讀后續(xù)寫慈善感恩節(jié)講義-高考英語作文復習專項

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。Myheartsank

asIheardtheclickingsoundoftheelectricitybeingshutoffagain.ItwastwodaysbeforeThanksgiving.Ihadbeenunemployedformonths,andmydaughterandIwerebarelysurviving.Igrabbedmypurseinanattempttofixtheproblem.

IgatheredallthechangethatIcould,but$1.75wasnotgoingtosolveourproblem.Weweremonthsbehindontherent,tothepointthatwarningnoticestomovewerebeingpostedonourdoordaily.

Nowwewerenotonlygoingto

beforcedoutoftheonlyhome,

butweweregoingtomakethatmoveinthedarkandcold.Mydaughtergothomefromschool.“Istheelectricityoffagain?”

sheaskedwithatoneofaccusation.

“Yes,”wasallthatIcouldgatherasIhungmyheadinshame.

“Mom,arewepoor?”

“Onlyfinancially,”Iresponded,chokingbackthetears.Atthatmoment,Ifeltaburstofenergy.

IhadtodoeverythingIcouldtomakesurethatThanksgivinghappened.

Afterall,

itwouldbeourlastoneinourhome.IhadmadeOrphan(孤兒)Thanksgiving,whichweledthosepeoplewithnowheretogo,atraditionfor14years.

Now,withawarningnoticeandnoelectricity,

howwouldImakemy15thOrphanThanksgivingareality?

Ihadtoaskforhelp,butslowlyIwasgettingthingsdone.

IputoutanannouncementthatitwouldbethelastOrphanThanksgivingatmyhouse.Peoplelivingnextdoorweregenerousenoughtoofferhelp.

Wegatheredcandles.Wecleanedtheroom.

AllthatwasleftwastofindthemoneytobuyfoodforaThanksgivingmeal.Thatnight,Isatinmycandlelitbedroomwithmydaughtersleepingsoundlynexttome.

Iheldmygrandmother’sgoldnecklaceinmyhandforwhatfeltlikealifetime.

ShewasthewomanwhotaughtmetocookwhenIcouldbarelywalk.ShegrewupduringtheDepression,and

shehadtoldmemanystoriesofhardship.

Ireasonedthatshewouldhave

approvedofmygivingtothoselessfortunate.Shewouldhaveapproved.兩個提示句：ThenextmorningIsoldthenecklace.Aftertheparty,Icameacrossasuitcasewithanoteonitunderthedinnertable.本篇寫作學生的問題：1.情節(jié)不合常理：學生設計箱子里的東西是我賣出去的項鏈，但我賣東西時沒有人跟蹤，如何讓別人知道了我的處境。（但有個別考生針對此進行設計比較合理：信里說這個熟悉的鄰居碰巧看到我賣項鏈，被感動，于是買回來送給我）

2.主題不夠清晰：一般而言，主題結(jié)尾呈現(xiàn)提倡清晰明了，而有考生使用一些突兀的環(huán)境描寫讓人不明所以，而閱卷老師在極短時間內(nèi)只想知道你是不是tothepoint。3.線索照應疏漏：本文有很多線索，不一定都要照應。但是和主題相關的線索，一般都要照應一下，但大量的學生只知其一，不知其二。Step1:ReadforthecluesEmotion:1.

Myheartsank2.

sheaskedwithatoneofaccusation.3.

“Mom,arewepoor?”“Onlyfinancially,”Iresponded,chokingbackthetears.4.

Atthatmoment,Ifelt

aburstof

energy.5.

Iheldmygrandmother’sgoldnecklaceinmyhandforwhatfeltlikealifetime.Problem:1.

butweweregoingtomakethatmoveinthedarkandcold2.

howwouldImakemy

15thOrphanThanksgivingareality?3.

AllthatwasleftwastofindthemoneytobuyfoodforaThanksgivingmeal.Solution:1.

