專題06 導(dǎo)學(xué)案-如何使續(xù)寫中的動(dòng)作描寫富有“電影鏡頭感”

1、導(dǎo)學(xué)案一一如何使續(xù)寫中的動(dòng)作描寫富有“電影鏡頭感”語言表達(dá)“空乏平淡”是同學(xué)們?cè)谧x后續(xù)寫中存在的典型問題，究其原因就是：不會(huì)根據(jù)文 章主題和情節(jié)開展進(jìn)行精彩生動(dòng)的動(dòng)作描寫是其中主要原因之一。今天，學(xué)會(huì)5招，提升讀 后續(xù)寫技巧一一讓續(xù)寫中的人物變得“靈動(dòng)”起來！學(xué)習(xí)目標(biāo)：.Learn ways to describe vividly in continuation writing. Promote writing skills through practice.Step I：輸入夯實(shí)基礎(chǔ)L “看”a.根據(jù)英語寫出漢語意思catch a glimpse oftake a quick look(3)

2、 look intolook upgaze atstare atglare atpeep atglimpse/glance atgape atblink atones eyes fall on someplacelook at sb straight in the eyeones eyes fix/focus/concentrate on_ones eyes scanb根據(jù)漢語提示默寫英語短語(1) 偷瞄眼(2)瞥見；不注意看到(3)向里看，調(diào)查(4) 抬起頭向上看(5)凝視(6)盯住怒目而視(8)偷窺(9)瞥一眼(10)吃驚地看(11)朝眨眼(12)某人的目光落在(13)直視某人的眼睛(14

3、)某人的目光緊盯著(15)某人的眼睛掃視2.“走”的精彩描寫a.根據(jù)英語寫出漢語意思tiptoestrideSneak limpstumblestaggerslip into the roomstorm out of the doordash backrush/hurry to the stationpace restlesslywander aimlesslyb.根據(jù)漢語提示默寫英語短語(1)躡手躡腳(2)大步走(3)鬼鬼祟祟地走癇著走(5)跌跌撞撞地走蹣跚(7)溜進(jìn)房間(8)沖出房門(9)沖回(10)沖到車站(11)不安地走動(dòng)(12)無目的地漫步3.“手”的動(dòng)作描寫a.根據(jù)英語寫出漢語意思

4、grasp at sthseize sth (from sb)drag reach for one s handraise one s hands slid one s hands intocatch/ hold of one s armcup one, s hand overwithone s head in one? s handsfold one s armscatch /grab one s armpull sb. into one s armsb.根據(jù)漢語提示默寫英語短語(1)盡力抓住某物(2)(常指通過暴力突然)奪取(3)拖拽；吃力地往前拉(4)伸手抓住某人(5)舉手(6)將手插進(jìn)

5、(7)抓住某人的手臂(8)捂住(9)雙手抱著頭(10)某人雙臂交叉(11)抓住某人的胳膊(12)拉某人進(jìn)懷Step II：學(xué)會(huì)“5招”使續(xù)寫“靈動(dòng)”讓你的動(dòng)作描寫富有“電影鏡頭感”Suddenly, A moving dot(點(diǎn))on the horizon was spotted. Exhausted but hopeful, Jane jumped to her feet to catch a clear sight of it.nThe helicopter J Jane murmured, sprang up and dashed to the center of an open ar

6、ea, waving her yellow blouse desperately and yelling at the helicopterThis time she was spotted, which made her feel moredelighted. Eyes brimming with tears, Jane jumped off the rock and rushed towards Tom a flying arrov , hugging tightly in his arms, please never leave me alone!n第1招：三聯(lián)動(dòng)連續(xù)使用三個(gè)動(dòng)詞并列做謂

7、語例如：(上文中紅色句子)“The helicopter,nJane murmured, sprang up end dashed to the center of.Jane jumped off the rock and rushed towards Tom第2招：非謂動(dòng)非謂語動(dòng)詞與主句的謂語搭配使用例如：(上文中藍(lán)色句子)The helicopter,nJane murmured, sprang up and dashed to the center of an open area, waving her yellow blouse desperately and yelling at t

8、he helicopter with excitement.Eyes brimming with tears, Jane jumped off the rock and rushed towards Tom like a flying arrow, huewine tightly in his arms, please never leave me alone!H第3招：副助動(dòng)句子前后或動(dòng)詞前后使用恰當(dāng)?shù)母痹~增強(qiáng)語效例如：Suddenly, A moving dot(點(diǎn))on the horizon was spotted.waving her yellow blouse desperatel

9、y第4招：介賓動(dòng)介詞短語修飾限定，尤其是with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)例如：Jane jumped off the rock and rushed towards Tom like a flyinq arrowWith butterflies in his stomach, he walked towards the entrance.第5招：無主動(dòng)無靈主語往往是時(shí)間或地點(diǎn)名詞后接see或witness等動(dòng)詞 例如：The little river and woods in my hometown witnessed my growth.Step III： Practice makes perfect!句子

10、訓(xùn)練：He left his tent.他一頭霧水地離開他的帳篷Hearing that he had been saved, we.聽說他得救了，我們松了 口氣。He looked at me .他以可怕的眼神看著我。They left the cave.他們驚慌地離開了那個(gè)山洞。She stared at the stranger.她驚愕地盯著那陌生人。At the sight of the snake, Jack .一看到那條蛇，杰克跳起來、抓起一塊石頭就扔過去。7., the people on board got panicked, .飛機(jī)急劇下降，機(jī)上的人們開始恐慌，全都尖叫起來。

11、8.At last, we returned to our camp,.我們終于回到了營(yíng)地，又渴又餓筋疲力盡。9., fear overwhelmed me, .夜幕降臨，我感到極度害怕，使我渾身哆嗦。10., we ran.惡狼在后面緊追，我們拼命地逃跑。Step IV：語篇輸出學(xué)以致用閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。（2021 江蘇如皋第二次適應(yīng)性考試）One dark night during the summer holidays, I walked over to my friend Jeremys house to stay over. W

12、e were going to have a movie marathon of our favorite sci-fi adventure film series and stay up late with some snacks and drinks. I had not been to his house before because he had only recently moved, so I asked him to text me over his new address: 64 Cherry Tree Road.Jeremys new street was a nice pa

13、rt of town, lined with tall trees and most of the houses had a hedge or fence at the front. Some of the houses had their numbers on the gate, some on the house, and some didnt seem to have a number at all. It had started to cloud over as I left my house, and as I turnedon to his road, it began to ra

14、in. As the rain got heavier, I rushed to find number sixty-four and eventually found it . or so I thought. I walked past number 62, so assumed it was the next one, which appeared to have no number. You see, usually the odd numbers are on one side of the street, the even numbers on the other.I walked

15、 quickly up the driveway to the front door. It was very dark too and there were no lights on inside the house, which did seem strange. However, I was getting drenched （濕透的）and wanted to get inside! I rang the bell, but nobody came, so I rang and knocked again. Then I noticed there was house number a

16、fter all. A ridiculous small one that said 63. There was a sudden thud （呼的聲）inside the apparently empty house, and a moment later the front door opened violently.A hooded （戴兜帽的）man with a beard and blue glasses hurried past me and ran into the street. There was a shout from inside: “Wait fbr me, Rob! ” Another man rushed out, but hedropped what he was caiTying and tripped on the doorstep. The other