讀后續(xù)寫+為埃及之旅點(diǎn)滴地?cái)€錢+講義 高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)

3月15日云南省高三統(tǒng)測(cè)讀后續(xù)寫ItwasJuly2019andmy

mum

Rebeccawastakingmeona120km

walkingholiday

fromPortugaltoSpainasaspecialtreatformy10thbirthday.Oneday,whilewalkingalongthecoastalpathstaringoutattheAtlanticocean,IchattedawaytoMum.“WhenLexiturns10,areyougoingtotakeheronatriplikethis?”Iasked,referringtomy

seven-year-oldsister.MumsaidLexihadalreadyaskedtogotoSvalbardinthenorthofNorwaybecauseshewascrazyaboutpolarbears.AlthoughIwasstillonmyfirstspecialtrip,I’dbeenlearningabout

ancientcivilizations

atschoolandknewI’dlovetoseesome

relicsintheflesh.SoIcontinuedsaying,“Whydon’tIgotoEgyptwhileyou’reinSvalbardwithLexi?”,addingthatmy

dad,Olaf,couldtakemethere.“Great,butI’mnotpayingforit.”Mumreplied,chuckling.“That’sfine.I’llpay,”Isaid,“I’llsaveupmy

pocketmoney

andgeta

job.”Sothat’sexactlywhatIdid.ThoughIwastooyoungtodoanyotherpaidwork,Ihadmyownsolution.Istartedsavingmy$10-a-weekpocketmoney.Also,Iwashedmyparents’carormowedthelawnforextracash.In2020,wemovedtoPerth.Oneday,Isawapamphletintheletterboxadvertisingajob

deliveringcatalogues.WhenItoldMumIwantedtodoit,shetriedtoputmeofftheidea,remindingmethattheworkwastiringandtime-consuming.Butwhenseeingthedeterminationinmyeyes,sheagreedtocallthem.Thankfully,myyoungagedidn’tbotherthem–Igotthejob.OnaMonday,amountainofcataloguesweredroppedoffatourhouse,whichshockedmealot.Itoldmyselftocalmdownanddedicatedtowork.Ittookmeninehourstosortthroughthem.Atfirst,Iusedmy

bike

andcarriedthecataloguesinmybackpacktodeliverthemto430housesinmyarea.

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Afterseveraldeliveries,Ifounditwasn’tveryefficient.

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Threeandahalfyearslater,Isavedamassive$6,500,andDadandIflewtoCairo,Egypt.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________故事中文梗概2019年7月，為慶祝我的十歲生日，我的媽媽Rebecca策劃了一場(chǎng)特別的旅行：我們從葡萄牙出發(fā)，步行至西班牙，全程長(zhǎng)達(dá)120公里。沿著美麗的海岸線漫步時(shí)，我好奇地詢問媽媽是否也會(huì)為我的妹妹Lexi安排一次類似的旅行。媽媽告訴我，她計(jì)劃帶著Lexi前往挪威的斯瓦爾巴德島，去探尋北極熊。我的心中充滿了對(duì)古代文明的熱情，渴望親眼見識(shí)那些悠久歷史的見證者。因此，我提出了一個(gè)想法：當(dāng)媽媽陪著Lexi去追尋北極熊的足跡時(shí)，我可以和爸爸Olaf一同踏上前往埃及的旅程。媽媽笑著同意了我的計(jì)劃，但明確表示不會(huì)負(fù)擔(dān)這趟旅程的費(fèi)用。我毫不猶豫地接受了這個(gè)挑戰(zhàn)，決定通過攢零花錢和做零工來籌集旅費(fèi)。2020年，一個(gè)偶然的機(jī)會(huì)讓我看到了一份投遞廣告目錄的工作機(jī)會(huì)。盡管我年紀(jì)尚小，但我的決心和勇氣讓我獲得了這份工作。每周一，我家門前都會(huì)堆滿了新的目錄，我需要花費(fèi)9個(gè)小時(shí)去仔細(xì)整理它們。然后，我會(huì)騎著自行車，背上裝滿目錄的背包，開始我的遞送之旅，為我所在區(qū)域的430戶家庭送去最新的信息。通過這份工作，我不僅學(xué)到了責(zé)任感和堅(jiān)持，也為我的埃及之旅一點(diǎn)一滴地積攢著資金……

