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浙江省5年10次高考英語作文啟示（2016---2021）8次續(xù)寫2016.10叢林冒險（迷路）；2017.6狼口脫險（公路、騎車）；2017.11家庭旅行（駕車、帳篷）；2018.6騎馬迷路（農(nóng)場）；2020.1家庭親情（小狗）；2020.7熊爪余生（研究基地、拍照）;2021.1南瓜卡頭（萬圣節(jié)）；2021.6家庭責任（打工賺錢）2次概要2018.11在申請大學前參觀大學；2019.6父母如何適當表揚孩子；總結(jié)：考續(xù)寫的可能性大，概要的可能性??；概要的得分較低；同一屆兩次作文形式會保持一致。小說三要素：人物character,情節(jié)plot,背景setting細節(jié)描寫：動作描寫，情感描寫，心理描寫，對話描寫，環(huán)境描寫細節(jié)描寫語言服務(wù)于主題（動作、情感、心理、對話、環(huán)境等）語言風格盡可能與原文協(xié)同（詞匯、句式等）細節(jié)語言描寫微技能（原那么）:一.具體而非籠統(tǒng)WalkWander,stroll（漫步，閑逛）limp（一痛一拐地走）Stagger/stumble（蹣跚地走）tiptoe（踮起腳走）Stride（大踏步走）e.g.Hewassodrunkthathestaggeredallthewayhome.他喝醉了，一路搖搖晃晃地走回家。Shestumbledupstairsandintobed.她跌跌撞撞地上樓上床睡覺。Shetiptoedtothebedsoasnottowakethebaby.她踮起腳走到床前，以免吵醒嬰兒。Theyenjoystrollingthroughthecountryside.他們喜歡在鄉(xiāng)間漫步。Descriptionofaction馬兒奔跑gallop馬疾馳trot馬小跑拉緊韁繩hold/grab/pull/jerkthereinssharply鞭打馬whipthehorse;crackthewhip策馬加速spur（馬刺；鞭策）thehorse下馬getoff/dismountthehorse馬后退直立rear馬嘶neigh,whinnyDescriptionofemotion迷路前好奇、愉悅(curious,delighted)Socutewastherabbitthatitkeptmespeelbound.NeverbeforehadIseensuchacutecreature,whichgrabbedmyattentioninnotime.Iimmediatelygrewfondofthefurryrabbitandcalledoutexcitedly,〃Dad!Look!”Alarmed,therabbitranawayinaflash.Ifollowediteagerly,hopingtocatchitasmytrophy(戰(zhàn)利品，獎品)forthetrip.迷路后害怕、焦慮、后悔(frightened,worried,regretful)MyheartbegantosinkasIglancedaround,“wherearewe,Dad?〃Iaskedworriedly,withmyvoicetrembling.Iwassopetrifiedthateventheslightestsoundwouldsendshiversupanddownmyspine.HadIlistenedtoUnclePaul'swords,wecouldhaveavoidedtheincident.獲救時激動、如釋重負(excited,relieved)HavingfeltourwaythroughthedarkforestforhourswhensuddenlyIheardthegurglingofthestream.Dad,theriver;whichwilltakeustotheuncle'sfarm!”Icouldn/thelpexclaiming.Seeingthefaintgleamoflightinthedistance,IfeltasenseofreliefwelledupinmyheartasIknewwehadfinallyfoundourwayout.Descriptionofsetting愉悅高興Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetree,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwovenblanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.緊張害怕寬慰激動二.展示而非講述toshownottotellHewashappySoexcitedwashethathehummed/whistledhisfavoritetunewithhiseyessparklingwithgreatexcitement.Shewassad.Onhearingthebadnews,herheartached,tearsstreamingdownhercheeks.Hewassurprised.Totallycaughtunpreparedbytheheadmaster'sgentleness,Rigostoodfrozenforsecondsandfinallymanagedtorespond,zzHello,sir/He/shewasangry.Hewassoangrythathestormedoutoftheroom,slammingthedoorfuriouslybehindhim.Muchannoyedbythenews,Shegnashedherteeth.〃WhydoIhavetoattendclassesonSunday?"shemoanedinanger,glaringatherparentswithburningeyes.（情緒+神態(tài)+動作+語言）三.小詞大用而非大詞小用Hestoodup,huggedhisparents,andsmiled,tryingnottolethisemotionsgetthebetterofhim.

Thefamilyhuggedandsmiledthroughmistyeyesandthenlaughed.Theboyliftedthelastbagontohisshoulder,andflashedabrightsmile.Hertailbeganwaggingeversoslowly,thenfasterasshecaughtthesmell.、萬物之靈一一人的聲音i.表示人哭的象聲詞cry：哭,喊,未必有淚.cry：哭,喊,未必有淚.Shed：流淚.Blubber：嚎啕大哭.Pule：小孩的嗚咽,抽泣.Weep：流淚,哭泣.Tears：淚水.Whisper：低語.Wail：大聲痛哭,尖叫.Howl：大聲哭.Sob：啜泣,抽噎..表示人笑的象聲詞gringrin：露齒而笑roar=haw-haw二ha-ha：哈哈大笑crow：嬰兒的歡叫g(shù)iggle：咯咯地笑，傻笑grin：露齒而笑roar=haw-haw二ha-ha：哈哈大笑crow：嬰兒的歡叫g(shù)iggle：咯咯地笑，傻笑grin：露齒而笑roar=haw-haw二ha-ha：哈哈大笑crow：嬰兒的歡叫g(shù)iggle：咯咯地笑，傻笑竊笑gurgle：咯咯地笑guffaw：哄笑，大笑snort：撲哧一笑burble：竊笑chuckle：抿嘴笑，暗自笑titter：竊笑，傻笑,嗤嗤地笑snigger=snicker：.表示人說話的象聲詞boom：甕聲甕氣,消沉有回響的聲音.Roar：咆哮，獅子般地吼叫.Snort：發(fā)哼聲Grunt：哼哼聲，咕嚕聲.Squawk：粗而響的叫聲,訴苦或抗議.Shriek：尖叫聲Mutter：嘀嘀咕咕,含糊的低語聲Murmur：喃喃說話聲，隔壁的人語聲Mumble：嘰咕，咕噥Grumble：肚子咕咕的叫聲，牢騷Whisper：低語,謠言Hum：哼曲子的聲音，猶豫時的嗯嗯聲.humandhaw：表示猶豫或支吾的嗯嗯呃呃聲chatter：喋喋不休,震顫聲babble：嘮叨，咿呀學語gabble：急促不清的話聲gibber和jabber：同上prattle：嬰兒的11禺口禺學語聲chat：聊天coo：喂（口禺細語

barkbark：叫罵，叫喊shrill：尖聲bark：叫罵，叫喊shrill：尖聲snarl：咆哮,bellow：怒吼聲moanbark：叫罵，叫喊shrill：尖聲ThewindwaswhistlingthroughthetreesandthehowlingofanimalsfromafarsentshiversupanddownJane'sspine.Iwasinspiredbythedoves'persistence.Whilehelpingthedoves,myhopeforfuturewaskindled.Enjoytheharmonyofhumanandnature.Birdstwitteringonthetree,butterfliesflutteringaround,andbeesbuzzing,Ifeltasenseofvigorandhopecamebacktome.Eyesglintingandlipscurvingintoabigsmile,theboywasjumpingwithjoypointingatthenestonthetreewithecstasy.Thechirpsofbirdsandthecheersofthekidwerejustthemedicinewhicheasedmypainsandunhappines