讀后續(xù)寫環(huán)境描寫速記公式

讀后續(xù)寫：環(huán)境描寫公式（解析版）目錄TOC\o"13"\h\uPart1寫景兩種重要的訣竅 3第一種方法：“情景交融”法 3情景描寫：Gloriesofthestorm 5第二種方法：比喻法 5Psart2素材積累： 12Part4綜合模擬演練 141．（2023秋·廣東·高三校聯(lián)考期末） 141．（2023春·湖北·高三校聯(lián)考一模） 172．（2022秋·重慶長壽·高三重慶市長壽中學(xué)校?？茧A段練習(xí)） 20Part5高考真題再現(xiàn) 231．（拍照北極熊遇險） 23通過對環(huán)境的描寫，能夠向讀者交待故事的背景，襯托人物，渲染氣氛，從而推動情節(jié)發(fā)展。環(huán)境描寫真的是必不可少的。此外，作者可以通過環(huán)境描寫向讀者間接的表達(dá)著故事中主人公的內(nèi)心情感變化。首先要明確的是，把主旨想清楚，時刻不忘“寫景乃為主旨服務(wù)”這句話。如果景物與主旨無關(guān)，就是為寫景而寫景，就是無效的寫景。例如，大家看看我要傳達(dá)出“高興”與“悲傷”兩種不同主旨時，該用下面哪種景物描寫。A.花兒低著頭，楊柳無精打采。B.花兒昂著頭，楊柳擺動這枝條。答案一目了然。所以，景隨主旨變。先確定主旨，然后來寫景，這樣才有效果。通常情況下，傳達(dá)出的情感好，則用褒義色彩的美好的、正向的詞。傳達(dá)出情感需要不好，則用貶義色彩的糟糕負(fù)面的詞。大家看下面三例：Thewindwasblowingdreadfully(恐怖地)。Thewindwasblowingsoftly（柔和地）。Thewindwasblowingfortably（舒服地）?？梢钥闯鋈鋫鬟_(dá)出什么樣的情感吧。下面我來具體講講寫景兩種重要的訣竅：Part1寫景兩種重要的訣竅第一種方法：“情景交融”法用一個公式來表達(dá)就是：寫景+感受寫景后，再添加一個明顯的情感描寫，就是指：有時在景物描寫之后，加上一兩句自己的情感態(tài)度。這樣做的整體效果就是：情境交融。當(dāng)然，如果你想造成“留白啟發(fā)思考”的效果，那么就沒有必要添加這種顯性的情感態(tài)度描寫了。舉個例子，大家記得2017年11月高考《健忘的媽媽》的故事續(xù)寫吧。第一段可以用到下面三句：Thatnightwesetupourtentinapark.（那天晚上我們在公園里搭起帳篷。）Themoonwasheldupabovethesky,shininghersmoothandcharmingmoonlight.（月亮被高舉在天空的上方，照耀著她那光滑而迷人的月光。）Twinklingstarswereblinking（眨眼）,andfragrant（芬芳的）breeze（微風(fēng)）gentlyblew.（閃爍的星星眨著眼，芬芳的微風(fēng)輕輕地吹著。）先來解決5個重點單詞。smooth光滑的charming迷人的blinking（眨眼）fragrant（芬芳的）breeze（微風(fēng)）這個景物描寫很精彩。但是如果后面在加一句：Restingbeside

mymother,withhandsheldtightlybyher,Ifeeltheworldissobeautiful.（躺在母親身邊，雙手緊緊地握著母親，我覺得這個世界是如此美麗。）這樣一加，就讓“母親”顯現(xiàn)，就讓“我與母親關(guān)系和諧”的主旨就顯現(xiàn)了。再比如，下面兩句景物描寫：第1句：Thewindwas

howlingdreadfully

andtherainwas

pouring

fromtheheaven,

whippingagainstthebranchesoflined（成排的）

trees.（風(fēng)可怕地嚎叫，雨從天傾斜而來，拍打著成排的樹枝。）第2句：Theworld

wasloadedwith

aseaofdarkness（世界承載著一片海洋般的黑暗）.先來解決4個重點單詞。

howling(怒吼)dreadfully（恐怖地whipping（抽打）lined（成排的）這兩句的后面，如果再加一句：Iwasseizedwiththeroaringpowerofnature.Asenseofhorror