Iputoutanannouncement.Peoplelivingnextdoorweregenerousenoughtoofferhelp.2.

shehadtoldmemanystoriesofhardship.3....

approvedofmygivingtothoselessfortunate注意的是：很多學生只寫了善良有了好報，但沒有注意到：OrphanThanksgiving是不是要繼續(xù)辦下去？我們是不是很窮？我們是不是搬出去，在又冷又黑的冬天？（這三點都是文章提到的問題）Step2:InfertheplotPara1:1.soldthenecklace>whatwouldIdowiththeearnings?(buy...)2.aftertheparty>Iheldaparty.綜合：1.（賣掉項鏈后的emotion)購買節(jié)日需要的東西2.舉辦節(jié)日晚會3.鄰居過來幫忙，孩子們開心

Para2:anoteonit》whatdiditsay?(感謝，鼓勵，箱子里有錢）綜合：1.note內(nèi)容2.我讀過后的感受（感動）3.女兒的反映+主題下水文填空（部分有提示詞）Thenextmorning,Isoldthenecklace.

I

_________（攥緊）theearningstightlyinmyhandswith

___________________________（說不出的難過）.Yet,the

_________

ofOrphanThanksgivinginstantlyfilledmewith

_________.

_____________________________________________buyingfood,toys,andmore（整個一天，我忙著買……）.

Icouldgetthroughthetoughtimeandmakeitasuccess!Soon,thebigdaycame.Tomydelight,almostallneighborscametogethertohelp,bringingvariousgifts.Mydaughterandtheorphansenjoyedthemselvesgreatly,theentirehouse

_________withtheirlaughter.Aftertheparty,Idiscoveredasuitcasewithanoteunderthedinnertable.

_________,Iopenedthenote,whichread:“HappyThanksgiving.

Despiteyourhardtime,youstillthinkoftheseorphans.Hopefully,themoneyinthesuitcasecanhelp.”Inaninstant,

___________________________.（流淚）The

_________ofworryaboutmovingoutorelectricitybill

_________.（如釋重負）Mydaughter

_________hereyeswithpuzzlementand

_________awaymytearsgently.I

_________hertightly,wantingtotellher:“Wearenotpoor;Instead,wearerichbecauseourgivinglovefillsotherswithhappiness,andinreturn,wereceivethesame.”好的文章需要有好的銜接過度詞，請列出來：時間過渡詞：Theentireday...;

Soon,thebigdaycame;

情緒過渡詞：Tomydelight;

Key:

Thenextmorning,Isoldthenecklace.

Iclutched（攥緊）theearningstightlyinmyhandswithanindescribablesadness（說不出的難過）.Yet,the

thought

ofOrphanThanksgivinginstantlyfilledmewith

energy.

Theentiredayfoundmebusy

buyingfood,toys,andmore.（整個一天，我忙著買……）

Icouldgetthroughthetoughtimeandmakeitasuccess!Soon,thebigdaycame.Tomydelight,almostallneighborscametogethertohelp,bringingvariousgifts.Mydaughterandtheorphansenjoyedthemselvesgreatly,theentirehouse

echoing

withtheirlaughter.Aftertheparty,Idiscoveredasuitcasewithanoteunderthedinnertable.

Confused,Iopenedthenote,whichread:“HappyThanksgiving.

Despiteyourhardtime,youstillthinkoftheseorphans.Hopefully,themoneyinthesuitcasecanhelp.”Inaninstant,

tearswelledupinmyeyes.（流淚）The

weight

ofworryaboutmovingoutorelectricitybill

lifted.（如釋重負）Mydaughter

widened

hereyeswithpuzzlementand

wiped

awaymytearsgently.I

held

hertightly,wantingtotellher:“Wearenotpoor;Instead,wearerichbecauseourgivinglovefillsotherswithhappiness,andinreturn,wereceivethesame.”Step3:Appreciatethemodelwriting官方范文：ThenextmorningIsoldthenecklace.

AndthenIrushedtothestoretobuyaturkeywithsomevegetablesandfruits.Bythetimethefoodwasmadeandguestsstartedtoarrive,Ilooked

exhaustedbuthappy.

The

smell

ofTurkeyfillingtheroomandthesoftbreadreflectingthecandlelight,a

big

dinnerwasalreadyinplace.Despitethelackofheatorlight,everyonewasenjoyingdinnerandconversation.Weallexpressedourheartfeltgratitudetoothers.Mydaughterproudlyannouncedth