【課件】讀后續(xù)寫精講精析-以2021八省聯(lián)考為例

1、讀后續(xù)寫精講精析讀后續(xù)寫精講精析-以以20212021八省聯(lián)考為例八省聯(lián)考為例讀后續(xù)寫Step 1Step 1：精深語篇，精深語篇，精準理解精準理解Step 2Step 2：理清思路，把握全局理清思路，把握全局Step 4Step 4：積累素材，激活表達積累素材，激活表達Step 3Step 3：推動情節(jié)，展開續(xù)寫推動情節(jié)，展開續(xù)寫 During this past year, Ive had three instances of car trouble. Each time these things happened, I was sick of the way most people ha

2、dnt bothered to help. Para. 1 instance n 情況，例子，事例 car trouble 汽車故障 be sick of (doing) sth 對（做）某事感到厭倦 / 厭煩 not bother to do sth 懶得做某事，不愿費心做某事Step 1：精深語篇，精準理解精深語篇，精準理解One of those times, I was on the side of the road for close to three hours with my big Jeep. I put signs in the windows, big signs that

3、 said NEED A JACK (千斤頂), and offered money. Nothing. Right as I was about to give up, a Mexican family in a small truck pulled over, and the father bounded out.Para. 1 say v 寫著 offer v 自愿給予 pull over （使）?？吭诼愤?bound v 跳躍，跳躍著前進Para. 2 He sized up the situation and called for his daughter, who spoke En

4、glish. He conveyed through her that he had a jack but that it was too small for the Jeep, so we would need something to support it. size up 判斷，估量 size up the situation 對情況作出了判斷 convey v 轉達，傳達 support v 熟詞生義 支撐Para. 2Then he got a saw (鋸子) from the truck and cut a section out of a big log on the side

5、 of the road. We rolled it over and put his jack on top, and we were in business. cut a section out of a big log on the side of the road 從路邊的一塊 大木頭上鋸下一段兒 roll v 滾動，翻滾 be in business 準備就緒Para. 3 I started taking the wheel off, and then, if you can believe it, I broke his tire iron. No worries: He han

6、ded it to his wife, and she was gone in a flash down the road to buy a new tire iron. She was back in 15 minutes. We finished the job, and I was a very happy man. take the wheel off 拆卸輪胎 tire iron n 拆輪胎棒（iron此處指鐵器，通常用來構成復合詞） hand to 把交給 in a flash 轉瞬間，立即Para. 4 The two of us were dirty and sweaty. H

7、is wife prepared a pot of water for us to wash our hands. I tried to put a $20 bill in the mans hand, but he wouldnt take it, so instead I went up to the truck and gave it to his wife as quietly as I could. I asked the little girl where they lived. Mexico, she said. They were in Oregon so Mommy and

8、Daddy could work on a fruit farm for the next few weeks. Then they would go home. sweaty adj 滿是汗的 a pot of water 一壺水 go up to 走近Step 2：理清思路，把握全局理清思路，把握全局 本文是一篇記敘文記敘文，作者講述了自己親身經歷的一個感人故事。作者的汽車出故障后，本以為無人愿意幫忙，沒想到墨西哥一家人不嫌麻煩，不計回報，甚至全家出動，幫作者修好了汽車。然而，故事并沒有結束，感動作者的遠遠不止這些，后邊還會發(fā)生什么樣的故事呢？Step 2：理清思路，把握全局理清思路，把握

9、全局Para.語篇結構關鍵詞語篇結構關鍵詞1汽車出故障2-3好心人幫忙修車father: cut a section out of a big log; rolled it over and put his jack on topdaughter: English, conveywife: gone in a flash to buy a new one4作者支付報酬car trouble，a Mexican familyput a $20 bill in the mans hand, but he wouldnt take it; gave it to his wife as quietly

10、 as I couldStep 2：理清思路，把握全局理清思路，把握全局Para.語篇結構關鍵詞語篇結構關鍵詞5午飯與紙袋午飯與紙袋6返還報酬返還報酬 After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if Id had lunch.Step 3：推動情節(jié)，展開續(xù)寫推動情節(jié)，展開續(xù)寫文章通過情節(jié)線“汽車出故障好心人幫忙修車作者支付報酬？”和情感線“失望開心感激？”，按照時間順序進行敘述。根據(jù)情節(jié)線和感情線可以清晰理清篇章結構和接

11、下來的發(fā)展脈絡，即小女孩給紙袋，返還報酬，以及作者的情感變化：驚喜、驚訝、感激、感動等。Step 3：推動情節(jié)，展開續(xù)寫推動情節(jié)，展開續(xù)寫語篇語篇情節(jié)線（動作詞匯）情節(jié)線（動作詞匯）情感線（情感詞匯）情感線（情感詞匯）Para. 1汽車出故障失望失望（be sick of；give up）Para. 2-3 好心人幫忙修車開心（a very happy man）Para. 4作者支付報酬感激（a $20 bill; as quietly as I could; I asked the little girl where they lived）Para. 5-6 小女孩給紙袋，返還報酬（Acti

