陜西省2016年高考英語(yǔ)命題作文寫(xiě)作技巧

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-----教學(xué)目標(biāo)HowtomakeanoutlineHowtopickoutimportantpointsHowtowritebeautifulsentencesHowtoorganizethesentenceslogically假設(shè)你是李華,你購(gòu)買(mǎi)了一部某外國(guó)公司生產(chǎn)的手機(jī).因有質(zhì)量問(wèn)題,要求該公司更換.請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn),用英文寫(xiě)一封電子郵件.1.問(wèn)題:手機(jī)不響鈴,不能發(fā)短信;該產(chǎn)品已售完,無(wú)法更換;型號(hào)新,無(wú)配件,無(wú)法維修.2.要求:公司應(yīng)盡快予以更換.注意:1.詞數(shù)為120左右;2.參考詞匯:配件(sparepart)Thestyle:

exposition（說(shuō)明文）Themainidea:PresenttheproblemswiththephoneandaskforachangePerson:

thefirstperson第一人稱(chēng)Tense:thepresenttense

現(xiàn)在式

andthepasttense過(guò)去式Task1Examinethecontentcarefully

Task2提煉要點(diǎn),確定重點(diǎn)詞匯,劃分段落Importantpoints：threeproblemsplus

onedemand要點(diǎn)：三個(gè)問(wèn)題加一個(gè)要求Point1:

notring;notsendmessagesPoint2：soldout;notchange…for…

或notexchange…for…或notreplace…with…

Point3：

newmodel;nospareparts;repair/fix/maintain

Point4：

require/requestsb.todosth

或demandofsb.todosth.Task3連詞成句1.手機(jī)不響鈴,不能發(fā)短信

Itdoesn’tring.Itdoesn’tsendshortmessages.2.該產(chǎn)品已售完,無(wú)法更換

Themodelhasbeensoldout.Theycan’tchangeanewoneforme.3.型號(hào)新,無(wú)配件,無(wú)法維修

ItisanewmodelinChina.Itisimpossibletofixitwithouttherightspareparts.4.要求公司應(yīng)盡快予以更換

Idemandof/require/requestyourcompanytochangeanewoneformeassoonaspossible.Task4

提升句子，組句成篇注意：靈活運(yùn)用好句式一.使用非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞(nonfiniteverb)使句子簡(jiǎn)潔高檔二.巧用倒裝(inversion)結(jié)構(gòu)增強(qiáng)句子的表現(xiàn)力三.嘗試多樣化表達(dá)方式,如：

1.感嘆句(theexclamatory)2.with短語(yǔ)

3.定語(yǔ)從句(theattributiveclause)

4.各種名詞性從句5.各種狀語(yǔ)從句(theadverbialclause)1.手機(jī)不響鈴,不能發(fā)短信整合前：Itdoesn’tring.Itdoesn’tsendshortmessages.整合后：可以造至少兩個(gè)并列句(or,meanwhile,either)a.Itcan’tringorsendshortmessages.b.Itdoesn’tringatallandmeanwhileitdoesn’tsendshortmessages.（Neither….nor句式）c.Itcanneitherringnorsendshortmessages.可造至少兩個(gè)倒裝句式（notonly…butalso,nor,neither

）d.Notonlydoesitfailtoring,butalsoitcan’tsendamessage.e.Themobilephonecan’tring,

norcanitsendmessages.2.該產(chǎn)品已售完,無(wú)法更換整合前：Themodelhasbeensoldout.Theycan’tchangeanewoneforme.整合后：a.Thenewmodelhasbeensoldout

sothat

theycan’tchangeanewoneforme.b.Themodelhasbeensoldout,

asa

consequence,

it’simpossibleforthemtochangeanewoneforme.(非限制性定語(yǔ)從句nonfiniteattributiveclause)c.Themodelhasbeensoldout,whichmakesitimpossibleformetohaveanewone.（主語(yǔ)從句）d.Thefactthatthemodelhasbeensoldoutmakesmeunabletochangeit.（結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句至少兩個(gè)sothat，asaconsequence/result）3.型號(hào)新,無(wú)配件,無(wú)法維修整合前：ItisanewmodelinChina.Itisimpossibletofixitwithouttherightspareparts.整合后：a.Since

it’sanewmodel

andthere’renospareparts,Ican’tgetitrepaired

.b.Sonewisitstype

withoutanysparepartsthatIcan’tgetitrepaired.c.With

itsnewtypeandnosparepartsleft,

Ifindithardtohaveitrepaired.原因狀語(yǔ)從句because，since，as和倒裝句各一個(gè)so…thatwith結(jié)構(gòu)一個(gè)

4.要求公司應(yīng)盡快予以更換整合前：Irequire/requestyourcompanytochangeanewoneformeassoonaspossible.整合后：

賓語(yǔ)從句Toconclude,I

demand/require/requestthat

yourcompany

should

havemyphonechangedassoonaspossible.

用appreciateitifB.I’dreallyappreciateitif

youcouldreplaceitsoon.

包含賓語(yǔ)從句、同位語(yǔ)從句、虛擬語(yǔ)氣及被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)的句子C.Ihopethat

myrequirement

that

you

should

changeanewphoneofthesamemodelformecan

besatisfied

assoonaspossible.5.檢查謄寫(xiě)仔細(xì)謄寫(xiě)，保證字跡工整，卷面整潔。Whichoneispreferred?DearSir,

……Tendaysafterthat,itdidn’tringorsendshortmessages.ThenItookittotheseller,but

wastoldthatthemodelhadbeensoldoutand

Ihadtowaitatleastthreemonthsforanewone.LaterIwenttotherepairman.Hesaidsinceitwasanew-modelinChina,itwasimpossibletofixitwithouttherightspareparts.Iwassodesperateonhearingthat.HowcanIwaitthatlong?

Therefore,Irequirethatyousendmeanewoneofthesamemodelwithinamonth.

Thankyouforyourconsideration.

Yours,