creepingupon

me.（我被自然發(fā)怒的力量抓住了。一種恐懼感悄悄爬到我身上。）這樣就進一步強調(diào)了自己的情感。情景描寫：Gloriesofthestorm【原文】Therhythmaccelerates;plinkfollowsplunkfasterandfasteruntilthesoundisarollofdrumsandtheindividualdropsbeeanarmymarchingoverfieldsandrooftops.Nowthefirstboltoflightningstabstheearth.Itisheaven’sexclamationpoint.Thestormishere.【翻譯】雨的節(jié)奏在加快。噼啪之聲，一聲緊接一聲，越來越急，最后好似鼓聲陣陣。一滴一滴的雨點仿佛匯成了一支大軍，行進在田野和屋頂上。就在這時，第一個閃電劈向大地。這是蒼天發(fā)出的怒吼。暴風(fēng)雨來了?！举p析】此段描寫了暴雨將至的情景。多處使用了修辭。先是plink和plunk這兩個擬聲詞，形象地描繪出了雨點的噼啪聲。然后arollofdrums

采用了比喻的修辭，形容雨聲之大，其次anarmymarchingoverfieldsandrooftops

也是使用了比喻的手法，后面stab使用了擬人的修辭方法，指雨像劍一樣劈下來?！舅伎肌课覀冊谂龅奖┯陥鼍暗乃夭臅r，可以模仿其寫作手法，使用多種修辭，形成很強的畫面感?？傊鶕?jù)凸顯“情感”的需要，我們可以決定是不是該加一句顯性的“情感表達(dá)”，來決定是不是呈現(xiàn)顯性的“情景交融”?！皩懢?感受”這個絕招，大家掌握了嗎？第二種方法：比喻法我們的環(huán)境描寫還可以用比喻手法，用“l(fā)ike”即可，并交代、突出特點。如果總結(jié)成公式，那就是：寫景+比喻+特點與大家分享的例子是一位美國作家的短篇小說TheWhistle

(寒笛)中的寫景片段：原文是：

Nightfell.Thedarknesswasthin,

like

some

sleazy

dressthathasbeenwornandwornformanywintersandalways

lets

thecold

through

tothebones.Thenthemoonrose.譯文：

夜色降臨,暮色稀薄,

猶如穿過了數(shù)個冬季的敝衣,難以抵御刺骨的嚴(yán)寒。而后月亮升起。sis文本分析先來解決重點表達(dá)：sleazy

稀薄的

let..through

讓...通過,類似passthrough02我們再來做句子分析：這句話的核心句是：Thedarknesswasthin，即：暮色稀薄。其他內(nèi)容都是錦上添花的作用，就是讓這個核心句子顯得更加完整具體。怎么做到的呢？首先是用到了比喻：這里的

like.就起到了這個作用：“l(fā)ike

some

sleazy

dress”像是一條薄薄的裙子，將darkness比作薄薄的裙子還不夠，還穿了好幾個冬天(hasbeenwornandwornformanywinters),冬天里穿裙子一定非常的寒冷。于是作者又加上了寒冷入骨(tothebones)。如此，一個寒冷的夜晚(coldnight)與一件不能御寒的敞衣相聯(lián)系，內(nèi)容可以如此豐富。關(guān)于比喻，可能有些同學(xué)不是特別熟悉，再給大家一個例句：Afirestill

fluttered

inthegrate(壁爐爐膛),...

like

abirdtryingtofinditswayoutoftheroom.一團火還在壁爐爐膛里舞動著，就像一只掙脫束縛的鳥。這句話里，把壁爐里跳動的火苗比作想掙脫束縛的鳥（finditswayoutoftheroom）。使“火苗”的描寫更加生動。我們再來上面提到的“薄霧”的例子，回憶一下公式：寫景+比喻+特點如果說詳細(xì)一點就是：平平無奇的交代下自然現(xiàn)象+比喻（定語從句或非謂語修飾）+突出特點(冷得不得了)學(xué)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫，最快的方式，就是改編，仿寫。我們一起來牛刀小試一下吧：如果我們要描寫“霧”，應(yīng)該怎么寫呢？給大家5秒鐘時間思考一下吧。好，時間到。我們來看一下這位同學(xué)的寫法：Thewindwasblowing.Themistwasgettingthick,

