【縣公開課課件】《How to Beautify English writing》寫作公開課

HowtoBeautify

EnglishWriting?Ourappearanceneedsbeautifying,whataboutourwritings?firstimpressionouterbeautybeautifulhandwriting

FindoutthebeautyinthewritingStep1：Leading-in【2018·全國Ⅰ卷】DearTerry,Howareyoudoing?Inyourlastletter,youaskedmeaboutbeingaguesttoaChinesefriend’shome.Now,Iamwritingtoinformyouofsomerelevantdetails.Tobeginwith,accordingtoourtradition,youaresupposedtoarriveearly,sothatyoucanhelpthefamilypreparethedinner,whichismeaningfulandinteresting.Besides,you’dbetterbringsomegifts,likeabookoraChineseknot.What’smore,whenyouareenjoyingthemeal,youneedtoavoidmakingnoiseswhilechewingfood.Hopefully,thesesuggestionswouldbehelpfulforyou.Ihavetheconfidencethatyouwillhaveagreattime.Bestwishes!Yours,

LiHuaDoesthewriteruseanylinkingwords（連接詞）?Arethereanygoodsentencepatterns（句式）?Isthereanyadvancedvocabulary（高級詞匯）?Arethereanymistakes?

LanguageIseverythingtothepoint(切題)?Areallthedetailsstated?ContentDoeseachparthaveatopicsentence?Istheessaydividedintoparts?StructureASSESSMENTInnerBeautyStep2：InnerBeautifying----languageAdvancedwordsGoodsentencepatternsLinkingwords首先:firstly

其次:secondly

最后:

finally;首先:tobegin/startwith;firstofall

其次:

then,next,besidesfurthermore,what’smore,inaddition,

最后:lastbutnotleast1.Linkingwords邏輯角度linkingwords對稱順序轉(zhuǎn)折順序因果順序條件順序讓步順序遞進順序foronething,fortheotherthing,ononehand,ontheotherhandbut,however,while,though,otherwise，inreality,insteadbecause,since,as,thanksto,asaresult(of)if,unlessaslongas,onconditionthat,though,as,evenif/though,whether,wh-(what,when,where,how)everand,what’smore,besides,

inaddition,what’sworseadj.；adv.;phrases2.Advancedwordshappyasksoaboutprogressbeinterestedinvery

bigadvancement/achievementbepassionateaboutdelightedinquiretherefore/consequentlyberelevant/linkedtotremendous，huge，giant，enormousYoushouldlearnmoreaboutlocalcustomsandmannersinadvance.Itwillhelpyouadapttothenewsurroundings.

定語從句3.GoodsentencepatternsYouaresupposedtolearnmoreaboutlocalcustomsandmannersinadvance,whichwillhelpyouadapttothenewsurroundings.定語從句，名詞性從句，狀語從句ItcannotonlybroadenmyviewbutalsohelpmelearnmoreabouttheChineseculture.

倒裝句3.GoodsentencepatternsNotonly

canitbroadenmyviewbutalsohelpmelearnmoreabouttheChineseculture.I’mwritingtoinviteyoutotakepartintheChineseTraditionalCultureShow.ItwillbeheldattheArtCentreinourschool.I’mwritingtoinviteyoutoparticipateintheChineseTraditionalCultureShowtobeheldattheArtCentreinourschool.

非謂語3.Goodsentencepatterns

Step3：InnerBeautifying----Structure&Content

Findandtranslatethekeypointsinthewriting.2019年福建省質(zhì)檢書面表達假定你是李華，你的美國朋友Jack來信詢問“嫦娥四號”探測器（Chang’e-4probe）名稱的由來。請你給他回信，內(nèi)容包括：1．“嫦娥四號”登月成功；2．嫦娥的傳說；3．中國人的登月夢。注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；2．可以適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。內(nèi)容要點（3點）及次要點（2點）1.合適的開頭：詢問“嫦娥四號”探測器（Chang’e-4probe）名稱的由來。2．“嫦娥四號”登月成功；3．嫦娥的傳說；4．中國人的登月夢。5．恰當(dāng)?shù)慕Y(jié)尾拓展傳說，寫跟登月有關(guān)的內(nèi)容。拓展登月夢，從古到今不斷的探索和進步次要點1次要點2Chinesedreamofgettingtothemoon.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Bestwishes.askmeaboutthenameofChang’e-4probeChang’e-4probegettothemoonsuccessfullyastoryaboutChang'e.合并句子，適當(dāng)拓展使行文連貫（基礎(chǔ)篇）DearJack,

