高考英語寫作專題復(fù)習(xí)：讀后續(xù)寫 幫助老人故事續(xù)寫 講義

Summervacationjustbegan.SteveandPaulhadsettheirheartsonpracticingbaseballdamakethefreshmanteam.Stevegrabbedhisbatandglove,shoutingaquicbeforerushingout,thed"What'swrong?ForgotyoursthadtohelpMrThimpson,whosebrThimpsonisoldandneedshelp."UnderstandingthesituatioTogether,theyheadedtotheThimpson's.theyswept,theyputboxesthatscatteredaroundthegahelf,itfelloffandwithitfallingaf"You'vegottoseethis,"Paulpulledoutahand“Wecan't!"Steveinsistedfirmly.HegrabbedthemoneyfromPaul'shandandstuffeditbackintheenvelope."Knockitoff.You'rebetterthanthat,"Stevesaishelf.“Comeon.Let'sgetdoneandgototheJustthen,MrThimpsonwalkedintothegarage,surprisingthem.HecametoinvitethtastethechocolatethatMrsThimpsonhadjustbaked."Ugh...Sure,MrThimpsonusfinishupandwe'llberightin."AfterMrThimpsonleft,Pauladmittedhismomentofembarrassmentandregret."Idon'tknowwhatgotintome.TheThimpsonsarealwaystryingtometakemoneyfromthem,sinceshethinkstheydon'thavethatmuch.makingmecakesandcookies,andshehasknitted(編織)fiveswe1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右；Theboysfinallyfinishedcleaningthegarageandthen幫助老人故事續(xù)寫續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)第一段要點(diǎn)：著重描寫保羅在屋內(nèi)的狀態(tài)，如局促不安的肢體動(dòng)作，眼神游離不敢直視老人；史蒂夫?yàn)榫徑鈿夥账龅呐?，如繪聲繪色地講述棒球故事，模仿球員動(dòng)作；以及老人講述棒球往事時(shí)的神態(tài)，眉飛色舞、手舞足蹈，讓故事場(chǎng)景更具畫面感。第二段要點(diǎn)：細(xì)致刻畫保羅收到包裹時(shí)的反應(yīng)，先是驚喜得張大嘴巴，接著小心翼翼打開，看到手套時(shí)眼中閃爍光芒；描述老人送禮物時(shí)的溫暖話語和親切笑容；最后補(bǔ)充保羅和史蒂夫前往公園后，使用新手套進(jìn)行棒球練習(xí)的場(chǎng)景，如兩人的投球、擊球動(dòng)作，臉上洋溢的快樂笑容。情感線起初，保羅因看到錢產(chǎn)生不當(dāng)念頭而興奮，被史蒂夫制止后感到尷尬和后悔，在屋內(nèi)吃巧克力時(shí)滿心愧疚。收到禮物時(shí)，保羅從驚訝轉(zhuǎn)為感動(dòng)，對(duì)老人充滿感激，同時(shí)為自己之前的想法感到羞愧。史蒂夫一直秉持正直態(tài)度，在幫助保羅的過程中，對(duì)保羅的轉(zhuǎn)變感到欣慰，兩人都在這次經(jīng)歷中體會(huì)到善良帶來的溫暖與滿足。故事線假期計(jì)劃：暑假開始，史蒂夫和保羅計(jì)劃每天練習(xí)棒球，為進(jìn)入新生隊(duì)努力。幫忙抉擇：保羅因要幫手臂受傷的辛普森先生打掃車庫(kù)而猶豫，史蒂夫理解并一同前發(fā)現(xiàn)錢財(cái)：在打掃車庫(kù)時(shí)，保羅不小心碰落盒子，發(fā)現(xiàn)里面有一大筆錢，曾提議要小費(fèi)，被史蒂夫堅(jiān)決制止。屋內(nèi)交談：辛普森先生邀請(qǐng)他們品嘗巧克力，保羅因之前的想法而愧疚，史蒂夫努力活躍氣氛。收到禮物：準(zhǔn)備離開時(shí)，辛普森夫人送給保羅一個(gè)包裹，里面是嶄新的棒球手套。感悟前行：保羅被禮物感動(dòng)，和史蒂夫前往公園，決心用手套好好練習(xí)，領(lǐng)悟到善良才是真正的回報(bào)。主旨升華句choices,andkindnessalwaysreways.(這次經(jīng)歷讓男孩們明白，正直是指引我們?cè)谌松x擇中前行的指南針，善良總會(huì)以意想不到的美好方式回饋。)Throughthisencounter,theyrealizedthattrhumanrelationshipsandthejoyofhelpingothers.(通過這次相遇，他們意識(shí)到真正的財(cái)富不在于金錢，而在于人際關(guān)系的溫暖和幫助他人的喜悅。)