讀后續(xù)寫（市一等獎(jiǎng)）

讀后續(xù)寫ContinuationWriting以2016年10月新高考首考試題為例閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”

shecried.“Help!”

Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.But

no

more

helicopters

came

and

it

was

dark.

_________________________________It

was

daybreak

when

Jane

woke

up.

_________________________________________注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.讀寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。評(píng)分參考：閱卷時(shí)主要考慮以下內(nèi)容：1.與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度；2.內(nèi)容的豐富性和對(duì)所給關(guān)鍵詞語的覆蓋情況；3.應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性；4.上下文的連貫性。1.What'sthestyleofthepassage?A.Narration(記敘文)B.Exposition(說明文)C.Argumentation(議論文)whowhenwherewhathowwhy2.Person(人稱):Firstperson?Secondperson?Thirdperson?

3.Tense(時(shí)態(tài)):Pasttense?Thesimplepresenttense?ReadfortheclueofthestoryPara(

)Para()Para()Day2Day1Day31,2,3,45,6,78who

whenwherewhathow

ReadforComprehensionJane&Tom(acouple)OneweekendinJulyInaforestquarrelledwalkedawaygotlostheardahelicoptertakeoffyellowblouseInvain...?angry,scaredexcited,helpless…?DecidethethemeforthestoryTrueloveneverfailsCherishwhatyouhaveSolvetheproblemspositivelyNevergiveupwhenintrouble(A)(B)(C)(D)DecidethethemeforthestoryTrueloveneverfailsCherishwhatyouhaveSolvetheproblemspositivelyNevergiveupwhenintrouble(A)(B)(C)(D)Mythemeforthestory:

Nomatterhowdifficultitwas,theirlovewouldleadthewayforthem.

PredicttheDevelopmentPara.7Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark.Para.8It

was

daybreak

when

Jane

woke

up.

Time:thenightbeforesleptFeeling:disappointedFindaplacetosleeptrytogetoutseparatePara7:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.…Para8:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.…whowhenwherewhat/howJanenightintheforesthowJanefeltwhatJanediddarkdaybreakwhowhenwherewhat/howJaneTomdayintheforestorotherplaceshowJanesurvivedhowtheyfeltreuniteddisappointedtiredwalk,find,climb,stop,sleepTom,helicopter,find,tell,love,hug…h(huán)appy

DrawaMind-MapPlots:logicalmeaningfulpositive

ClassifythetenwordsintosixgroupsJane,Tom,lake,walked,climbed,atadistance,stream,

Tohergreatjoy,helicopter,yellowblouseChooseatleastfiveoutoftenwordsandexpressionslake,stream,helicopter,yellowblouseJane,Tom

walked,climbedtimelapse（時(shí)間推進(jìn)）atadistanceTohergreatjoyanobject（物線）acharacter（人線）anevent（事線）spatialalternation（空間變換）author'sthoughts&emotions（作者的思想感情）SomestepstoanalyzebeforeContinuation:Findthestyle、person、tense、themeofthepassage

2.ReadforComprehension3.PredicttheDevelopment4.DrawaMind-Mapforthefollowingtwoparagraphs5.Chooseatleastfiveoutoftenwordsandexpressionsanobject、acharacter、anevent、timelapse、spatialalternation、author'sthoughts&emotions

GuidanceBewellconnectedtothegivenpassageandthebeginningsofthetwoparagraphs.Bewellorganizedwithatleast5ofthe10givenunderlinedwords.Makesurethestorydevelopslogicallyandreasonably.Neverignorethebasic

toneofthearticle.Writethecontinuation閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”

shecried.“Help!”

Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.But

no

more

helicopters

came

and

it

was

dark.

_________________________________It

was

daybreak

when

Jane

woke

up.

_________________________________________Evaluation

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Jane

hadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight.Althoughshefeltalittlesad,shedidn’tgetfearful.Shethoughtabout

Tom.“Hemusthavecalledfor

those

helicopters.

Maybehewasinoneofthemandwillcomebackagain!Ihavetoguidehimtomorrow.”ShefellasleepanddreamedofseeingTom.

Paragraph7:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.

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