2023學年完整公開課版Polishyoursentencesincontinuationwriting

Polishyoursentences

incontinuationwritingGoalsAfterthisclass,studentsareexpectedto1.applyinversionandNon-finiteverbssentencestructuresactively.2.enhancetheawarenessofinanimatesubjects.3.learntopolishsentencesincontinuationwriting.Havingnoconfidenceinyourlanguageskillsincontinuationwriting?Performingbadlyinsentencestructures?Feelinginamesswhenwriting?whynotpolishyoursentencestructures?

快使用“三劍客”讀后續(xù)寫之“句式三劍客”1.倒裝句2.無靈主語句式3.非謂語結構句式Threepracticalsentencestructuresincontinuationwriting1.inversion2.InanimateSubject3.Non-finiteverbs

倒裝--Inversion

whatwhat

倒裝--Inversion

Hardly

hadIenteredtheclassroomwhenIwasseizedbythefriendlyatmospherehere.(我一進教室就被這里的熱情氛圍所感染.)

Wereitnotforyourattendance（如果沒有你們的參與）,thisclasswouldbemeaningless.推薦程度WhyIpromisedthatinnocase

wouldIgivein

(我不會屈服于）toanychallenge.TomakecertainemotionstandoutToemphasizetargetinformation；ThoughIwasfrightened,Imanagedtokeepmybalancetopreventmyselffromfallingoff.盡管害怕，我還是設法保持了平衡以免自己摔下去。HowplacewhatyouneedtoemphasizeinfrontofthesentenceFrightenedasIwasTearswellingupinmyeyes,________________thatatinywhiteliewouldinjectsuchgreatpowerintoothersandchangetheirlife.

我淚眼模糊，從未料想（anticipate）一個善意的謊言會給人巨大的力量-—以至于改變?nèi)说囊簧?。HowplacenegativewordorphraseinthefrontofthesentenceneverhadIanticipatedPracticemakesperfect!

ThoughRacheltriedtobehavecautiously

(用關鍵詞“as”改寫）,shestillbrokesomething(achinavase).盡管蕾切爾努力的做到小心，她還是打碎了東西——一件瓷器花瓶。changethesentencestructureoftheunderlinedpartCautiouslyasRachelmighttry

Hehadjustreachedthespot

（句首用hardly，倒裝）whenhewasrootedtothegroundwithhorror.他剛到現(xiàn)場就被嚇得動彈不得。Practicemakesperfect!Hardly

hadhereachedthespotchangethesentencestructureoftheunderlinedpartInanimateSubjects（無靈主語）Thepasttwomonths

haswitnessed

mypains-takingeffort.what推薦程度havingnolifeThereweremanyfamilystoriesrelatedwiththemailboxinfrontoftheirhouse,happyorunhappy,ofthepast20years.WhyToaddtovividness(生動性）Themailbox

hasseen/witnessedthestoriesofthefamily,sweetorbitter,ofthepast20years.Thepast20years

hasseen/witnessedthejoysandsorrowsofthefamily.Themailbox

seemstobetellingthefamilystoriessilently——happyorunhappyones.在過去的20年中有很多的家庭故事都與他們家門前這個郵箱有關——辛酸的，亦或幸福的。Onthinkingofthis,IfeltextremelyangryandshookbecauseIcouldn'tbearitanylonger.WhyToachieveconcision（簡潔）Atthethoughtofthis,Icouldbearitnolonger.Fierceangershookmybody.How?

瀝瀝小雨在輕輕地述說著她的傷感…Thedrizzlingrain___________hersadness-“Don'tleavemealone,mom!”waswhisperingInanimateSubjectAnimateVerb無靈主語+擬人化的謂語動詞How?

Theafterglowofthesettingsun

__________throughthewindow

,creatinganamazingatmosphereofpeace.落日的余暉透過窗戶悄悄進來，歲月靜好。slippedin

Thepersonification(擬人化）Practicemakesperfect

!

這女人溫和的笑容讓詹妮想起了自己的奶奶

Thewoman'sgentlesmile___________Jennyofherowngrandmother.詹妮心底最柔軟的部分被觸動，因為她的奶奶也常叫她安琪兒。Jenny’ssoftheart______________becausehergrandmaoftencalledherangel.remindedwastouchedAllatonceIchargedathim,burningwithanger.突然，我怒火中燒地向他沖去。Non-finiteverbssentence（非謂語結構）what

推薦程度

Gluedtothespot,Janedidn'tknowhowtorespondtoherfather.呆在當場，簡不知該如何回應她的父親。whyTomakeyourlanguagebrief(簡潔）andidiomatic（地道）HowWhenIsawHarrystormbacktothepondwithalongstickinhishand,Iwasinjectedwithvitality.（當我看到湯姆手拿一根長木棍風一般跑回池塘時，我充滿了活力。）changetheclauseinto“non-finite”structure將從句變?yōu)榉侵^語結構SeeingHarrystormingback