主要人物：作者“我”次要人物：“我”的媽媽、爸爸和妹妹續(xù)寫思路建議第一段，著重寫發(fā)現(xiàn)工作方式低效（itwasn'tveryefficient）后的改進(jìn)方法。改進(jìn)方法可以是“我”自己想出來的，也可以是別人（比如家人）建議的。

第二段，重點(diǎn)寫攢夠旅費(fèi)之后到埃及旅行的感受。感受應(yīng)該結(jié)合作者喜歡古代文明（ancientcivilizations）這一點(diǎn)來談。結(jié)局部分，可以適當(dāng)深化主題以及表示感謝（比如：感謝自己的付出、家人的支持。）

寫作示范Afterseveraldeliveries,Ifounditwasn'tveryefficient.

Itwasatthispointthatmy

dad

offeredsomeadviceonimprovingmymethodofwork.Hesuggestedorganizingmy

deliveries

intosections,whichcouldhelpstreamlinetheprocess.Takinghisadvicetoheart,Ibegangroupingmydeliveries,planningmy

bike

routeseveryweekendwithstrategicprecisiontocoverthemosthousesintheleastamountoftime.Itwasn'tlongbeforemyefficiencyimproved.EverycoinIearnedbroughtmeastepclosertothePyramidsandmummiesthatfascinatedmesomuch.(85words)

Threeandahalfyearslater,Isavedamassive$6,500,andDadandIflewtoCairo,Egypt.

WeexploredthePyramids,andIwasfinallyabletoseetheancient

relicsintheflesh

thatIhadonlypreviouslyknownfrombooksandschoolprojects.Standingbeforethegrandmonuments,Ifeltaprofoundconnectiontohistoryand

ancientcivilization.Myjourneyhadtaughtmethevalueofperseverance.Moreover,Ifeltastrongsenseofgratitudetowardsmydadforhisadvicethathelpedoptimizemyeffortstowardsreachingthisgoal,andtowardsmy

mom

forprovidingmewiththeopportunitytogrowandchallengemyself.

(90words)

寫作細(xì)節(jié)分析Afterseveraldeliveries,Ifounditwasn'tveryefficient.

Itwasatthispointthatmy

dad

offeredsomeadviceonimprovingmymethodofwork.（爸爸雖然是次要人物，但也可以合理利用）Hesuggestedorganizingmy

deliveries

intosections,whichcouldhelpstreamlinetheprocess.（合理敘事：改進(jìn)的方式是分區(qū)域規(guī)劃送貨路線）Takinghisadvicetoheart,Ibegangroupingmydeliveries,planningmy

bike

routeseveryweekendwithstrategicprecisiontocoverthemosthousesintheleastamountoftime.Itwasn'tlongbeforemyefficiencyimproved.EverycoinIearnedbroughtmeastepclosertothepyramidsandmummiesthatfascinatedmesomuch.（合理敘事：逐漸攢夠了旅費(fèi)和下文第一句無縫連接）(85words)

Threeandahalfyearslater,Isavedamassive$6,500,andDadandIflewtoCairo,Egypt.

Weexploredthepyramids,andIwasfinallyabletoseetheancient

relicsintheflesh

thatIhadonlypreviouslyknownfrombooksandschoolprojects.（與原文的relicsintheflesh呼應(yīng)，這是作者一直夢(mèng)想看到的東西）Standingbeforethegrandmonuments,Ifeltaprofoundconnectiontohistoryand

ancientcivilization.（和原文重要概念互動(dòng)）Myjourneyhadtaughtmethevalueofperseverance.（適當(dāng)提煉主題和意義）Moreover,Ifeltastrongsenseofgratitudetowardsmydadforhisadvicethathelpedoptimizemyeffortstowardsreachingthisgoal,andtowardsmy

mom

forprovidingmewi