12、on ？）？）驚喜、驚訝、感激、感動（Feeling ？）？）Step 4：積累素材，激活表達（細節(jié)描寫詞匯）積累素材，激活表達（細節(jié)描寫詞匯）細節(jié)描寫：動作線：小女孩給紙袋，返還報酬（側重面部表情、心理活動、肢體動作等人體與動作的細節(jié)描寫）情感線：作者的情感變化（側重驚喜、驚訝、感激、感動等情感描寫）Step 4：積累素材，激活表達（細節(jié)描寫詞匯）積累素材，激活表達（細節(jié)描寫詞匯）人體與動作描寫人體與動作描寫（面部表情、心理活動、（面部表情、心理活動、肢體動作等）肢體動作等）情感描寫情感描寫（驚喜、驚訝、感激、感動等）（驚喜、驚訝、感激、感動等）面帶笑容面帶笑容 wear a smile o

13、n ones face面露喜色面露喜色 sbs face lights up / brightens臉上露出燦爛的笑容臉上露出燦爛的笑容 a bright / shining smile appears on / spreads across / crosses sbs face勉強笑了笑勉強笑了笑 force a smile步伐輕快步伐輕快 with a spring in ones step眼睛閃爍著喜悅的光芒眼睛閃爍著喜悅的光芒 sbs eyes shine brightly with joy眼睛緊盯著某人的臉眼睛緊盯著某人的臉 ones eyes fix on sbs face好奇地看

14、了某人一眼好奇地看了某人一眼 throw / cast a curious glance at sb詞：詞：affect, move (moved, moving), touch (touched, touching), curious, shock, wonder, surprise (surprised, surprising), amaze (amazed, amazing), astonish (astonished, astonishing)appreciate, thankful, grateful, aid, assist詞塊：詞塊：do sb a favour, help ou

15、t, with the help of, give / lend (sb) a hand, in return (for),express / show ones thanksStep 4：積累素材，激活表達（細節(jié)描寫詞匯）積累素材，激活表達（細節(jié)描寫詞匯）人體與動作描寫人體與動作描寫（面部表情、（面部表情、心理活動、肢體動作等）心理活動、肢體動作等）情感描寫情感描寫（驚喜、驚訝、感激、感動等）（驚喜、驚訝、感激、感動等）緊緊抓住某物緊緊抓住某物 hold tightly on sth伸手抓某人的手伸手抓某人的手 reach for sbs hand手里拿著某物手里拿著某物 hold sth

16、in ones hand伸出雙臂擁抱某人伸出雙臂擁抱某人 put / throw ones arms around sb沖上前去沖上前去 rush forward to do sth沖到門口沖到門口 rush to the door揮手揮手 wave ones hand搖頭搖頭 shake ones head手舞足蹈手舞足蹈 jump / dance for joy興高采烈地興高采烈地 in a cheerful voice目瞪口呆目瞪口呆 with sbs eyes wide open 驚訝地說不出話來驚訝地說不出話來 be shocked beyond words驚訝地驚訝地 in ama

17、zement / astonishment出乎意料地出乎意料地 beyond ones expectations潸然淚下潸然淚下 / 淚如泉涌淚如泉涌 tears roll / run / stream / flow down sbs cheeks 或或 tears well up in sbs eyes感動地說不出話來感動地說不出話來 be touched beyond wordsSample 1: When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if Id had lunch.My gut feeling was to refuse. But

18、 my stomach was growling since I hadnt eaten for more than four hours. Seeing my embarrassment, the girl just pressed some bread into my hands and changed the subject to talk about my car. After the seemingly simple meal which pulled us closer together, the family was ready to leave. When the father

19、 started his truck, the little angel handed me a paper bag, then waved goodbye to me. I stood and watched the truck until it vanished around a turn. After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.The fruit inside didnt look perfect, but the tantalizing aroma filled the air. Picking one

20、 up to take a big bite, I found a $20 bill in the bag. Recalling their sincere eyes and smiles while chewing the juicy fruit, I felt the warmth flowing into my heart. Certainly, Ive encountered many indifferent people and Ive experienced some helpless moments, but I still put my trust in this beauti

21、ful world. Because I finally realized one thing that stands the brunt of life throughout its course: a kind heart. (177 words)出彩表達積累1. gut adj. 本能的2. growl v. 低聲吼叫3. vanish v. 突然消失4. tantalize v. 逗引，招惹5. aroma n. 芳香；香味6. indifferent adj. 漠不關心7. stand the brunt of sth. 首當其沖8. When the father started

22、his truck, the little angel handed me a paper bag, then waved goodbye to me.當那位父親發(fā)動他的卡車時，小天使遞給我一個紙袋，然后向我揮手告別。（對動作的生動描寫）9.Recalling their sincere eyes and smiles while chewing the juicy fruit, I felt the warmth flowing into my heart.咀嚼著多汁的水果，回憶著他們真誠的眼神和微笑，我感到溫暖流進了我的心里。（對神態(tài)的生動描寫）Sample 2: When I was a

23、bout to say goodbye, the girl asked if Id had lunch.Before I could speak, my stomach answered in a delighted grumble. After ages of hopelessly waiting and an hour of hard work, my body was desperate for fuel. The girl giggled and led me to their truck. There I saw a small portable table. I must have

24、 said “thank you” a thousand times during the meal. The father simply smiled and patted my shoulder. His wife gestured to the dishes. “This one good?” she asked. And then I was handed a paper bag filled with Mexican delicacies. After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.Lying on top of the food was my $20 bill. I immediately looked around for the truck, but it was long