like

ahuge

texturedvelvetcloak,

making

whatishiddeninsideanunclearmystery.風(fēng)正在吹。霧越來越濃，像一件巨大的有質(zhì)感的天鵝絨斗篷，把一切隱藏在模糊的神秘之中。這句仿寫的句子很好的get到了比喻的精髓，非常好的運用了“l(fā)ike”，texturedvelvetcloak（有質(zhì)感的天鵝絨斗篷），形象具體。非謂語making做狀語，也著實炫了一下語法。既簡潔描繪了景色，又營造了一種神秘、緊張的氛圍。Standingbesidetheemptyroad,theylookedupintothesky,feelingthepreciouspeacefromwithin.站在空曠的道路旁，他們抬頭仰望天空，從內(nèi)心感受到珍貴的平和。1.人物動作的畫面定格Theystoodthereforamoment,sidebyside,waitingfortherushingholidaycurrentandfortheirplaceinit.Thenthedaughterglancedoverandmomentarilyregardedhermother.Andslowly,almostreluctantly,sheplacedherarmwithapparentlyunaccustomedaffectionaroundhermother’sshouldersandgentlyguidedherbackintothedeluge.

她們并肩站在那里，等待著節(jié)日的浪潮，等待著她們在浪潮中的位置。然后女兒掃了一眼，立刻注視著她的母親。慢慢地，幾乎是不情愿地，帶著明顯不習(xí)慣的愛她把胳膊放在她母親的肩膀上，輕輕地引導(dǎo)她回到洪水中。Hishardworkpaidoff!Holdingthesodatinfirmly,Reubenrushedfortheshoptobuythebrooch.Themomenthegotthebeautifulbrooch,heburstthroughthefrontdoorandplaceditinDora’shand.NeverhadDorareceivedsuchagift.Speechlessandhappy,sheheldhersontightlyintoherarms,withtearswellingupinhereyes.他的努力得到了回報！魯本緊緊地握著汽水罐，沖向商店去買胸針。他一拿到那枚漂亮的胸針，就沖進前門，把它放在朵拉的手里。多拉從來沒有收到過這樣的禮物。她高興得說不出話來，緊緊地把兒子抱在懷里，眼淚涌了出來。Thebutterflycleanedhertearsontheface，“No.”Godfeltabitrelievedandsaid，“Tomorrowyoucanbeehumanagain.”Bu2.特殊寓意的寫景畫面Theskywasabillionpureeyesoflightandthegrassgreenunderfoot,itwasasifnightanddayhadbeeonebeautifulmoment.Dawnhade.

天空像是一億只純凈的眼睛拼接在一起，腳下是青草，仿佛黑夜和白晝已成為一個美麗的時刻。黎明已經(jīng)來臨。（黎明到來的畫面）02 Dawnsentshimmeringraysovertheplacidocean,bestowingagoldenpathfromtheshoretothehorizon.黎明在平靜的海面上放射出出閃閃發(fā)亮的光線，留下一條從海岸到地平線橫亙而過的金色道路。（黎明到來的畫面）03ThecrystalandceruleanwaterwasgentleasIwadedthroughit,thesunsetlikeorangepaintonabluecanvas.當(dāng)我涉過水晶般天藍(lán)色的輕柔的水時，日落就像藍(lán)色畫布上的橙色顏料。（美好日落時的畫面）

04Thelingeringsunlightwasobliteratedbytherapidlyfallingnight，resemblingapitchblackcurtaindrapedoverthesky.逗留在天際的最后一縷陽光被迅速落下的夜幕擦除，就像是天空被一層漆黑的幕布覆蓋。（日落時的畫面）05

Themoonundersiegebystarsseemedtolightenthenightbringingforthstarsthatshoneandhungintheblackness.Theneverendingblacknessconsumedeverything.被群星圍困的月亮似乎照亮了黑夜，帶來了在黑暗中閃耀和懸掛著的群星。無盡的黑暗吞噬了一切。（描寫夜空的畫面）

06Lookingup,IsawthesunshinebrighterthanIeverknewbefore.Isawatreeinthedistanceglistengentlyasitreflectedthesun'srays.Myconsciousnessebbedawaywiththeheat.ItookafewblinksbeforeIlandedwithathud.

