初中英語人教課標版九年級全一冊-英語作文課-公開課

Sheisakindteacher.Inordertohelpyou,shealwaysworkshard.Sheisateacherwhoisveryhelpful,forexample,shealwayshelpsyouwithyourChinese.Whoisshe?Let’splayaguessinggame!Sheisateacherwholikestravelling.Sheisateacher.EnglishWriting--TrytomakeyourwritingbetterpollutionHi!Tina,I’mhappytogetyourletter.Ihearthatthepollutionisbad.Ihavesomesuggestions.Youshouldwalktoschool.Youshouldturnofflights.Youshouldplantsometrees.Youshouldusesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes.Thesearemysuggestions.Ihopetheenvironmentinyourhometownwillbebetterlater.Yours,BillTinaI’mhappytogetyourletter.Youshouldwalktoschool.Tip1:Usewordsandphrasesproperlyandvividly.用詞適切、生動I’mhappytoreceiveyourletter.Youshouldgotoschoolonfoot.Howtomakeitmore

vivid(生動的)？I’mhappytohearfromyou.Youshouldgotoschoolonfootinsteadoftakingcars.PartsofBody:正文(節(jié)選)Youshouldwalktoschool.Youshouldturnofflights.Youshouldplantsometrees.Youshouldusesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes.

Sentencepatterns(句型)ofgivingadvice:should/candosthWhynotdosth?/Whydon’tyoudosth?Whataboutdoingsth?/Howaboutdoingsth?Itis+adj+forsbtodosthItisagoodideatodosthHadbetterdosthItisbettertodosthTrytodosthLet’sdosth…Let’swalktoschool.Itisagoodideatowalktoschool.You’dbetterwalktoschool.…Tip2:

Trytousedifferentsentencepatterns(句型).We’dbetterturnofflightssothatwecansaveenergy.Youshouldturnofflights.PartsofBody:正文(節(jié)選)AdverbialClause狀語從句sothat…,when,inorderto,…Turnofflightswhenweleavetheclassroomstosaveenergy.Inordertosaveenergy,let’sturnofflights.…Youshouldplantsometreesthataregoodfortheenvironment.Youshouldplantsometrees.PartsofBody:正文(節(jié)選)AttributiveClause定語從句that,which……Tip3:

Usecomplexsentences(復(fù)合句)tomakesentencesbetter.Youshouldplantsometreesthatcanmakeourearthgreen.Usesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes.Forexample,wecanusechinacupsinsteadofpaperones.Usesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes.PartsofBody:

正文(節(jié)選)Trytoaddanexample.forexample,suchas…Usesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes,suchasusingclothbagsinsteadofplasticbags.…Tip4:

Addexamplestomakeyourwritingpersuasive(有說服力的).

Hi!Tina,I’mhappytohearfromyou.BecauseI’msorrytohearthatthepollutionisserious.Ihavesomesuggestionsforyou.Let’swalktoschoolinsteadoftakingcars.It’sgoodforustoreduceairpollution.Youshouldplantsometreesthataregoodfortheenvironment.Turnofflightswhenweleavetheclassroomstosaveenergy.Usesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes.Forexample,wecanusechinacupsinsteadofpaperones.Thesearemysuggestions.Ifeveryonestartstodosomething,theworldwillbesaved.Ihopetheenvironmentinyourhometownwillbebetterandbetterinthefuture.Yours,BillTip5:Uselinkingwordsproperly連接詞使用恰當(dāng)

()Coherent(連貫的)?寫作中句子和句子之間比較常用的連接詞1.表示并列/遞進關(guān)系：and,besides,what’smore,also,notonly…,butalso…,atthesametime,…2.表示轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系：but,however,…3.表示因果關(guān)系：because,since,so,therefore,…4.表示結(jié)果：asaresult,so…that…,…5.表示先后：First,Second,Third,Next,Finally…6.表示時間：when,while,after,before,assoonas…7.表示總結(jié)：inaword,generallyspeaking,allinall…

Hi!Tina,I’mhappytohearfromyou._______I’msorrytohearthatthepollutionisserious.____Ihavesomesuggestionsforyou.

______,Let’swalktoschoolinsteadoftakingcars.It’sgoodforustoreducepollution._______,Turnofflights______weleavetheclassroomstosaveenergy.__________,youshouldplantsometreesthataregoodfortheenvironment.________,usesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes.Forexample,wecanusechinacupsinsteadofpaperones.Thesearemysuggestions.Ifeveryonestartstodosomething,theworldwillbesaved.Ihopetheenvironmentinyourhometownwillbebetterandbetterinthefuture.Yours,Billfinally,so,firstly,but;when;secondly;what’smore;

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Firstly,let’swalktoschoolinsteadoftakingcars.It’sgoodforustoreducepollution.Secondly,turnofflightswhenweleavetheclassroomstosaveenergy.What’smore,youshouldplantsometreesthataregoodfortheenvironment.Finally,usesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes.Forexample,wecanusechinacupsinsteadofpaperones.Finally,usesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes.Forexample,wecanusechinacupsinsteadofpaperones.

Hi!Tina.I’mhappytohearfromyou.ButI’msorrytohearthatthepollutionisserious.SoIhavesomesuggestionsforyou.

Thesearemysuggestions.Ifeveryonestartstodosomething,theworldwillbesaved.Ihopetheenvironmentinyourhometownwillbebetterandbetterinthefuture.Tip6:Makesurethestructure(結(jié)構(gòu))isclear.

作文評分標準評分原則：1.按5個檔次給分。中檔屬第三檔（9分—7分）。2.按學(xué)生所寫內(nèi)容和所用語言確定檔次（內(nèi)容分和語言分各占一半）。3.卷面整潔，詞數(shù)符合要求?？傇~數(shù)不足40詞可在本題總得分中扣去3分；超過120個可在本題總得分中扣去2分。4.內(nèi)容評分要點：（1）內(nèi)容的完整性；（6分）（2）語言的得體性和多樣性（4分）；5.各檔次的給分范圍和要求：第五檔（很好）：（15—13分）完全完成試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)。?信息全。?語言可讀性強，語言結(jié)構(gòu)基本正確，有少量錯誤。第四檔（好）：（12—10分）完全完成試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)。?