Ifitweren'tforthatstupidquarrel,Iwouldn'tbetrappedhere,”shethoughttoherself,andhereyeswerecloudedwithregretfultears.（“如果不是那次愚蠢的爭吵我也不會被困這里”想到這兒悔恨的眼淚模糊了雙眼。）

Practicemakesperfect!changethesentencestructuresoftheunderlinedparts“Wereitnotforthatstupidquarrel,Iwouldn'tbetrappedhere,”shethoughttoherself,regretfultearscloudinghereyes.（“如果不是那次愚蠢的爭吵我也不會被困這里”想到這兒悔恨的眼淚模糊了雙眼。）Practicemakesperfect!Janefeltscaredandtired,shewasinexhaustionandfinallyslidintosleep.(簡覺得又累又怕，精疲力竭，她最終睡著了。）Surroundedbythefearandtiredness,Janefeltexhausted,slidingintosleepfinally.Practicemakesperfect!Whichsentencestructuredoyouprefer?1.倒裝句2.無靈主語句式3.非謂語結構句式oryouwanttohaveatryofallofthem?AssignmentPolishthefollowingsentencestructures,usingthese3structureswiththehelptheabovestrategies.

Shareyourexercisewithyourclassmates.Trytolearnfromyourclassmatesanddomorereflection.還有比做練習更幸福的事兒嗎?SO...續(xù)寫“句式三劍客”之夯實訓練GroupworkEx.1句式升級訓練1.SamsawRolandlazilybathedinmildsunshineandhereyeswerenarrowedintoaline.Samdartedtowardshim.(山姆看到羅蘭德慵懶的在柔和的陽光下嗮太陽，眼睛瞇成一條線。山姆朝他沖過去。）changethesentencestructuresoftheunderlinedparts試一試你學會了多少呢

1.SeeingRolandlazilybathedinmildsunshinewitheyesnarrowedintoaline,Samdartedtowardshim.有沒覺得此刻的場景和動作都變得生動起來？2.Rolandlookedathimandwaggedhistailpolitelyandthenturnedhisheadaway.Shefellsoundasleepagain.(羅蘭德看了他一眼，禮貌的搖搖尾巴然后就轉過腦袋呼呼大睡。）句式結構：Doing+句子主干+Doing試一試你學會了多少呢changethesentencestructuresoftheunderlinedparts2.Givinghimalazyglimpse,Rolandpolitelywaggedhistailandthenturnedhisheadaway,fallingsoundasleepagain.你看到一只曬太陽的懶狗了嗎？3.Onseeingthis,Ifeltshockedandscared.一看到這情景，我全身都感到震驚和恐懼。（用無靈主語句和短語runthrough）3.Shockandfearranthroughmybody

atthesight.4.WhenIthoughtthatImightspeaktothemandbehappyoneday,Ifelthopeful.想到有一天我可以和他們說話并且很開心起來，我就充滿了希望。句式結構：用無靈主語句4.ThethoughtthatImightspeaktothemandbehappyoneday

filledmewithhopee.5.Shewassohungrythatshetossedandturnedinbed.(她餓得在床上翻來覆去睡不著）句式結構：So前置的“so...that結構”5.Sohungrywasshethatshekepttossingandturninginbed.

Ex2.修改讀后續(xù)寫短文習作（節(jié)選）（遼寧省營口市2021屆高三上學期期末）小女孩Jenny撿到一位oldlady-Mrs.Green的錢包，正在上門歸還中......P1.Thewomanwhoansweredthedoorhadbeencryingrecentlyandlookedupsetandanxious.——————————————————————————————————————————P2.Thewomantookthewalletsmilingly.————————————————————————————————————————————————準備好放大招了嗎？小組合作，在下面所給的范文基礎上進行修改，對其句式進行升級

Thewomanwhoansweredthedoorhadbeencryingrecentlyandlookedupsetandanxious.

“AreyouMrs.Green?”Jennyaskedpolitely,sherecognizedherfromtheIDcardinstantly.Mrs.Green,whowasconfused,noddedandlethercomein.“Madam,didyoulosesomething?”Jennycontinuedandaskedsomenecessaryquestions.“Ilostmywalletwiththemoneytobuygiftsforsomepoorchildren.”Theoldladyblurtedoutatlast,surprised,hereyeswere

openedwideandtheyweresparklingwithhope.Jennyfeltguilty,herfaceseemedtobeburningandhandedthewallettoher.ThankGod,shewouldhavedisappointedthosekids.Thewomantookthewalletsmilingly.

SheheldittoherchesttightlyandthenhuggedJenny,andtearsstreameddownherface.“Youaretherealangel.Nooneknowswhatthewalletmeanstothechildren.”Shesobbedingratitude...polishthesentencestructuresoftheabovest