抬頭一看，我看到太陽比我以前所知道的還要明亮。我看見遠(yuǎn)處有一棵樹反射著太陽光，發(fā)出柔和的光輝。我的意識隨著熱度而衰退。我眨了眨眼，然后摔倒在地才猛然回到現(xiàn)實中，恢復(fù)了知覺。（特殊寓意）07

Dottedwithglittering

stars,thesky,midnightblue,gavethesceneafairytalequality.

綴滿星光的天空，午夜的藍(lán)色，給了這一場景一個童話般的質(zhì)量。（神話般美麗的夜空畫面）

Theraindrummedonthewindow,biddingfarewelltothelastbeamofsunlight.雨水打著窗戶，向最后一縷陽光告別。

（雨水來臨的畫面）Kissedbytherainandglistening,thewetgroundiscoldunderfoot.Adenseearthlysweetsmellrisesfromtheground,envelopingeverythingwithinitssoftembrace.潮濕的地面走起來很冷，被雨水親吻后閃閃發(fā)光。一股濃郁的泥土般的香味從地上升起，把一切都包裹在它柔軟的懷抱里。（雨后清新的畫面）09TheleavescrunchedbeneathmyfeetasIstrolleddownthestreet.Occasionally,onewouldfallpastme,lightlyswayingastheairgentlycarriedittotheground.

我在街上漫步時，樹葉在我腳下嘎吱作響。偶爾，有葉子會從我身邊掉下來，輕輕地?fù)u晃，緩緩落到到地面。（描寫落葉的畫面）

Part2素材積累：1、描寫瘋女人：摘自CharlotteBronte《簡愛》瘋?cè)藞鼍啊驹摹縄twasawoman,tallandlarge,withthickdarkhair.Shethrewmyveiloverherheadandlookedinthemirror,andIsawoh,themosthorribleface!Discolored,almostpurple,andsavage!Shehadbloodshoteyesandswollenlips,andsheglaredintothemirror.【翻譯】這是一個又高又大的女人，長著濃密的黑發(fā)。她把我的面紗扔到頭頂上，照著鏡子。然后我看到，最可怕的臉！幾乎成了紫色，很兇惡！雙眼充血，嘴唇腫大，憤怒地瞪著鏡子?！举p析】本段描寫了羅切斯特受騙娶的瘋女人。從全局到局部進行描寫，先是身形，頭發(fā)（tallandlarge,withthickdarkhair），然后從臉部，眼睛、嘴唇（themosthorribleface!Discolored,almostpurple,andsavage!bloodshoteyesandswollenlips）。將一個不同于常人的人物形象刻畫的淋漓盡致?！舅伎肌吭谧x后續(xù)寫中，假如遇到有發(fā)瘋的場景描寫，可以嘗試模仿運用，先寫大，再寫小。不僅可以寫人，也可以寫憤怒的動物。如2020.7浙江高考讀后續(xù)寫描寫被噴了辣椒水的熊回來后的場景：Withtwo

bloodshot

eyes,thebear

letoutadeafeningroar

andviolentlystruck

thefencewithhisfullstrength.With

eyesswollen,thebear

letoutadeafeningroar.2、描寫狂喜場景：摘自AnimalFarm動物農(nóng)場【原文】Theanimals

rushedto

thetopofthefarmand

gazedround

themintheclearmorninglight.Yes,itwastheirs—everything

thattheycouldseewastheirs!Inthe

ecstasy

ofthatthoughttheygambolled(/?ɡ?mbl/

雀躍)roundandround,theyhurled(用力投擲)themselvesintotheair

ingreatleapsofexcitement.

They

rolled

inthedew,they

cropped

mouthfulsofthesweetsummergrass,

kickedup

clodsoftheblackearth,and

snuffed

itsrichscent.Thentheymadeatourofinspectionofthewholefarmandsurveyed

withspeechlessadmirationtheploughland,thehayfield,theorchard,thepool,thespinney.Itwasasthoughtheyhadneverseenthesethingsbefore,andevennowtheycouldhardlybelievethatitwasalltheirown.【翻譯】動物們沖到小山頂上，在清新的晨光中四處凝望。是的，這是他們的一他們所看到的一切都是他們的！想到這里，他們一陣狂喜，兜著圈子雀躍耍鬧，在極度興奮中，他們猛地蹦到空中。他們在露水上打滾，大口大口地咀嚼甜美的夏季牧草；他們踢開黑黝黝的土塊，吮吸泥塊中濃郁的香味。然后，他們巡視了整個莊園，在無聲的贊嘆中參觀了耕地、牧草地、果樹林、池塘和樹叢，好像他們之前從來沒有見過這些東西一樣。即便是現(xiàn)在，他們還是很難相信這一切都?xì)w他們所有?！举p析】本段描寫動物們看到屬于他們自己的莊園后激動興奮的情景。主要通過一系列的動作描寫突出動物們的喜悅之情，they

