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73全國(guó)創(chuàng)新英語(yǔ)大賽優(yōu)秀作文題目：；Directions:；Readthefollowingparagrap；Howdoyouunderstandvolunt；Comeandjoinusinvolunteer；OnVolunteer；黃昕彤遼寧省鞍山市鞍山一中108班；Thedefinitionofthewordvo；Undoubtfully,thosevolunt；Peoplearo題目：Directions:Readthefollowingparagraphandwriteacompositionasstatedatabout300wordsin60minutes.Yourcompositionwillbegradedaccordingtoclarity,accuracyandmeaningfulness.InaccordancewithCRInews,thespiritofChinesevolunteers,fromrespondingtotheMay12earthquaketothe2008BeijingOlympicGames,notonlytouchedtheChinesepeople,butalsogeneratedworldwideattention.Officialstatisticsshowthatchinahasaccumulatedabout8billionhoursofvolunteerworkfrom380millionvolunteerssince1993andisgoingtohavemoreandmorevolunteers,especiallytheyouth.Howdoyouunderstandvolunteerwork?Inwhatway(s)isitimportanttopromotethewell-beingofindividuals,families,communitiesandtheworldatlarge?Yourwritingoughttocontainthreeparts,yourviewpoint,thesupportingideas,andtheconclusion.Comeandjoinusinvolunteerworkrightnow!OnVolunteer黃昕彤遼寧省鞍山市鞍山一中108班ThedefinitionofthewordvolunteerinLougnan（Longman）Dictionaryissomeonewhohelpsotherssponstaneously（spontaneously）andwillingly.That'strue!Lifeisastyleofenjoyingyourself,notonlybyentertaingandenridingyourself,butalsobytheprocessofhelpingothers.Undoubtfully,thosevolunteersrevealtheirgreatloveandpassionfortheircountry.Loveistheeternalthemeoftheworld,Withouthove(love),it'slikebirdswithoutwings,failingtoshowitstalentsofflying,It'slikespringwithoutflowers,buryingischarmingfragrantsinthedeepsoil.TheirvoluntyworkunitesChina,shouingtheworldhowunitedChinesepeopleareshockingtheworldofitscooperation.Peoplearoundthecountryaremakingtheireffortstohelpingothers,whichleavestheworldanimpressionthatChinaisavealcountry,andallthepeopleherearelikebrothersandsisters,whocaresalotforothers.YoucanneverimaginehowtouchedIwaswhenIwatchedtheTVprogramcalled“MovingChina”.13peasantsfromtangshangvolunteeredtohelpthosevictimsofSichuangonhearingthetremendousearthquakehappenedthere,leavingalltheirfarmworkdoneinthefieldtheysacrifiledanythingandhelpedothersatanycost,fortheyknewtheglantpainstheearthquakebringstopeople.Theycanneverforgethowmuchpainstheyhavendertakenintheearthquakeandhowmuchhelptheyhavereceivedfromtheworld.Theycomparedtheirownfeelingstothevictimsandpassedthesplriton.Inthissense,peoplewillpassthespiritfromgenerationtoqueneration,fromChinatoallovertheworld.Then,howsweetwilltheWorldbe!Ihaveadreamthatoneday,Iwillbeamemberofthevolunteerteam.Ihaveadreamthatoneday,I'llmakecontributionstoChinahoweverslightestitmaybe.IhaveadreamthatonedayI'llbeafounderofaworldCharity,helpingpeopleallovertheworld.I'mfirmlyconvincedthatitwillnotonlybeadreanforme,butalsoadreanforpeoplealloverChina,allovertheworld,andforthegreatGlobalVillage.