happiness.(史蒂夫和保羅的故事提醒我們，即使面對(duì)誘惑，堅(jiān)守原則也能引領(lǐng)我們走向道德成長(zhǎng)和真正幸福的道路。)Intheend,theylearnedthattherewardsofkindngain,andthatasimpleactofhelpingcemotions.(最后，他們懂得善良的回報(bào)遠(yuǎn)比任何物質(zhì)收獲都珍貴，一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單的幫助之舉就能創(chuàng)造出一連串的積極情感。)Thisheartwarmingtaleshowstenrichthelivesofothersbutalsofindadeourselves.(這個(gè)溫暖人心的故事表明，當(dāng)我們選擇善良而非私利時(shí)，我們不僅豐富了他人的生活，也在自己內(nèi)心找到了更深層次的目標(biāo)和滿足感。)寫作示范一Theboysfinallyfinishedcleaningthegarageandaround,avoidingMr.andMrs.Thimpson'sgaze.Mr.Thimpson,completeturmoil,recountedhisgloriousbaseballmemorieswithgreatenthusiasm,hishandsgesturSteve,sensingPaul'sdiscomfort,jumpedinwithahpitcherthrewtheballinthewrongdirection.Hemimickedthepitcher'sconfusedexpression,makingeveryonelaugh,exceptPaul,whothoughts,constantlyreplayinghismomentofweakneAstheyfinishedthecakeandwereabouttoleave,Mrs.ThimpsonhandedPawrappedpackage.Paul'seyeslitupinsurprise,andhishcarefullyunwrappedthepackage,hisbreathcatchinginhisthroatwhenhesawthebrand-newbaseballglove."Weknowyou'vebeenworkingsohardonbaseball.Thisigratitude,"Mrs.Thimpsonsaid,hereyestwaytothepark,PaulturnedtoSteveandsaid,"I'llnTheyarrivedatthepark,andwiththenebathittingtheballechoingthroughtheTheboysfinallyfinishedcleaningthegarageandthhighspirits,sharingstoriesofhisoldbaseballteam,hibesttoeasethetension,startedtalkingaboutacrazyHeanimatedlydescribedthechaos,makingMr.Thimpsonlaughheartily.ButPauownthoughts,beratinghimselfforhisearlierlapseinjudgment.HestolealookattheThimpsons,feelingalumpforminhisthroat.HeknewhehadtomakethingsrAstheyfinishedthecakeandwereabouttoleave,Mrs.Thimpsonhbaseballglove,hiseyeswelledupwithtears."Thisisforyou,dear.Wehobaseballjourney,"Mrs.Thimpsonsaidgently.Paulwasovercomewprofusely,hisvoicebreaking.OnwhatIthought.Butthisgift..it'slikeasecondchance."Whentheyreachgloveandthrewaballhighintothesky,watThebovsfinallyfinishedcleaningthegarageandthenwentintothehouse.Theairwasfilledwiththewarm,comfortingsmelloffreshlybakedchocolatecakediningtable,theirmindsstillonthemoneytheyhadfoundbutnotmentionedtoTheybothfeltasenseofreliefastheyenjoyedthedeliciouscake,tryingtoforgettheunsettliAstheyfinishedthecakeandwereabouttoleave,Mrs.ThimpsonhandedPaulabeautifullywrappedpackage.Paul'seyeslitupwithcuriosityandgratitude.“Thankyou,Mrs.Thimpson,"hesaid,eagerlyteari