英語期中考試作文

2010學(xué)年第一學(xué)期九年級(jí)英語期中考試作文分析評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)：內(nèi)容分7分：開頭總起1分；兩條理由各2分；結(jié)尾總結(jié)1分；全文通順條理性1分；語法分8分：給分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)同以往；文采分3分：內(nèi)容分與語法分的總得分達(dá)到13分，可適當(dāng)?shù)玫?-3分文采分；A.全文行文通順、條理清晰、言簡意賅即可得文采分1分；B.（達(dá)到標(biāo)準(zhǔn)A的要求）使用精彩漂亮的語句（詞組、句型），且合情合理，不顯擺詞匯量、不刻意堆砌，可得文采分2分；C.（達(dá)到標(biāo)準(zhǔn)B的要求）文采出眾，論據(jù)有力，蘊(yùn)涵深意，令人回味，可得文采分3分。需注意的問題：內(nèi)容方面：審題不清，造成正文部分內(nèi)容出現(xiàn)偏題：此為本次作文題中暴露出最嚴(yán)重的問題！試比較以下2個(gè)作文題的區(qū)別：Isitnecessaryforstudentstotakecellphonestoschool?Isitnecessaryforstudentstousecellphones?Usingcellphonesfortoolongdoesharmtoourhealth,fortheyproducealotofradiation.What’smore,we’llprobablyenduphavingpooreyesight.Almostallcellphonesaremultifunctional.Theycanbeusedasanelectronicdictionary,acalculatorandapowerfulsearchengine.Ifunfortunatelythere’sanemergency,wecangetintouchwithourparentsorfriendsimmediatelysothattheycangetusoutoftroubleintime.Cellphonescanholdhundredsofindividualphonenumbersandhelptotakephotos.Inthisway,wedon’tbotherwritingtheinformationdownonpaperanditreallybringslotsofconveniencetoourdailylife.以下所列論據(jù)是否圍繞文章主題呢？始終用總—分—總的結(jié)構(gòu)作為中考作文的基本框架：A.總起句開門見山，給出自己的觀點(diǎn)，即回答第一個(gè)問題（What’syouropinionontakingcellphonestoschool?Isitnecessary?）；B.文章正文部分闡述理由，即回答第二個(gè)問題；

注意：根據(jù)作文要求，至少闡述2個(gè)理由，且都切

實(shí)聯(lián)系到school；2個(gè)理由必須從不同方面闡述，

不重復(fù)、不雷同！C.文章結(jié)尾部分必須再次陳述自己的觀點(diǎn)，與總起句相呼應(yīng)，但不宜使用與總起句一模一樣的句式。

Withallkindsofcolorsandtypes,cellphonesplayimportantrolesinourdailylives.Lastbutnotleast,cellphonesaremorethanjustagadgetforshowingoff.Wereallydependonthemmorethanwerealizenowadays.語法方面（單句改錯(cuò)）Cellphonesenablestheparentstocommunicatewiththeirchildren.Studentscanusecellphonestosendmessagesandplaygames,socellphonesletstudentsdonotlistentotheirteachersduringtheclass.Somestudentmightstayatschooluntilverylate.Childrencantextwiththeirparentsthroughcellphonesandmaketheirparentsnotworrywhythey’llbelateforhome.Ithinktakecellphonestoschoolisnotnecessary.Becausewhenweneedtocallourparents,wecangototheteachers’officeandusethetelephonethere.Ontheotherhand,manystudentscan’tcontrolthemselves.Theymayplaythecellphoneinclass.Sometimestheteachersseeit,butsometimestheydon’t.Thiswillstopstudentsfrompayingattentionontheirstudyandwillhaveabadeffectontheirgrades.Asthesereasons,it’sreallyunnecessarytotakecellphonestoschool.請(qǐng)為以下三篇文章打分：Inmyopinion,itisnecessaryforstudentstobringcellphonestoschooltousethemastools.Forthetimebeing,manystudentsgotoschoolandgobackhomebythemselves.Theyneedacellphonetobeintouchwiththeirparentswhentheyhavesometroubleontheway.Also,iftheyhavesomethingthatkeepthemfromgoinghome,theycantelltheirparentsintimesothattheirparentswon’tbeworried.Cellphonesarenecessaryifit’susedasatool.As矮f筐ar煎a廟s澤I’裙m脊co笑nc禁er筋ne碑d,認(rèn)t澆ak糟in霸g紡ce蟻ll癥p北ho耗ne凍s鼓to默s喪ch勢oo蹲l腔is藏u幕nn通ec配es完sa吐ry關(guān).顛St眠ud防en惑ts消i廳n踩sc申ho扔ol輕m糾ay摸p竄ut佩c慰el削l獵ph吼on鍛es掉c屢lo車se溉t結(jié)o布th衫ei馬r酒bo禍di興es蒼.壺Th嘉en到c女el鄭l發(fā)ph蘿on擦es丹a賄re陽l廈ik狹el志y豎to先d草o己ha狐rm騾t或o販th歪ei構(gòu)r嫩he續(xù)al疾th犁.醫(yī)Fu山rt忍he攔rm蜂or步e,惱s慢tu秋de固nt起s易do什n’希t跨ne舊ed遞t時(shí)o其se述ar恩ch徹f捕or座i釣nf助or催ma走ti荒on廣,滅si疾nc畏e贊th情ey爪c遲an齡a疊sk免t掉ea煉ch悅er乎s掙fo中r福he布lp鑰.貧Mo培st虛i經(jīng)mp張or奴ta薯nt持ly諒,囑ga脊me些s招in矩p嘩ho燦ne饅s錯(cuò)st末op亮s港tu欺de董nt茄s巴fr浴om東f圓oc貴us設(shè)in直g槍on答l欲es