1.6顧家北寫作訓(xùn)練營(yíng)群abc審題61女性產(chǎn)假

1、#61:女性的產(chǎn)假In many countries women are allowed to take maternity leave from their jobs during the first few months after the birth of their baby. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?點(diǎn)擊開始作答觀點(diǎn)學(xué)生觀點(diǎn)點(diǎn)評(píng)學(xué)生的觀點(diǎn)錯(cuò)誤的原因女人休產(chǎn)假,不愿再回去上班，喪失競(jìng)爭(zhēng)力不夠有力。不想去上班不一定是因?yàn)楹⒆?，可能是其他原因。生產(chǎn)后有產(chǎn)假，親自哺育寶寶，母性的溫暖，寶寶身體更強(qiáng)壯不夠有力。母性會(huì)讓孩子強(qiáng)壯？還是母親的照顧？

2、放產(chǎn)假,可以適應(yīng)新的生活方式,為以后工作和家庭的平衡做準(zhǔn)備不夠有力。莫非回家照顧孩子以后都是這樣的？這不就等于工作和家庭失衡了嗎？休產(chǎn)假，尊重女性，提升公司的聲譽(yù)不夠有力。那么產(chǎn)假休多長(zhǎng)可以表示尊重女性呢？帶薪休假的價(jià)格太高可能會(huì)讓公司把太多的錢放在這上面，甚至導(dǎo)致破產(chǎn)沒有說服力，且不說產(chǎn)假是否帶薪，即便如此，也不會(huì)到破產(chǎn)的程度休產(chǎn)假有利于女性身體健康能夠在休息過后更好工作休產(chǎn)假有利于讓女性獲得尊重安穩(wěn)工作帶來社會(huì)和諧太過空泛。為什么會(huì)和諧？不休長(zhǎng)假，會(huì)革命么？做IT的女性休產(chǎn)假，跟不上變化，工作沒了太過具體，說的太窄了。開頭段替換詞In many countries=in many soci

3、eties, across the world/globe, in many parts of the world.Women=female employeesAllowed=permittedtake maternity leave =take several months offafter the birth of their baby=give birth to their babies開頭段范例There are Companies in many societies which permit female employees to take several months off af

4、ter giving birth to a baby. I think it has advantages, although some women may not be able to fit into the workplace. （6.5）Companies in many societies permit female employees to take several months off after giving birth to a baby. I think it has advantages, although it may affect womens career advancement. （7）結(jié)尾段范例In conclusion, women can benefit from maternity leave, although their career may be affected adversely.主體段一A休產(chǎn)假B身體恢復(fù)C更好地工