讀后續(xù)寫題目+拯救潛鳥 講義 高三英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)寫作專項

廣東省六校（東莞中學(xué)、廣州二中、惠州一中、深圳實驗、珠海一中、中山紀(jì)念）高三上學(xué)期第二次聯(lián)考英語讀后續(xù)寫題目:閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。PoliceOutpost

LakeisasfarsouthasyoucangoinCanada.Infact,nexttothelakearethe

protectedwetlands,wheresongbirds,ducks,andCanadageeseglidedbyonthe

breeze,touchingdownbrieflyonthewater’ssurfacebeforeflapping(振翅)theirwaybackupintothesky.Standingatthe

lake’sedge,mycousin,Allan,andIcastourfishinglinesseparatelyontothe

smooth-as-glasswater.DowntheshorelinewasAllan’sfather,myuncleRick.He

likedtofishalone,awayfromdistractions,noise,andotherpeople.Allanshouted,

“Dad,whereshouldIstand?”UncleRickpressedhisfingertohislips,pointedtoashadyspot

byalargerockwherehehadcasthislineandshookhisheadgently.“Hewantsusto

bequietorelsewewon’tcatchanyfish.”Iwhispered.“WhydoIhavetobesoquiet?”askedAllan.“Allthosebirdsare

makingmorenoisethanIevercould!”Iignoredhim,

pullingbackonmyrodgentlyandsquintingintotheglareofthesun.Outof

thecornerofmyeye,Icaughtaglimpseofafewgreatnorthernloons(潛鳥)gatheringtogethernotfarfrom

theshoreline.Whatweretheydoingthere?Loonsusuallytravelalone,buthere

werefiveoftheminacluster.Maybeitwasafamily?Justthenoneloon,

makingaloudpainfulcry,swamawayfromthegroup,towardme.

“Allan!Come

here.Now!”Allanlaidhis

fishingroddownonthedirtysand,dartingtowardme.“Comehere.Take

alookatthatloon.It’sswimmingtowardus,notfarawayfromus.It’strying

togetourattention.”Theloonfinallystoppedintheshallowwaternearshore,notten

feetawayfromus.Itwassoclosethatwecouldseeitsroundredeyes.

Strangely,thebird’swingswereheldtightagainstitsbody.Wadingintothe

waterandgettingclosertotheloon,webothsawafishinglinewrappedtightly

arounditsneckandashinyredhook(魚鉤)initsbody.Leftlikethis,thelooncouldn’tflyorfishor

survive.Itwasaskingustohelp!注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150詞左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答?！癎ofetchthescissorsfrom

thefishingbox,”IurgedAllan.

AsIsetdowntheloonon

thewater,itjoyfullyflappeditswings.試題分析:本文是--篇記敘文，主題是人與自然文章描述了“我”’、Allan和我的叔叔Rick在加拿大最南端的一個警哨湖邊釣魚，發(fā)現(xiàn)并拯救了一個被魚線纏住的潛魚。反映了“我”們是有愛心的人，熱為友愛，熱愛自然，這是值得廣大青少年學(xué)習(xí)的榜樣。文章體現(xiàn)了人類關(guān)愛與保護動物的美德，適合高中生寫作。五要素分析：When--onedayWhere--atPoliceOutpostLakeinSouthCanadaWho--主要人物I，Allan，theloon;次要人物Rick(myuncle)what--AllanandIfoundaloonaskingforhelpWhy--Theloonwaswrappedbyfishinglineandcouldn'tfly.鋪墊和伏筆：Justthenoneloon,

makingaloudpainfulcry,swamawayfromthegroup,towardme.為續(xù)寫我們循著聲音找到受傷的潛鳥埋下了伏筆。文本webothsawafishinglinewrappedtightlyarounditsneckandashinyredhookinitsbody為續(xù)寫部分設(shè)計“我”如何去解救這只可憐的潛鳥埋下了伏筆。故事線：Rickusaskedtobequietwhenfishing---foundaloonswimmingtowardsus---foundtheloonwrappedbyfishinglineandrescuedit---？？情感線：fondofquietnessandstavingalone---polite,curiousandhonest---carefulandfullofhelpandlove---？？分析續(xù)寫段首，確定續(xù)寫方向：由第--段首句Gofetchthescissorsfromthefishingbox“去把剪萬從釣魚箱里拿來?！蔽掖叽佟疘urgedAllan,艾倫)可設(shè)問如下1HowdidAllanrespondandwhatdidhedo?2Whatdidusdowiththeloon?3Howdidtheloonfeel?4.Wastheloonsaved?5Howdidwefellandwhatdidwedothen?(這個問題結(jié)合第二段首句提問)由第二段首句AsIsetdowntheloononthewater;joyfullyflappeditswings(當(dāng)我把潛鳥放在水面上時，它高興地拍打著翅膀)可設(shè)問如下:6.Didtheloonflyawayandwhatdiditrespond?7.HowdidIfeel?8.WhatdidAllando?9.WhatdidRickdoandsay?10.Whatistheresultthestory?HowdidIfeelthen?(可結(jié)合主旨設(shè)問)運用和原文相一致的語言風(fēng)格組織續(xù)寫情節(jié)：創(chuàng)設(shè)續(xù)寫兩段故根據(jù)六要素和自己的想象，借助文本資源，事的情節(jié)，創(chuàng)設(shè)畫面可以有動作、情緒、心理、語言等的描寫Paragraph1:[開端]“我”催促Allan去拿剪刀，Allan取回剪刀>“我”和Allan一起剪斷纏繞的線和身上的魚鉤>“我”和Allan感到欣慰。Paragraph2:把潛鳥放在水面上時，它高興地拍打著翅膀潛鳥不愿立即飛走->“我”感到自豪>Allan則高興地與潛鳥說起再見。[結(jié)局Rick]夸獎“我”們做了好事一潛鳥慢慢游走。[感悟]“我”感到欣慰，這次經(jīng)歷將永遠(yuǎn)留在“我”的記憶。范文:

“Gofetchthescissorsfromthefishingbox,”IurgedAllan.Heimmediatelytookaction,rushedtotheshore,andreturnedwithasmallpairofscissors.Itookadeepbreathandclosedmyeyesforamomenttostabilizemyself.Icarefullybentdowntopickupthediver.Surprisingly,thebirdremainedsilent,asifitcompletelybelievedwewereheretosaveit.Encouragedbymycourage,Allenwalkedforward,cutthethreadaroundtheneckoftheQianlongwithscissors,andcarefullyremovedthehookfromitsflesh.Afterthetaskwascompleted,webreathedasighofrelief.AsIsetdowntheloononthewater,itjoyfullyflappeditswings.

Itstaredatusandstoodup,flappingitswingsvigorouslyagainstthelakesurface.Itdoesn'twanttoflyawayimmediately,asifexpressinggratitudetous.ItsdisplaydeeplymovedAlanandme.Ontheshore,UncleRick,whohadbeenobserving,said,"Children,Iamimmenselyproudofyourloveandconcernforbirds.Collaboratingtohelpandmaintainthelifeofthisdiverisundoubtedlythemostremarkablethingwehaveeverdone.Bathedinthegoldensunshine,thelakeshimmeredwithenchantinglight,andbirdsflewfreelyonthewater-ascenethatwillforeverbeengravedinourminds.點評：續(xù)寫部分按照時