoffwhenshestretchedbackherarm.However,totheirgreatdisappointment,aftersearchingthecarcarefully,theywerenotabletofindit.Feelingdepressed,theyfigureditmighthavefallenoutoftheopendriver'ssidewindow.SooutofthecardashedtheHannahs.

Thecouplesearchedtheparkinglotandthecarforhours.Nothing.

Later,backathome,withthelastrayofhope,theHannahssearchedthecarforhoursonceagain.Nothing.Theystaredatthecar,tremblingwithrageanddepress.Yearslater,Danielboughthiswifeamuchlargerengagementring.Fortunately,thismonthKoreymadecontactwithDanielHannah,towhomsheexplainedthewholething.Hannah,deeplytouchedbywhatKoreydid,criedout

withgratitude.AndhepromisedtogiveittohiswifeasagiftforthecomingMother'sDay.OnMother'sDay,themomentAshleigh'ssonpresentedthelostringtohismother,sherecognizeditatthefirstsightanddancedforwardtocatchitasifakidhadgottreasure.“Itwasneverlost,never...”,shemurmuredtoherself.Memoriescamefloodingbackandjoyfultearsrolleddownhercheeks.

Timepassedquicklythatyear,andbeforeweallknowit,itwasthelastdayofschool.Ourschoolhadaveryspecialtraditiononthelastday.Alltheteachersfilledthesidewalk,wavinggoodbyetothekidsasthebusespulledoutwiththeirhornshonking.Butonthatparticularday,