讀后續(xù)寫之三句銜接（2022年全國1卷）講義-高三英語寫作專項(xiàng)

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路線)throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊惱).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Wesatdowntoeachother,butDavid

wouldn'tlook

atme.（第一段）I

watchedasDavid

move

uptothestartlinewiththeotherrunners.（第二段）01—續(xù)寫原文解讀（5W1H）When：thedayofthebigcross-countryrunWhere:

small

town/

byafenceWho:

I(ateacher)andDavid(a

primarystudentwithbraindisease)Whatproblem：Davidwantstoquitthecross-countryrunforfearthatotherswouldlaughathimbecauseofhisabnormalgesture.Topic：encouragementandlovefromothersTIPS：通過分析原文主要人物間的沖突點(diǎn)或者矛盾（David害怕同學(xué)們的嘲笑想要放棄比賽），從而解讀文章主題（同學(xué)之間的關(guān)愛團(tuán)結(jié)的主題）02—三大銜接句Para1:We

satdownnexttoeachother,but

David

wouldn'tlookat

me.關(guān)鍵詞：Davidwould’tlookatme思考：David不看我的原因，進(jìn)行銜接思路：David躲避我的目光，表明他心理糾結(jié)要不要參賽，心情很沉重。所以，銜接para1段首句可以從動作描寫來外現(xiàn)David心理活動，同時和首句的動詞進(jìn)行并列。銜接句1（Para1第二句）：Hiseyesdeliberatelyavoidedmine,andhissmiledisappearedontheface,withhislimbsshakingasweakasleaves.Para2:IwatchedasDavid

moveduptothestartingline

withtheotherrunners.關(guān)鍵詞：Davidmoveduptothestartingline思考：David為什么會參加比賽思路：合理推理，Para1側(cè)重刻畫作為老師的“我”成功說服David，通過言語或者其他方式使David重獲自信。Para2側(cè)重描寫比賽場景，David勇敢完成比賽，得到大家的鼓勵和歡呼，突出團(tuán)結(jié)關(guān)愛的主題。反推Para1結(jié)局：David決定參加比賽銜接句2（Para1最后一句）：承上啟下Turningaround,

hegaveme

asmileand

walkedto

thestartingline

whereother

kids

werereadyto

start.銜接句3（Para2第二句）：對David和其他選手的起跑/準(zhǔn)備過程進(jìn)行動作描寫He

tookadeepbreathand

calmed

himself

down.

(對David準(zhǔn)備過程的描寫）David

tookfirst

step,

slowlybutfirmly.

(對David起跑動作的描寫）Asthegun

rangout,

David

andotherrunnersbegantorun.

(對David和其他選手起跑的描寫）Start!

Allthe

kids

disappered

swiftly

likelighteningintoforest,

leaving

David

staggeringandstruggling

hisstepforward.

(對David和其他選手起跑的對比描寫）03—范文

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.

Hiseyesdeliberatelyavoidedmine,andhissmilealsodisappearedontheface,withhislimbsshakingasweakasleaves.

“It”snottherealyou,David”,Ibrokethesilence,walkedtohisfront,

holdinghisshouldersandcontinued,“Listen,David,youhavepreparedsomuchforthisrunning,ifyouwanttoquit,Iwillbeforyou.”

Davidburstintotears.

Suddenly，agroupofkidsemergedaroundus.ThecameuptoDavid,andembracedhimandshouted“Cheerup.David,youcandoit!”Davidstoppedcryingandhisfacelitupbytheirencouragement.Turingaround,

hegavemeasmileandwalkedtothestartinglinewhereotherkidswerereadytostart.(124)

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.

Start！Allthekidsdisappearedswiftlylikelighteningintotheforest,leavingDavidstaggeringandstrugglinghisstepsforward.

Buthisbodywasuncontrollable,soonhisheelswerebleeding,becausehisshoeswerewornout.Afteralongtime,Davidwasstill100metersawayfromthefinishingline.Thepathwaslinedwiththecoachandotherkidsintears,whowereinformedofthepoorbodyconditionofDavid.Noonelaughedathim,butcheeredupandclappedforhim.Davidwastouchedandhewassteppingforwardwhenhewastrippedbyabigrock.“Heisbleeding!”criedtheotherkids.“David!David