專家建議：整篇文章條理清晰，結(jié)構(gòu)完整，總體感覺(jué)很好。但有個(gè)別語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，固定搭配有些用得不夠準(zhǔn)確，建議多用課本學(xué)過(guò)的固定搭配或是詞組造句。專家點(diǎn)評(píng)：文章語(yǔ)言流暢，運(yùn)用了修辭手法，展現(xiàn)出一定的語(yǔ)言功底。此外，論據(jù)生動(dòng)有力，讓人信服。如果句子之間的多用些關(guān)聯(lián)詞就更好了。陳茜江蘇省哈爾濱市第三中學(xué)高三18班Deargrandfather:Howareyou?Iamwritingtoinviteyoutojoinus,inthenextyear,tobeavoluntearinthegreatevent,whichistoholdinShanghai.We,agenerationborninthe90sinourcity,havemadeateamtodothevolunteerwork.AndyouarewelcomedbyallourteammembersawingtoyourgreatamountofknowledgeaboutChinesetraditionsandculture.Pleasedon'ttellmeyouaretoooldtodothisjob.Ibelieveyouaresuretoacceptmyinvitationafterreadingmyfollowingexplannationoftheimportanceofthevolunteerwork.Nowadays,volunteerwork,whichhasraisedpublicinterestandconcern,isbecommingmoreandmorepopularthroughouttheworld.Asisknowntoall,volunteerworkisnotonlymeaningfulbutalsonecessary.Onemypersonalwete,what'smore,it'sinterestingandpleasant!Ithelpusdevelopoursel.Firstly,forindividuals,especiallythoseyoung,todovolunteerworkisanawailuabewanytogoinsocialexperience.Bydoingvolunteerwork,theycanmeetvorriouspeopleandtheymayrunacrossallkindsoftroubles.Theyhowever,canbecomematureanddeterminedbysolvingtheseproblems.Youknow,nopains,nogains.Also,individualswillrealizethattheydomakeadifferenceinsomeoneelse'slife,eventhewholeevent,theworld!Theirconfidencecanberovisedandconfidenceiswhatittakestodoanyjobwell.Forfamilies,ifyou'rethesidethatreceivedthehelpofthevolunteers,ofcouseyourissuewillbemoreeasilydealtwith.Ifyou'rethesidewhogiveothersyourhand,youwillrealizethereexistsnobetterwaytoeducateyourchildrenthat“avirtwredeseruesamother”becauseyou'llgetthebestpresent-smiledeeplyfromone'sheart,inthewholeworld.Itisagreatchanceforallmembersgettingclosertoeachotherincommunitiesbytakingpartinvolunteerwork.Theirteamspirits,theirco-operationwillbegreatimproued.So,whynot?Themostimportantly,forthewholeworld,fortheentirehumanrace,volunteerworkwillmakeearthabetterplacetolivein,itisthroughvolunteerworkthatweknowtherearesomanypeoplearewillingtohelpothersalthoughtheycan'tgetmoneyfromit.Itisthroughvolunteerworkthatweknowweareallbrothersandsisters,thatweareallfamilies.Mydeargrandfather,canreon!JoinusandhelpintroduceowrgreatChineseculturetotheworld.21centuringisonopencewtury.Youcantrustyourselfandpleasetrustus,too!We'llhelpyouandweneedyouhelp!Let'smaketheworldabetterplacebybeingavolunteer!It'sasmallstepforusbutitisaleurgeoneforthewholeworld!Loveyou.Yourgranddaught.