【讀后續(xù)寫】高中英語讀后續(xù)寫講評：100 dollars 名師課件-周媚

ContinuationWriting臺州第一中學周媚老師

100dollarsCharactersgrandmaStructure

pickupcheckguess/imagine(realcharacter)(imaginarycharacter)Part4(para6-7)dealwithMegan,momatallman,niece,Part1Part2Part3(para1):(para2):(para3-5):

thebillonthewaytoschool

thebillatschool

theownerofthebillonthewayhomeontheschoolbus_______________________________________the

billathome,inthesupermarket

Walkingslowlytowardsherhouse,shedebatedwhethertotellhermomofhernew-foundtreasure.thinkcarefullyPart4(para6-7)dealwiththebill

uneasy/nervous,guilty,relievedstruggle，feeling,action，dialogue,decision...action,feeling,ending...struggleThenextdaywasSaturdayandMeganandhermomarrived

atthesupermarketearly.(para6)Walkingslowlytowardsherhouse,shedebatedwhethertotellhermomofhernew-foundtreasure.struggle,feeling(nervousness/uneasiness，guilty，relieved),action，dialogue,decision...Struggle1Struggling/Tornbetweenkeepingthesecretandtalkingtomom,Meganwasataloss,soshepulledoutthebill,straighteningand

crumplingitagainandagain.（徐心瑤）2Treats,toysandnewskirtsthatshehadalwaysdreamedof

floodedintohermind.Meanwhile,mom’swordsofbeinganhonestgirlwereechoing.inherhead.(楊易錚)3Thedevilinhermindtriedtopersuadeherinthesweetestvoicewhileanotherstrongvoicekepttellingheroftobehonest.(周逸飏)4Suddenlyademonpoppedoutfromherheart,

whispering

,“Don’tbeguilty.TheBillbelongstoyou.”Butthesecondmomentshethoughtofhermother’sconstantreminder:Alwaysbeanhonestgirl.邱(俊淵)feeling(nervousness/uneasiness)1.心跳加快

Megan’slittleheartfluttered/beat/pounded/hammered

wildly.Megan'sheart

raced.2.心跳到嗓子眼了Megan'sheartnearlyjumped/leapt/bumpedintohermouth.3.她心跳陡然停了一下Herheartmissed/skippedabeat.4.Herthroattightened.Herpalmssweated.

Herlegs/bodytrembled/shook/shivered/quivered.Hereyebrowsknitted/tightened.Shebitherlowerliptightly.(/violently).decision1Maganreturnedthebilltotheowner,sothenextdayMaganwastakentothemarkettoberewardedwithsometoys.2Maganhandedthebilltothepolice,sothenextdayMaganwastakentothemarkettoberewardedwithsometoys.3Thefamilybeingverypoor,Momkeptthe100-dollarbill,sothenextdaytheywenttothemarkettobuysomenecessities.4Maganandhermomdecidedtogotothesupermarkettobuysomenecessityforsomepoepleinneedwiththebill.Tip1:Thestoryshouldbelogicalandpositivewiththethemehighlighted.(para7)ThenextdaywasSaturdayandMeganandhermomarrived

atthesupermarketearly.

action,（helped）people’sreaction，feeling,ending...ActionGrabbing

thebilltightlyinhertinyhand,Magan___________tothemarketandquicklyhereyeswere

tothetoys.However,thinkingofwhatMomsaidlastnight,Meganstartedto________presentsforthechildreninneed.Alldone,Meganwrappedthemupand

themwitharedribbon.gluedchoosetied/decoratedTip2:Aseriesofactionscanmaketheplotmorevivid.rushed/dashedEnding1.Onthewayhome,

Meganthought:“Honestyisthebestpolicy.誠實至上.”2.“ThoughIhaven’tgotmyfavoritetoys,Ihaveharvestedsomethingmorevaluable.”Megansaidtohermom.Tip3：Thetoneofthecharactershouldbeconsistentwithhispersonality.Ending1ThejoyofsharingandspreadingkindnessfilledMegan'smind.（葉俁含）

2Onthewayhome,breezegentlybrushedMagan'shairandthesunshoneonherfacewarmly.(陳昱臻)3MomhuggedMegantightlyinherarms,saying“Mysweetie,Iamreallyproudofyou.”(張盧尹)4Astheywalkedbacktothecar,Megantookhermother'shand,smilinghappily.4-->自然式結(jié)尾1-->主題升華結(jié)尾2-->環(huán)境描寫結(jié)尾3-->畫面定格結(jié)尾

Walkingslowlytowardsherhouseshedebatedwhethertotellhermomofhernew-foundtreasure.

Shewastornbetweenkeepingthesecretandtalkingtomom,herheartbeatingwildly.Onceinherroom,sheclosedthedoor.Carefullyshestraightenedthe

bill

thatdidn’tbelongtoher,andthethingsshedreamedofstartedrunningthroughhermind:abike,aniPod,newtoys...Thenitwasdinnertime.NoticingMegantoyingwithhersupper,momaskedwithconcern，“Mysweet,iseverythingOK?”NotuntilthendidMeganpouroutwhathadbeendisturbingherthewholeday.Overthedinner,momandMegandiscussedhowtodealwiththebillforalongtimeandfinallytheycameupwithanidea.

struggleactionfeelingdialogue

ThenextdaywasSaturdayandMeganandhermomarrivedatthesupermarketearly.

Megananxiouslyrushedintothesupermarket,wherevariouskindsoftoyscameintohersight,alladorableandinviting.Meganchosecarefully,puttingthemintoherbasket.Inthebasketwereherlongdreamedfavoritetoys,however,shedeterminedtogivethemtothechidrenintheorphanageaspresents,sincetheimaginaryfigureofthatlittlegirlcontinullyappearedinhermind.Then,shewenttothecashier,proudlytookoutthe＄100billfromherpocketandhandedittotheclerk.SeeingwhatMeganhaddone,Momworeanapprovingsmileonherface.(魚米)定語從句獨立主格現(xiàn)在分詞（狀語）倒裝句并列動詞現(xiàn)在分詞（狀語）since引導的從句

Walkingslowlytowardsherhouseshedebatedwhethertotellhermomofhernew-foundtreasure.

Shewastornbetweenkeepingthebilltoherselfandtalkingtomom,herheartbeatingwildly.Onceinherroom,sheclosedthedoor.Carefullyshestraightenedthe

bill

thatdidn'tbelongtoher,andthethingsshedreamedofstartedrunningthroughhermind:abike,aniPod,newtoys...Thenitwasdinnertime.NoticingMegantoyingwithhersupper,momaskedwithconcern，“Mysweet,iseverythingOK?”NotuntilthendidMeganpouroutwhathadbeendisturbingherthewholeday.Overthedinner,momandMegandiscussedhowtodealwiththebillforalongtimeandfinallytheycameupwithanidea.

ThenextdaywasSaturdayandMeganandhermomarrivedatthesupermarketearly.

Megananxiouslyrushedintothesupermarket,wherevariouskindsoftoy