gambolled/?ɡ?mbl/

雀躍roundandround；hurled(用力投擲)themselvesintotheair

ingreatleapsofexcitement等在后面描述中作者還寫到了sweet

summergrass，richscent也側(cè)面描寫出了動物們當(dāng)時愉悅的心情，生動形象地向讀者展示了當(dāng)時的畫面場景?！舅伎肌吭谧x后續(xù)寫中，假如要描寫出乎意料的喜悅，激動之情，可以嘗試模仿運用?？梢詮闹魅斯囊幌盗袆幼髅鑼?，環(huán)境描寫，心理描寫出發(fā)，豐富細(xì)節(jié)內(nèi)容，重點突出他們激動興奮的情緒。Part4綜合模擬演練（2023秋·廣東·高三校聯(lián)考期末）閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。MortywascheckingouthislibrarybookswhenitcaughthiseyeaposterforAdventureRocksKidsCamp.“Checkthisout!”MortycalledtoBenandFredashegrabbedthreebrochuresanddashedtocatchupwithhisbestbuddies.Theyallstopped,booksinhands,tostareatthepicturesofkidsflyingabovecanyonssuspendedfromziplines.Theyinstantlybelievedthebrochure’sheadline:Summerwon’tbepleteuntilyouTakeittotheLimitatAdventureRocksKidsCamp.Benbrokethesilence,“Wehavelessthantwoweeksuntilregistrationopens,anditsaysthecampfillsupfast.”ThenanideapoppedintoMorty’shead.“Whydon’tweselllemonadeandsnacksbythesideoftheroad?Wecanpoolourallowancesavingsforthecamp.”“That’sagreatIdea,”Bensaid.ThesunhadbarelyeuponSaturdaymorningwhenthekidssetuptheirbusiness.Theychoseaspot,askedpermissionfromthehomeowner,andthenaskedtousehergardenhoseforwatertomakelemonade.TheirbusinesswentsmoothlyuntilBenannouncedthattheyhadaparativelysmallstockoflemonsshortlyafternoon.Mortydecidedtomaketheirstockgofurther.“Fred,whenthejuggetsdowntoonefourthfull,justfillittothetopwiththewaterhose.”Mortywasthinkingoutloud,“I’llchangethesignandcharge30morecentsforeachcupoflemonade.”Theirbusinesswentonandthethreeweresecretlyproudofthelittletrickstheyhaddone.JustasMortyfinishedrefillingthejugwithwaterforthethirdtime,avehicleroundedtheer.Mortysawtheminivanwithhisfatheratthewheelandhisfamilyinside.Theypulleduptothesidewalk,andhisbrothersandsistersjumpedout,eachclutchingacoinortwo.Theywereeagertosupporttheirbrother’sbustlingbusiness.Morty’sfamilyboughtthelastofthebrowniesanddrankthelastdropofwatereddownlemonade.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡得相應(yīng)位置做答。Morty’sfatherfrownedatthesipofthelemonade._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Theydecidedtofixtheirwrongdoingsthenextweek._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Morty’sfatherfrownedatthesipofthelemonade.Astohim,ittastedmorelikewater.Overwhelmedwithconfusion,heaskeddirectly,“What’swrong?Ittastesjustlikecoldwater.”ThemomentMortyheardhisfather’sdoubt,hestoodawkwardly,notsurewhattosay.FredandBenwerealsospeechless.Amomentlater,theyadmittedwhattheyhaddone.AlthoughMorty’sfatherwasdisappointed,hesaid,“Youstillhavetimetocorrectyourwrongdoings.”Hearingthis,theynoddedimmediately.Theydecidedtofixtheirwrongdoingsthenextweek.Bensuggestedtousethemoneyearnedtoprepareenoughlemonsfirstandthenreducetheprice.Theyallagreed.Whentheyrestartedtheirbusiness,theyevenstoodasign,saying,“WesendacupoflemonadetocustomerswhoboughtitlastSaturdayafternoonforfree.”Theymadeover50cupsoflemonadeforaconstantstreamofcustomerswithalowpriceandover20cupswereforfree.Asyoucanimagine,theydidn’tgetenoughmoneyforthecamp.Buttheylearnedavaluablelessonthatoneshouldalwaysbehonest.