讀后續(xù)寫人與動物故事類兒子偷偷與小鹿的碰面課件高考英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)

高考英語讀后續(xù)寫語篇練習(xí)人與動物的故事——兒子偷偷與小鹿的碰面1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文4續(xù)寫原文Hewascuppingbothhandsinfrontofhimashewalked;beingverycarefulnottospillthewaterhecarried.Ifollowedhimsecretlyashewentintothewoods.Branchesandthorns(刺)slappedhislittlefacebuthedidnottrytoavoidthem.Hemighthaveamuchgreaterpurpose,Ithought.AsIleanedintospyonhim,Isawthemostamazingsight.Severallargedeerappearedthreateninginfrontofhim.ButBillywalkedrightuptothem,atthesightofwhichIalmostscreamedforhimtogetaway.Ahugebuck(雄鹿)wasdangerouslyclose.Butthebuckdidn’tthreatenhimnorevenmoveasBillykneltdown.AndthenIsawababydeerlyingontheground,obviouslysufferingfromthirstandheat,liftitsheadwithgreatefforttolap(舔)upthewatercuppedinmybeautifulboy’shands.5段首句Para1：Whenthewaterwasgone,Billyjumpeduptorunbacktothehouse.Para2：Insteadofscoldinghimlikehisfather,Idecidedtohelphim.6Part2題目分析7點1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語；點4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點8續(xù)寫思路分析文章以人物為線索展開，講述了在一個干旱的季節(jié)，作者6歲的兒子用雙手捧水，多次往森林里去，作者感到好奇，悄悄跟過去一看，眼前的情景讓她為之感動。9續(xù)寫思路分析Para1：Whenthewaterwasgone,Billyjumpeduptorunbacktothehouse.①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當水沒了，比利跳起來跑回房子?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫父親回來時以為Billy在玩水責備他，把他弄哭了。10續(xù)寫思路分析Para2：Insteadofscoldinghimlikehisfather,Idecidedtohelphim.由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我決定不像他父親那樣責罵他，而是幫助他。”可知，第二段可描寫作者安慰兒子并答應(yīng)幫他一起救小鹿，最后終于下雨了。11續(xù)寫思路分析續(xù)寫線索兒子讓水灌滿“小杯子”——父親生氣斥責——Billy哭泣——作者擦去兒子眼淚——答應(yīng)幫忙救小鹿——看到下雨，感到驚訝——覺得上帝被感動了12續(xù)寫素材可用詞匯：行為類裝滿：fillup/befilledwith大喊大叫：shout/yell幫助：help/assist情緒類生氣地：angrily/furiously驚訝地：inastonishment/amazingly感動的：moved/touched13續(xù)寫素材可用句型：[高分句型1]BeforeBillycouldmakeanyexplanation,hewalkedintothehouseangrily,leavingBillyweepingthere.（before引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句）[高分句型2]Wipingoffhistears,Ipromisedtohelphimsavethebabydeer.（wipingoff為現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語）14Part3范文呈現(xiàn)15范文呈現(xiàn)Whenthewaterwasgone,Billyjumpeduptorunbacktothehouse.Ifollowedhimbacktoatapinouryard.Heknelttheremotionlessly,lettingthedripslowlyfilluphissmall“cup”.Justatthatmoment,hisfatherreturned.ThinkingBillywasplayingwithwater,heshouted,“Neverwastewater!Ifweranoutofthelimitedwater,wewouldloseeverything,evenourlives.”BeforeBillycouldmakeanyexplanation,hewalkedintothehouseangrily,leavingBillyweepingthere.16范文呈現(xiàn)Insteadofscoldinghimlikehisfather,Idecidedtohelphim.Iwentupandheldhiminmyarms.Wipingoffhistears,Ipromisedtohelphimsavethebabydeer.Ifoundhimasmallpottocarrywater.Holdingthepotfirmly,Billywalkedtowardthewoodsagain.AsIwatchedhimdisappearingintothewoods,tearswelledupinmyeyes.Thencamethemiracle.SuddenlyIfeltadropandthenmoredropsdrippingontomyface.Ilookedupinastonishment.Oh,itwasrain!ItwasasifGodwastrulymovedbyBilly’ssinceresharingandcametosaveusfinally.17范文譯文水沒了，比利跳起來跑回房子。我跟著他回到我們院子里的一個水龍頭前。他一動不動地跪在那里，讓滴水慢慢地灌滿他的小“杯子”。就在這時，他的父親回來了。他以為比利在玩水，就喊道：“永遠不要浪費水！如果有限的水用完了，我們會失去一切，甚至生命?！北壤€沒來得及解釋，他就怒氣沖沖地走進了房子，留下比利在那里哭泣。18范文譯文我沒有像他父親那樣責備他，而是決定幫助他。我走上前把他抱在懷里。我擦干他的眼淚，答應(yīng)幫他救小鹿。我給他找了一個裝水的小鍋。比利緊緊地握住鍋，又向樹林走去。當我看著他消失在樹林里時，淚水奪眶而出。然后奇跡出