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ContinuationWritingLanguage:ThechildrendecidedtomakepopcornandwenttoBernard’shome.ThechildrendecidedtomakepopcornandwenttoBernard’shomeastheywereanxioustoknowwhatBernardwouldthinkofthisidea.PolishyoursentenceTip1Add“why”---多問幾個為什么Language:Tip2Addadj./adv./phrases(形容詞、副詞、短語)

對名詞搞事，對動詞修飾Atlast,Bernardputthepopcornintopaperbagsandtookitout.PolishyoursentenceEventually,Bernardputthecrispy(脆的)andyummypopcornintothelovelypaperbagsandtookitoutwithdelightandexcitement.Language:Tip3Addnon-finiteverbs勿忘非謂語作狀語2.Hearingthegreatidea,asuddenwaveofjoysweptoverhim.PolishyoursentencesHearingthegreatidea,hefeltoverjoyedanddeeplytouched.1.Thepopcornwasyummy.Theyputitintopaperbags.Enjoyingthesweetsmellofthepopcorn,theyputitintopaperbags.

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Shenoddedwithasmile

andencouragedthechildren,"Let'sget

started!"Immediately,Claravolunteeredtogetthebigboxofcornand

preparedthemicrowaveoventomakepopcorn.Atthesametime,John

wenttopurchasesomepaperbagsandarrangedallthestuffinplace.

HarryrantoBernard'sanddraggedhimtothescene.Afterhearingthe

explanation,Bernardwasoverwhelmedwithexcitementandgratitude.

Theycouldhardlywait.Timewentbyswiftly,andthechildrenlaughed,

carryingouttheirgreat“project".Joyfilledtheyardandeveryone's

heart.Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Carryingallthepaperbags,hecalledout,“Popcorn!50centsforoneextra-large

pack!"Peoplestartedtogatheraroundhim,whichdrewevenmore

people.Everyoneisreadytobuyonepacktosupporthim.Theairwas

richwithhappinessandkindness.Withinnotime,Bernardsoldoutofallpopcornandearnedquitesomemoney.Onreturning,hethankedthe

Meredithfamilywithwateryeyes.ForClara,HarryandJohn,itwasan

unforgettable

experienceaswell.Itturnedoutthattheireffortsnotonly

helpedabrotherinneed,butalsogavethemselvesthesweettasteof

helpingothers.

SummaryPlotLanguage1)Add“why”---多問幾個為什么2)Addadj./adv./phrases對名詞搞事，對動詞修飾3)Addnon-finiteverbs勿忘非謂語作狀語2)Relatetothearticlegiventoyou緊密聯(lián)系所給文章3)Coherenceofthecharacterinthefirstsentence注意人物銜接1)Focusonthefirstsentenceineachparagraph鎖定所給段首句Bytheendoftheclass,wewillbeableto…developareasonableandwell-organizedplot;.practisewhatwehavelearnedinthisclass.learnthetipsonhowtobeautifyourwriting;LearningObjectives◆評分參考閱卷時主要考慮以下內(nèi)容：（1）與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度；（2）內(nèi)容的豐富性（3）應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準確性；（4）上下文的連貫性。Plot&Language李籽言18分

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優(yōu)秀：李籽言朱杰峰陸丁瑞欣帥言紀禮峰張冬鳴李艾佳郁彤龔博文進步較大：江朵兒管月唐柏悅沈昊傅程昊董慶薇吳愛榮李大鵬Problems：Plot:irrational情節(jié)不合理

Language:notvivid句子表達“骨感”……Para2:

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Webeganit.Firstly,Meredithmakeafireontheground.Then,sheputmanypopcornintothatbigbox,hangingonthefire.Waitingfor20minutes,awonderfulflavour

flowout.Finally,Meredithputouttheboxwithstrongstrength.Dozensofyellowanddeliciouspopcornspringtooureyes.WeputmostofthemintothepaperbagsandsenttoBernard.?/10分Plot:1)Focusonthefirstsentenceineachparagraph鎖定所給段首句

Para.1

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Para.2

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Theysucceeded

inmakingpopcornTheyputtheirgoodideaintopracticeBernardsoldpopcornearnmoneytosolvetheproblemPara1:

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Becauseitwasnotonlysuitableforlittleboys,butalsogoodtomakesomemoney.So,theywenttothelocalsupermarkettobuysomecornandpaperbags.Whentheygothome,theybegantomakepopcorn.Afterputtingitallintopaperbags,theywenttoBernard’shome.TheytoldBernardhowtosellthepopcorn.Bernardandhisparentswereverygrateful.Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.?/10分Plot:2)Relatetothearticlegiventoyou緊密聯(lián)系所給文章(theme&details)“YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus?wecanmakepopcorn,andputitintopaperbags,and

Bernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.Para1:

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea,shethoughtitwasaagoodone,too.ThechildrendecidedtomakepopcornandwenttoBernard’shome.HardlyhadtheyenteredthehousewhentheysawBernarddoingsomething.Then,Johntoldhisideatohim.Bernardwasverythrilledandthankful.TheymadepopcornbesideBernard’shome.Next,theyputitintopaperbags.