【導(dǎo)語】本文以故事情節(jié)發(fā)展為線索，講述了Morty，Ben和Fred三個孩子因為想去參加夏令營，在路邊擺攤賣檸檬水賺報名費。隨著檸檬越來越少，他們打起了歪主意：往檸檬汁里兌水并提價。后來，Morty的家人開心地來照顧生意。他的爸爸喝出了檸檬水的問題，不禁發(fā)出疑問。幾個孩子沉默片刻，還是承認(rèn)了錯誤。在Morty爸爸的鼓勵下，他們決定第二周彌補錯誤。隨后，他們用賺到的錢購買了足量的檸檬，降價，并主動聲明給上周周六下午購買檸檬水的顧客免費送一杯檸檬水?？上攵?，他們最終沒有錢參加夏令營，但是他們懂得了珍貴的一課：做人要保持誠信?！驹斀狻?.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“Morty的父親喝了一口檸檬水，皺起了眉頭”可知，第一段可描寫Morty的爸爸發(fā)現(xiàn)了檸檬水的問題后，幾個孩子很尷尬地承認(rèn)錯誤的場景，以及Morty爸爸建議他們怎么做。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“他們決定下周改正他們的錯誤”可知，第二段可描寫他們?nèi)绾胃恼约旱腻e誤。2.續(xù)寫線索：發(fā)現(xiàn)夏令營傳單——想?yún)⒓印獢[檸檬水?dāng)傎崍竺M——檸檬水兌水被發(fā)現(xiàn)——承認(rèn)錯誤——糾正錯誤——感悟行為類①糾正：correct/rectify②建議：suggest/remend情緒類①疑惑：Overwhelmedwithconfusion/filledwithconfusion②尷尬地：awkwardly/embarrassedly【點睛】[高分句型1]ThemomentMortyheardhisfather’sdoubt,hestoodawkwardly,notsurewhattosay.（由連詞themoment引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句）[高分句型2]WesendacupoflemonadetocustomerswhoboughtitlastSaturdayafternoonforfree.（由關(guān)系代詞who引導(dǎo)限制性定語從句）（2023春·湖北·高三校聯(lián)考一模）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。WhenAidenaskedmetoacpanyhimonacampingtriptothemountains,Ienvisionedalogcabinwithacracklingfireplace,hotcocoa,andbunkbeds.Imaginehowmyrustic,yetfortableimageofcampingbecameanightmarewhenAidenandhisolderbrother,Lebron,showedupwithatruckfilledwithcampingsuppliestents,rolledupsleepingbags,andcanteens!Ididpackabackpack,asinstructed,butIhadnoideaweweregoingonsurvivaltraining!Lebron,eversoefficient,hadascheduletokeep,andhehurriedmetogetinsowecouldleavethecityhustleandbustlebehindus.Ahead,themountainsloomedbiggerthanIhadrememberedthem;thetreeswerelarger,andtheenvironmentwasmuchmoredangerous.Atleasttheweatherwasamazing—cottoncandycloudsdottedthedeepbluesky.Atthetrailhead,LebronstrappedasleepingbagontomypackandlecturedAidenandmeabouthikingetiquette.Thefirstpartofthetraillookedmorelikeawoodedroadthatledupthemountainsthanahikingpath.Soon,thepathbecamenarrowerandsteeper,forcingmetofocusonthetaskathandandtotalkless.Aswegainedelevation,wemovedabovethetreeline,andIcouldseethetrailzigzaggingupthemountain.“Itlookscloserthanitis,”Lebronsaid,readingmyfacialcues.“Thisisthemostdifficultpart…watchthetrail,nottheview.Looserocksandtreerootsmakethetraildangerous,andwehavenoshade.”Finally,wereachedthesummit.Mylegsaching,Idroppedmypackandgroaned.“Notimetorest,”Lebronsaid,lookingupatthesky.Theweatherhadbeenwarmallday,anditfeltgoodtorelaxinthecoolbreeze.“Theweatherupherechangesquickly,andthatcoolairmeansastormisbrewing.Weneedtosetupcamp.”注意：1.詞數(shù)150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題紙上作答。Ithoughthewaskidding,butLebronwasquiteserious.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Justasquicklyasthestormcamerushingin,itstopped,allowingustoexitthetent.