_______________________________

askedmeaboutthenameofChang’e-4probe.____________________________________________Chang’e-4probe

gottothemoonsuccessfullythisyear._____________________ThisisthestoryaboutChang'e._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Chinesedreamofgettingtothemoon._____________________________________________________.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Bestwishes.

I’mhappytoreceiveyourletter.Youtellyousomethingaboutit.Wewereveryhappy.Chinesetoflytothemoon.Peopleadmireherandwanttolearnfromher,sotheprobeiscalledChang’e.Shewasthefirst

Wehavemadegreatprogressinscienceandtechnology.IamwritingtoStep4：WriteandbeautifyEnglishwriting

Beautifyyourwritingbyusingadvancedwords,goodsentencepatternsandlinkingwords.AdvancedwordsDearJack,I’mhappytoreceiveyourletter.YouaskedmeaboutthenameofChang’e-4probe.Iamwritingtotellyousomethingaboutit.Chang’e-4probegottothemoonsuccessfullythisyear.Wewereveryhappy.ThisisthestoryaboutChang'e.ShewasthefirstChinesetoflytothemoon.Peopleadmireherandwanttolearnfromher,sotheprobeiscalledChang’e.Chinesedreamofgettingtothemoon.Wehavemadegreatprogressinscienceandtechnology.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Bestwishes.Yours,LiHuadelightedlandedonrelevanttoitnamedafterChang’ehavelongdreamofexploringWeChinesetremendousinquiredGoodsentencepatterns（Discussion)DearJack,I’mhappytoreceiveyourletter.YouaskedmeaboutthenameofChang’e-4probe.Iamwritingtotellyousomethingaboutit.Chang’e-4probegottothemoonsuccessfullythisyear,weareveryhappy.ThisisthestoryaboutChang'e.ShewasthefirstChinesetoflytothemoon.Peopleadmireherandwanttolearnfromher,sotheprobeiscalledChang’e.Chinesedreamofgettingtothemoon.Wehavemadegreatprogressinscienceandtechnology.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Bestwishes.

delightedlandedonrelevanttoitnamedafterChang’ehaveunyieldingdreamofexploringtheWeChinesetremendouswhichmarksamilestoneinChinesedevelopmentinscience.Theregoesatalesayingthatchang'e,wasthefirstChinesetoflytothemoon,that'swhytheprobeinquired

Yours,LiHuaDearJack,

I’mdelightedthat

youwrotealetterinquringmeabout

theoriginof

thenameofChang’e-4probe.I’mwritingtotellyousomethingrelevanttoit.Chang’e-4probe

landedonthemoonsuccessfullythisyear,whichmarksamilestoneinChinesesciencedevelopment.

TheregoesatalesayingthatChang'ewasthefirstChinesetoflytothemoon,shewasregardedasthesoul,hopeanddesireinexploring,

that’swhytheprobeisnamedafterChang’e.WeChinesehaveunyieldingdreamofexploringthemoon.wehavemadetremendousprogressinthedevelopmentofscienceandtechnology.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Bestwishes.ConsequentlyLinkingwordstherefore,ItisuniversallyacknowledgedthatAnduptonow,

Yours,LiHuaDearJack,

I’mdelightedthat

youwrotealetterinquringmeabouttheoriginofthenameofChang’e-4probe.Consequently,

I’mwritingtotellyousomethingrelevanttoit.Chang’e-4probe

landedonthemoo