2021屆廣州市高三年級階段訓練讀后續(xù)寫試題參考范文與考生樣卷

1、2021屆廣州市高三年級階段訓練】讀后續(xù)寫試題參考范文及考生樣卷試題第二節(jié)讀后續(xù)寫（滿分25分）閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短 文。"Ada! Milk!” Mama called.Milk. It was Ada's turn to get it. Ada sighed and shut her first-aid book Her head hurt from reading in the dim morning light, but how else was she going to learn?Ada tied the cow

2、close to a tree. Somewhere down the mountain, some volun teer doctors were teachi ng medical skills to village n urses Ada heard Betty drive off hours ago. “She should have taken me with her. She thinks I'm too young, but she's wrong. I am already 16!” Ada thought.Ada carried the milk back t

3、o Mama, then wandered up the road. Roy, a village boy, had gotten a donkey, and some kids had gathered around to see it. Roy was always doing something to get attention. Like now: he was trying to stand on the animal's bare back.41 No wonder they dontrust kids with anything important： Ada though

4、t, sighing. She had just turned away when she heard a thud and a few screams Roy lay on the gro und n earby moaning in pain. The don key stood several meters away. “Roy!” The kids nearby ran towards him. "Get Betty,M one said. Ada shook her head. “Betty's gone to the city.” The other kids s

5、eemed frozen in place.Ada ran to where Roy was lying. She dropped to her knees on the dusty road. "Roy! Can you hear me?M Roy moaned in agony. Ada saw that one of his legs was crooked, bent a little sideways between the knee and the ankle. A broken leg!She remembered what the first-aid book had

6、 said about broken legs: if there is no ambulanee, straighten the bone before moving the victim There certainly wouldn't be any ambulance here. Ada looked back up the road. The other kids were still standing there, watching. "Victor!” Ada called to one of the boys. "Go get Roy's ma

7、ma, and find someone with a truck/1 She turned to the others. nGive me your shirts. We need something to tie his leg with." 注意：1. 續(xù)寫詞數應為150左右；2. 請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Ada then found a strong stick, which she would use to keep his leg straight.The next day, Betty came to Ada's home.解題分析1. 準確解讀故事

8、背景和情節(jié)：故事背景：故事發(fā)生在某個醫(yī)療條件落后的邊遠山區(qū)，主人公Ada是一位16歲 的少女，她比同齡人成熟沉穩(wěn)，對當護士救人有著深厚興趣，并口覺閱讀急救書 籍獲取相關知識。然 而，護士 Betty卻認為Ada年紀還小，不宜參與醫(yī)療培 訓。Ada因此難過，不服氣。（核心沖突）故事發(fā)生：男孩Roy莽撞行事，在毛驢背上摔下來，摔斷了腿。然而，周圍沒 有能夠實 施急救的醫(yī)療人員和醫(yī)療設備。（具體沖突）故事發(fā)展：在其他孩子因護士 Betty不在而不知所措時，Ada沉著地檢査Roy 的傷勢，并根據急救書上的指示鎮(zhèn)定地指揮孩子們協(xié)助她實施急救：她一邊遣人 去找Roy的母親和 卡車（送Roy去山下的醫(yī)院），

9、一邊吩咐男孩們把上衣脫 下來，用于綁直固定Roy骨折的腿。2. 合理接續(xù)上文情節(jié)，預測故事的結局：故事高潮：（續(xù)寫段落一）根據前文內容以及兩個段首句可判斷，續(xù)寫的第一段應圍繞Ada 如何解決具體沖突（有人需要急救）來展開，重要情節(jié)須包括：（1） Ada對 Roy進行簡單必要的急救過程（可以通過動作、語言、表情、心理等細節(jié)描寫， 重點突顯主人公的醫(yī)者仁心及急救過程的專業(yè)和有效，可穿插略寫Roy的行為 和感受）：（2）簡要交代Roy母親的到來及其合理的反應（如：安撫兒子， 感謝Ada等）；（3）簡要交代Roy被卡車送去醫(yī)院，暗示沖突得到及時解決（也可簡單補充專業(yè)醫(yī)生的評價等合理細節(jié)，但非必要細節(jié)）

10、。故事結局：（續(xù)寫段落二）根據前文內容及故事結局的一般要求判斷，續(xù)寫的第 二段應圍繞核心沖突（Ada不被認可）的解決來展開，要回應前文Betty對 Ada的不信任，描述Betty對Ada的態(tài)度轉變：Ada出色的急救表現贏得了 Betty的贊賞和認可。故事核心沖突最終得以圓滿解決。3. 表達得體、有效：主要情節(jié)與細節(jié)描寫的組織應詳略得當，故事推進緊湊；句子間的邏輯連貫要清 晰合理；細節(jié)的展開要與上文埋設的線索相吻合，不要節(jié)外生枝，過度拓展。接 受符合故事發(fā)展的合理結局。參考范文Ada then found a strong stick, which she would use to keep h

11、is leg straight. She gently explained what she was going to do then carefully wrapped the shirts around Roy's leg and the stick Roy cried out in pain “I know it hurts/1 Ada said softly"But this will hold it still until you get to the hospital.n When Ada was done, she looked up and saw Roy&#

12、39;s mama watching from a few meters away. Behind her was a neighbor in a pickup truck. When Ada stepped away, Roy's mama ran over and held Roy's face in her hands. “Thank you, Ada,n she said Ada helped them lift Roy into the truck, then they drove down the hillside towards the hospital.The

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