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Ithoughthewaskidding,butLebronwasquiteserious.HeandAidenworkedexpertly,whileIstoodaroundandpretendedtohelp,thunderrumblinginthedistance.Wesetupnearaboulderoutcropping,butthewind,thunder,andlightningwererelentless.Asthestormrolledinwithavengeance,wetookcoverinside.Lebron,sensingthatIwasscared,reachedinhisbackpackforsomecrackersandpeanutbutter.Slowly,butmethodically,hespreadthepeanutbutterandtoldstoriesabouthiscampingadventures.Eachtimelightninglitupthetentandthethunderechoed,Icringed.“Thisisjustatypicalsummerstorm—they’reshortlived,butintense,”Lebronstated.“Thecampsitemightgetabitmuddy,butwhat’sthefunincampingifyoucan’tgetdirty!Atleasttherainwillkeepthebearsaway,”hesaidwithasmile.Justasquicklyasthestormcamerushingin,itstopped,allowingustoexitthetent.Theviewwasstunning—Icouldseeformiles,andtherainleftafreshscentofpineandanearthysmellofsoil.Asdarknesssetin,lmarveledatthemultitudeofstarsinthenightsky.Iwon’tlie—Iwasyearningforahotshowerandasoftbed,butasIgazedupwardattheMilkyWay,IknewthiswasanadventureIwouldneverforget.【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者跟著艾登和他的哥哥勒布朗一起去露營冒險，一路艱辛，最終到達(dá)了山頂，就在作者想要放松休息一下時，勒布朗卻告訴她冷空氣意味著風(fēng)暴正在醞釀。他們需要馬上搭帳篷?！驹斀狻?.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我以為他在開玩笑，但勒布朗是認(rèn)真的。”可知，第一段可描寫他們開始搭帳篷和暴風(fēng)雨來臨后的事情。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“就像暴風(fēng)雨來的一樣快，它停了，讓我們可以離開帳篷?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫暴風(fēng)雨停息后作者所見所想。2.續(xù)寫線索：開始搭帳篷——帳篷里躲雨——欣賞雨后美景——感慨萬千行為類①認(rèn)為，覺得：think/guess②幫助：help/aid/giveahand③躲藏，隱蔽：takecover/findshelter④停止，結(jié)束：stop/cease情緒類①認(rèn)真的，嚴(yán)肅的：serious/solemn②極有魅力的，絕妙的：stunning/wonderful/beautiful【點睛】[高分句型1]Ithoughthewaskidding,butLebronwasquiteserious.(運用了省略連詞that的賓語從句)[高分句型2]HeandAidenworkedexpertly,whileIstoodaroundandpretendedtohelp,thunderrumblinginthedistance.(運用了while引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句和獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)作伴隨狀語)[高分句型3]Asdarknesssetin,lmarveledatthemultitudeofstarsinthenightsky.(運用了as引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句)（2022秋·重慶長壽·高三重慶市長壽中學(xué)校?？茧A段練習(xí)）閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。AsIbegantowadethroughthirteenpagesofthecreditcardpany’snewpolicy,Iwasn’tsurehowitwasgoingtoaffectmepersonally.AsIwaitedtobeconnectedtoacustomerservicerep,IconsideredwhetherIshouldevenwritethefifthnovelinmyOldCapeHouseseries.DidmyreadersreallyenjoythemysterioushistoricalstoriesItold?ShouldItakeonmoredebttobuymypaperbackbooks?Ithoughtaboutalltheauthorevents,booksignings,andbookfairsthatmightbecanceledbecauseofthevirus.Whenwouldnormallifereturn?“Hello,Ms.Struna,thisisThomas.MayIhaveyouraccountinformation?”Afterrepeatingtheinformationheneeded,Iexplainedmydilemmaintryingtounderstandthenewpolicyandaskedhowitwouldaffectmyfuturepurchases.“Please,donotworry.Youwillhavenochange.”“Areyousure?Iamanauthorandtravelfrequently.Ineedtohaveaccesstomycardatalltimesforbigorsmallpurchases.”Ilaughedtomyself,thinkingIwasn’tgoinganywhereforawhile,atleastuntiltherewasavaccine.