專家建議：句子之間的銜接做的還不是很到位，建議多練練關(guān)聯(lián)詞的用法。詞匯不夠豐富，句型變化不多，建議多看些范文，多練一些經(jīng)典句型。專家點(diǎn)評(píng)：文章立意很好，整體結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，語(yǔ)言大體流暢，還能夠引經(jīng)據(jù)典，顯示出有一定的英語(yǔ)(論壇)文化底蘊(yùn)。Tobeavolunteer，Bringarayofsunshine陳天悅山東省濟(jì)南市山東省齊鋼高級(jí)中學(xué)高三4班DearTom:Itisagreatpleasureformetohavethewondefulchancetoputpentopaperandsendmygreetingstoyou.Yousaidthatyouwantedtobeavolunteeranddidn'tknowwhetheryoushouldornot.Iwanttohelpyouanalyseit.Inmyopinion.Ithinkitisnotnolyagoodchancetohelpothersbutalsoagoodopportunitytomakeselp-improvement.You'dbetterparticipateinthevolunteerwork.Ifwecompaneyouthtoflouers,asisoftenthecase,thentheyoungvolunteersarethemostbeautifulflowers.Byjoininginthevounteerwork,youwillleamhowtohelpothersandhowtoloveothers.What'smoreyoucanalsofinditoutthattherearemanypeoplesufferingfromdisasterandthenyouwillvalueyourcomfortablelife.Althoughyoumayfeelverytiredasavolunteeranditmaycostyoumuchtimetohelpothers,Istillinsistthatyoushouldbeavolunteerbecausetheadvantagesbrightaboutbyvolunteerworkoverweighthedisadvantages.Itallthepeoplerefusedtobevolunteers,thepeoplesufferedfromthemay12earthquakecouldloseheartandmostofthemwouldn'thavethechancetosurvivefromthatdisaster.Ifnoneofthepeoplewantedtobeavolunteer,theBeijingolympicGameswouldbeafailure.Ifeverypeopledidn'tfeellikebeingavolunteer,therewouldbenopeoplecleaningtheenvironmentandprotectingthebeautifulsceneryautomatically.Itwasterrible!Fromallmentionedabove,volunteersplayaveryimportantpartinourdailylife.TobeavolunteerwillgaingloryforChina.Asisbrowtoall,Chinesechildrenarealwayslaughedatforlackofpractice.Sotobeavolunteerisagoodchancetocanpensateforit.Frommypointofview,it'shightimethatyoubecameavolunteerandlearnedtohelpothers.Ifeveryonemakesacontributiontohelpingothers,theworldwillbemuchmorebeautiful!Atlast,wishyouallthebest!Yourssincerely.Lily.專家建議：一篇文章的結(jié)構(gòu)是評(píng)判該文章優(yōu)劣的重要參考標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，但結(jié)構(gòu)顯然不夠簡(jiǎn)潔清晰，所以建議作者能在平時(shí)多閱讀英文報(bào)紙上的文章，有意識(shí)地觀察規(guī)范的英語(yǔ)文章是怎樣設(shè)計(jì)結(jié)構(gòu)的。專家點(diǎn)評(píng)：文章二三段的結(jié)構(gòu)很混亂，建議這樣的文章段落都應(yīng)寫(xiě)成總、分、總的形式更能突出文章的邏輯性，并在“分”的部分也一條一條分開(kāi)寫(xiě)，而不是都堆在一段內(nèi)，讓人分不清哪句是觀點(diǎn)哪句是論證，很混亂。