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.?/10分Para.1

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.SomedetailedinformationofMrs.Meredith

Plot:3)Coherenceofthecharacterinthefirstsentence注意人物銜接Para.2

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.SomedetailedinformationofBernardLanguage:1.Shewasdelightedthatherchildrencouldsolvetheproblemontheirown.(陸丁瑞)ThechildrendecidedtomakepopcornandwenttoBernard’shome.ThechildrendecidedtomakepopcornandwenttoBernard’shomeastheywereanxioustoknowwhatBernardwouldthinkofthisidea.Polishyoursentence2.TheysoldthepopcornwithalltheireffortsothatBernardcouldearnenoughmoneytohelphimfamily.(欣帥言)3.Everyonewasinlowspiritswhenfacingthedifficulty.(倪啟航)Tip1Add“why”---多問幾個為什么Language:Tip2Addadj./adv./phrases(形容詞、副詞、短語)

對名詞搞事，對動詞修飾1.Johngraspedthisworkcheerfully.(傅程昊)2.Theysoldoutallthetastypopcorn,exhaustedbutthrilled.(賈林林)3.Whenhewenthome,heshoutedinhighspirits.(虞道佳)Atlast,Bernardputthepopcornintopaperbagsandtookitout.PolishyoursentenceEventually,Bernardputthecrispy(脆的)andyummypopcornintothelovelypaperbagsandtookitoutwithdelightandexcitement.Language:Tip3Addnon-finiteverbs勿忘非謂語作狀語1.Supportedbythem,Bernardwasconfidentagaintosellthepopcorn.(張冬鳴)2.Theyencouragedhim,makinghimpluckupthecouragetosellpopcorn.(龔博文)3.Lookingatthemoneyinhishands,tearswellingupinhiseyes,hefeltgratefultoMeredithinhisheart.(管月)2.Hearingthegreatidea,asuddenwaveofjoysweptoverhim.PolishyoursentencesHearingthegreatidea,hefeltoverjoyedanddeeplytouched.1.Thepopcornwasyummy.Theyputitintopaperbags.Enjoyingthesweetsmellofthepopcorn,theyputitintopaperbags.whichmade…？Groupwork

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Shenoddedwithasmile

andencouragedthechildren,"Let'sget

started!"Immediately,Claravolunteeredtogetthebigboxofcornand

preparedthemicrowaveoventomakepopcorn.Atthesametime,John

wenttopurchasesomepaperbagsandarrangedallthestuffinplace.

HarryrantoBernard'sanddraggedhimtothescene.Afterhearingthe

explanation,Bernardwasoverwhelmedwithexcitementandgratitude.

Theycouldhardlywait.Timewentbyswiftly,andthechildrenlaughed,

carryingouttheirgreat“project".Joyfilledtheyardandeveryone's

heart.Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Carryingallthepaperbags,hecalledout,“Popcorn!50centsforoneextra-large

pack!"Peoplestartedtogatheraroundhim,whichdrewevenmore

people.Everyoneisreadytobuyonepacktosupporthim.Theairwas

richwithhappinessandkindness.Withinnotime,Bernardsoldoutofallpopcornandearnedquitesomemoney.Onreturning,hethankedthe

Meredithfamilywithwateryeyes.ForClara,HarryandJohn,itwasan

unforgettable

experienceaswell.Itturnedoutthattheireffortsnotonly

helpedabrotherinneed,butalsogavethemselvesthesweettasteof

helpingothers.

SummaryPlotLanguage1)Add“why”---多問幾個為什么2)Addadj./adv./phrases對名詞搞事，對動詞修飾3)Addnon-finiteverbs勿忘非謂語作狀語2)Relatetothearticlegiventoyou緊密聯(lián)系所給文章3)Coherenceofthecharacterinthefirstsentence注意人物銜接1)Focusonthefirstsentenceineachparagraph鎖定所給段首句SupposeyouwereMengWanzhou,theCFO(ChiefFinancialOfficer)ofHuawei,completethestorybasedonwhatyouhavelearned!(about50words)Plot+Language

IwasarrestedgroundlesslybyCanadianauthoritiesattherequestoftheUSonDec.1,2018.DuringthethreeyearsunderhousearrestinVancouver,mylifewasturnedupsidedown.However,IalwayshadfaithinmyreleasebecauseIfirmlybelievedinmyPartyandmygovernment.Eventually,thedaycame.IntheeveningofSeptember25,2021.Ifinallyreturnedtomyhomeland,markingtheendofmyover1000daysindetention(扣押).

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