“Letmereassureyou.Therewillbenochangetoyourcard,butMs.Struna,mayIaskyouonemorequestion?AreyoutheauthorofTheOldCapeHouse?”Myjawdropped.Hewastalkingaboutmyfirstnovelofsuspensefulhistoricalfiction,TheOldCapeHouse,publishedin2013.IwasstunnedandIstammered,“Why,yesIam.”Iwasstillskepticalaboutwhathewantedfromme.Thomaskepttalking.“Ithoughtitwasyou.Irecognizedyourname,andwhenyoutoldmeyouwereanauthor,Iknewitwasyou.”“Oh,mygoodness.”MyheartstartedtobeatfasterwithdelightattheconnectionIwasmakingwithanunknownforeignreader.“Ms.Struna,yourbookchangedme.ItchangedhowIlookattheworld.Itshowedmewaystobemoreadventuresomeandtobeopentonewthings.Thankyousoverymuch.”注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:IwasstunnedattheideathatIhadmadeadifferenceinsomeone’slife._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Ihungup,endingthiscoincidentalconnectiontoafanreaderinafarawayplace._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】IwasstunnedattheideathatIhadmadeadifferenceinsomeone’slife.Imurmuredunbelievablyandexcitedly,“Ihadthoughtnobodywouldlikethistypeofnovel.Iwasabouttogiveupwhenyougavemestrength.”Atthistime,thereweresomanypeoplestandinginlinethathehadtobebusywithhiswork.Therefore,hedidn’tsaytoomuch,justgivingmeadeterminedlookandtellingmetocallhimashehandedmeanotewithatelephonenumber.Consideringthatmaybehewasoffduty,Icalledhim.Hewasextremelygratefulformycallingandsaidemotionally,“ItwasyourOldCapeHouseseriesthatinspiredmeandpeoplearoundmewithconfidencetolife.Hopingyoucancontinuewritingtobringhopeandnewthingstoyourloyalfans.”Ihungup,endingthiscoincidentalconnectiontoafanreaderinafarawayplace.Isankintothought:becauseoftheoutbreakoftheepidemic,everyone'slifewasdeeplyaffectedandcouldn'tgoout.Yes,hewasright.Itmaybeagoodchanceformetobringanewworldandsomethingaboutadventuretotheirlife.Whatakindman!Hiswordswerelikethewarmsunshinetosweepawaydarkcloudsoverheadandbringmehopeandconfidence.NowIthinkitistimetoopenmyputerandcontinuewriting.【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開。講述了作者在辦理業(yè)務(wù)時遇到自己的書迷。作者在書迷的簡短幾句話中感覺到了自己的寫作的意義，讓自己在疫情之下的生活多了幾分希望?！驹斀狻?.段落續(xù)寫由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我為自己改變了別人的生活而感到震驚?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者在自己書迷的鼓勵下激動的心情以及他們之間的交流和互留號碼，然后通話。由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我掛了，結(jié)束了這段與遠(yuǎn)方一位讀者的巧合聯(lián)系?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫作者掛后的思考以及受到鼓勵后燃起希望，對自己充滿信心。2.續(xù)寫線索：作者難以置信——留下號碼——通話——陷入思考——開始相信自己——繼續(xù)寫作3.詞類激活行為類說：murmur/say鼓勵：inspire/encourage遞給：hand/pass情緒類激動地：excitedly/emotionally堅定的：determined/firm【點睛】[高分句型1]Iwasabouttogiveupwhenyougavemestrength.(運用了beabouttodo…when…句型)[高分句型2]ItwasyourOldCapeHouseseriesthatinspiredmeandpeoplearoundmewithconfidencetolife.(運用了強調(diào)句型)Part5高考真題再現(xiàn)（拍照北極熊遇險）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”—thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears—likeallwildanimals—shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI’mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard,andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough—hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws(爪子).Iradioedthecampmanagerf