另外注意同義詞的替換已是文章表達(dá)更豐富，比如文章中多次出現(xiàn)的幫助他人就都是使用：helpothers就顯得過(guò)于單一了~Volunteers李彥妮遼寧省鞍山市鞍山一中10.14班Thereisavividsayingthateverygloriouseventisjustifiablyconnectedwithvolunteerswhoisagroupofpeople,holdingthefundementaltohelpotherswithoutpay-backbenefits.In1993,whenthenewwordburtoutamongsocialsociety,mostofusgaveaslurtoitinconsideringofeconomy.Thespecialgroup,however,isjustlikeariver-smallatfirst,containedwithinitsbanks,floodpassionallythenmergedintothesea,forthesenseofmoralconsiderations.Andnow,Iquitesupporttobeavolunteer.Wecanneverforgetthesemovingscenes:AgroupofadolecentsfromBeijingdashedtotheCityofWenchuanwhogaveuptheircomfortablelivingsituationsandpickeduptheheavyburdentosavepeopleburiedintotheground,whileamiddleagedwhitecollarwhothrewawayhiscomputerandsalarycameheretofetchwictims'livesfromthedeath.Itisvolunteerswhorushedtothisplacewhichhassufferedfromthecatastrophethatgaveagreathelptothosevictimsinneed.Avolunteercansupportapieceofsky,andthisonereasonIameagertojointhem.Secondly,onlyavolunteerwhoisinactivepartinBeijingOlympicGameswillhegiveagreathelptothoselosers.ItisvolunteerswhogaveusawarmwelcometoBeijingthatputtheglorioussportsmeetingfrominchaostoinorder.Aperson,asweknow,whohasn’tjoinintothegroupofvolunteerisoneoftheunfortunatevictimsofthissocietywhichisoccupiedwithlove.Allofusareinhighpressureinthisadversecircumstance.Ourmindcatchesholdofsomethingandwillnotletitgo,ifwechoosethewaytoarguewiththemind,thestrongerthewill,themorefuitilethetask,sowe,shouldchooseawaytohelpothers,toseethesmilefromothers.Thenthepressuregetoutsuiftly.Ialwaysgointoraptureatamerementionofbeingavolunteerandregarditasapersonwhoiseagertohelpothersoragroupnotinthesameclasswiththesuburbansocial-climbers.Itseemsaclichébutasayingwhichisaninfallibilitythatasplendidcasecannotleaveavolunteerjustasafishcannotlivewithoutwater.專家點(diǎn)評(píng)：作者盡量用到了一些高級(jí)詞語(yǔ)和句型，表明作者有一定的英語(yǔ)功底，但是小的錯(cuò)誤頻發(fā)，如單詞拼寫(xiě)，語(yǔ)法問(wèn)題，句子邏輯，這在某一方面也表明作者的基本功有待提高，繼續(xù)努力。專家建議：用詞準(zhǔn)確是寫(xiě)作的基礎(chǔ)。對(duì)于學(xué)習(xí)英語(yǔ)的中國(guó)學(xué)生來(lái)說(shuō)，背單詞擴(kuò)大詞匯量是有必要的，但遺憾的是，學(xué)生們背的大都是單詞的“外殼”，記的大都是單詞的表意或字典提供的大致意思，而基本上忽視了詞在語(yǔ)境中的作用和詞的“精神”。這種只記單詞表意的學(xué)習(xí)方法對(duì)提高語(yǔ)言的運(yùn)用能力，特別是寫(xiě)作能力是極其不利的。Letusshine徐葉子江蘇省張家港市張家港外國(guó)語(yǔ)學(xué)校高二4班Volunteersarejustlikediamondsinthesun,andthediamondsareforever,especiallytheyouth.Volunteerworkisjustlikeamiracle.FromtheMay12thearthquaketothe2008BeijingOlympicGames,volunteerworkmadeunbelievablecontributions.60yearsagoourcountrywassetup,todaywewillcelebrateits60thbirthday.Inthisprocess,volunteerworkdidalotofhelpandnowourcountryisstandingintheworldjustlikeagiant.Inthepastyears,volunteershavehelpedalargenumberofpeople,theold,theyoung,thepoorandthehomeless.Allthevolunteersknowthattheroadaheadwillbelongandcragged,butnomatterwhatobstaclesstandintheirwaytheywillneverstop.Becausetheyhaveacreedandtheybelieveeverythingispossible.Ohthecreedofvolunteerwork,youmakevolunteerskeepongoingwithouthesitation.Ohthecreedofvolunteerwork,youmakevolunteershandinhandandbewithtogetherforever.Ohthecreedofvolunteerwork,youmakevolunteersgototheedgeoftheworldandletthemknowthetruemeaningoflife.Doyouknowwhatthecreedis?Yes,itislove.Withlove,volunteerworkmakespeopleopentheirmindandletthemfindtheskyistheirs.Withlove,volunteerworkmakespeoplelookintotheirheartsandletthesunshinein.Withlove,volunteerworkmakespeoplebelievethatsmilerswillneverloseandfrownerswillneverwin.Iknowsomethinghaschangedbecauseofvolunteerwork.Iknowitforrealbecauseitfeelssorightandtheworldlookssomuchbrighter.Loveisimportanttovolunteerworkandvolunteerworkisimportanttothewholeworld.Theinfiniteskyismotionlessandtheblueoceanisboisterous.Thismomentisperfect.Letusbecomevolunteersandtryourbestinvolunteerwork.Itcanbethestartofsomethingnewandit'sourturntolearnsomeorwinsome.So,let'smakeawishandgetreadytoshinelikediamonds.專家建議：建議該考生在語(yǔ)言流暢的基礎(chǔ)之上，注意兩方面問(wèn)題。第一，用詞更具體些，避免使用語(yǔ)義較為空泛的表達(dá)，如learnsomeorwinsome。第二，文章華美有余，但邏輯層次不足。需加強(qiáng)句子與句子之間以及段落與段落間的邏輯性。專家點(diǎn)評(píng)：該作文使用了很多修辭方式，從這一點(diǎn)上看，作者在學(xué)習(xí)英語(yǔ)的過(guò)程中一定是位有心人，注重邊閱讀邊積累背誦。同時(shí)能看出，作者一定是一位喜愛(ài)英文歌曲的人，文中很多表達(dá)都來(lái)自于音樂(lè)歌詞。但在遣詞造句時(shí)，需要區(qū)分口頭表達(dá)和較書(shū)面表達(dá)，在這點(diǎn)上，文章還有提高的空間。三億文庫(kù)3包含各類專業(yè)文獻(xiàn)、應(yīng)用寫(xiě)作文書(shū)、外語(yǔ)學(xué)習(xí)資料、行業(yè)資料、幼兒教育、小學(xué)教育、中學(xué)教育、生活休閑娛樂(lè)、73全國(guó)創(chuàng)新英語(yǔ)大賽優(yōu)秀作文等內(nèi)容。下載地址：73全國(guó)創(chuàng)新英語(yǔ)大賽優(yōu)秀作文.Doc【Top】最新搜索全國(guó)創(chuàng)新英語(yǔ)大賽優(yōu)秀作文循環(huán)水池操作鄂辦發(fā)電201426號(hào)181惠普師范學(xué)院培訓(xùn)計(jì)劃節(jié)日祝福模板USA50州氣候及學(xué)校推薦論文金屬探測(cè)器我國(guó)HDPE管材的現(xiàn)狀和發(fā)展前景簡(jiǎn)述競(jìng)聘上崗的程序。(簡(jiǎn)答)關(guān)于自制力的議論文個(gè)人工作業(yè)務(wù)總結(jié)本人于2009年7月進(jìn)入新疆中正鑫磊地礦技術(shù)服務(wù)有限公司(前身為“西安中正礦業(yè)信息咨詢有限公司”)，主要從事測(cè)量技術(shù)工作，至今已有三年。在這寶貴的三年時(shí)間里，我邊工作、邊學(xué)習(xí)測(cè)繪相專業(yè)書(shū)籍，遇到不懂得問(wèn)題積極的請(qǐng)教工程師們，在他們耐心的教授和指導(dǎo)下，我的專業(yè)知識(shí)水平得到了很到的提高，并在實(shí)地測(cè)量工作中加以運(yùn)用、總結(jié)，不斷的提高自己的專業(yè)技術(shù)水平。同時(shí)積極的參與技術(shù)培訓(xùn)學(xué)習(xí)，加速自身知識(shí)的不斷更新和自身素質(zhì)的提高。努力使自己成為一名合格的測(cè)繪技術(shù)人員。在這三年中，在公司各領(lǐng)導(dǎo)及同事的幫助帶領(lǐng)下，按照崗位職責(zé)要求和行為規(guī)范，努力做好本職工作，認(rèn)真完成了領(lǐng)導(dǎo)所交給的各項(xiàng)工作，在思想覺(jué)悟及工作